Lord of the Abyss: Starting as an Apprentice Priest

Surprisingly, it's not bad. The plot has a suitable rhythm and the writing is not good. It feels a bit like a great writer. The protagonist is very lucky and feels like it's about to take off. I suggest you add some talents to add charm. You know what people want to see in the plot. I hope that this rhythm can be maintained after players come out. Writing about players is a big challenge for the author, which means adding several popular characters who are online for a long time. Come on. The author has never written any books before and lacks fans, resulting in low popularity, but as long as he can write 600 chapters, I believe everything will be fine.

I'm ready to watch it. Thank you for opening the harem. Please watch more.

No mention of the Age of Gods later? It is recommended that you write longer and set a small goal of 10 million words first.

The Holy Light protects your friend!

This kind of NPC novels are rare nowadays. There are only three that are well-written and well-known in my impression, namely "Super Mechanic", "Yggdrasil Game", "This Game is Too Real", and longer ones like "Elemental War Realm" and the Ancestor one. The others are not very famous.

The classic Super Mechanic's BOSS flow online game article is considered a good book in the currently declining category of online game articles. The advantages and disadvantages are quite obvious, and in general the shortcomings are more obvious Advantages: Most people still have an impression of how popular the Super Mechanic was before. Basically, you can get good results if you learn to write without poison. The various fates set in the book are also a bit novel, the plot settings are reasonable, and there are no poisonous points Disadvantages: It is too slow to warm up. The protagonist of 1.2 Million words does not appear until he reaches level 5. After that, he basically cannot escape the fate of the experience pack. After all, he is reborn and knows the plot. Is it necessary to make the gap between the protagonist and the player so big? It's easy to break down the writing later. The pressure is too strong. The protagonist has basically acquired the epic legendary expertise all the way up, just showing the data, such as converting 5 times or 10 times of divinity into blood blue, or increasing attack power. The key is that the NPC data has never been given. Why can't the protagonist defeat NPCs who are one or two levels higher than him? Do they also have so many specialties? I didn't give it to you either. Given the data, the protagonist's attack is 100,000, and the NPC's health bar is 100,000 and his defense is 50,000. Why not just slap him to death with two slaps? Every time you fight, you have to throw away skills, and the damage caused by the fight is all unknown. If you don't want to do data flow expertise, don't give it to digital algorithms. Data flow is written in the form of data flow. The supporting characters are too weak. When Great Technician Han returned from time travel, he took in all the famous beauties and favored children of heaven, while the protagonist took in a weakling kitten when he returned from time traveling. I don't know who the Saint is, and the Shengyuan NPC randomly selected one with high combat power. I don't understand the plot at all. Basically, these people are reduced to soy sauce in the end. Writing so many words makes me feel like I'm turning into poisonous weeds, but it's basically just food and grass.

I beg the Shennong people to give their evaluation and see if you can fall into the trap.

Just a humble opinion. Overall, it feels a bit like a supernatural mechanic or a pastoral tantra. To talk about my feelings, I get a lot of specialties in every battle, but now I don't know which specialties are the most important and core. I only know that specialties are constantly adding attributes. It seems that some new mechanism is being added, and various aspects are growing. Although there are many various attribute data, it actually gives me a thankless feeling. I have to spend time thinking about the specific data, and then I feel that these seemingly powerful specialties do not have a particularly strong sense of existence. My personal opinion is that maybe it is better to drastically reduce the number of specialties and only focus on some key and existential specialties. Then I feel that the writing method of data flow is actually quite laborious. It is better to emphasize the functionality of specialties. Then there is the issue of the protagonist's genre. What kind of self-destruction style can the players have? The protagonist doesn't know much about the specific genre. It is said to be the Holy Abyss. It seems that it mainly uses the Abyss skills under the skin of the Holy Light. It feels like it is the seventh level now, and it feels that the strength is quite powerful. There are no very impressive skills or playing methods. It feels like the battle is just glowing cannons, summons and cages. The above are just some small opinions. There may be some parts that are not as accurate as the content in the book. I welcome your criticism and correction, and also welcome the collision of many opinions.

What the author wrote is actually pretty good, but there is a fatal problem for me! The skills are too miscellaneous and scattered, and there is no idea of ​​​​building a system. Logically speaking, "Holy Abyss Descending" is a very good core skill. Building a system around this skill is much better than the so-called hidden profession. You can also continuously integrate radiance and abyss skills to build a more unique skill system. After all, you call yourself "He", so don't you want to create a system of your own? The author said that no matter how powerful the hidden profession of the Lord of Light Wings is, it will still be the glory of others?

Is the penalty for player death too low? There seems to be no penalty at present. There is only such thing as death cooldown. If it continues to be like this, what else do people in this world do?

Have you ever traveled through a game? Some things are scribbled and taken for granted.

I have always said that the Abyss Life Path is very powerful and confusing. In my previous life, it was a profession that was only unlocked in later versions. How can you be so good at it? But now I can't see how the protagonist's Abyss Life Path is any more powerful than other paths? And isn't the combat power the same? The writing is crazy, the protagonist has so many specialties, and others can be invincible at the same level if they have one of them. There are so many protagonists and there are not many NPCs, so at least one level of invincibility must be passed. To put it bluntly, with so many specialties, a pig can kill enemies by two levels.

After reading the beginning, I felt it was okay, but when I thought about players coming in the future, I was inexplicably repulsed. Wouldn't it be great for the protagonist to enter a different world in the game? Why do players have to come? The author has set that NPCs cannot be resurrected after death. Players who play the game according to reality will definitely kill every NPC. Moreover, the plot is going well, and there are a lot of infinitely resurrected players. Don't you think it's very fragmented?

Stacked in advance: no pushback, no malice, just write whatever comes to mind Advantages of this book: The setting is relatively novel, the writing is more joyful, there is no threshold for reading, and there are many jokes that have a strong otaku flavor. Anyway, it is quite suitable for my radio wave My personal shortcomings: The world view atmosphere is not created enough, the characters are not established, the fast pace and dry description make the reading experience like reading How can I say... Game alien novels really have to be interesting, right? In world-view plot dungeons, one of the protagonists and supporting characters must be flesh-and-blood. The protagonist has dual paths of light and darkness. What a good source of misunderstandings. For example, when the protagonist first got his professional title, he took the initiative to go out to a free clinic in order to get a subsidy - to gain a good impression, and later he took the initiative to destroy the corpses and eliminate traces of the blood followers. Hosted in my hometown - I understand the righteousness well, (not yet but) if I encounter an abyss-type attack in the future, I will take a big tonic pill and pretend to feel uncomfortable. Jpg I am making a fortune in silence, but the program is very effective. Isn't this kind of writing interesting? As a result, the current look and feel is just like the ruthless taskbar cleaning master... In addition to the feeling that he is a player in modern society, I don't feel that Luo Xiu's personal characteristics and tendencies in big and small matters have been significantly shaped. The male protagonist's character is not well established, which actually affects the reading experience and makes people feel "drama". Also, how to make full use of dungeons and NPCs, what a good time to set up the shop setting (water word count)... Isn't Luo Xiu a priest? Add some confession or confession skills, and gossip about the spending line when you go to the free clinic. When KOing the enemy, use a similar passive to freeze the screen from other people's revolving door skills, draw three and one, and it can appear that the selected skills are not that good. Can imba use other memory scenes to open a new book and write new tasks... Wouldn't it be better to connect three or five small branches and irrelevant NPCs into a hidden line or even a main line? Why don't you go crazy with the NPC's favor and reputation, and then use your intimidation, seduction, stealing, speed-passing, kicking in the door, and how to perform the tricks? Why don't you, a Yuan Shen, play for five dollars? If you don't treat Jiraiya as an intelligence officer, what's the difference between you and a native with a golden finger? The same goes for the Blood Hunter copy. I have already written about it, so why don't I write a little bit about Cat Girl's past and then take her with me to download the book? Then I fake death in front of her and watch her regret for the rest of her life and then resurrect and wait for her to guide herself. It turns into a sultry and funny three-part girl who has to have the three major illusions in life "Does he like me" every time she finishes the book and touches the box before touching the box? Design points like this are all wasted. I can only say that I am really screaming and scratching. Having read half of it, I just couldn't bear to write a long review in the middle of the night. I'll just follow the situation as it happens. The good news is that you can feel the passion for imagination and creation. The bad news is that there is really a lot of room for improvement. I hope there will be improvements or continued efforts in the future.

The author writes very well, just keep the existing style. After all, it's hard to reconcile everyone's opinions. You can't satisfy both the needs of people who don't have a heroine and the people who have a harem with multiple heroines. Just keep the current style of having no heroine. Don't want both and engage in ambiguity and soft porn 😄

The beginning was good, but why were the results so bad?

After playing for a long time, I have put together a lot of various skills, but I can't tell how strong it is in terms of performance! How much damage can a skill cause? How fast can a person with high agility go? How much damage can a punch or a kick cause to a person with strong body? How wide a battle will affect it! These side descriptions can reflect the intensity of the battle and make it easier for readers to have a sense of the picture! Your current battle description is what skills the protagonist uses, how much blood the opponent is hit, the protagonist uses skills, the opponent is killed, then things explode, the rewards are settled, and then it ends. There is no description of the environment at all, and there is no sense of picture at all! It's too empty! It is recommended that the author improve this aspect!

Author, I really feel that this angel is poorly portrayed. If it has no impact on the outline, it is better to downplay it. (Just a suggestion)

Happy wolf hunting!

It's a pretty good seedling (personal feeling). First of all, the update speed is pretty good. The author seems to be Quanqin. Novel without updates is just empty talk! Then the combat description is relatively complete, with a sense of graphics and tension, and the character of the protagonist is also relatively cute, with a sense of conscience and the sense of madness that the player feels at the same time. In addition, there are some problems that I personally think are problematic: 1. The first one is that the characters are not vivid enough. The author has great potential, but it doesn't feel like it's complete yet. This gives me the illusion that the protagonist is still playing a game. For example, the fat man in the slum kept talking about his younger brother. One moment he said that the protagonist was his younger brother, and the next moment he was not. I thought there would be a related story, briefly introduce how the fat man got to this situation, and outline some tragedy and pain in two or three sentences. The author wrote the battle very vividly, including moves and some character creation, but it stopped abruptly after the war. There is also the old Adventist. When he was resurrected, he felt pity for the Elementalist. Regardless of whether it was a pretense or something else, this sentence made him seem to have existed. He also mentioned the gods believed in by the Theocracy. He was resurrected in the body of a little boy. At this time, it is completely possible to briefly write about his childhood and how he came to this point. The old man gives readers a deeper impression of the Theocracy that pursues magic, and creates a person who is more like a person who once existed. However, the author only wrote half of it, describing a gorgeous box, and then the reader opened it and found that it was empty, and there was a feeling that he could not get up or down. And after the death of the knights, they were loyal to the kingdom when they fought. Why not give some description through the system so that readers can witness their past glory and the past glory of the kingdom. It will be smoother to collect the crown fragments to open the branch later. In addition to enemies, the protagonist's sense of survival is not enough. It can be something interesting he saw in the market, or a group of drinkers in the tavern saw him teasing him a few words, or even mentioned that the protagonist sent a letter to the mentor after the death of the city lord, and then casually wrote a reply to the mentor. While shaping the mentor, it also allows readers to think that the protagonist is living in a world, rather than a single-threaded puppet. 2. The second optional issue is that the author can give some characters with medium roles a distinctive or easy-to-remember nickname. For example, "Shadow of Murder" is very good. I can't remember his name, but it's Brother Sha anyway. It may be my problem, or it may be a common problem among Chinese people. Anyway, I am confused about the names of foreigners in the book. I know who they are when I see them, but I still have a deeper impression of their identities or other characteristics. Is it Connor and Antonio? Anyway, there were two violent pastors, I can't remember their names, but I know they were violent pastors. 3. The third one is that the author used some dirty jokes at the beginning of the film to lighten the atmosphere. I am a male channeler and I must have a certain acceptance, but this kind of description cannot be used too much, and it is best not to be used on the protagonist. Other casual supporting characters can use this kind of description to have the effect of the program and will not tarnish the image of the protagonist. The above is purely personal opinion, not a writing guide. The author is very good. I hope this book will get better and better. Don't scold me, I'm a loser

The original title of the book is "Full of Holy Light, Do You Call This the King of the Abyss?" After discussing with the editor, I planned to change it to ——"Conquering the Abyss, Starting from the Trainee Priest" Don't admit your mistake, woo woo woo The original title is not interesting, I hope the new title will be better ヘ(_ _ヘ)

It's obvious that you want to write about the protagonist being busy with things, as a fun point, but a cardinal from an extraordinary world is too busy every day because of the Vatican affairs. I can only say that the author's design is very humorous.

To be honest, the writing feels a bit like a pastor's tantra.

Authority can be drawn by lottery. Players are only at level 40 at the moment. They can learn authority now. The threshold is too low. The probability of drawing authority is 0.5%. As mentioned before, the player base is about 40 million. This is really a bad street. It directly reduces the level of God to the lowest.

I have read about 200 chapters so far. I would like to ask if the skills will be streamlined and eliminated in the future. This skill cannot be created by integrating the previous skills. I feel that there are too many skills and not much performance. It seems a bit difficult to stretch.

It looks quite comfortable from the front, with a plot and a refreshing feeling of upgrading and fighting monsters. Later, the plot was slowly pushed forward, and there was no sense of escalation. I don't know if the author realized it or not. It feels a bit like writing a storybook. I feel tired after reading too much.

Personally, I think it's okay, but there is a slight problem with the combat power. The protagonist has a lot of expertise and super-standard skills, but he can't kill anyone one level lower than him in one blow.

Reddyman stood on the border wall, and the crack in the distance continuously exuded the aura of the abyss. It has been more than a day since the rift appeared, and it has been half a day since Reddyman arrived here. Until one moment, his figure flickered, and the next moment he appeared in the temple. "Go and call the new guy named Luo Xiu, and then call a few high-level priests who know holy healing. If you don't have enough, I can immediately ask for someone from the Holy City and tell me my name." Rediman ordered the local bishop. As a seventh-level man with a glorious destiny, and bearing the title of Eternal Knight, he deserves such a right. Luo Xiu came to the temple shortly after receiving the summons. When he saw Reddyman, he subconsciously used his investigative skills. Reddyman didn't care and didn't take precautions, letting Luo Xiu look. The panel presented in front of Luo Xiu at this moment shocked him extremely. A series of question marks showed nothing, which showed that Rediman's status was far beyond the world, far beyond Luo Xiu's current moment "Boy, stop looking, come with me." Rediman waved for Luo Xiu to follow, and the two walked to a secret room. "Tell me, how did you come into contact with the abyss." After sitting down, Rediman asked a sentence that made Luo Xiu's hair stand on end. "What abyss is Sir Knight talking about? Why haven't I heard of these things?" Luo Xiu knew very well that no one should know the concept of abyss now. "Stop hiding. You can hide it from anyone in this world, but you can't hide it from me. I come from the abyss, and I am a relic of the abyss." Luo Xiu's spirit tensed to the limit in an instant. A relic of the abyss has achieved the supreme position of the eternal knight, which is unbelievable. Reddyman seemed to feel Luo Xiu's nervousness, "Don't worry that I am a spy sent by the abyss. I am more worried that you are a danger. Tell me how you came into contact with the abyss." "You are joking, I am just ordinary..." Luo Xiu hadn't finished speaking yet. He was interrupted by Ruimandi, "Forget it, I don't want to hear so much from you."  Reddyman said seriously, "Next, I need you to become stronger at all costs until you can support this world." Luo Xiu was confused and couldn't quite understand what Reddyman said, "Why, forever..." "I will die next, but before I die, I will let people see the power of the abyss, and then people will be curious and suspicious of the abyss. No matter what, I want you and your men to control the direction of public opinion. I stand too high in the temple and can't do anything." After saying this, Luo Xiu did not give him a chance to speak again. "I have gone too far. I don't know if I can still be a practitioner of brilliance. This happened just in time. Instead of being discovered and causing panic, I might as well get involved myself." Reddyman said to himself, and suddenly thought of something. He raised his hand and took out a weapon and a lance from the spiritual world. "Almost all the trophies in my life have been smelted by me. My soul and my inheritance are all in it." Rediman finished talking to himself and stared at Luo Xiu, "I don't really want you to follow my path, but you are the only person in this world who may do so. If you are really desperate, you can see its shadow in the abyss spiritual world, take it away, and accept my inheritance, such as If you don't follow my path, I also hope that you can find a suitable successor for me and hand over the Holy Spear to him." Reddyman's words that seemed to explain the funeral made Luo Xiu feel a little pressure. Indeed, he is the only one who can touch the abyss in this world. A few minutes later, Rediman stood on the city wall, with many priests standing behind him. "According to plan." Reddyman whispered. The priests behind him began to chant advanced holy healing techniques, and the healing light flashed on Rediman. Luo Xiu, who was waiting in the church, looked at the letter left by Rediman. Suddenly, from Luo Xiu's inspired perspective, extremely violent fluctuations occurred at the top of the city wall. Luo Xiu galloped out and rushed towards the city wall. Reddyman's power continues to rise, The legendary trait "Leading the First in All Battles" The only trait "Extreme Balance" The legendary trait "Restraining Oath", The epic trait "Extreme Sublimation" The special skill "Ultimate Dragon Transformation" Several are turned on at the same time, and under the influence of the rules, the aura gradually becomes violent and continuously improves. Gradually reaching a peak, unable to improve under the pressure of rules. Declare to the world the power that transcends all. Rediman took a step forward, and the space continued to shake and shatter. The power that escapes is already the limit of the human world that has not been sublimated. Reddyman jumped off the city wall and walked a few steps in front of the city wall, stepping into a deep pit with each step. After a few steps, Reddyman seemed to have adapted to the rising strength, and he took off his horse. A terrifying abyssal aura erupted from his body. Epic trait "Disaster of the Abyss"! Rediman no longer conceals the nature of his abyss. As a relic of the abyss, thanks to the gift of the abyss, adulthood is the seventh level of the abyss' destiny One step, two steps, the running Rediman transforms into a black and white stream of light and rushes towards the crack, carrying the wall and riding on the wall to roll back the escaped abyss breath with the force of the storm. The moment Rediman rushed into the rift, the rift closed. Ordinary people have no idea what happened in that moment. Luo Xiu also understood everything after reading the letter As the favored one of the abyss, Rediman's authority in the abyss was enough to close the door. He wanted to prevent the battle in the abyss from causing the breath to escape, but after entering, his escape route was sealed, and he did not want to come back alive. The superimposition of several traits creates a power that has already exceeded the upper limit of the world. After entering the abyss, due to the different upper limits of the world, his power will increase significantly after entering the abyss. This is also a huge load on him. The pressure of the rules makes him enter this state and he will not have a few minutes left to live. Preparing for treatment in advance is to prevent his own body from being torn apart by his violent power. In the abyss, several new kings were crucified on the throne. Before his death, the standing Rediman released all his power, destroyed almost all high-end powers, and blocked a large number of authority. Before the next multiple monarchs appear in the abyss, the abyss will be a completely closed cage.

Wouldn't it be better to write less about such intimate interactions with Tatya?

Is this Scarlet King a pure super monster? There are so many demigods on hand. Compared with other demigods who have different fates, they are all the same as the one on the roadside.