The Number One Card Maker

Finished spreading flowers! ! ! First of all, Da Da's imagination is as big as ever. Whether it's infrastructure frenzy, wizard academy, or this one, the background of the story is all a strange setting, very novel! However, this time it can be regarded as a breakthrough. After all, it is not a purely infrastructure farming story. I feel that the buried plot lines such as the extermination of the family and life experience are the main line. Secondly, wouldn't you consider changing the title and copy of this book? After reading the entire article, I really don't feel that it is heading towards an upgrade stream. The title is a bit misleading and the copy is a bit vague. I read the article directly from the author, but it may not be very friendly to newcomers. Then, I felt that the emotional lines of the novel were getting less and less. I am a pure love fan, so don't become a non-CP! ! Also, it's such a big novel, and every time the ending leaves me with a feeling that I'm still unfinished, I always feel like I can continue writing. Alas, I want to read the sweet side stories in every book~ Finally, congratulations on the completion! ! ! Looking forward to the big new article, pen core (beep quietly: I hope the new article has more emotional lines~)

It ended too hastily, and the bad guy didn't get punished. He was a bit worried and just said he didn't know his whereabouts. I know he had difficulties, but this is not the reason for him to do bad things. If everyone does this and says something with reasons after doing bad things, then why should the police do it? What about the dead people and victims? Will they have to pay for his hardships? ??

The low subscription volume of this book is really inseparable from the copywriting. Distortion and other things made me think of Alien directly. Traveling into a movie to practice and calling grandma out to fight are actually very good ideas. There are too many things this book wants to express, but I have to write about each one, but the ideas are not clear. I didn't feel happy after reading it. One is that it is unfinished, and the other is that the revenge chapter is too long. Every fight is so tragic that I can't watch it. It's stressful. I hope the next one will be good. I still like the author's writing style, such as describing the daily life of students and tribal children, which is relatively relaxed.

I feel like there are still a lot of things that haven't been explained. How did the protagonist get into a car accident and become an embryo? Attack and receive are a pair and attack can make its own decision and choose to close. It shows that the two of them should have been adults when they were sealed, so why did they become embryos? And how many generations of civilization have used them as secret weapons? This is too strange. He also said that they are destined to save the world. Several generations of civilizations have changed. What kind of world are they going to save? Where did this news come from?

I still feel it is a pity. The world view and setting are definitely unique and novel in Jinjiang. However, the world view is grand but lacks details. The plot line is a little thin. The grass gray snake line stretches for thousands of miles. The lines in the text are mostly superficial. The dark lines are not dark enough and are slightly abrupt, such as the dark line of Emperor Jingtian. The identity of Baili's villain is too obvious. If you are a frequent reader of the article, you may have guessed it a long time ago. I already knew his identity from the first time he appeared, probably because others praised him, "If you know Baili, you will never doubt him." In addition, Baili was once the light of his generation and surpassed the rest. It is too obvious. Using a once-absolutely good guy as the villain is quite ironic: "Tragedy is breaking the beauty of the world to show others." But the author's description at the beginning was off-center. If he wanted to achieve this kind of contrast, he should not describe what this person was like from a macro perspective and a third-party perspective. Instead, he should start with his details. He could write a memoir, describing how he got along with his friends, how he tried his best to kill the enemy, how he had been shaken countless times but still remained firm. Only these details can make the character more three-dimensional and make readers more unbelievable and distressed by such a gentleman's rebellion. I don't know if this counts as writing guidance, but it's just some sincere advice from me as a reader. Writing can be trained, but setting requires inspiration, and inspiration is hard to find. I am very optimistic about the author. He has such a fantastic and exquisite world view and setting. There will be more novel inspirations like this in the future. I look forward to the gorgeous world that the author will bring to us when his writing style becomes more mature.

It would be nice to add a few more chapters at the end to add details. For example, the person and rewards of the third personality live broadcast, and why the male protagonist lost his memory. None of this was made clear

All I can say is that the ending is inexplicable, and the emotional line feels like a top student solving a math problem. There is only one solution and answer. The process is brief, and it doesn't matter if it is there or not.

I quite like the world view setting, but the emotional scenes are hard to explain in words.

This emotional line is so magical and confusing

I also read the article directly from the author. The infrastructure craze was my original intention! I feel like everything I write now is in a hurry, and a few of my books feel unfinished. I wonder if I could write slower, or even start a new book to make up for the complete worldview!