Longevity Begins with Smile and Pride

The full text is still readable, but the Yitian part is full of long paragraphs to earn subscriptions. One original text of "Green Willow Villa" can be written in 5 large chapters, with long self-righteous psychological descriptions, like a mentally disturbed person who has one thought at a time, and extremely inconsistent behavior. Anyone who has read Jin Yong's original text will feel that it is extremely poisonous. I won't order it anymore, and I'm leaving!

From the beginning to now, I only have some very superficial thoughts. If I keep writing like this, I feel that I haven't done well before the first book. The more you write, the more annoying you become. It's not that your writing is not good, or that it makes people feel frustrated. Maybe it's because I'm too young to understand, but I feel that Internet writing has no future. How can it be achieved by just relying on those old readers of Jin Yong? If you want to make money, you must find a fusion point between the current popular writing style and your ability to write French and grammar. Otherwise, there is no progress and no money. Is it possible that you are just generating electricity for love? I see many readers in the book review section constantly expressing their thoughts. Your thoughts are your thoughts, and my thoughts are my thoughts. You should not judge my opinions. Besides, this is the starting point, not your Tieba Weibo What caused the war was to talk about the plot, and belittle others at every turn. Who do you think you are? If you eat a few more years of food and salt, you will know more. You understand the ways of the world. Young people don't understand, right? There is so much pressure on everyone in today's society. Don't they all want to be in the world in books? I am looking for a sense of pleasure and grudges in the world. In reality, I am already very annoyed by the annoying worldliness. I am still annoyed when I come here. What are you doing? I just want to preach, right? The people in the book review area are so angry and say that you don't understand the world. If you don't understand life, everyone knows it. If you don't say it, it doesn't mean you don't understand. You just understand. What are you superior about? If you really understand, why don't you go into politics? Use your talents there to show off your pitiful sense of superiority. Why haven't you become successful?          ，，，，， I read from another author: The author is at the helm of the novel, we are just passengers, and I just put forward my ideas. Whether you think it is naive or boring, it's up to you. If you still insist on your own ideas, then I admire you very much. Many people only write what they like and want to write after they become successful. There is nothing wrong with you writing your own books from the beginning. The fault is that the times are wrong. I can only say that you should try your best. I support you. Although I don't have much money, I am not like a book friend who finally has time, but I always hope that your writing will get better and better. Come on! I may occasionally open it and read it in the future. Maybe when I get older, I will start to understand some of the things in this book, but I would rather not understand it.         ，，，，， Come on 🙏🙏 You can delete it if you don't want to see it. It's a long way to go, see you again! ! 🙏🙏

It is indeed not suitable for me to read, but I quite like reading it. From the last book until now, I can't stand it anymore. As I watched, I felt more and more depressed and uncomfortable, and the more I thought about it, the more I thought about it. Life is no longer very comfortable, and I don't want to continue to see the so-called human nature and the sophistication of the world. Come on, author, keep writing. It's a long way to go. I hope your writing will get better and better! One book is more exciting than the other! 🙏🙏🙏

After seeing the latest chapter, I wonder why the protagonist can't use the same force he used to attack Zhou Zhiruo on those villains. Xie Xun kills people like crazy, you tolerate it, and you design to give him a chance to change his ways, because he wants to please Zhang Wuji and unite with the Mingjiao to achieve great things. All kinds of minions come out to question you, but you have the patience to respond with emotion and reason, in order to convince the public. Then Zhou Zhiruo... Was tortured to the point of obsession, forced to death, and then you didn't even bother to say anything soft because of a preconceived prejudice. This protagonist gives me the impression that Liu Bei throws his child and Song Jiang kills his mother-in-law with high moral integrity. It is beneficial to his great cause, even coaxing and persuading. It is useless to his great cause. Even if you have a little affection and a few months of friendship, you can be killed with one slap without taking any effort. It can be said that you are eager to save your wife, but it is at this critical moment that people will act according to their inner nature. Yes, I am optimistic about this protagonist. If he learns the art of imperial control, he will be able to change dynasties easily. But as the protagonist of the online novel, he is a little bit... Hard to describe in one word I think there is less life and death fighting, more abuse of food, and a little bit of blood and growth.

The author really wants to incorporate the protagonist into the story to replace the original plot of the protagonist. One book is okay, but too many characters will lead to the protagonist's temperament being changeable. Sometimes he is calm and wise, sometimes he is reckless and impulsive, sometimes he is brave and courageous, and sometimes he is indecisive. After many experiences in Xiaoao, except for his martial arts, there is no progress. If there are other books to be written in the future, we should still pay attention to the impact and shaping of the protagonist's growth experience on his character, and every time he wears it, he must be a lover who refuses but still welcomes her. It would be ridiculous for the heroine to have a lifelong misfortune!

The author was also criticized for being autistic 😠, haha. There are indeed a lot of poisonous points, but they still make people read. For example, the heroine is told about the fate of the characters in the original work, and as aborigines, they still believe it... There is also the emotional scene about the mother-in-law that everyone complains about, and she keeps saying those few sentences over and over again. There are quite a lot of good points. Even with the popularity of black-and-white literature, it is very good to be able to stick to martial arts fan fiction based on a narrow sense. This is also the reason why I can keep reading. Finally, go for it, and I wish you better and better writing! 😡

Good book. But there is a feeling of a rushed ending and a lack of interest. I had expectations from the name of Immortality, especially the name of the master seems to have left a foreshadowing, but if I think about it and write it according to the protagonist's character, it will be impossible to write. No matter how many more martial arts memories remain, adding a heroine will also repeat the same path. It is advisable to imagine, but it is really unnecessary to indulge in obscenity.

I have to be impressed by the author's writing style, but it's hard to describe how the author does things for people. You can see the author criticizing people in all the book reviews. I don't know if you are doing it for food or for fame. This behavior is strange and must be tepid.

Xiaoao was there showing off his speech the whole time, but he was beaten with Songshan's hidden weapon and was "sad and angry". He felt really frustrated and withdrew.

Did you think you wouldn't lick Ren Yingying? The results are all decided, take a look, it's a disgusting batch, don't look at it, it will feel like a loss again. It was good for you to accept the daughters of Yue Lingshan and Liu Zhengfeng in the early stage, but then you refused to accept them and licked Ren Yingying later. You are really smart.

Very sore, very anxious, and Wenqing was seriously ill.

Everything else is good, except for the bad point about Zhao Min at the end that almost persuaded me to quit. It's not that I can't accept it, it's obvious that I will. The key is that every other chapter there is a natural marriage between Zhang Wuji and Zhao Min. What a smile, mysterious and unpredictable, I accepted it, and I have experienced two worlds, and I have experienced everything. Yingying has even said before that she understands the principle of one flower, one world, and even knows that she has experienced the key points of Zhang Wuji and Zhao Min's love. She still has Zhao Min fall in love with him for half a month. It is destined to be like this. I accept it. This is really heartbreaking.

Opening a comment for new readers. This is an author who is good at telling stories. This is a work that favors group portraits. If you don't like the intrigues and intrigues, you can leave. After all, this arena is not suitable for you. If you like short stories and the protagonist can't change the story whether he does anything or not, you can also avoid it because you can't understand it. This author has a good grasp of the situation, and has a good grasp of human relationships and intrigues.

In my opinion, martial arts, as Jicha said, are "emotional, righteous, and lawless." The author's writing style, in my opinion, imitates Jin Yong too much. . Looking at the whole story, on the surface it seems that the protagonist is having a smooth sailing, but in fact he is extremely frustrated. . He always cares about his upright character in everything he does, and being restrained is as uncomfortable as pulling his neck. . . I recognize Jin Yong's heroes, and I respect Guo Jing, Qiao Feng and others from the bottom of my heart, but their heroes are too sacrificial for others and have too high aspirations, which ordinary people cannot afford, so I respect and admire them, but I don't want to be them. . I think that a modern person who travels to the world of martial arts cannot be a great knight. Being able to have a bottom line, eliminate evil and promote good, in my opinion, is already a very righteous outlook on life. . . Therefore, the protagonist in the author's works is too fake, making it difficult for people to have a sense of empathy. . Isn't the martial arts world that most people yearn for "a world of love, justice and lawlessness"?

After following the update and seeing the latest 37 chapters, I feel that I should have a say in whether the book is good or bad. (Why do I say where the chapters are? It's to prevent the time and space police and a group of black people from brushing up.) First of all, the author writes in great detail the psychological descriptions of the characters and the causes and consequences of the events. What's wrong with this? I think it's very good, at least it doesn't look tired. Secondly, the author has a good understanding of the human world in martial arts and the books of Mr. Jin Yong (he only goes to Jinpenwashing) and can portray all the supporting characters well. Isn't this better? So, is it okay for me to give this book a solid foundation first? Then let's study the specific benefits of this book. 1. The regulations for events are clear. 2. The psychological description and story arrangement of the protagonist and supporting characters. 3. Regarding the changes that will occur after the protagonist joins the event and the plot arrangement of the supporting characters after the change. 4. The personal story and emotional arrangement of the protagonist in the full text Are these four items alone necessary for a fine novel? Will adding more points start to be a bonus? The fifth point is that the whole world of Swordsman is full of calculations about various human relationships. Therefore, there is no brotherly pride of Tianlong and the great chivalrous person in the Condor 3. In such a story, is it too much to ask the author to write a chivalrous and soft-hearted person? The sixth point is that before the two events have been told, some malicious people (those who really cannot be regarded as well-intentioned comments) are posting comments to dislike it. Because the author's writing style and writing style are better than those people. He touched someone else's cake. So if you like it, just keep reading. If you don't like it, you can go out and turn left to read those fast-traveling or what you call "killing and decisive" books (to put it bluntly, they are garbage that you can't even read with your brain). That's it, I hope the author can persevere and finish the book. If the writing style can be kept to the lowest level, it will be just a piece of food. Maybe it will be a god, but the fandom is not the best. I hope that the author can have original works in the future. If the writing style is still like this, then he can basically become a great writer.

The beginning was good, the Lin family and the Liu family were solved in a way that was consistent with Jianghu, and the protagonist was witty, but something went wrong later on. He deliberately set up the training ground on the top of the mountain, did not notice Zuo Lengchan's movements, was forcibly ambushed, and owed favors. The whole process of meeting Ren Yingying was wrong. The character creation fell apart, the characters became weird and inconsistent, and the plot was not as reasonable as before.

From Yu Canghai, he climbed over the wall and rushed into the Fuwei Escort Agency. People from both sides showed up, but instead of hitting the pair of squirters, they squirted for seven chapters! ! ! If this is not water, what is water? Still saliva! Did the author, a keyboard warrior, come to write novels? I wrote seven chapters of scolding and it's still awesome!

Chapter Thirty-Four is so damn stupid, why are you filming a TV series here?

The protagonist has his own ideas and an aura of losing face. If he wants to give discipleship to the nun, that's fine. Basically, if he doesn't want to give Tianmen face, he won't do it, because I'm strong. According to local custom, this is simply looking for trouble, and no one will feel sorry for him if his legs are broken. He also has his own justice and pursuit, and is too lazy to manage his power. Expect to be ambushed and killed twelve times by top masters throughout the year. We are not afraid of thieves stealing, but we are afraid that thieves will miss us. The protagonist's intelligence points are not added to Goudao. Recklessness, face, favors, luck, there is always a reason for him to fall into the trap. Martial arts is not about cultivating immortals. It is doomed that the best masters cannot beat a bunch of first-class ones. To sum up, the protagonist will often be brought to desperate situations by his own character. And because he is the protagonist, he has luck and favor and survives the desperate situation. Then prepare for the next round. I read the book "The Final Word" before, and I really enjoyed it like reading the "Golden Book". The grievances and hatreds in the rivers and lakes are involuntarily, and the characters are flesh and blood. There is no fixed routine. I don't know when, but the taste has disappeared from everyone. When the protagonist meets a beautiful woman, he is not as measured as Gu Chaoci is to Huang Rong. For example, when Yue Lingshan humiliated him in public several times, he just accepted it lightly. The dialogue often has a bit of a dog-licking feel. Just because Renmei gave me another candy? Those who didn't know thought they had been injected with Tie Chou's gene. Alas. Pity.

After reading Chapter 85, I gave the author a big suggestion. First of all, I can see that I really appreciate your writing and talent, including some of your handling of the plot, but here are a few suggestions that I hope to adopt. As a reader of online articles, I deeply feel that today's readers are different from readers in Jin Yong's era. Everyone's acceptance of setbacks has greatly decreased. Blindly abusing the protagonist or abusing love is a taboo in online articles. The author has his own ideas, and it can be seen from the previous chapter that he has a good understanding of Jin Yong's martial arts. However, as an online article author, I think it is not advisable to preach to readers with the fundamental attitude that you don't understand Jin Yong. I can accept it, but 90% of readers cannot accept it, because we are not debating Jin Yong's martial arts on the forum, but readers spend money to appreciate the stories you create with your talent and ingenuity. You are no longer a follower of Jin Yong's martial arts but a creator. To put it bluntly, if the audience cannot accept your work, you will be in vain and you will not make any money. Your creation must take into account your understanding of Jin Yong's martial arts and the reader's acceptance limit. Even if Jin Yong himself came back to life and wrote Internet articles about his feelings and the plot of Little Dragon Girl, he would still be cool. Writers of online articles should avoid thinking that they have understanding and talent and point fingers at readers, thinking that you are all s and are better than you don't understand. Wouldn't it also be criticized for publishing a leaflet teaching readers how to read novels? I want to write something different, but I can't write for the sake of being different. Isn't writing online articles just to make money? Is it still for the sake of writing? A little personal suggestion: When everyone objects, for example, the protagonist's emotional scene is too slow and awkward, maybe it's not that readers can't accept it, maybe it's because your description is too heavy-handed? Too much is too much. When writing, it is easy for the author to get stuck in his own logic and want to write everything clearly. But in many cases, being too clear may also be a kind of strength for the readers.

If you don't want to feel depressed, I suggest you stop reading it. The protagonist is restrained and aggrieved at every turn. After reading today's chapter, I really can't stand it anymore. Alas, no one forced me to watch it, but I still had to spend money to buy it.

Those who haven't stayed up late to read Jin Gu probably won't be able to read this book. On the one hand, the traces of imitation are actually quite heavy, and it is also specific to the imitation of language style. On the other hand, for young readers, it is too daddy and preachy all the time. This is also a common problem in popular literature in the past. You have also learned this and carried it forward... These two points are very bad. The language style is pretty good, but the preaching is really annoying. The fighting scenes also have a retro feel, and you can even hear Shan Lao's accent in some sentences. It's too retro, but not good enough, which means it's out of touch with the times, which is quite rare for online writing.

Why am I so verbose? It turns out that the last book was about Gu Chaoci. It's the same sentence. Don't write too verbosely. Learn from the lessons of the previous book. You have a thorough understanding of martial arts, but some of the understanding of human relations are really bad. The character of the protagonist is very weird. There are so many inner activities. There are so many truths. I am already old enough to read martial arts. Why should I listen to your reasoning after reading a book? There are many key points, and your own understanding may not be correct. The most important thing is not to be so verbose and describe so much in your heart. It is also based on the previous book, and many people think it is your trumpet. The biggest advantage of your book is that it has a good understanding of force, which is a super plus point. The description of the protagonist is also much better than the previous book. At least the personality is not so weird. The biggest problem is The narrative is too long-winded, and you export your own ideas and cognitions in various ways. The key is that many of your ideas and cognitions are not very recognized by most people, including me. I really need to think less about this aspect. Come on, author. Generally speaking, it is still readable. If I look at all such martial arts novels, your novel is considered first-rate. There are problems in your writing, and other people have more and bigger problems. In comparison, your novel is still very good.

The author's writing is really good, but there are some poisonous points that are easy to avoid. It's better to avoid them. Is it useless for you to play against your book friends every day? If you win online, subscribe and lose.

I really regret voting for you. The righteousness on his face will eventually attract women. You can't write without women? Is it really the reason why readers read less and complain more? It's okay, just keep writing based on your point of view. Anyway, I just gave up.

What kind of martial arts did you write without violence or murderous intent? It's not fun at all to grind and moan. What age are we in? People's wisdom has been developed for a long time. They all know that they have the golden belt of murder and arson. It's really boring to pretend to be here

It's really frustrating to watch, Pure Gou Shi, what the hell is the protagonist portraying? There are other things in the front, what are you writing in the back?

I only saw Chapter 46. The details are described well, but not so well. It's too long-winded. If you write specifically about Xiaoao, I can wash my hands in a golden basin for 20 chapters. You are not suitable for Astronomy. There are also emotional scenes that you don't know how to write. It's too embarrassing. It doesn't matter whether it's something familiar or unfamiliar. It's not good to be distracted all the time. As a warrior, you're stunned when you see a bitch, and you can't complain. Finally, being a hero is very tiring. Instead of spending a few chapters arguing with Fei Bin and the others, why not just start killing? Do you want to live in this world for the rest of your life? According to what you said before, you won't get married and have children, and you don't have to worry about revenge on your descendants. So what's the point of your and Songshan's talk? Even if you can silence someone with words, you still have to rely on force in the end. People who watch it feel frustrated, and the astronomy makes people feel frustrated. I have never seen anyone who can get angry. I won't watch it anymore. I'm just frustrated and this is my first time to complain.

I found that the protagonist is a talkative person who likes to teach people about science and various psychological activities. After reading more than a dozen chapters, I became a little bit unbearable. At the beginning, I asked Yu Canghai to fight for peace. After more than ten chapters, he then revealed the secrets of the evil-repelling sword manual to the Lin family and his son. This thing can be explained clearly in a few sentences. Then the father and son would interject one sentence and the other one, and they would reveal a few chapters. In the middle, there were a lot of science topics, including thieves and thieves. . . . . .

Assassinating Kublai Khan was struck by lightning, and he also received a destiny. Forget it, I thought it was a good book. Waste of time and money