Hunting Immortals and Demons

I have been reading The Dragon King of Shepherd Boy before, but I didn't expect that Shepherd Boy would quietly release a new book. I didn't see it until after get off work in the evening. I have caught up with the latest chapter. It is pretty good, but it is relatively slow to catch up. It can be seen that the shepherd boy is gradually becoming more creative. The writing style of this work is much more delicate than that of Dragon King, and it is still very comfortable to read. It is still a new book period, so I will first reward the shepherd boy with a silver alliance to cheer him up. I still hope that the shepherd boy can continue to work hard! Looking forward to the next plot.

If you want to make a guest appearance in the Dragon Tower, you can write down your name and the martial arts you are good at. I will look at the arrangements, but I can only try my best, and it is not 100% possible to arrange it.

I have read about 20 chapters. If you are a new book lover and read this because the author is a great master, you will definitely regret it. There are too many little bits and pieces. Even old bookworms may not be able to stand the free part.

Why do we always have to create extraneous things? To even break through to become a Wuhou, you have to go through many unnecessary steps such as buying tiger bones, competing for the purchase quota, being cheated and losing the purchase qualification, being robbed and killed, leaking the secret of cooking tiger bone soup, and being counterattacked by the Li family. This is just a breakthrough for Wuhou. This kind of incident that appeared out of nowhere cost the author more than ten chapters. The author is complacent about making bad money, but he doesn't know that he has already lost his favor as a reader, and the road is getting narrower and narrower.

Jiang Zhiwen, everyone is a great god these days

I subscribed to a chapter specifically just to write a review. I finished listening to it for free, but I don't have the motivation to subscribe, so I don't feel good about reading it directly. After all, I can see that the author is sincere and really puts his heart into this book, so I'd like to give you some suggestions. Advantages The setting and world view are very good, very complete and not obtrusive. The writing is up to standard, concise and comfortable The story rhythm is also very good. Problem The characters are forcibly set up for the development of the storyline. The characters are reduced to tools to advance the plot and are completely undepicted. People have human nature, and with human nature they have habits and behavioral logic. Only characters full of humanity can become the fulcrum of the story, supporting the logic and completeness of the story. A simple example The protagonist's mother, this role is very empty. Why do I mention the role of mother? Because a large part of the protagonist's character setting in the early stage is family affection, so it is necessary to have a full-fledged parental character image to make the protagonist's character image more vivid. Appearance is skin, behavior is flesh and blood. Only when complete can the character have vitality. The role of mother has no image and no behavior. In this novel, the only description of the role of the mother is that she loves her son~ Well, this is like writing about your cat. My cat has one nose and two ears... It is recommended to depict the mother's appearance "Yan'er, Mom is not hungry, I will give you this bowl of porridge." Wang Cui handed the bowl in his hand to Lu Yan. Lu Yan looked at the old woman in front of him. Her wrinkled cheeks were sunken, her figure was slightly stooped, her eyes were half-open and she looked very weak, but she still showed kindness. … The two elders couldn't resist Lu Yan, but the mother only drank half of the bowl of gruel before passing the bowl to Lu Yan again. "Mother,..." "Yan'er, drink." Lu Yang just wanted to refuse, but when he looked at the old woman's tender eyes, he couldn't help but trembled in his heart and took the bowl. In the next paragraph, when meeting the three young people in the mountain village, Lu Qingshan blocked Lu Yan behind him and changed it to Wang Cui tightened his body and immediately pulled Lu Yan behind him, blocking Lu Yan from behind. Lu Qingshan stepped forward, holding a hunting bow in his hand, with the bow and arrow already on the bowstring. The focus is on the third paragraph Lu Qingshan was injured while hunting and returned home. In the article, the family reached a consensus that Lu Qingshan needs to hunt more meat. Here you can let the mother stop, depicting a woman who loves her son and husband, and is unwilling to sacrifice her husband for the sake of her son to take radical risks. Finally, let the protagonist propose that he go hunting with his father in a safe outer area. This can smoothly extend the plot and make the image of his parents more vivid. Of course other small conflicts designed for mothers are also possible, but they must be reasonable. Tell me about another character? It can also be said that there are three, that is, the three little Luoluos in the village. Um..., These three people are unreasonable. Just delete them. It will have no impact on the plot at all. 1. Three people cannot dominate among tens of thousands of refugees, so it should be a group of many people, and these three people are only three of them. 2. Mr. Liu chose a group of young men to die, but missed these three? Is it reasonable? This kind of orphan gangster will be forced even if he doesn't volunteer. Is he the best candidate for the job? 3. How can a small mountain village that can hardly support itself afford to support these three gangsters? 4. Is there no one from the Liu family to guard this small mountain village? With this trio, readers will naturally think of this. Then the question arises, why don't the old villagers run away? Is it because they don't know there are monsters, are they not worried, or are they just the ones who don't run away? Well, anyway, it all falls apart upon closer inspection. (I'll add more when I think of it. Wu Ling's appearance is very suspenseful, and the psychological description of the original villagers is extremely contradictory and unreasonable, and is forced to be mysterious. Personally, I feel that the original villagers who stayed should believe Liu's words, and their psychology is lingering fear, but not too scared. After all, everyone is the most Seeing the corpse but not the monster, Liu should make his lie more realistic, find a beast corpse or something, so that people can stay in the village with peace of mind as bait) The three people can be replaced by villagers, and the original villagers can use conflicts over farm interests, and the protagonist shows off with a little force. Alas, the plot is unnecessary anyway, the character conflicts are unreasonable, and it is also very cliche and boring. The plot after entering the city is very compact, with many characters appearing, but I have basically forgotten it after watching it. The characters feel like they are just nouns. For characters who can appear twice or more, it is recommended that they briefly describe their actions and expressions, and make their speech and actions more personalized, so that they are more vivid, and the number of words can be reduced. The comment was too long and I got a little confused and forgot what else to write, that's probably it. Nowadays, good-looking novels are all in the form of narratives, which have the same feeling as a movie, mysterious and infinite, or the kind of copy written by a mortal. There is no need to delete the plot. If it is necessary to extend the plot and add a few more twists, the reading effect will be better. The setting of this novel is really good. The characters would be more vivid and reasonable, and the plot would be more focused. It would be perfect.

Well, I haven't read Ten Thousand Dragon Emperors. The setting of this book is very similar to that of the Martial Saint of the Ten Directions, and there are various little poisonous points. You can know them by reading the free chapters 🙂 I can't be too straightforward, I'm afraid of being criticized 🤐

It's not good-looking. The protagonist has a lot of cheats and is not as strong as others in higher-level skills. He also does a lot of nonsense. I have never seen the protagonist be able to do one thing. He just brags about the plot for the sake of bragging about the plot. It's a waste of time!

I'm curious what the protagonist thinks of killing three gangsters? Obviously it is not a sin to injure someone to death. As long as the protagonist has any brains, he will only break people's limbs and leave. This kind of person cannot survive. The protagonist can openly express that it is okay if the person he hurts is fine.

Poison, forcibly reducing intelligence, I was poisoned to death after reading Chapter 35, and I couldn't stand it anymore. It's another classic story of forcibly creating plot conflicts in order to develop the plot. It's particularly clever and forceful. I can't stand it. Don't the author know that this kind of operation will make the protagonist's character look special?