The Outcast: The Heavenly and Human Become One

Anyone who didn't know better would think the protagonist was practicing the Sunflower Manual.

When you write fan fiction, you should at least read the original work; you can't just write whatever comes to mind.

It's quite difficult; why insist on writing such a childish main character?

My comment was deleted twice, but I'm posting it a third time because it's really bad.

The protagonist has two lifetimes and is having an ambiguous relationship with a little girl who's only a few years old? I endured the agonizing thought and read a few chapters.

It's getting too weak. From a purely narrative perspective, he's vying for first or second place with the Old Master, but everyone else wants a piece of his pie. This keeps going on and on; how brainless are the villains?

No, you wrote about gunfighting in the first two chapters, just to show off?

I thought I'd master Wudang kung fu, but in the end, I was still stuck with the Celestial Master's Mansion. I thought I'd specialize and take off, but trying to do everything resulted in mediocrity. Nothing beats the sincerity of focusing on mastering the "Reversing Eight Directions" style.

Given the protagonist's unruly nature at this age, he was never meant to practice Feng Hou's martial arts and shouldn't have stayed in Wudang.

Do you think the latest two chapters sound like they were written by a chuunibyou (middle school syndrome) student? They're really hard to read.