I Traveled to the End of the Immortal Path

Chapter 11 is starting to get weird again. I've been refining it, but there's nothing useful about it. It's just boring again before it's put on the shelves. Write less about women and less about emotional drama, no one wants to see it. Does it mean that if you don't write about women, you won't be able to write a book? This book suffers from this problem.

What a pity. At that time, I was so optimistic about the immortal road and the struggle to become a god. It was a pity that when I wrote about exploring the mountains, I suddenly changed my style and turned into a short story. As a result, every subsequent book was not long.

The first few chapters are pretty good. They can't be called fairy grass, but they can at least make people's eyes brighter. The only flaw is that there is always a large amount of inexplicable psychological activity. Of course, it may also be due to different personal reading habits. But there are problems starting from traveling back to 3000 years later, and the problems are huge. First, there are two women. The younger sister has a crush on the protagonist, so it is understandable that she has feelings for the protagonist. But my sister wanted to kill the protagonist at the beginning, because the misunderstanding was solved later and the protagonist had a handsome face, so she had feelings for the protagonist inexplicably, which felt very brainless. And as far as the timeline is concerned, there are only a few days before and after, and the Sichuan opera changes its face not so quickly. Second, after the protagonist travels to the end of the world, he can learn various secrets from the past for free. In my understanding, after the protagonist gets the secret skills and returns to reality, he should work hard to learn them, and then use these powers to show off and slap people in the face. This is more fun, instead of going back to the end of the world and having sex with girls. The third one is that the protagonist returned to reality after getting the weapon refining from the end of the world, and directly shouted to the Nascent Soul monk to exchange for 10,000 spirit stones, which made everyone know. Elementary school students all know that wealth is not revealed, and the protagonist is just a third-level Qi practitioner. According to the fact that the protagonist only has one hundred spiritual stone resources per year, which is equivalent to the resources of an ordinary handyman disciple for a hundred years. Not to mention that the inner disciples value this resource, it is easy for ordinary disciples in the late stage of Qi training to kill the protagonist, right? There are many other small details, such as "I feel like I'm in love again" inexplicably in the last days, and in reality, I pretend to be aloof because I am being slapped by a Taoist companion, which feels like a split personality. Since Dan Da returned to Qidian, I have read almost all the new books at the beginning, and almost all have given long reviews. It's just that the accounts are not the same, but I am really not a black man. You are the only one in the entire Qidian that allows me to write long reviews, purely because of feelings. It feels like it's really not suitable for writing an emotional drama, it's too abrupt, just like the previous book Tokisaki Kurumi, without any sense of involvement. The biggest problem with this book is not that you want to write about women, but that you want to accept two women at once, sisters. In my humble opinion, the innocent and cute character of the younger sister has been well portrayed, so there is no need to add another older sister. Even if we have to add it, we can wait until the sister successfully accepts it, and then add the sister's emotional drama, step by step. I really can't write a low-level plot about being sexually abused, and the results will be better than the inexplicable good impression I have now. Finally, I still hope that the new book will be a hit.

Dan Da, I took a look and found that it was only 80 after six hours of fake pursuit, and it was 50 after the real pursuit. This number will have to be cut after it is put on the shelves. There is really no need to write it down. If it doesn't work, let's just follow the trend... It's only 200,000 words now, and it's not too late to stop. In the next book, we won't write about women, only kill, kill, kill.

The author's Endless Arms and Immortal Road Confrontation can be said to be classics among classics.

If the results of this course are not satisfactory, I suggest you open a vest, give up this identity and start over, and regain your original intention. Sometimes I can't watch it because I don't have confidence in the subsequent plot and have no expectations, so I will be picky about the current plot.

I have been following it for a while now, and I feel that the main theme of the love world of this work is: Emotional suppression, taking responsibility, bitter love, and other negative elements. Although there are elements such as acceptance of fate, consideration, non-jealousy, free and unrestrained generosity, etc., The overall atmosphere is dark and unhappy. Of course, pink bubbles filled with a bunch of love letters are not what make people feel. "I think the current changes in the plot and the emotional description that the book focuses on are not integrated with each other." Using what a bartender I like told me, he said that the pursuit of bartending is always two words: "balance." Spirits can be prepared so that no one can taste the liquor at all; If the liquor is not prepared well, even if it is diluted with water, the heavy liquor taste will not disappear. This book is currently like a cocktail that is too heavy. I feel that the owner is full of sincerity in the ingredients used, but the taste is not integrated and balanced enough. Daddy Orange and you have been book friends for more than ten years. I have followed all your works for more than ten years. Emotional drama is probably your most scientific challenge, but I sincerely hope that you can mix this glass of wine. ※Finally, it is a virtue to provide advice while also attaching suggestions for solving the problem. By dismantling and analyzing all the current best-selling emotional dramas, you may be able to sort out many routines and arrangements of elements for writing emotional dramas, at least to give your inspiration and imagination a breather. Since analytical skills are also what you are best at, it is equivalent to your deep-rooted and extremely rational character to enter the avenue of emotional writing. Or take the writing styles that you were good at in the past: humorous writing style, strategic thinking, description of timeless life philosophy, etc., And use them back in the description of emotional dramas. This is equivalent to trying to use your maxed-out martial arts and using different internal skills and mental methods to see how it works. I believe it is very likely to be a successful new genre. The above suggestions, of course, are not my business as to whether you will become possessed or commit suicide with a knife.

Is the popularity of Dan Da big passerby gone? Hey, the author of Endless Arms, I feel that this account is useless.

Hey, after chasing it for two days, I still went back and watched Immortal Road again, for the fifth time. It is also a fairy tale, Xianlu is a true classic. This one obviously wants to follow the trend, change and speed up, but now it is not even as good as the early stage of the family story of Thousand Machines Palace and the family novel. The pace is too fast and it seems to have a battle of wits. The result is a fake battle of wits where the protagonist's IQ is crushed throughout the whole process. It does not have the taste of a big egg. It is really a pity. A simple novel written by a novice is too convoluted, and basically relies on breaking news, jokes and characters to win. Danda really has no advantage in this aspect, so there is a way out as if he specializes in witty writing 😟

7. I read Endless Arms, and every time I read it, it takes about a year. I read Gods Game 3, and I can't stand other novels at all. I like this real style so much, it really makes me feel immersed.