Cultivating Immortality in a Cyberpunk World of the Strange

You said loyalty tests would be conducted continuously, and only those who passed could become public officials, yet the officials in the public service system are incredibly corrupt! And what happened? The protagonist, a native of the country, was too afraid to take the tests?!

I took the college entrance exam 10 years ago. After the exam, I saw a pirated copy of your book at a roadside stall. When my mom came to pick me up, she found me reading a novel on the street and kicked me.

The plot is so melodramatic; it would have been better if the protagonist had been an orphan. The first few chapters made me incredibly angry.

The start was good, but some parts felt a bit off. 1. The titles of Martial King, Martial Emperor, and Martial God were really too low-level. 2. The conflicts in the episodes about Rose were inexplicable. 3. I don't understand why the school cares about a student's potential. Can they really train a student to become a Martial God? It seems that the core requirement is just to get one of the top spots in the inter-school competition, right?

How boring! I thought the protagonist was practicing some strange magic, but it turns out it's just a bizarre world instance where they're practicing legitimate magic. So boring!

It's well-written, but the handling of realms and martial arts techniques isn't very good. I feel that martial arts techniques from a bizarre world shouldn't be revealed. Everyone using family heirlooms seems like a charade, treating everyone like fools. At least use the credits earned from selling talismans to buy a few martial arts techniques to make it look impressive. Do you really think people won't be interested in investigating you?

Just push through the story like a wish-fulfillment novel, but pay attention to plausibility. You've been adding too much nonsensical plot lately. The first few chapters were okay, but the later ones are... Unpleasant. It's like a game world where you learn skills and get equipment; in the real world, it's just about relentless action.

The author failed to consider that people can choose not to have children when they are oppressed to a certain extent. How did the couple raise two children when they worked more than ten hours a day and had no elders to help them?

Regarding the settings of the cyber world: 1. There are no bankers. I can't think of any reason why banks would fail or lose their former glory. In the cyber world, there are generally no rulers. Theoretically, the bank reserve ratio is infinitely low, meaning that banks have unlimited money.

Water, + creative + too little cyberpunk style + gradually becoming less eerie + the logic is roughly right + but not very engaging + limited subject matter + will gradually become less enjoyable later on.