Cultivating Immortality, Starting as a Shepherd

This seems a bit absurd. A newbie who's just started practicing Qi Refining is spending all day learning spells. How many spells can you cast at level one? How much proficiency will that increase? This is just my personal opinion; feel free to delete if you don't like it.

How many chapters have you written? Look at the title of your novel!

A pig handler? The one who releases pigs? It reminds me of a story about a lost pig.

What are you writing? Are you really cultivating immortality? One minute he's learning martial arts, the next he's learning magic. This little Karami, who's only just gained spiritual energy, is already learning one spell here and one spell there. What, are you trying to fly to the heavens?

Let's change the name to "Starting from the Boiling Blood Powder: Falling into Demonic Behavior"

These are all problems stemming from the "A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality" series. It's a mafia-style cultivation world; think about it, in a cultivation world, those in power are hundreds or even thousands of years old. Even their own descendants—how much would they really care? Leaving aside whether they're truly theirs, those who aren't wouldn't care much either.

It's a haphazard, disorganized mess, and incredibly watery...

It's definitely a slow burn; the protagonist has just successfully cultivated his inner energy, and immediately some clan members provoke him, wanting to take him as their lackey, even though they are all Daoist disciples.

What I really don't understand is, what's the point of having so many martial arts training storylines? This is a cultivation story, not a martial arts novel. Why bother with all those martial arts techniques when you could be doing some physical cultivation stuff?

If this continues, I feel that Xianxia novels are doomed. The protagonists, obsessed with becoming immortals, always abandon other, easier paths to success, throwing themselves headlong into cultivation, only to be targeted for some strange reason, and to deliberately hide their abilities after joining a sect. Meanwhile, cultivation sects, large or small, are always vying for power and profit.