Wet Ovulation

I saw it on the shelves in one go, and there was one thing I couldn't say. The author has good writing style, new ideas, and a complete cultivation system that is not cliche. But the current results can only be said to be mediocre. I feel that the biggest problem lies in the portrayal of the protagonist. As far as the first 70 chapters are concerned, the portrayal of the protagonist is quite unpleasant. To sum it up in one image, he is "hypocritical" and "both serious and upright" The excessive psychological descriptions were not handled well, which resulted in these psychological descriptions not only not being added points, but becoming deducted points. It might be better not to write it at all. Let me give you a few examples. When Monk Dayou appeared on the scene in Chapter 50, he killed a tree of crows. The psychological description of the protagonist here is "cast a good child in the next life." But just before the 47th chapter, the protagonist looked at the boy's remains and said, "My heart is so angry that I wish I could crush Yu Xiao's bones into ashes." Combined with the previous series of interactions with Brother Crow, it is difficult not to feel that the protagonist is bullying the weak and afraid of the strong. For another example, in Chapter 67, Monk Dayou died. The protagonist lacked resources and planned to snatch Monk Dayou's inheritance. The protagonist's psychological description here is "Send Buddha to the West. Dayou will not blame him too much underground." This sentence is purely the protagonist's self-psychological comfort, making the protagonist "both responsible and upright". You can grab it if you want. Everyone understands that there is really no need to write out the psychological activities. If it is written, it will make the protagonist hypocritical. Then at the end of Chapter 67, the protagonist did another big job and went on a killing spree in the temple of Monk Dayou without any reason. There is no psychological description here? ? ? He just doesn't care about anything and starts killing as soon as he meets someone. In the past, the protagonist picked up evil people while collecting supplements, and Yu Xiao killed people randomly. The protagonist also acted quite indignant, but the question is, what is the difference between the protagonist's behavior now and Yu Xiao's? No investigation, no reason, just because you blocked my way, so I killed you. Isn't this just "being and standing at the same time"? It's evil for others to kill people, but you deserve it if I kill someone? There have been many such "destroying good impressions" before. I only picked two and wrote them down when I first saw them. Some people may say that this is true human nature. I admit that most ordinary people are like this. They like to comfort themselves and bully the weak and fear the strong. But everyone is also covering up this kind of self. No one wants their image in other people's minds to be like this, right? Why? Because everyone knows that this image is not pleasing. The current image of the protagonist is so unflattering. The two things I mentioned earlier in this chapter are controversial and ridiculing. I think many people may be dissuaded by such an image of the protagonist.

Originally, it could be a good book by sticking to the Golden Finger to promote the plot and grasping the rhythm. However, it started to fall into a cliché later in the writing. I put the highlight Golden Finger aside and focused on writing some battles. I picked up the sesame seeds and lost the watermelon. Pity

The author likes to describe the environment in parallel prose. He is an old writer. Personally, I think the author has put a lot of effort into neatly arranging the dialogues. The ups and downs and conflicts in the plot should be arranged more carefully and longer.

Compared with the popular online novels nowadays, the plot of this book rarely gives people a sense of smooth unfolding. I have read so many immortality novels, and this is the only one that truly writes about the "immortal energy" and the otherworldly sense of immortality. Perhaps it sacrifices the excitement brought by the fast pace, but cultivation of immortality requires thousands of years. Come on, author

From my personal experience, I feel that the author has the feeling of a big boss sitting quietly on the top of a mountain, teaching sutras and Dharma, recalling the past and present, and speaking eloquently. No matter how you compete for fame and wealth in the world, I will remain calm and aloof from everything else! Recently following the general trend of "Three Frontiers War", the thinking logic and behavior of all levels are very reasonable, and the key points of success and failure in everything are also very consistent and can withstand scrutiny! The writing style of fighting is even more like "there is no mention of fighting in every word, there is fighting everywhere"! The five elements are mutually reinforcing and restraining each other, and the image is very strong! The plot does not drag out, and the author never changes his creative rhythm for any reason. It is so stable! The image of a protagonist who has a strong mind yet is tactful, who is step-by-step yet abiding by the rules and authority, who is firm and soft yet methodical, who knows the world but not the world, who is worldly yet refined, has come to life!

I'm looking for a novel of this caliber. I was really fascinated by this novel in the later stages. I searched all over the Internet, but there are not many that I can read. I have read Destruction of Luck, Confrontation with the Great Way, and I'm still reading Inquiry into the Immortal Way. What books do you recommend?

The front part is okay, but the back part is messy and has no logic.

The book is really well written The writing style is also good, which makes me feel that reading Liaozhai is different But it is too slow.

A good book, a good book, and there are no flaws in the continuity. It is above my reading level.

It's a good book. I thought all online novels nowadays are boring. I didn't expect that this book would make me want to read and forget about food and sleep. The title of the book is not attractive enough, but the writing is really good. I hope that the performance of this book will improve, that more readers will see it, and that the author will earn more and have more motivation to persevere and write this book into a classic. Most of the books written by the so-called masters at Qidian are really bad, and they don't even know where the traffic comes from if they are meant to entertain children.

It has been three days since the grass carp who controls the air force, Xiaoyi Heidalang, the crow monster named Wusongzi, the centipede spirit who likes breeding, and the heavenly being who is about to block people's path. Creativity is limited to the scope of Xianxia!

Basically, I wrote whatever I thought of, and many characters were basically used and lost 1. First of all, the parents of the protagonist were not explained at all after the birth 2. The Dragon King kept pretending to be sweet until the end, and they were never described. And his little son, there was no follow-up after watching the protagonist fight with the Black Tiger Zen Master 3. The two peaks of Taiping Mountain were basically not described after the Cangpin Golden Elixir was refined 4. After the Peach Blossom Fairy finished drinking. No such person was found 5. The owner of the island who was drinking together was not found after drinking. The avatar in the back showed up once during a fight, and then disappeared 6. The Ji family lost it after using it, and only appeared in the stealing scene. The chapters of Zhao Tanshu 7. The Jiang family of the Zhenling sect was thrown away after use. I don't remember the three tigers of the Jiang family very well. It seems that only the ending of the two tigers was described. What happened to the boss in the end was not written 8. The He Guanzu The master's brother, the Earth Immortal, was also thrown away after use. The protagonist learned it a few times and I forgot, he kept learning, and made a clone. Then the clone turned into an immortal queen, and there was no such person, and the Genius of the True Spirit Sect that he learned together was also found. This person 9. Fairy Baihua, martial arts, etc., Has foreshadowed it many times, very strong, almost never missed 10. That Yaksha, appeared several times in the early stage, and then the Jindan Queen found no such person, and later appeared in other people's words It happened once. When I came back from the world outside the world, my subordinates discussed it. As a result, let alone the follow-up, the follow-up of this plot was completely gone 11. The world outside the world was even worse. The two largest companies described in it basically only existed in the background. The protagonist upgraded those few skills. Hey, then he found Han Xuan. Hey, he converted Ci Yu and then came back. Then Han Xuan found no such person. 12. I seem to have only been to Taishan Divine Mansion once. I kept describing what the prince had prepared for the protagonist, but he never showed up. 13. That Buddhist woman, I forgot her name, she met the protagonist in the early stage, and then the protagonist sent Qianjuer there to learn Buddhism, and then found no such person. 14. In the later period of Taoist Huolong, there was no such person. Didn't the master's friends say a few words? 15. Who is the master wife of Chunyang Palace and the sister or sister of the disciple's mother? No such person was found. , The palace owner only lives in the background 16. The Thirteenth Lang of the Lei Department, no such person was found in the later period, obviously there were so many friendships in the early stage 17. The younger brother of Yunshui Temple, just messed up. This person is no longer found. The ending of Gale was described in the later period when he was promoted to the True Lord. Now I don't know what happened to the Yunyu Temple. In the Zhenling Sect, this sect was no longer found after his identity was exposed 18. Huo Zheng, a character who appeared in the later period, after reading the ending, I didn't feel that it was useful or that it played a role in promoting the plot. 19. The Qualification Spirit Court was lost after it was built, and the few people who were conquered only appeared in those chapters. 19. The messenger, named Dou or something, asked the protagonist to have a drink with Peach Blossom Fairy and basically found no such person. 20. I still don't know where the Jade Immortal came from, I just say it's very mysterious 21. The master's chief female disciple was lost after she showed up. Later, no such person was found, but she was not described as dead. When I entered the fairy city in the later stage, I thought she would miss her face 22. That ghostly master, the description of Mrs. Huode was very high, and she only lived on the background board. 23. Apart from Ancestor Baihe, the other one only lives on the background board. 24. It's the end, and Qingtianzi's hidden secrets are not understood either. 25. The protagonist's Buddhist avatar is called that so-and-so friend. He is the young master of the divine court. After refining the so-and-so magic weapon, no such person was found. 26. Little Stone Sect, after fighting Taiping Mountain and Yunyu Temple, there was no mention of destroying the sect, so this sect was not found. 27. The feathered man I met while taking the car underwater was not found. 28. Monkey friends in the early stage, go back in the middle stage After practicing the martial arts, this person was not found 29. Qian Zu only lived in the background board 30. After the monk in the Taiping Mountains in the early stage was discovered to be a spy, he was not found after he left. The tiger that followed him before was also found not to be this person. That's all I can think of for now, feel free to add more. After watching the ending, I really couldn't sleep. I couldn't let it go for a long time, so I wrote this out of emotion. In fact, many of these can explain the ending in one sentence, but it is a pity that they did not write it down, but directly found out that this person was not there.

Let the protagonist be careless and suffer a lesson, and be severely punished. It is an ancient literary youth plot like giving away a daughter. It highlights how a person becomes unhappy. After the author writes this kind of plot, it will feel like he has taught the reader a lesson. Nowadays, the literary youth will not choose this path. The author's bad move can only be said to be a loss of character. Of course, it is also possible that the author is on the fifth floor and uses this trick to screen fans. There will always be "reasonable parties" who come out and force explanations. Let's see how many times we can play again.

The author wanted to write about management power and farming, but he simply didn't have the writing style. How many assets he has at his disposal and how they were formed are not written down in detail at all, and are written in a blur. The more you learn about the novel, the more it looks like a plot. The interpersonal relationships are written carelessly, and the scope of vision and business ability are written in a foggy manner. They are not written in detail at all. If I keep writing like this, the novel will collapse.

I don't know why you are so anxious (๑•̌.•̑๑)ˀ̣ˀ̣You have to be a human being?

When I was driving on the road and listening to novels on Himalaya, I happened to hear the conversation between Baiqin Shangzhen and the three demon disciples. When the three demons persuaded Baiqin to go to the Yunyu Temple, Shangzhen cursed me and said, "If I join the Yunyu Temple, you will be the first to die." This kind of subtle emotion mixed with disgust was not written further when Bai Qin Shang was really surrendered, and the opportunity to move to a higher level was lost. Nowadays, online articles tend to be polarized, and the audiences are also polarized. On one side, there are novice readers, and on the other hand, old readers have higher requirements for books. Whether it is the mysterious Lord of the Squid who loves diving, or the Xuanjian Immortal Clan of the Ji Yue people, the delicate and nuanced emotional descriptions mixed in with the tense plot are the key to making these sacred books stand out. I will not go into details about these emotional descriptions. As a reader, whether it is a classic, a popular novel or an online novel, the most relatable thing is the impermanence of fate and the complex and intertwined emotions.         ，， Whether it is the hatred between the black owl and Xiao Qinggu, Li Muru's hatred, the relationship with his sister, and the relationship with the master, the descriptions are all superficial and cannot scratch the itch in the reader's heart with this kind of emotional resonance. Of course, the description of some psychological activities is indeed very good, but the requirements for reaching a masterpiece are slightly lower. The so-called deep love means deep responsibility. Because I like Black Ring's books, I set the standards for masterpieces. I really have high expectations. I can only read but not write. Please forgive me for not being accurate~

I recently read Chapter 186. The more I read, the more confusing and weird it becomes, and there is a vague feeling of double standards. I am a little unhappy about it, but the comments section is full of praise. Is it my own problem? If you are confused about this, let me ask you a question

The quality of this book is no worse than those in the top ten of the monthly popular list. Whether it is writing, plot, or refreshing, it is better than those. It is at least on par with Xuanjian Xianzu. The only books I must read every day with money are Wet Egg and Xuanjian, so why are they not popular?

I have always liked this book very much and have been looking forward to ordering thousands of copies of it. However, due to various reasons, this book is still only rated as a masterpiece, which I have to say is a pity. I think the advantages and disadvantages of this book are very obvious. Let me talk about the advantages first: 1) If anyone wants to see the classical cultivation of immortals, or the world of immortals in the minds of the ancients before modern times and before Internet literature, I will definitely recommend this book. Although the setting and worldview of this book are fictional, they are very ancient and in line with traditional Taoist concepts. At the same time, the author's writing, wording, and allusions, including the cultivation path, realm, skills, magical powers, etc., Can only be written after at least reading Taoist canon. 2) From the perspective of online writing, this book is also very ingenious. This book solves a common problem in this type of multi-life cultivation, that is, it is difficult to fully accumulate the early accumulation to prepare for subsequent cultivation. And there is no need to repeat the same practice content over and over again, which will make readers tired. I won't spoil here how to solve it, although it may not be solved well enough. 3) In fact, the character creation in this book is also very good. The protagonist kills decisively without being sloppy. Some supporting characters also have distinct personalities and are not stereotyped. The layout can be called a gray snake grass line. The climax is not sloppy, and it is quite refreshing when it is time to feel good. However, I still have to say that the book has more than 900 chapters and still does not have tens of thousands of orders. I think there are still several obvious problems. 1) The protagonist lacks some charisma. The protagonist's behavior can no longer be described as weird. I feel like an eagle looking at a wolf and a wolf looking at others are not enough to describe the way the protagonist behaves. The protagonist is more like a demon than a demon. Such a protagonist really lacks an audience at the beginning and lacks personality charm. Although I feel that writing this way is relatively true, it does not quite meet the expectations of most readers. 2) This book lacks a sense of youthful enthusiasm. All descriptions, narratives, and plot designs have a cold feeling. Sometimes it's a bit cumbersome to read. 3) The interval between the climaxes is not well written, which is also a common problem of this kind of cultivating immortality for many generations. Not much else to say, I still hope that this book can reach 10,000 orders.

Calabash Baby

[Golden Boy] Also known as "Little Saint of Lingxu" Realm: Five Realms of Fetal Spirit·Mid-term (mid-term homework: reversing the changes of the Five Elements) Main hangings: (there are three hangings of large, medium and small) [Wet Egg Fetus Transformation Bead] Core hanging - the fidelity of the spirit will not be lost or lost, used for reincarnation [Yuan Pi Ruyi] At your own expense - Ruyi, the fourth treasure in the world, spends too much plot and protagonist's efforts to lock in the moment of success - "Weiji". Refresh status, set BUFF, and avoid disasters. [Pupillary God] Xiao Gua - Auxiliary Gua of Taoism and Numerology - God Gunlong gives the finishing touch to calculate the past and future of all things. The corresponding attack methods such as Magnetic Light Bottle Treasure and Xuanming Star General will not be described one by one. Supernatural powers: (meaning to separate Earthly Evil and Tiangang) Haishi Dafa (profound illusion, magical power is not yet full), Liuwu Divine Power (crane control hand is refined and understood all the way), Qilu Great Supernatural Power (during the reincarnation of the clone, it is learned Seeds of supernatural powers), three heads and six arms (the magical powers developed by clones along the way can be learned) Strength and performance information: Real strength: As of Chapter 1015, the strength rivals those of the Six Realms·Yang Shen Di Immortal Latest achievements: Zen Master Ping Caihu, fighting Jin Yuxian Affiliated forces and relationships: Human World: (the top level in the human world) -one of the two days in the sky -with Zhongtian's pseudo-direct successor, Fangzizi, with master and apprentice , without the name of master and apprentice, the relationship is the same as mother and son -Under the Taiping Palace faction, the real leader of Heguan Immortal world: (Na Shuang compiled) Yanshou Palace-Under the throne of the Three Fate Stars, the "Yiling God General" led the Tiannan Mountain Yueyin Division to kill the soldiers, and the storms in the rivers and lakes. Moon Palace - Under the seat of the Taiyin God, there is the Taiyin Immortal Class, and the jade-colored boy in the medicine-making platform is extremely noble. ---Supplement 1 Clone: ​​Righteous God, also known as "God". Affiliated forces and relationships: Human World: (Has achieved a path to heaven and reached the top) Yunyu Temple - The current person in charge of Yunyu Temple, after fighting against the Golden Feather Immortal, has basically taken over the power of Man Shen Ying. Zhenling Sect - Entered the core of Zhenling, and has reached a plan with Zhao Tan to exchange Zheng for Zhao. Entering the Zheng family's blessed place The Immortal Realm: (take double preparation) Qinghua Palace - under the seat of Mude Xingjun, "Subjugate the demons and show the heavenly generals", in charge of the stability of the East China Sea, patrolling the demon atmosphere, and promoting the righteous law. Lei Department - Under the Deputy Commander-in-Chief, the Chief Lei General has the power to open the government and govern one side of Lei Government. I will continue to add more when I have time, and everyone is welcome to add~

The pace at the beginning is too fast, the world view is too big, and the end is already obvious.

The writing was really brilliant at the beginning, but after the third life when he was reborn as a crow, it started to change a bit. It felt like he was deliberately suppressing the protagonist. He would do whatever it takes to become a human being. To put it mildly, it was for the sake of the great road. But being a demon means you can't cultivate the great path? There is a trend of opening high and moving low (personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it)

Author, your novel is very interesting, but the weather has been cold recently and the temperature has dropped significantly. You should pay more attention to updating and don't worry about your health.

Exchange the jelly grass, Let the jelly grass grow up!

I have been reading this book. How should I put it, the outline is quite interesting, but the literary talent is a bit weak, which makes it very blunt in many places, and the development of things often loses its sense of purpose. Some food is tasteless and it is a pity to throw it away.

"Hall of the Dead" and "The Call of the Mountains" are full of anticlimaxes (¯¯Յ) Especially The Call of the Mountains, the first volume is so well written, but the later chapters become more and more chaotic This book seems very innovative at the moment, but your level is very high at the beginning of the book. The key is whether you can maintain the level later and whether you can persist in finishing it. In terms of anticlimactic ending, you and Baoyue Liuguang, your neighbor next door, are really a good couple.

The inner alchemy method of practicing qi was founded and perfected by Emperor Yuanyang Hua: refining qi + refining qi to transform into gods + refining gods to return to emptiness There are three steps and six realms, each step has two realms, and each step is divided into three major tasks: front, middle and back. ) Refining Qi to Transform into God Building the foundation of three realms (Yang Dragon + Fu Yin Tiger + Golden Blood Chalcedony) Four realms of golden elixir (both water and fire, enlightenment of Yin God & lead and mercury extraction, pregnancy and nourishment of fetal immortals & second refinement of sun and moon, five elements position) Note: There is an elixir moving middle palace after the five elements position, which is a process of promotion. I don't know if it counts as homework. Refining the God and Returning the Void Five Realm Fetal Spirit (Five Elements Reversed + Five Elements Reversed + Breaking the Void, Fetus Entering the Upper Palace) There is also the integration of form and spirit. It is not clear whether it is placed in the promotion process of the Five Realms or the homework of the Sixth Realm. The details of the six realms of Yang God have not yet been revealed. It is known that there are (living and governing famous mountains to combine with the Taoist temple). I don't know which section belongs to the front, middle and back Further up are the Celestial Immortal-Detao Fruit-Shenzhen-Golden Immortal. I still don't know the details, but there will definitely be a one-step divine tool. Under the sky today, if the six realms are completed, you must accumulate merit before you can ascend to the Celestial Immortal. In ancient times merit was not necessary. At the same time, in addition to the inner alchemy path, there is also the ancient demon path, the branch cultivation methods such as refining, outer elixir, and various divine methods after the rise of the human race. It is difficult to correspond one by one. The three-line orthodoxy passed down from heaven is generally the inner alchemy path of three steps and six realms, but each has its own characteristics. Huang Ting Palace, the overlord of Zhongzhou, has an internal scene method in the golden elixir period. Once mastered, it can be regarded as a small magical power, which belongs to the direction of control + field Baoguangzhou Zhenling Sect, which can obtain a certain demon's true form in terms of refining, belongs to the direction of tank + physics Tiannan Taiping Sect, where the protagonist is, trains various divine generals, and finally can transform into gods and generals, and then become immortals. Can it be regarded as an all-round assistant? Welcome messages with additional modifications

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It feels inexplicable, why do you need to insert so many descriptions in classical Chinese? Is AI becoming more and more useful? In the past, it was just right to put a sentence or two from time to time, but now a few hundred words are placed at the beginning of the chapter. There's no need to be so crazy about word count, right?