This NPC Is Ahead of the Version

Overall, it's okay, but the plot is too slow and a bit watery.

I used to say that the Destiny Protagonist's template was too high, but now I can trap the Destiny Protagonist just by popping up a d+🤡. So the question is, who is the real one? 🤔

If you are curious and want to read this book, you can read it at the front, which is good. But getting a vaccination is also a way to vent my personal dissatisfaction. 272-273 has a poisonous point, forcibly suppressing a person who came to the door for honest transactions. The protagonist wanted her to stay and serve the protagonist, and chose to use power instead of being honest. Is this a plot that normal people can come up with? I don't understand. I'll run away first and decide whether to watch it later. I won't vote here anymore.

It's okay. A super mechanic (superpower flow) + his own imagination, he can be regarded as an NPC + a player. After all, the setting is that the later game merges with reality, which is equivalent to the protagonist being reborn with foresight + leading in the version + NPC has no level limit Advantages: So far, it's pretty good, the plot is not laggy, and there are The complete main line, not the Holy Mother, nor the combat power. After all, you can reach level 30 at level 10. You can also give your abilities to other people to gain experience. You can withdraw your abilities at any time with a thought, train NPCs and players, and cut leeks. It can be regarded as another super god mechanic Disadvantages: Some places choose basics. I had to explain the reverse/ability two or three times due to the mutation, and I had to rewrite my ideas over and over again. It was a bit watery, but it was a free chapter. It didn't matter. Some of the plots were too classic. The companions had two souls. They broke out to help the protagonist at a critical moment and then lost their memory. They were usually weak. In addition, there were some plot points. You wrote the optimal solution for experience and evolution points. The best combination with talent, and also wrote that the experimental base was hunted down and had to use up experience and evolution points, and was forced to make do with the crisis. I don't understand it. Although you want to express that the plan cannot keep up with the changes, it feels really speechless to write like this But overall it is good, you can read it, and it is identified as food and grass.

The energy level intensity of the home star cannot support C and above. How can a hostile villain find all kinds of strange objects just for the sake of hydrological pressure progress? It has been written before that the mother planet has not blocked the disaster, but when you are reborn, all kinds of monsters and monsters appear? Class C's are running all over the ground, and one of B+'s will pop out whenever they disagree. In the plot of the Horizon Level, you have to have all the buffs activated to achieve a D+ mission objective. Are all the water improvements you made in front of you fake? It gives me the feeling that this mother planet is like a place where gods have fallen, with a lot of ghosts and monsters. He said that I was invincible, and then fought back and forth with the soldiers, and even raised leeks and water. What have you been reborn for? Even the wonders of the universe have emerged. Why was your home planet destroyed in your previous life? A level B can clean up the disaster on the planet. When I look at it this way, does the protagonist need to hit A before leaving the planet?

It was determined that there was too much Valorant.

The feeling is average, the left and right brains are fighting, and it is useless to post at the same time. I do not correct the typos proposed in the free articles and the published articles. I am immersed in my own art, and I feel that there will be a big, disgusting reader later.

This author is really not suitable for writing about superpowers. It is completely different from the superpowers in my impression. He is like a fool. Superpowers, mutants, and superpowers. This superpower is more like a talent. In the end, it is no different from a skill. Kinetic energy, such an awesome thing, turned out to be like this, just like mastering electromagnetism. It's the same as those with superpowers. Some people use it to change the cosmic constants, while others can only use it as a magnet. The Super God Mechanic's superpower is the perfect expression of superpowers. The expressiveness of superpowers should be weird and unpredictable. As a result, your performance is like Ultraman. You come up to melee first, but you can't beat the second stage, just like a martial artist.

Eunuch protagonist

Don't tell me, you look like a mechanic. 😀 But there are also shortcomings🧐The description of the woman is a bit too typical. I think the setting of Bai Yueguang NPC should be changed. Also, the protagonist's S-level power "kinetic energy" feels average🤔. I'm not KY. For now, this kinetic energy doesn't feel as strong as energy absorption, or will it be upgraded later?

The first chapter just introduces the background. There is no need to write about the female NPC, which gives people a depressing feeling.

It feels like the author has run out of work sooner or later. First of all, the fight with the doctor was crazy. There may also be readers who said that the protagonist was killed by a player in the back. The author thought that the price reduction was a patch for a super behind-the-scenes force. By the way, it was hinted that the protagonist might have been solved by someone from that behind-the-scenes force. This reminded me of the book Weird Jianghu: Jianghu. I remember that I also made a super-behind-the-scenes force like this in the later period.

I listened to this book completely before going to bed. I have heard the protagonist's expressionless face for more than ten days in a row before going to bed... I feel so miserable and resentful that I want to be the god of death who doesn't cry, right? 🥱

The author turned off comments from the beginning. Can this book become popular? When the data is not good, it just clicks. Otherwise, it's over. You can't comment in each paragraph. You need at least one coin. To enable this function, you need to be at least a little popular. If you have more comments, you will start to open a coin. Pass is jealous, right?

The doctor is a poisonous person, but the author keeps writing about it, and the female characters are too poorly written, so try to write as little as possible.

It always feels like a deus ex machina. Like deus ex machina🙄

It's hard to comment. There aren't many problems, but the problem is that there are no problems. The Super Mechanic is an absolutely cool metronome-paced article. Expert Jenga is just one of its advantages. The prerequisite for the book not to collapse is that Qi Peijia has written a 100,000-word outline and a numerical design that can definitely be used as an online game. I don't know if the author has carefully calculated his own values ​​and thought about what his strength is at each stage. The expressiveness in the later stage can no longer support the algorithm. Anyone who has played Minecraft Cool Pack knows how terrifying this value is once the left foot is stacked and the right foot is stacked. The protagonist talks about the perfect route, various top routes, each route is quite strong when taken apart. The expressiveness is enough. But taken together, it feels like they have been weakened together. The single route also has this strength. In addition, the motivation of the protagonist is better than that of a brainless person who only pursues power. It's not inhumane either. But the feelings are too lacking. Therefore, the story drive can only come from disaster and the pursuit of strength. It's like limiting yourself to death. Fortunately, this was probably the author's choice because he knew he was incapable of writing emotional dramas well, and he didn't really want to become inhumane. The combat plot is slightly lacking. Basically, if I fire you, I will kill you instantly. Hey, I have become stronger in the second stage of resurrection. Just wait for me to die. You are in the second stage, and I am in the second stage. I'm in stage three, and you wait for me to die. You are in three stages, and so am I. It can only be said that the power system is like this. Compared with other systems, it is basically difficult to operate.

Too watery! Moreover, one sentence can be repeated two or three times, and the plot progress is extremely slow.

You are really invincible. Your Shui Zishu skills are really perfect. A new author can come up and practice Shui Zishu to the peak, right?

I just ordered it and you get it all for free. It's so disgusting.

I saw that the first dozen chapters looked familiar at 9 out of 10, so I commented on them. Maybe they were a reference, and I wanted to encourage you not to end in a hurry like that one, but to polish it. After reading chapter 25, I felt a little overwhelmed, and I couldn't stand it after reading dozens more chapters. I am chovy, you have written the novel for me! A bunch of settings are all similar to "From the Star Abyss". It's okay to borrow from this book. After all, there are many novel settings. It's okay to borrow from Super Mechanic. After all, it was the peak before, but there are too many similarities. Can you put some original highlights of your own? You can try a lot, and replace this one with that one. Eating books is also first-rate. The early settings were all written, but a bunch of monsters and monsters appeared on the novice planet. No, there were such a bunch of monsters and monsters. How come the planet in the previous life was gone? I chovy, at first glance, I judged that there were too many stitches and the writing was not good.

It's a lot of fun, but it's also a little bit toxic. Things that were just mentioned in the previous chapter will be told again in the next chapter. Moreover, the protagonist's strength in more than 400 chapters can be said to be invincible in the world. He does not have enemies from the sky or goes to outer space. He continues to raise leeks in the Novice Village. His faults are not hidden. It is considered a good read in the fourth natural disaster type novel. Maybe because of the name, people who read it feel that there are few comments and few comments.

I suggest you keep the story short when writing. The initial new balls are written in too much detail. After entering the C-level normally, you should be killing randomly at the same level. Why do you feel that you can fight back and forth with others at the same level as others? Just have the strength to sweep everything. Hurry up and get out of the planet.

It feels okay at the beginning, a bit like a mechanic, but the further you go, the harder it is to evaluate. After all, this is the author's first work, and this kind of game article is indeed difficult to write. First of all, the author's writing style still needs to be improved. It can be seen that the author wants to write a relatively grand multi-system world view and the fourth natural disaster flow, but I only feel the deliberate description of the protagonist system and a small part of the player's participation. There is no "inspiration" of the fourth natural disaster flow protagonist of the older generation. The character creation is also very flat, and the protagonist's way of uttering sentences from time to time during battle is too similar to the previous doctor's style.        ，，，，， Forcibly reducing one's intelligence is a yes. Secondly, the plot control is a flaw. I have read almost 250 chapters. I thought the "several twists and turns" in the previous duel with the doctor were just the beginning. I didn't expect that the subsequent battles would also be entangled for a period of time. A lot of descriptions were required to make D-level, and a victory declaration was required to kill someone.        ，，， And many skill descriptions that can be mentioned in one sentence have to be too lengthy, which also makes me uncomfortable. Finally, I would like to state my attitude. I am not deliberately nitpicking. I spend time and energy to express my opinions in order to let the author understand my views and feelings as a reader. I also hope that the author can write better and better, but only by discovering problems, facing them squarely and solving them is the way out.

Damn it, the latest dozens of chapters are too watery! It is obvious that the plot can be compressed and passed quickly, and the combat power is a joke? He has obviously improved so much, but he is still fighting so hard. A battle lasts more than ten chapters?

The Heralded Knight, the Black Knight's Harem Samasa Overall, it's okay, pretty good.

Who can tell me what the plot is after Lingxiao Mountain? I don't understand it at all

Why do I feel like I can finish the book without leaving my home planet?

Overall, there are as many good points as bad points. A rare advantage, the things in the introduction (which is cool) are indeed seen in the article one after another.