NBA: The System Shows Up Only After I've Won MVP

You're really good at padding the story. The first round of the playoffs against the Grizzlies was already dragged out for dozens of chapters. Six or seven games were filled with so many chapters. You deserve to fail.

When writing a novel, you should just do whatever feels good. The wingspan-to-height difference should be at least 15 centimeters, right? Your static stats aren't even as good as LeBron James'; you're just average in the league.

Having read up to Chapter 6, here are my thoughts. This book is best read with your head on the edge of your seat; some details shouldn't be scrutinized too closely. The protagonist was drafted by the Clippers in 2008 and led them to the number one overall pick in his rookie season, selecting Blake Griffin.

Tessa

It's written like a diary entry, from a God's-eye view throughout, with no sense of immersion whatsoever; the novel reads like a report.

This roster has no chance of winning the championship; they'll likely lose to the Mavericks, thus cementing the Silver Horn King's legendary title.

This is too long; don't write such a long article about the competition.

Li Jianyang, what a terrible name! You've read too many light novels, haven't you? It's the same style as Lin Jianlu! You'd be better off calling him Li Shet, Li Aisso, or Li Dick! If you call him like in America, it would be Shet Lee, Aisso Lee, or Dick Lee. That would at least make people laugh.

110,000 Words, five matches...

The characters aren't introduced at the beginning; it's all so abrupt and illogical.