Immortal Offering Ritual

It's not as bad as the comment section said. It could be said to be a fairy grass before it was released, but now it is at least a good grass. Advantages: The writing is smooth, the context is clear, and there are no lines everywhere. The values ​​​​are very normal, the sect's atmosphere is very good, the author can write more about the sect's cohesion and value system. The explanation of the exercises is okay, I have some thoughts. Disadvantages: The plot is relatively flat, and the connection with the distant place and high-level officials is very weak. I don't even know what the protagonist's goal is or the core of his path, but it may be mentioned later. In short, the lower limit is good grass. If there is a more grand plot and promotion in the future, it may not be impossible to reach fairy grass.

I've read the last one of his books, and it was okay in the early stages. All kinds of pretentious things, I'll just read the first chapter. Chapter 1, well, it's pretty much a rejection, right? I knew this book was not suitable for me. I came here to have fun Literature and youth, I might as well read literature.

Currently there is no single or long position. I asked once before and there is no accurate information 🙂🙂🙂

Excellent classical fairy tale, but I don't know if there is a love line

I am used to those so-called zero-sum games among underworld cultivators, so it is refreshing to see this kind of world. From the setting of Zhengjiao, it can be seen that the resources in this world are biased towards those that are relatively abundant, so the appearance of this kind of decency is necessarily reasonable. Moreover, I also have some thoughts about the latest chapter and the previous plot. Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it. If you squirt hard, you are right. I still hope that there will be more of this kind of glorious and upright power in Qidian. After all, there is already a lot of darkness in reality, and there is no need to repeat those depressing stories in novels.

Multiple female protagonists, no female protagonist, or single female protagonist Every woman has a crush on the male protagonist, but the male protagonist is like a love-struck character, like a personal computer. It would be fun to write with multiple female protagonists. Don't always have a female cultivator appear who vaguely likes the male protagonist, and then the male protagonist is indifferent. The two senior sisters in the early stage didn't reply to the letters, so it's okay to reply to the letters. If the male protagonist is handsome, just describe it directly. There is no need to describe it sideways because of the love of so many women. Is the male protagonist the only male protagonist? If there is no female protagonist, then don't write so many supporting female characters. Basically, they all have a vague liking for the male protagonist, but there is no female protagonist. This is not a strange thing. If you have this time, you might as well catch up on more plots. And if you are writing a story without a heroine, the unimportant female supporting characters will be in the past. I feel there is no need to mention it again. If the two senior sisters are not accepted, there is no need to increase their presence. After all, the protagonist will surpass the others sooner or later. There is no need to use the gap to show that it is inappropriate. Just say that the protagonist is single-minded. It can't be a single female protagonist. It doesn't look like it. There are audiences for multiple female protagonists, single female protagonists, and no female protagonists. It's just this vague ambiguity that is uncomfortable to watch. In the last book, I felt that the author did not handle the relationship well. I feel that whether you like multiple female protagonists, single female protagonists or no female protagonists, it should be uncomfortable to watch. Overall, the plot is quite good. It is not a plot about bitterness and hatred. The cultivation system and realm are also quite complete, but the emotional aspects are a bit stiff.

First of all, the cultivation realm of this book is very complete, and the various Jiao methods are also very unique. I feel that there are still very few people who write about this kind of cultivation The appearance of the protagonist is also good, there is no overpowering the guest, it is equivalent to a guiding role, and there is no need to impose a plot to advance the main line The other is the plot, a rare decent flavor, not annoying There are all kinds of provocations and pretending to be pigs and eating tigers. Although there are not many big scenes, the feeling of slowly advancing is also very comfortable I think there are two things that will be difficult to deal with in the future: First, the facial makeup of the supporting characters, because this book has a large world view, and there must be many supporting characters who are inevitably homogeneous, especially the female characters. There is no big difference, they are all strong and beautiful. The second is the issue of balance of combat power. The protagonist will be more and more hanged in the future. Now he is basically invincible in the group. How to balance it in the future is a problem In general, this book is a breath of fresh air. I have seen many such books that will fall into a state of lack of content and lack of updates after being put on the shelves. I don't know if the author can persist. I am still very optimistic about it 🤓

I feel angry at work, and I feel depressed while reading a novel after get off work. Can you be more decisive? Aren't you the chief of the great religion and the face of Jiantian Sect? That's it? During the selection process within the sect, you acted like a gangster, but when it came to critical moments, you showed mercy to women when you saw them outside? Really mean. Where is your Chaohuang Zhengqi and the demon disintegrated? Can't you trade your injury for your life? It feels like this Yuanjie copy is just a joke, no one died. It was inexplicable and made me angry.

In general, if you are short of books, you can read If you write something more attractive in the future, the shortcomings will be acceptable. The first 24 chapters, general content 1. Failed to refining qi, borrowed medicine through gambling, successfully returned the medicine, failed to get married 2. Cheated and succeeded in refining qi for the second time, and received door benefits 3. Arriving late, the benefits were changed, and the compensation was to win rewards by playing PK 4. The protagonist of Duck King found a few old friends, got the explosive secret book, and won PK, successful small upgrade, small flames turned into big flames 4. Assigned to the new station of the sect for training

The previous book relied on the female senior and finally became a senior Taoist monk This book's cultivation is more about appearance. I feel that the previous part emphasized too much on the appearance of pig's feet and relied on women. There is also the part about the senior brother breaking the contract with the rabbit clan. It is written as if ugly people cannot cultivate immortality. It directly denies many mediocre-looking people and also denies the victory of man over nature.

Other works often have similar cheats that issue tasks and guide the protagonist's growth, but the goals are generally relatively clear. In this case, if the protagonist follows the instructions and completes the task, he can often gain more than if he does not complete the task. We sometimes call this kind of system puppet, but if the writing is good, it won't be too harsh. As for this book, as a book about cultivating immortality, everyone agrees with the writing style, but the golden finger makes people feel uncomfortable. It seems to give a general direction without giving a clear task, but every decision the protagonist makes must consider the impact of Goldfinger. If the protagonist makes a decision first, then fits the golden finger and gets positive feedback, then the perception will be much better. The current situation is that the protagonist first ponders an idea, and then finds that in order to comply with the golden finger, he has to change his mind more than once. Is that really in line with the so-called Taoist heart?

I received this book recommendation from another author. After reading a few chapters, he persuaded me to quit. What the hell is this book about? The author has no friends in real life and borrows money directly from the bank.

Xunxian asks to behead people, even if it is a dream, it is romantic. I feel better personally

If you keep writing like this, I'm going to give up the book, it's so disgusting. Five rivers divide the continent into six parts and are written as five. When seeing a woman, she lowers her head inexplicably and shows mercy. Can you continue to write down your life-fighting momentum and decisive killing methods in the early stage of the battle? If this continues, I will really give up reading.

The latest chapter is a bit clownish. He puts his head down when he sees a woman. He doesn't even dare to use the life-saving skills. It is obvious that Huang Zhengqi of Chao Ming Dynasty is domineering and decisive. When encountering a narrow road, the brave will win. I don't know what he is writing. This chapter is completely different from the protagonist's style foreshadowed before. Inexplicably, he acts like a coward. When he is fighting with someone, he doesn't take any action when he is interrupted. It's really disgusting. Aren't you the chief of Jiantian Sect? What about your noodles? Where is your pride? You were so awesome during the internal assessment of Jiantianjiao, but during the external war, did you see women who didn't even dare to risk their lives?

The latest chapter is finished. A genius suppresses the current Shuangwen script. Suddenly, a character with resources and background comes to forcefully control the protagonist. He can't beat him and can run away with a heavy treasure The protagonist stands there seemingly unharmed. He is beaten for no reason, and then he waves and runs away with the heavy treasure, haha The author has written a hundred and forty-two chapters of Shuangwen. From the 143rd chapter, there are first signs of abuse of the protagonist The author has exhausted his talents To be happy, you have to be happy to the end

🐶The author must have been a eunuch in his previous life. As long as he is a woman, he will be merciful.

The golden hand points out a sharp word. In order to condense this word, the protagonist has to change his thoughts and actions, which is like a puppet on a string. The protagonist doesn't even think about whether he really wants to do this. This book is tasteless and it would be a pity to discard it.

The description of the protagonist who was very controversial in the early stage strictly followed Yudie's instructions is indeed inappropriate, and it is even more inappropriate for the author to describe it repeatedly. It should be the other way around, describing that the protagonist's actions are all based on his heart, and then Yudie gives feedback. After all, the reader sympathizes with the protagonist. Even if everyone is arranged in life, it is not in vain to read the novel if it is like this in the novel. Either this is a villain plug-in with a strong sense of oppression, such as a main god, to add rationality to the protagonist's behavior.

Why give the word sharp, you have to follow the word sharp The word sharp cannot become wisdom😥 This cannot be the golden finger to control the wage earner Because I am afraid of disobeying the golden finger and losing the golden finger, I will no longer be sharp

The protagonist in this wave is the fantasy god of civil war. It won't work if you meet a woman in a foreign war. Why don't you show the same momentum as you did overseas? It's all about the last wave of the road, and there's no need to risk your life. Isn't it Chao Huang Zheng Qi? This wave of protagonists probably want to reconcile yin and yang. You won't be able to play this trick for a long time after playing Guyang.

Whether you were a turtle in your previous life or not, it would be a god to be able to write a plot about using spiritual objects and spiritual weapons to bribe these great disciples. Regardless of whether you accept it or not, it would be a god to be able to write such a plot.

The character of this protagonist is cunning and indifferent. It would be fine if he could hide it. The key is to make it clear that he is a villain. So many people like him. This is the wisdom of the world. Do all women rely on Happy Beans to think about problems? The protagonist who is secretive and is the same as your third brother. If he is bad, he should be as bad as possible, and if he is good, he should be upright. There is no point in being secretive and being a villain. If you have money, don't give it all. If it's worth 10 spiritual stones, you have to give only nine spiritual stones, and then say you owe someone a favor. Go to the Fox Clan to ask for medicine. As soon as you get the medicine, you ask them how you can repay the favor if you go ashore, so as not to be taken advantage of later. He is really a little fairy boy in the world of immortality.

The control feeling of Goldfinger is too strong. If you want to be sharp, the protagonist must be sharp.

The language is good, but the plot design is too problematic. I can understand that you want to set up a famous and upright sect, but the people here are too upright and it is boring. Just like the person who snatched the treasure in the protagonist's armor. First of all, they didn't steal it openly, and they also supplemented the armor. It was interesting enough. After knowing this, he gave the protagonist a sword, which made me feel a little bit embarrassed. The protagonist has no background and no identity. As for that, someone else has a foundation-building relative. You might as well write that the protagonist successfully proves himself and gets the treasure, and then others come to apologize, give some treasures, and lay down some foreshadowing. Secondly, the protagonist did not go to the Fox Clan to fulfill his wish immediately after successfully practicing Qi, which means that his emotional intelligence is not good. You have succeeded by relying on soft food, and you still do not go to the largest investor to express your gratitude. It is heartless. Obviously this is a small emotional explosion, the fox mother's surprise, the fox girl's dilemma of not being able to love her, and the protagonist's benevolence and righteousness, can't they all be reflected? Again, if you are good-looking, you will be rewarded by using it at the beginning. If you use it regularly, it will only make people think that the protagonist is incompetent. The first thing other female cultivators think of is that the protagonist is good-looking, and then they will make secret glances. What's the point? Also, the golden finger is too obscure. It's not strong in the first place. I haven't written down the trigger conditions clearly yet. I just jumped on it word by word. Isn't it interesting?

Why do some authors like to write about protagonists who stop being with women after traveling through time? Is the author also a eunuch?

The Wenqing taste is too strong, and the beginning is very attractive. It's a pity that the story is too flat and the writing is too literary and I feel tired after reading it for a long time.

I have two questions. One is that Goldfinger is a bit poisonous. This Goldfinger gives people the feeling that the protagonist is being led by Goldfinger. It would be great if the protagonist's real-life behavior is reflected in Goldfinger's ancient words. Now Golden Finger is like a trap mission system, and the mission only has one word for the protagonist to guess. The other issue is the heroine problem. The charm of the protagonist is described crazily. It is always described everywhere that the female character wants to have sex with the protagonist but the protagonist is indifferent. It is really disgusting. Either be honest and have multiple female protagonists or single female protagonist, or be more refreshing and no female protagonist, don't write so many weird reactions of female characters, and have some normal people. This is the most disgusting way to write, neither good nor bad. I really want to represent everyone. To be honest, whether you like single female protagonists or multiple female protagonists, No girl, but a reader who can accept all three types. No one will like your way of writing. It is really rare to be able to write such a way of disgusting everyone I really like the world view, the power system and the protagonist's sect, but these two problems affect the perception too much.

In my personal impression, the Immortal Sect should be like this. The author and I thought about it together, so I was very happy to read it. I also like the author's changes in Xuanjian's "righteousness".

After reading some, I can still see that the author's writing skills are not good. The inclusion of some ancient texts in the article does not mean that you are good at it or have good experience.. On the contrary, it reads like sand mixed with rice... Doesn't it make sense to describe in a mysterious and mysterious direction? There are countless authors like this in Xianxia. Most of the authors can't even understand the nature of the realm. There. I wrote a lot... I suggest you read these two novels "Fantasy World Travel" and "Ming Zun" to see Chen Yishi's handwriting. Not only can he describe the essence of various realms, he can also tell you what the differences are between various realms... How can a great master know everything from just a superficial glance, and what is the essence of various cultivation methods? Not only is it the loftiness of the realm of thought, but it is also the breadth of various subtle techniques...