That Hateful Witch Is Pretending to Be My Wife!

Because martial arts stories are polluted by high sequences, the more martial arts they are, the easier it is to become green. I'll wait and see.

The light novel is so long. If you write about martial arts, you might as well post it in the martial arts section. The martial arts section is better.

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Please tell me the words! Please read more in the new book issue! 😭😭Don't keep your pillow to death! ! !

Give it a year first 🙂, otherwise it will be a matter of asking for leave sincerely

I think this book is generally above the level of food and close to grass jelly, so I recommend reading it. But the shortcomings are really obvious: many plots are too rough and could have been written better. The first is the reason for the sword. Generally speaking, this kind of thing is realized at the end of the first volume at the climax, but here it is found in less than ten chapters, after witnessing the death of a friend. This reason is of course fine in itself, but in less than ten chapters, the character has not even begun to be described yet, so death is used to foreshadow this. Even if you replace the character with a certain designated heroine, most of the audience will not resonate with it, let alone identify with it, because the emotions are not yet in place. Then there is the fighting scene, you have to write some of it, just kill the Wolf King and it will be gone. Although the author explained that this is a romance novel, romance novels are classified. Since the background of the story is here, you will inevitably write about fighting, and this low-level world of martial arts requires fists and fists. There is also Xie's feelings. Normally, who would think of someone they met once when they were three or five years old (even before the male protagonist was adopted, they never played together or exchanged letters) as a friend and miss him for ten years In general, It's just too deliberate, and it feels like shooting an arrow first and then drawing a target. In order to achieve a certain goal, the feasibility and rationality of the intermediate process are ignored, which leads to very rough writing. However, there are no mistakes in the text and general direction.

Sister Zhen is my mother, you are not allowed to scold her 😭

When I saw it was martial arts, I was a little afraid to watch it 😰

Let's get straight to the point and let's talk about the advantages first The writing is very good and looks promising in the future Okay, now I'm going to talk about the areas that I personally think need to be improved. The following are my personal opinions. If I offend anyone, I apologize in advance First of all, there is a big problem with the rhythm of the plot. I think a good novel should have a degree of relaxation. When it becomes tense, it should be tense. When it relaxes, it should be relaxed. This is the kind that cannot be tense at all. Can you imagine that the protagonist group is racing against time to investigate the case while being hunted? Can you spend more than ten chapters chatting at the crime scene? Speaking of chatting, the author will often suddenly start chatting and expressing emotion at a certain point (it's ugly to say that it is a literary crime), and often write a whole chapter or even two or three chapters. At least 50% of the whole article is the protagonist group chatting, and the author likes to fill this kind of chat with settings. These settings usually fall into the cliché. At first glance, you might want to take a closer look and think about whether such a setting will be of great significance somewhere in the future. But after you throw away the setting one after another to tell the story, you often start to lose the freshness and start to look at the lines to see if you can push the main plot. Because these settings usually only play a role in enriching the character's characteristics. They do not contribute much to the main plot, and the central idea they want to express is very repetitive. You can completely use the actions of the characters in the plot to set off a person's inner personality. Instead of giving a full speech and adding a summary at the end to tell me what kind of person he is, I think it is very dry and blunt to create a character in this way. If you really want to write it like this, you might as well finish each character's personal growth path like Octopath Traveler and then transition to the main plot Let's talk about some more details. As I said before, this novel has a more literary and youthful atmosphere. There are more descriptions of suffering, emotions, etc. Throughout the whole novel. The description is good. But there is really no need to summarize the protagonist's feelings in every description. Sometimes describing the protagonist's reaction with a simple action may be more powerful than two or three paragraphs of inner activities (roughly meaning that I can write two lines of tears falling from the corners of his eyes after hearing a certain news, but I cannot write two lines of sad tears falling from the corners of his eyes). Of course, this is entirely a matter of my personal preference. It is also possible that many people don't like the style that I think is good, so I just want to mention it To summarize, I have read this novel so far. If I want to use a metaphor to describe it, it's like a movie that only has slow motion and close-ups, and each shot is accompanied by a narration: "He is sad" and "He is angry." If you ask me about the movie, I will say that the lighting is good, the setting is very good, and the shots are very designed. Don't ask if it is good or not, but to be honest, it is quite promising. Overall, I would give it 70~80.

1. Of course the male protagonist can save people. I also hope that the male protagonist can act chivalrously and be righteous without any regrets. But? Is it a bit reckless for a person to lead a pack of wolves into the snow-capped mountains? Have you considered the situation where you are exhausted and have no luck? If the heroine does not come to save you, will you die instantly? Will the people in the church be sad because of this? Of course it looks cool to sacrifice your life to save others, but is it wrong to save yourself and do your part? 2. Slave trader. This man really deserves to die, but if you just kill him, only a few little girls will be left? After looking at it, it seems that you didn't say how to deal with it and just released it into nature. Are you sure you didn't harm others? The story is about the male protagonist's early immaturity but he changed it later. It's really unbearable to keep doing this