24,291,966 comments indexed
The biography of a mortal who cultivates immortality is written that one cannot become an immortal without spiritual roots, while the one written by *** is that one cannot become an immortal without a woman.
Yes, Xiao Wu is a tool man. In the original novel, Xiao Wu is also a tool man.
If you dare to charge for a fan with a rating of 6.8, Let me see how it goes
renew
It's very interesting. The author please continue to make more updates. I really like this kind of heroine with some brains😋
It looks good in the front, but after getting the Tiangong Fairy City, the combat power has collapsed. What attracts people is to be cautious, walk on thin ice, and make reasonable use of golden fingers.
It's so frustrating to watch, I push myself hard, push myself to death, the Virgin Mary and a mental patient
Check in on the 19th day 3.23
It's Monday at work, the second day of menstruation, and I'm guessing I'll have menstrual cramps.
The supernatural bar is not supernatural at all, and the cool literary bar is suppressed and unhelpful. It's too deliberate, it's been suppressing, suppressing the protagonist, why are you still hiding the contradiction, just suppressing it?
Another story about a male dog who is in heat everywhere, but after chapter 300, he will not stop playing with women! !
Why don't you go to the Noumenon Sect if you have the Noumenal Martial Spirit? You won't be able to write if you leave Shrek.
It's good to read, but I can't imagine what the author is going to write next unless it's an open ending.
Trumpet I have finished reading. I hope the author can discuss some poisonous points.
Can the author stop writing? Can you give up this book and start a new one now? There are indeed a lot of poisonous points in your book. It is understandable that you want to be original. Maybe it is your first time writing a fan fiction, and I personally feel that the original content is too poisonous. Otherwise, the rating of your book must be at least 8.5 Or above. The original maid girl is actually acceptable. , But there is not much sense of immersion. After all, this is fan fiction. Personally, I think the exercises can be copied from homework. Wang Yu's setting is that the strongest exercises in the mortal world have always been sword cultivation and body cultivation. It is understandable that the author wants to be original, that is, the contents of original exercises It's easy to fall over, my writing is not good, and I don't have a deep understanding of the original chopsticks. I really recommend that you just copy the homework. After all, it's the same as the humanities. If you just copy the homework, our readers will feel more immersed in it. If you really want to create original skills, you can improve your skills in the later stage, and use the strengths of hundreds of schools to create your own skills. This method will be more accepted by everyone, instead of making original copies to obtain the exercises. Obviously your original exercises are overturned, and you don't feel that you have any awesome magical powers. Although it is said to be very awesome, it has directly obtained the power of the laws of the Mahayana period in the spiritual world. This It's really unbelievable. You must be looking for a follow-up to this technique, probably another pre-order copy or something. You must know that you are writing about a time traveler. You clearly know the plot, so why are you still struggling to find the technique? I don't quite understand. The Qingyuan Sword Technique in the human world can transform into a god. , I went to the spirit world to find Qing Yuanzi for follow-up. This inappropriate top-level skill was on my face, so I didn't have to worry about the danger of my life in the copy. Anyway, if I think about it from another perspective, I am a time traveler and I will definitely choose Qing Yuan Sword Technique. I already know the plot and anyone with a normal mind should know it. How to choose? You didn't do this original work well, so the natal magic weapon in the future will not work, the needle magic weapon is just okay, and the formation flag magic weapon. To be honest, you can directly write and practice a formation flag disk. The ability is basically the same, and it can be updated. After all, the formations will become more and more popular in the future. The more awesome you are, if you want to use this as your magic weapon, it will be embarrassing if you can't keep up. With Zhenhai Ji, I really feel that the author is really trying hard to be original. Unfortunately, this is a fan of cultivating immortals, which is really not suitable. I tried to substitute it, and it felt like martial arts or high school. The weapons in martial arts are not suitable for the world of cultivating immortals. You can't just have a halberd when other people's magic weapons are flying all over the sky. You have to sacrifice it or hold it in your hand, unless it is a composite type. For example, Wen Tianren's needle magic weapon can be combined into a gun. These are all poisonous points. I really feel that they are not as good as the Green Bamboo Bee Cloud Sword. Not to mention its unique value. There are at least 72 of them in a set. They are lethal and can be used for sword arrays. They also have evil-proof divine thunder. They are immortal weapons in the fairy world. How to cultivate and upgrade them. Travelers know it all. It's your turn. I am a time traveler, and I have not yet practiced to the level of the Immortal Realm, that is to say, I have no experience of the Mahayana level in the spiritual world. How should you choose a pill formation? This is a sub-question. You really don't have to worry about making original creations in the human world, otherwise it will be an infinite matryoshka doll. You will continue to create new magic weapons and techniques later. , If the writing is good, there will be no deduction, but if the writing is bad, it is just a poisonous point to be honest. In summary, the original skills are rubbish. They are just forced to brag to be very awesome. In fact, they are just a water release spell plus an escape water escape. In terms of original magic weapons, each one is more rubbish than the last one. I still want to think about it. Constantly changing the natal magic weapon without considering the point of accumulation. These poisonous points ruined this book. Otherwise, the rating could be higher. It is really a pity. There are really not many mortals who can write well. If this book did not have these poisonous points, in my personal opinion, it is already a high-quality book. Alas! It's a pity that with these poisonous points, no matter how well written it is, it's like a thorn that keeps reminding me that it's hard to continue reading. I hope the author will get better and better! That's it for this book, and I'm looking forward to your next book. Goodbye!
That's pretty much it, every chapter contains personal belongings of men and women. I'm here to read a novel
I'm not here to watch the emotional channel, I'm just trying to trick someone into talking about personal stuff.
The author's opportunity from the ancient Bodhi tree cannot be given to outsiders, but can only be given to his own family. The protagonist has nothing to do with them. If they get the opportunity, will they give it to the protagonist? It's simply impossible. They will only mock the protagonist for not being strong enough, and want to seize the opportunity. They may even kill you, so they must not be the bad good people who give even a bodhi seed to their own family. There are so many people in the Five Elements of your family, or you can recruit some elders. When your family's power is threatened, who will help you? Will the Ancient Family or Xiao Yan come to help? It's not about relying on the help of the people on Gulong Island to improve the strength of my family, or the people on Gulong Island. Anyway, there are a few people who have good relations with them. Never give it to outsiders, not even a bodhi seed. After all, when your own power is threatened, who has extended a helping hand, if it is not the protagonist Zhuli now I'm afraid you are alone. You must not give it. If you have Bodhi Seeds for those who are destined to be enemies, why can't you give them to your own family or use Bodhi Seeds to make Bodhi Pills to recruit those who are stuck at the peak of the Nine-Revolution Douzun, or to recruit those who have entered Douzun? There is no need to waste it on those who are destined to be enemies.
I haven't seen the back yet.
Let me first ask, should you stay with Shrek and not leave, or should you leave later?
Damn it, I didn't know about the new book until today😇😇😇😇
The author personally recommends that you think about the chapter name! I was listening to the novel, and every time I heard the name of the chapter! I have no desire to continue listening, because I can roughly think of the general plot of that chapter! The plot I heard is that you are writing a running account plot! . Moreover, there is another person on this platform who writes about the same subject as you on this platform! He writes about community travel, and he also travels through different maps. In your book, I jumped from chapter to chapter 35, and it's probably just a map! And then you wrote the plot like a running account.
The only shortcomings are that updates are too slow, the script is sometimes too delayed, and there are too few realistic chapters.
I'm afraid the author hasn't read the original work.
I'm afraid the author hasn't read the original work. Isn't that ridiculous? Does Ten Thousand Years Willow have a planetary level?
The first time I saw it was Tang San trying to please the protagonist, and it was endless
Don't tell me, although I know this is a cool article, it feels boring and a bit boring, but it is very different from ordinary cool articles, that is, there are always people who are not afraid of death to stand up. Provoking the Gods Once provoking the King of Gods, they will punish them. In the past, when I watched the anime, I felt disgusted. Ma Xiaotao, an idiot, deserved to be tortured. Whether it is anime, comics or novels, it is all fun. And Xuanzi, a loser, now watching him clean the toilet, I strongly recommend that he clean the toilet for the rest of his life.
I struggled to read Chapter 87, but I couldn't read the chapter where Qian Daoliu was stunned. The plot was quite good, but there were too many narrations and psychological descriptions. It felt like it was too much and too much. What was originally a good psychological description turned out to be like bullshit. This is the opposite of too much. People say that one beauty covers all ugliness, and this novel is one ugliness that covers 100 beauties. There are really too many nonsense narrations. I can't read it anymore, so I gave up... Oh!
The author is great
Although I haven't read the author's first book, Maya, but based on the author's in-depth exploration of the setting in the Game of Thrones book, and although I haven't read the author's DC fan fiction, being able to write 10 million words speaks for itself of his level. The author said that he was not very good at controlling the details of the plot back then, but in the book I have read now, the author's setting exploration and plot control in a single world are really great. The author himself has the talent to write very long novels, and is especially good at writing running map-style plot promotion. The protagonist often runs around to cause trouble, which is very suitable for writing novels such as the infinite flow of travel between two worlds. Many authors have difficulty in controlling this aspect when writing, but the author is talented in this aspect, and I feel that he is really good at writing. I also read the author's book first, and then I read the author's Game of Thrones fanfic when I was bored. It was really amazing. Although I have only read two of the author's books, from these two books alone, I really felt that the author was really good at writing a racing plot. It was very similar to a book I once read - The Fifth Form. I guess the author is familiar with capsicum. I feel that the plot style of this book is a bit like the fifth form, just running around and back and forth. It really has a feeling of déjà vu. Although I only read the author's Game of Thrones fanfic once, it was the first Game of Thrones fanfic that I read completely. After reading it, I really felt a strong sense of admiration for the author, and then I immediately started to come back and continue reading the author's fairy tale. The author has blazed his own path, starting from the light novel and now, step by step, the fourth book is an original fairy tale. If it hadn't been written too long, it would have been impossible not to have the promise of a great god. Really, the author's writing style is not as good as a promise of a great god. I really think it's quite that. What a great author!
Soul piercing soul piercing soul piercing soul piercing
The writing is very good. Come on, author, update quickly.
Author, if you say you are poor, then why can't you write more? ?
The writing is quite good, especially at the beginning. Before the war started, I personally didn't like it at the end. The process was a bit too fast at the end. I thought you would continue writing in the same style as the beginning, but I didn't expect to participate in the war.
Good, good, good, good. Very well written.
Nowadays, the curtain exposure stream is popular. It all says "exposure". What exposure do you deserve?
Good-looking, okay, good. Update quickly
How often will it be updated? How often will it be updated? Update soon. I finished reading it all night today.
It's finally updated. It's very nice. I hope it will be updated soon.
Good settings
I can only say that they are all good, but the plot is too dry throughout the whole process, and there is no excessive plot such as daily sub-plots or anything like that.
Mark it and go looking for ideas🤞
The author's writing is very good. Please try harder and update more. It's not enough.
Gotta stand up, stand up, stand up
It was okay before Chapter 70
I don't recommend watching it later. Ten more words, ten more words
It looks good, but the ending is a bit stretched and not well written.
Angry Seal is like a beet, and the book he wrote created a new development for Douluo Tongren. It gives people the feeling that when the protagonist wants to masturbate, Tang San can't wait to change into personality A.
It's so good. I like the author and keep following the show.
I feel like my combat power is a bit low. Dou Ling fights against level 6 monsters (Dou Huang). Will I be able to fight Dou Zong and Dou Zun when I reach Dou King?
It's too watery, lu-la-la-la-la-lu-la-la-la-la-la-la-la-la
The style changes drastically after Chapter 99
After Chapter 99, it is brainless and intellectual. It completely loses the sense of delicacy before. The logic is different in many places. For example, the setting of swallowing is different from what was written before, and the protagonist becomes crazy. Have you forgotten that Tang San wants to kill you? I remember that there weren't many updates during the 1999 period. I suspect I hired a ghostwriter.
It's too little, please update it soon. I've wrapped up what I wrote earlier. It's overall very good. It's just that the emotional handling before confirming the relationship with Xun'er wasn't very good. The more I write later, the better.
This is a new life
You have lived for so long, you have been a director for so long and you don't know that the capital in the entertainment industry is the largest. I don't believe that you didn't know anything about financial venture capital before you were reborn. If no one invests in you, you just wait to die.
What's the rush thing? I found the Silver Dragon King inexplicably. Yes, I found the Silver Dragon King in a cave. Then he was seriously injured and fell asleep. He just made some formation like an idiot, and then disappeared and died. The Silver Dragon King fell madly in love... This is a post thing, there is no logic at all.
I haven't played it, but I found out the protagonist is a man after reading the comments section.
It's neither male nor female. It's so cool to eat a peach.
There are too many stories about this kind of hostility to Tang San, but it's better than the forced hostility at the beginning of Notting City. It's barely readable.
Has anyone ever asked the author whether he wrote the plot of the Su family himself?
When I saw that paragraph, I thought it was either an AI or a studio writer. But he should have written the outline himself, right? Did he really decide this plot? Has anyone ever asked him why he writes NTR plots, to let himself go?