The Magic Network Collapsed Again: From Militiaman to Evil God

You've already written about Mystra, so why are you still using that Japanese goblin stuff? Magnubie is only a mid-level god, how can goblins have reproductive abilities that ignore the mother's body? You've got Japanese wish fulfillment stuck in your head; this isn't D&D fanfiction at all.

The opening is poorly written. You could have just killed a goblin on the first page and immediately started the job. I read until the end of chapter two before the protagonist's special ability finally kicked in. And this is how the protagonist behaves when facing goblins? What's the point of reading? Even if the protagonist was a newcomer, I wouldn't say anything. But you've been here for a year, and you still haven't adapted to these weaklings? Have you ever fought goblins before?

Is this really a fake D&D? Only swordsmen can be warriors? What about polearms then? Are people from the sewers just lowly servants? Or just go straight to Western fantasy. Saves the D&D label; 5 Intelligence is laughable. The thought of the protagonist only babbling "Aba aba" is unbearable.

The militia, trained for a year, fought a one-meter-tall goblin for three hundred rounds, trembling with fear. Their swords could even create sparks when they chopped at a wooden stick, and in the end, even their swords shattered. I thought you were fighting Warhammer orcs!

Damn it, since you won't listen to advice, just drown in your fantasies.

I suggest the author revise this. The character is about to become a warrior, and the story is filled with a thrilling but ultimately pointless battle against a dwarf-like goblin, which is just a filler chapter. The Baron Mage dies right before your eyes, and you don't even search him. Has the author really thought about the plot properly?

You can fix things at the beginning; few people like to see the protagonist make mistakes. You can get better weapons from the goblins, and why does the goblin setting have to be copied from Goblin Slayer? It's not likable to begin with, and it will only drive some people away.

The time traveler lived like a native, like a native with a cheat code.

The first chapter already features poison. How did the goblin god, with only mid-level divine power, manage indiscriminate reproduction of females? 😅 Doesn't this world have a Sunny Earth Mother? 🤔

Goblin Slayer version, take note if you want to see it.