Harry Potter and the Secret Treasures

Ron, who possesses all seven mortal sins, is not likable. He can be turned into a black man and just as easy to be whitewashed. I hope the author can control the plot well so that mortals can have a reasonably good ending. After all, I am also a mortal, and looking at him is like looking at myself.

This book has quite a few poisonous points. 1⃣️As a HP fan, many details and settings are really poisonous. For example, in Armanigus, the protagonist finished his first year, read a book, drank a magic potion, and recited a spell to succeed directly. The emotional original contains mandrake leaves for a month, and then the magic potion, you don't need it when there is a thunderstorm, right? The human body deforms itself, which is difficult, but it is no longer difficult for you, right? 2⃣️The male protagonist joins the trio and takes care of the child's development like a nanny. 3⃣️Ron. You can criticize him, but I don't like him either. But you wrote him so poorly, and made no progress in more than a thousand chapters from beginning to end. As a result, every time something happened, Ron was jealous, had his soul stolen, and caused trouble. Then the male protagonist went to save him, forgive him in various ways, and even took him to receive the award. Who is disgusting? 4⃣️Emotional issues. Not long after the beginning, she and Hermione were dependent on each other for life and death, but they didn't get together until about a third of the entire book. During this period, various confessions and kisses were interrupted. Why don't you just stop? Moreover, the distance from the original trio was not well controlled. 5⃣️The setting is to have past life memories, but if you look carefully, the memory is of no use at all, it would be better to have nothing at all.

It is completely unacceptable to forcibly reduce the protagonist's intelligence and write the plot twist in such a bloody way. . Especially when the protagonist deals with a certain mouse, he doesn't look like a time traveler at all. The tied rat was able to sneak out several times while being guarded by several insiders. It is really hard to accept that it can be criticized for dozens of chapters after being caught and then released. . . I would say that even if the main character was just a squib, his performance in this book would not be that outrageous. I have read so many lj xiaobai online articles, and this is the first bloody protagonist who forced me to go to the comment area.

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Defeat Ron to death, and then whitewash Malfoy and Snape like crazy

We must know that this book is the first of its kind for Harry fans It is inevitable that there will be flaws in the plot This book is the blueprint for future generations of Harry fans Don't criticize it here, don't compare this book with other books, many other books have learned from it

After reading more than 1,500 chapters, although the author is a Hermione fan, I really feel that Hermione is not suitable to be the heroine. In the original world line, which is the early stage of the book, it is quite suitable. However, after the author introduced the evil god line, she felt that the two were not suitable to be boyfriend and girlfriend, but more suitable to be comrades. The difference in their world view and values ​​led to Hermione sometimes not being able to understand Alvin. Although Hermione cared about Alvin, she could not understand. Sometimes it seemed that Alvin was accommodating Hermione. This feeling became more serious in the later stages of learning.

First of all, let me make a point: Anyone who tries to whitewash the Dursleys is either stupid or bad.

The protagonist is simply a trash male protagonist in Japanese comics. The Virgin is weak and irrational. He knows clearly that Ron is a loser who can't stand it, but he never takes precautions. He knows that Death Eaters will hurt people around him, but he never dares to kill him. This kind of person is not worthy of saving the world at all. He should have been plotted to death long ago. He is a pure child and extremely childish! The plot and world view of this book are so perfect, but the author has ruined it. The protagonist can be regarded as one of the most mentally retarded among the thousands of novels I have read!

The protagonist is too decent and cares too much about other people's opinions. But if he uses black magic, he will receive inner condemnation. It makes him laugh to death. Power does not distinguish between good and evil. It is just a means of killing. You should control power, not power control you.