The Immortal Kingdom of Guixu

To be honest, Baxia was alright at the beginning, but he got worse and worse later on. In a jungle-like place like Guixu, instead of focusing on developing combat power, you prioritize commerce. Doesn't this just prove the old saying, "The enemy hoards food, I hoard loot"? The enemy becomes my granary!

Since the jade plate is so valuable, its existence not only spread on the dark web but also indicated a value of one billion US dollars. Furthermore, the protagonist, having traversed the dark web, already knew about the leak. Didn't the employer know this? And to obtain the jade plate, the employer spared no expense, bribing a thousand mercenaries to compete for it.

It has this urban fantasy feel to it; I thought I was watching "The Divine Doctor Descends the Mountain" from over a decade ago.

*Martial Tomb* was a masterpiece of fantasy novels in its time, while *Eternal Kingdom* was a culmination of the Dynasty-building genre, though its ending felt somewhat rushed. *Lord of the Other Shore* was an experimental work, but unfortunately, it ultimately failed to break through.

Some suggestions. The author has gone in the wrong direction. You should try a mobile base farming/development genre, like the currently popular mobile city upgrade, train upgrade, or doomsday convoy upgrade novels. Basically, you need a mobile base that you constantly add various combat and living units to upgrade it. I think people would definitely read that kind of novel. That's also your strength.

Could you please work on how to end this? Every book ends abruptly, especially the one about the other shore—is it going to be discontinued again? Have some decency!

The author is amazing! Nearly 2.3 Million words, and the protagonist has only been around for a few months, yet his cultivation level is still at the Black Iron level. If it weren't for the fact that your level isn't too low, I would have killed you. Gold is top-tier, Silver is powerful, Bronze is pillar-level, and Black Iron is basic.

The initial teammates were useless, constantly leeching resources from the protagonist. Then, characters from movies and TV shows were added to the team midway through. Why didn't you just include them from the beginning? The constant rambling and pointless dialogue between the protagonist and those useless teammates is just padding the word count.

A whole chapter dedicated to moving supplies? Unbelievable! The word count is ridiculously high. Two-thirds of this book is useless drivel, filled with all sorts of side descriptions. Things that could be explained in a single sentence are stretched out into long chapters. Moving supplies is an extra layer of explanation (how to move them, where to put them, how it was done before, how it will be done in the future, why it's done this way). Too much rambling and the plot moves too slowly.

Before even finishing the first chapter, I noticed two self-contradictory points. The beginning mentions foxes being incredibly versatile, their genders unpredictable, yet the protagonist claims to recognize them from afar by scent after only a few encounters. A jade plate is described as unique and incredibly precious, yet the protagonist is tasked with escorting it alone.