Mortal: I Just Practice Taoism and Cultivate Immortality

My opinion is that this book must be cut. First, the system, or how to obtain spiritual roots, is not clearly described. You can just conjure up what you want. Second, cultivation is too fast. You have five spiritual roots. If you have more heavenly spiritual roots, you can't cultivate as fast as you do. My personal opinion is that opportunities gradually come with cultivation.

I just saw the subscription section and comment on a chapter! The two girls were speechless after reading these chapters, and they had no expectations!

The protagonist is suitable to use what he has learned to combine scientific knowledge and the way of the universe to create his own game. Wang Xiaohu's magic sword technique in the Legend of Sword and Fairy, Cloud Piercer and Lin Jiabao's Qi Finger Sword, Yiyang Finger, Qijue Sword Qi, Dragon Slaying Technique and Shushan Immortal Sword Sect's sword control technique, Ten Thousand Sword Techniques, Heavenly Sword, Sword God, Tiangang Battle Qi, Immortal Wind and Cloud Body Technique, Drunk Immortal Moon-Watching Step, Sword-Conquering Demons, Dionysus, Seven-Star Demon-Conquering Formation, Thirty-six Heavenly Gang Sword Formation, Demonic Flame Flash Slash, Xiaoyao Shenjian, Xingsuo Mind Blade, Sky-Splitting Sword, Destroy Yuehan and Qionghua Sect's Qianfang Residual Light Sword, Wuling Guizong, Shangqing Poyun Sword, Nine Nether Tempering Cold Sword, Wangshu Ice Dance, Xihe Sword, Ningbing Sword, Sword Roaring Nine Heavens, Transformation True Rujian, Sifang Su Lian, Bagua Sword, Sancai Chaoyuan, Taiyi Sword Jue and Jingtian's All-powerful Silver Bullet Wave and Five Spirit Immortal Techniques (wind and snow and ice in the sky, burning the sky with fire, stars sinking and the earth shaking, blazing flames and thunder, Mount Tai pressing on the top, strong winds shaking the sky, sky thunder breaking through the sky, meteors and fire rain, sea of hell fire, five qi waves, thunder shaking the nine states, burning sky and raging flames, ten thousand Li Feishuang, Fengjuan Canyun, Wuyue Qingtian) and the Five Elements Spells of Zhongtian Yongcheng in the game Ancient Swords and Legends and the Three Talents Sword, Magic Sword Subduing Demons, Dao Sword Ningzhen, Huiming Sword, Xuanzhen Sword, Luanjian Jue, Kongming Sword, Taixu Sword, Kongming Huanxu Sword and Xuanyuan Suitaixu and Guigu Taoism in the game Xuanyuan Sword (Jin Ling Ji Kong, Broken Wood Golden Dog) , Kanli Thunder and Lightning, Lunar Divine Thunder, Cloud Dragon Body Four Verses, White Tiger Stars Falling, Heaven Pan Ming, Leaf Dance, Sheep Muscles Erode Bones, Crazy Wood Kuang Lan, Green Dragon Cloud Screen, Star Fighting in the Jungle, Autumn Scythe, Five Poison Curses, Rage Stars in the Sky, Fiery Technique, Sunset in the West, Swords Set ablaze, Fire Feathers, Sparks Sky, Danfeng Disarms , Rainbow gurgling, Suzaku fluttering its wings, Bodhi Brahma, Nirvana of nine kalpas, Flowing clouds, falling ice and rocks, falling rain, flying black snow, Formless Tathagata, violent water attack, raging waves draining gullies, hundreds of rivers converging, winter cloud initiation, Xuanwu appearing in the world, earth spirit claws, mountains and ravines, silent shadows sinking in jade. , Waves move the earth, thousands of poisons are entangled, rocks break into the sky, sacrifices to ghosts to destroy spirits, Wei Tuo subdues demons, Huang Long Qi, Qi Healing Technique, Eight Star Fixing Techniques, Spiritual Breath, Daoist Ritual Light, Cool Wind Salon, Return to the Origin from All Directions, Cool Wind Curse, Erosion Rock Return, Transform Dryness into Prosperity, Wind Sand and Sweet Rain Technique, Combine Essence Technique, Follow the Meridian Heart Technique, Reversal of Dan Movement Technique , Candle to attract the moon, Soul-summoning spell, Turn the clouds to see the sun, Sacrifice willows to extinguish spirits, Soar snakes and throw away scales, Relax muscles and activate pulses, Nine-dragon injury-resolving technique, Rebirth from fire spell, Lift the dead red gold), Condensing sword to level thousands of miles

It's just a random fabrication. It's better to kill Han Li and grab the little green bottle to fight for the truth! What kind of immortality can you cultivate if you don't strive for it?

The writing style is too ordinary and the writing power is not good. Since you are writing fan fiction, don't pursue perfection. That writing power is not what you have. Newbies writing about cultivating immortals should try not to write about any female Taoist companions. Too bad will lower the grade.

Now that you have become immortal cultivators, you not only waste time among mortals, but you also have to lick the three beauties of Mo Mansion. It's very leisurely, isn't it?

1 Try to describe the story well, what should be detailed and what should be detailed. Draw the characters alive and don't make them too fragmented. 2 If the fight is extremely overwhelming, just go through a few lines, don't let everyone come up and get a few moves 3 Fans should also have a slightly different pattern and approach, it is best to have a plan before doing things, and don't do things the same way 4 Try to fit the big framework of the original work, such as approximate prices, etc. Details can be added in the second design, but the logic must be self-consistent 5 Interact with the character plot in advance. Changes in the plot caused by changes in character actions can be added as needed. Don't use too much correction power. If you copy the default, you will lose points. 6 Have a clear grasp of the cool points and features, combine work and rest, and reduce points by being dull 7 Think more, compare more, and highlight features 8 Don't make up for more than 20% of the second copy of the plot It is best to make an outline and refer to the original work while writing. The timeline can be roughly grasped, and it is easy to write.

There are fewer updates. This situation usually means that the eunuch is about to be released.

It completely follows the original work. There is nothing new except for accepting women. (If the bottle cannot be taken, the protagonist of the original plot has absolutely no qualifications to change, let alone snatch women, and he is not afraid of being photographed to death by others.) The character of the protagonist is also quite unreliable. As long as others are smart enough, the protagonist will fall.

Fighting is too stiff, often just writing the names of spells and magic weapons. There is no process, and there is no effect of using the spells (magic weapons). It is necessary to write down the characteristics of the spells and magic weapons.

It is recommended to have more female protagonists. Recommended collection: Nangong Wan, Xin Ruyin and Xiaomei, Dong Xuan'er, Chen Qiaoqian, Hong Fu, Zhong Weiniang and her master Jiang Yun, Nishang Fairy, Zi Ling and her mother Zhou Yuan, Fan Jingmei, Zhuo Ruting, Yuan Yao, Yanli, Mrs. Wen, Ling Yuling and her mother Wen Qing, Yin Yue, Bing Feng, Han Zhi Xian, Mei Ning, Wen Si Yue, Liu Yu, Bing Po Fairy, Mu Peiling, Bai Yaoyi, Yuan Cha Saint, Bao Hua Saint, Dai Er, Black Phoenix Fairy, Jin Yue, Xian Xian, Liu Le'er, Bai Suyuan

Very good, the guy writes very well, ahem, encourage yourself 😁

I saw the protagonist going to lick Mo Mansion and I pulled away, it was so disgusting!

This book should be renamed: Traveling Through Mortals to Become a Holy Mother, or I should be called I Save Sufferings in Mortals

Generally speaking, it's okay. You don't have any descendants. What are you doing to develop your family? Is it just a low number? It's no problem to bring so many women with you. Your family is of no use to you at all.