Raven's Claw at Hogwarts

When I saw a black boy named Franklin, I suddenly reacted. Was the protagonist in the GTA world in his previous life?😁😁😁

This Harry Potter fan-written book is quite good! Advantages: Reasonable development based on the original work. It is very important to pay attention to the word reasonable. Many fandoms collapsed as they were written, adding all kinds of no-brainer designs, adding all kinds of messy mythological abilities to the wizarding world, and then couldn't wait to open up new dungeons - the Far East, Russia, the United States, etc. When the mainline UK has not been developed much. There are also some fans who don't care about the logic of cause and effect, and don't consider the basic laws, as if everything can be explained clearly by saying "this is magic", not to mention a lot of inexplicable magic spells (and the effects are extremely powerful). This book is very good at this. Disadvantages: In terms of word count, it is still difficult to reach the 1 million word threshold at the current update speed. Readers like me often finish reading it in one night. However, in terms of plot, the author rarely copies the original text in large parts, which avoids a major drawback of many fan authors (paid chapters also copy the original text in various ways). It is inevitable to provide cheats for the protagonist to gain cool points, but so far the number of cheats is not particularly large, so it will not lead to a simplistic plot. Summary: A highly recommended Harry fanfic, but you need to improve the word count before reading it. At the same time, I also hope that the author will deviate from the main line of the original work as soon as possible when writing the article, and design a new main line for this newly added character, so as to avoid the inevitable "taking everyone to review Harry's Seven Parts" in the end. ps: The quality and performance of this book are a bit inconsistent, and the author may need some additional publicity.

The book is pretty good. I like this character very much. A pure egoist but with empathy for other people. The only flaw I feel is that the heroine and many supporting characters do not have many plots to make the characters more vivid. Many original characters really have different names. It doesn't feel inconsistent at all. On the contrary, Victor, a DIY character, is really good in describing the werewolf hunting.

To be honest, I just read about 10 chapters, but the author's writing style is really good!                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Out out out out of out out of necessity all The author really wrote about the protagonist's past life as a gangster in the United States. That kind of ruthlessness, that kind of uniqueness (not a typo), the taste is unmistakable. But when I saw the protagonist drowning a pure-blood who humiliated him without hesitation, I felt a little panicked 😓. . . Anyway, it feels great!                                      ，

I have always felt that Aunt Rowling's writing of the relationship between Dumbledore and Grindelwald as *** was a huge failure. I think they should be friends who respect each other and are enemies like Naruto and Sasuke. There is a kind of friend that can only be understood in terms of a wand versus wand battle

Without further ado, readers can leave a message below, whether it is a female (note! Female!) Character in the original novel that has appeared or has not yet appeared. In the end, I will choose the most popular one to be the heroine. This book has only one heroine. I thought about it but forgot about the harem. In addition, we are now recruiting for supporting roles. If you have any characters you want to appear in, you can leave a message below and I will select some and write them in.

I once heard a story about a desperate author who wrote a novel and couldn't finish it halfway through. This little Poujie was originally planning to enter the palace to serve the emperor. As a result, many readers in the comment area of ​​the book were discussing the plot behind the book. So that little guy started writing according to the plot guessed in the comment area. As a result, he not only finished the novel, but also got good results. Before I wrote a novel, I always thought it was a joke. It was only now that I started writing a novel that I realized that it was not a joke at all. Readers' discussions about the plot are very helpful to the author, especially a new author like me who is writing a book for the first time. I don't know exactly what kind of content readers like to see like those great masters. I can only explore the readers' preferences a little bit. Fortunately, the readers of this book are of extremely high quality, and there was no abuse as I suspected when I first wrote the book. They also enthusiastically discussed the plot with me, a newbie. I am truly grateful to the readers of this book! Thank you for not saying bad things to me because of my scummy writing style, but for giving me enthusiastic suggestions. Thank you very much! With the great help of all readers, I have revised the details of the outline again and again, and I don't know how many times I will revise it in the future. To be honest, this is a tiring thing. But I don't want to let you down. No matter how hard or tired I am, I will finish writing this book. This is the only feedback I can give to you readers who have helped me. Thank you!

Regarding the original novel, I have always felt that Hermione was extremely jealous, and he could not tolerate others being better than him. This was not obvious before, but you can see it in whichever movie you watch Half-Blood Prince. Harry got Snape's notes, which strictly speaking can improve his experience and abilities. But Hermione couldn't stand it, so she questioned Harry, and even persuaded Harry to give up the note in the end. After Harry put the note in the Room of Requirement, she was relieved. I feel that what Harry did after getting the notes was normal, and he even became excellent, but Hermione just couldn't accept it. I think she just felt that a scumbag could surpass me, a top student, and I couldn't accept it. In the finale, the Room of Requirement was burned to the ground. It was such a pity. There were so many mysterious books.

Abandoned, another fan author who follows the plot of the original work

Speaking of Hermione, don't you think there are many Harry Potter fan fiction that makes Hermione the heroine?

The writing is good, but how do you say it? The protagonist of the original work became intellectualized. The supporting characters become darker. It doesn't feel like Harry Potter, but it feels like a second-rate junior high school in China.

In the end, I still didn't insist on subscribing to the chapter. I will finally complain about the shortcomings and dislikes that I think. The main character is Mike, who travels back in time to Love 5, an American with abnormal views. Different views lead to different thoughts and behaviors, which makes people dislike it and makes it difficult to embody it. In addition, the author chooses an American but still uses the Chinese accent, which is simply not enough to make the drama. The second is that the protagonist's behavior is repeated and the good brothers will give you two blows. The author may want to write something different, but in my personal opinion, it just gave me a sense of psychosis. Of course, maybe because I love Mike, he is a psychotic person. Third, there are some problems with the setting of the original work. I don't want to complain about money and currency. It doesn't matter. The main reason is that the character design is too OOC and makes people uncomfortable. There is also the original plot that makes the characters OOC. That's probably it.

The introduction is very attractive to me, but it is a bit inconsistent with the protagonist described by the author, and his strength improves too slowly... Most HP fans nowadays have a characteristic. After adults travel through the magical world of Harry Potter and become children, they even think like children and like to interfere in the original three-person story. The story line of the team (it is said that the three-person team is reckless, but the protagonist behaves like Gryffindor no matter which house he is in), in a magical world, there is no desire to learn magic and to become stronger, even inferior to Hermione (I am talking about the desire to learn magic, not the learning ability)

Why do so many people like to get involved with the original protagonist Triangle? Don't you think it's an idiot? What you wrote is a dark trend, and it is a mess. This is not a dark trend, it is a diseased trend.

After playing GTA5, in my eyes, the protagonist is just a middle-aged fat man, and I have no sense of empathy.

If you don't like the plot of the fourth part, you can skip it. The first three films are egoistic, semi-dark and semi-warm, while the fourth film has both darkness and warmth, but also a Madonna who treats the mouse with a dog. In fact, if you don't know how to participate in the fourth part of the plot, after all, the whole fourth part revolves around the Triwizard Hegemony. You can definitely learn from Animax, and then make troubles to affect the plot and pursue self-improvement. There is no need to end the game personally, have no allies, and challenge Voldemort and a group of dark wizards. In other words, Voldemort didn't provoke you, and dealing with Voldemort is not something you, a gangster, have to do. You, a mafia boss, stepped on stage and made people look disgusting. If you open the book and both of your parents died at the hands of Voldemort, for example, if you were reborn and were killed by Voldemort in your previous life, and you come to the stage to deal with Voldemort, the audience will like to read your book.

I feel like there are bugs in the plot, and it's forced to be dark and dark. I really couldn't stand the part where the Hufflepuff students asked for drinks.

I sincerely hope that the protagonist stays away from the trio and doesn't deliberately follow the plot

This introduction is outrageous. Mudblood is an insulting term.

Thank you very much to Trooper1770 for the tip. Thank you very much. In fact, Trooper1770 can be said to be the first person to reward me for the content of this book. The book friend 20180315155331029 who rewarded me before is actually a friend of mine in real life. The reward was largely due to our real-life friendship. So I was really excited when I saw the reward from Trooper1770 today. It means that someone is actually willing to pay for a book written by me, a new author with extremely poor writing and ideas! I really have nothing to repay you with, I can only pay you a favor! (O_ _)ﾉ(o_ _)ﾉ(o_ _)ﾉ

Having read several Harry Potter fanfics, I want to talk about how Dumbledore treats Harry. He threw Harry into an orphanage that was not as good as it was, and rejected many aunts who were willing to adopt Harry. First of all, he is unwilling to raise it by himself, so why should Dumbledore raise it by himself? Secondly, being thrown into an orphanage may lead to adoption by others, which may develop an uncontrollable character, such as Tom Riddle. Then, they rejected many people who were willing to adopt Harry. The Weasley family was poor, Longbottom only had an old lady who was too busy, and Dumbledore was worried about the other families, fearing to develop an uncontrollable character. Besides, the so-called protection that Harry's blood relatives can provide him is only for Voldemort. For example, little Malfoy can do it, but can old Malfoy hit Harry? What about other dark wizards? How was Harry's mother's protective spell determined? Can a house elf hurt Harry? In summary, 1, the blood protection spell can only target Voldemort among the dark wizards, but others can't find where Harry lives. To sum up 2, when Dumbledore was considering who to adopt Harry, it was not to provide Harry with a better condition and environment (after all, Harry's parents died heroically), but to prioritize his own interests and consider what kind of character Harry should be cultivated.

To be honest, I don't like this protagonist very much. He is too utilitarian and exploits him in various ways. It's very uncomfortable to watch. Of course, I can still continue reading. What supports me is that the author does not write this kind of utilitarianism over and over again, allowing me to ignore the true character of the protagonist.

It's quite boring. I don't have much motivation to keep reading. It's so bland.

Why is the protagonist not from China? Failure

I've read more than half of it, but I haven't finished it yet. The writing is very good, and the early part is very exciting. It's among the top of the dozens of Harper's books I've read. In the early stage, the protagonist is a very principled person. He will kill anyone who touches me. In the middle and later stages, hundreds of people in the entire clan are killed for a Horcrux, and no one has messed with you. This is very disgusting. He is fully portrayed and has a sinister heart and a ruthless hand. , But the character that always had a bottom line was completely ruined. I kept seeing Dumbledore's strength decline later on, and I couldn't stand it anymore when he was messing around in school. Dumbledore knew everything that happened in the school, but he didn't stop it. This was inconsistent with Lao Deng's character. He just said hello before, and I felt like he was bleeding in the later period. I hope the new book won't make such a mistake.

I feel like this book is pretty well written... It's not as bad as you say, right? What Mike did in the early stage did make me feel uncomfortable, but I think it was just a manifestation of the difference in outlook. Everyone has their own standards for judging whether the three views are correct or not. This cannot be imposed on others, right? Moreover, Mike's previous life was not a good one (robbing banks). I feel that the author's level is gradually improving. As Mike gradually became stronger, I saw that he was not completely cold and dark. He would also take care of other people's feelings, and would give up the idea because Harry and he had been friends for several years... I really cried when I watched the scene between Victor and the little werewolf girl... And the latest chapter... Dumbledore's death made me cry violently! ! Mike is not the kind of heartless person. He will also be sad because of Dumbledore's departure... The author writes so well!

Wow, I feel like the writing style of this book is pretty good, but the main character is a bit violent, which is not very suitable for a relatively peaceful person like me. . .

The early stage was good, but when I saw the mid-term factory construction, I was a little confused. I felt that a few points were not very reasonable. First, in terms of the price offered by the construction company, I don't think it's reasonable to ask someone to give you a low-interest loan to build a house without asking for help. I think it's acceptable if you have a trustee to ask the construction team for a friendly price. The second is the joining of Brother Fred George. I think the price is unreasonable. Both of them can earn thousands of galleons from selling as agents in school (I mentioned it when I went to Ron's house at the end of the first semester). I think 50 a month plus R&D commission is too low. They are both business wizards in the wizarding world and they don't want to join like this. Ron's oil bottle that comes with it is worth the same as the two of them. The third is the Loyalty Curse. This secret spell will not be cast by the construction team on you, because the secret keeper of this spell is very important. It is too unsafe for outsiders to cast a spell on you to identify the secret keeper. Moreover, there are so many safe houses in Ravenclaw (the house given to the protagonist) that do not have the Loyalty Curse. It is unreasonable that a construction team can cast it casually. The stacking of these unreasonable points was too eye-catching, and I had to take a long time to look down.

I just watched part of it, and I think it's okay. It's about the same level as food, but the author's protagonist, like most other protagonists who travel through time and are reborn as children, can't tell that they were originally adults, and most of the time their personality is actually that of a child.

In the original book, Voldemort has a pathological obsession with Harry Potter. How could you cling to the protagonist in your book instead of looking for trouble for Harry Potter? This is not logical