A Sword Flies to Ask for Immortality

The writing is good, but it follows the old-fashioned way of having no main line and constantly having extraneous branches and plots.

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There's nothing to say about the writing, but it's too messy and complicated. It's like a new chef who hasn't even found a chef yet and starts cooking here and there without even learning a single cuisine. At least you have to learn and master one thing well, and the main plot is also well arranged. The protagonist wanders around every day and feels like he doesn't know what he wants to do. Everywhere he goes is a chance or encounters an enemy. Even in the game, there is a specific route for killing monsters and upgrading. Each map is cleared step by step.

It would be so exciting to join the sect in the early stage if you didn't write it earlier. I guess if there weren't so many readers' opinions, I would have joined the sect only after it was published. Write about people from the protagonist's family to express the protagonist's state of mind that is devoted to seeking truth. To be honest, with the protagonist's strength, how can you write about his family's contemporaries to express his state of mind? Instead, he acted like the Dragon King had returned. There are also things like monsters and Wei Gouzi. Wouldn't it be better for you to write similar stories after joining the sect and studying Dharma before traveling around and writing similar stories? It would be fine if the protagonist did not meet the immortal cultivators after becoming an Immortal on the Earth and searched for immortal fate along the way. But in fact, he has already met the immortal cultivators, obtained the first few levels of the Shenzong Kung Fu, and knows when the Xuantian Sword Sect will recruit people. Shouldn't the first task be to go to the realm of the Xuantian Sect and wait for recruitment? Why go on a time-consuming and irrelevant branch line on the road? Wouldn't it be better to spend the money when we arrive at Xuantian Sect's realm and wait for recruitment?

The writing style is fine, but the introductory chapter is too long and contains too many events, so many readers may leave before you can start cultivating immortality.

I came in from the Daily Poison Guide. I thought I would be poisoned, but I didn't expect it to be Benxiangcao. Unfortunately, I discovered it too early. I finished reading it in a long time. I am now anxious and scratching my head.

It's so messy. I wrote a little bit here and a little bit there, mixing in all kinds of causes and effects. I haven't found a sect to join and there are so many things. At best, it's a leap of thinking. At worst, it's a blur of priorities. I just write whatever comes to my mind. In the end, the Xuantian Sword Sect is exactly the same as the Emei Sect in Jet Li's version of Heavenly Sword and Dragon Sword. The plot is as classic as it gets, and it's as ancient as it gets. I can't figure it out. Is it because you can't write a classical fairy tale without using those ancient plots?

I saw the latest chapters. The first few dozen chapters are very good, with the feeling of classical fairy tales. The story of She Jiangshan is almost interesting at the end, but I can still watch it. However, when compared with the ordinary plot at the end, it doesn't make sense logically. In the beginning, She Jiangshan's flying sword was not practiced, and he could fight against several demon cultivators who had been practicing for hundreds of years. After a year, he completed the experience and became proficient in swordsmanship and martial arts. In the second turn, a bunch of blessings and improvements, and then after hitting the lowest level demon cultivator with one sword, it was said that it was too late to stop the demon cultivator's soul from escaping. This is illogical no matter from the perspective of cultivation, vigilance and defense, or the strength of the flying sword. The author forced this kind of thing to happen for the needs of the plot. In general, it can be predicted later, and it can be watched without thinking.

The apprenticeship was too abrupt The killing of Xuan Yuan and Xuan Heng had no foreshadowing, it was just a deus ex machina The story was suddenly too fragmented It would be better to reveal the inheritance after seeing the real Wu sword, and then others come to put out the fire and understand the cause. The three of them all learned the skills from the True Wu Sword, but they were not talented enough and only partially understood it. Then Zhen Wujian recognized that the protagonist had also practiced this skill, and by the way, he got a new skill to complete it, and was then taken to the sect.

What a rubbish! Why didn't the male protagonist reach the sky and become a powerful soul? They still need to practice step by step, which is simply useless. Those supporting female protagonists have become famous all over the world in just two or three years. What about the male protagonists? Still wandering around in the first and second realms, he is simply a waste. It is better to be a big devil and establish the authentic Xuanmen, slaughter all the hypocritical people in the world, and turn the real authentic Xuanmen into a demon sect, so that everyone can kill it.

The protagonist has been practicing martial arts for several years, and at the beginning the martial arts is at the highest level, a land immortal, but once he cultivates to become an immortal, he is dragging his feet, and it is just a side plot, I say hurry up and add more.

It's not that it doesn't look good, it just feels awkward. As a reader who has read Shushan and many Shushan fans, I personally feel that it is a bit awkward and looks unnatural. It doesn't matter how good the author's writing or writing skills are, but there is a sense of grafting. It looks like a replica of Shushan, but it doesn't count as such, and it doesn't look like a fan of Shushan either. Some plots had that familiar yet unfamiliar feeling, which made me feel awkward. In addition to this book, Toad's Sword Cutting also gave me a similar feeling.

I was already impatient when I saw that the author of Chapter 60 or 70 had written several martial arts chapters, but in the end he came up with another poison. Wei Gouzi is an ordinary person, but the protagonist is an immortal. If the protagonist can't even react, why should he be the one to save people? Does he have the ability to react? Even if he reacts, he is only a mortal body, so how can he be faster than the devil? It's not that the plot is disgusting, it's that the disregard for the character's ability limit in order to advance the plot is disgusting! If a novel sacrifices logic for the sake of plot, no matter how good the writing is, it will just be a mess and it will never be read. I thought it was fairy grass, but now I really doubt whether I should continue reading. In my opinion, forcibly improving or reducing the ability of a character for certain plots is the most destructive to logic. This shows that the author did not first figure out the next plot based on the characters and past plots, but instead integrated the plots and characters into it. It makes people doubt the author's writing skills!

After more than 70 chapters, I am still a casual cultivator, not on the right track.

Without a golden finger, why are you better than others? If Han Tianzun didn't have the Immortal Bottle, he wouldn't survive Chapter 100

I've always talked about joining a sect, but now that I'm in the latest chapter, I don't see any sects I've joined.

It's very good-looking. It's considered very good among new books. It is not inferior to some books on the Xianxia list. 🙂

I was a bit puzzled when I read Chapter 6. I must have beaten the person because I saw the victim's body. Why did you go there earlier? Three years ago, I was a wandering immortal on the earth. Even if you observe mourning for three years, wouldn't the previous time be enough to slay the devil? In the end, he turned out to be a nobody, and he was not so righteous in the past. He was just an ordinary person. Why did he suddenly lose his mind and feel angry?

The territory of the human dynasty is too large. Such a large territory must have corresponding strength, but the dynasty feels useless and allows extraordinary people to take whatever they want.

Youxian Gourd Feng has learned a bunch of branch lines from the lazy main line of Toad. But a toad wouldn't have failed to worship at the mountain gate in Chapter 60 Also, at the beginning, he directly learned the skills of other sects. Most powerful people can pinch and calculate, and the hidden dangers are too great The writing is very good, but the main and branch lines are confusing. Let's sort it out.

Like Ganjue in Shushan Zhenshi Dixian, the protagonist is not in the same painting style as other "authentic" Xuanmen. It is said that the protagonist is more suitable for cultivating immortals and that he is a genius, but he has always suffered a disadvantage.

Is it the protagonist who is a cultivator and a nerd? Doesn't the author feel that this kind of protagonist is boring? Yes, you are dedicated to the Tao, saying "I want to be free from the world, I want to achieve immortality" all day long. However, the story of the novel is always stronger than anything else. You are right to write the protagonist who is a cultivator, but readers will definitely get tired after reading it for a long time. After all, we have never been a cultivator, so we can only go over and over the few things in our imagination, which is nothing more than downloading dungeons, getting treasures, making enemies, counter-killing, and cultivating. As I said again, the story is stronger than any setting. No matter how good the setting is, no matter how pure the character of the protagonist is, if the story is not exciting, the above are all false. So my suggestion is not to have such strong writing skills, and don't exclude the protagonist from dealing with people, whether they are mortals, monks, men, women, children, or even goblins and ghosts.

Let me tell you straightforwardly, six thousand words a day is the minimum standard. Too few updates will not attract subscriptions.

It feels like a fairy gourd, keep it up and update more often.

As the title states, this book begins with the main character's motivation to become a monk and become a sect. In the details, good and evil gradually begin to take sides. No matter what magic weapon is used, good and evil begin to be defined. It becomes more and more tiring to read. It does not look like a time traveler at all, and the protagonist becomes more and more vulgar. . .

Hongyu felt so frustrated watching it. Everyone came over to give the protagonist a few blows to see if he could regain his place later. It was so uncomfortable to watch.

Write well and support you with all subscriptions. Just don't be a eunuch. There are too few good-looking classical heroes.

After I put it on the shelf, I read a few of them and kept reading. I found that now there is only one chapter a day, which is not a good sign for newcomers to new books. . I didn't read the latter part, I just said that the first part is indeed a fairy seedling, but I don't know why the author always likes to call the protagonist "little thief". I feel that the protagonist is not that weird and slippery character. From a reading perspective, not only are the definitions really confusing or incombinable, but they also add inappropriate "funny" elements to the serious text, just like the author's bad taste. . . This is purely a personal opinion. If everyone thinks there is no problem, then it means there is something wrong with me, then I will admit it. There is also the character of the senior sister. I cannot say that there is a problem, but I always feel that the style of writing is a bit inconsistent with the previous article, or the overall style of writing has become out of touch.

It's so good. It's a good book that I haven't seen in a long time.

Understanding one's mind and seeing one's nature is the highest state in spiritual practice. The whole process of reading "The Smiling Eagle" is aimed at reaching the state of knowing one's mind and one's nature. This is the second book I've read that states the state of one's mind and one's nature. I support the follow-up subscription.