The Immortal Immortal of Ten Zhangs in the Red Dust

Good writing can make you popular. I was watching it when it first came out. When I saw the writing, I felt that it became popular. Although it did not happen overnight. In the end, I saw that Chi Xin and the author climbed up. I hope the author of this work also has a good result. I will simply give a reward to show my support. Of course, it would be great if one day I really give up and write cool articles.

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There are more than 30 chapters left, and I always feel weird about the author's treatment of the protagonist and Shannu. After all, Xiang Nu was raised by the protagonist and later transformed into an adult. In my understanding, Xiang Nu is always like a raised daughter or a raised sister to the protagonist. It is difficult to understand that it will develop into a lover's relationship sharing the same bed. It is disgusting and uncomfortable. Of course, everything else is handled well

There is nothing wrong with anything else, but I have one thing to say. If you don't know how to write about feelings, don't forcefully write them down.

Well, how should I put it? It's too bland. The travel notes are not like travel notes, and the perspective is too different. It's a bit like a unit drama, but except for the first one where the demon is eliminated in the temple, it's quite exciting, but the rest of it is too trivial.

I really liked it at first, but suddenly he started to take care of girls and teach others the exercises. Although the protagonist practiced it himself, he also knew that the exercises had a source. He taught people from other sects without the consent of the other party. It was a bit inconsistent with the character design at the beginning. Really, there is nothing to write about women. The good ones have to abandon the book again.

Really, if you don't know how to write emotional scenes, you don't have to write them. When I saw Ma Shiqing, a book boy, poisoned and killed, the transition was too abrupt. There was also a comment below that said that Miss Chai died and turned into a ghost. The unit drama was not written smoothly in this way.

It was well written before, but I don't know why, but a female protagonist came out of nowhere. This kind of novel is not suitable for a female protagonist, and you, the author, don't know how to write about emotions, why are you so persistent?

Really, the previous writing is quite good, but I can't understand why the author suddenly focused on Mao's writing about the daughter of the Chai family. Isn't it good to go out and practice Taoism after saving people? The daughter of the Chai family died inexplicably, and the Chai family did not explain anything about the situation. I always feel like I'm inferior. Maybe other people like this plot, so I'll leave first!

From Chai Ruyi, being betrayed by his childhood sweetheart, to dying and turning into a ghost, and then burying the body in a different place, the plot transformation felt so disconnected. It felt like it was all done deliberately to advance the plot. The transformation in the middle only took a few chapters, and the plot was too blunt. Just like today I want to travel in the world of mortals, but tomorrow the demon will invade, and I will go and save the world right away,

If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, just write less. The later you go, the more addictive it becomes.

After reading the introduction, I found that the author is very talented. If it weren't for Baidu, I wouldn't know what it is to scare people. I've only read two chapters, and the writing and narration are pretty good. Come on, apart from Jasmine, there are very few people who write daily prose.

Why do all the female supporting characters like the protagonist? From the little pet to the little girl, to Chai Ruyi who turned into a ghost, to the Qingcheng Fujian girl we just met, there is no definite emotional scene, but there is a kind of ambiguity. It feels like the plot is all driven by the girl's various things, from Chai Ruyi's various things to Yan Shashu,

The sudden appearance of Qiao Niang is a bit strange, so we can only meet again by fate.

Is the author still planning to write about the harem? Just have a vase, don't use too much ink.

Taoist priest and Sanhua Empress? Like

Almost tastes bad. How should I put it, the author's writing is actually pretty good, but the plot arrangement is very stiff in many places. It lacks a natural and natural feeling. It's like a rope with many knots, which is very uncomfortable. For example, when the protagonist first arrived in Yucheng, and then the official department came to interact with him, the interaction felt very stiff. It is not easy for an official like this to survive. His IQ and EQ are extremely low. Even if he knows that the protagonist is awesome, he still has to ask the protagonist what kind of opportunity he got and has to prove his identity. The attitude of the protagonist is also very confusing. The protagonist has no respect for the city god of heaven and earth, but he is afraid of the officialdom. This is still the case when the protagonist has not broken any laws or disciplines.

Some are like "Taoist Priest and Sanhua Empress" But Xiangnu is not as cute as Sanhua Empress

This novel is definitely at the level of a master. You can come and take a look.

Let me tell you something, this writing style is really good

It's quite interesting, keep it up.