Eerie Revival: I Build a World with the Eerie

I have read dozens of chapters. In fact, in terms of setting and plot, it is not bad. It is different from the usual weird genres and is relatively innovative. However, the setting is too wordy and there are too many words, and many of them are talking about cars. This is the author's biggest problem, the language is not concise and concise enough. Many settings can be unfolded slowly, instead of rushing to cover large sections of settings and conjectures in one chapter. In addition, the author is very eager to let readers understand all the settings, which is too detailed. In fact, a proper introduction will increase the discussion, instead of requiring the author to explain all aspects, as if he is afraid that there are loopholes in not mentioning them.

I hope to create my own power, create my own APP, open a black market on it to trade things, publish tasks, and if you need anything, you can ask others to help. I do everything myself, and I don't look like a boss at all. .

Let me talk about my thoughts after reading. The author's writing style is good, and he must have practiced it, but the character of the protagonist is not. It would be better if the protagonist was a little more mature and not like a child. The protagonist wanted to take on private work after he just gained the ability. At that time, the protagonist had no ability to protect himself. Ordinary people can kill him with a compound bow, but he dares to go to a developer's villa to eliminate ghosts. And don't you have ten thousand? Do you need to be so anxious to make money? Can't you wait until you are stronger? Although it is to lead the plot, it seems that the protagonist has no social experience. The second thing is that after the protagonist eliminates ghosts for the developer and helps his friend to eliminate ghosts, he sees his daughter and the protagonist feels soft. Does he like his daughter? What's more important is that the protagonist asked him to call him brother. I don't know how old the author is. If you have children, you may offend people by asking your children to call someone else brother. Although I don't know how old you and the developer are, but his daughter is not old, which proves that you are not too different. If you ask his friend's daughter to call you brother, then you are no longer his son? This does not mean lowering one's status. It will instantly make people look down on him. It can be seen at a glance that the protagonist is a little kid with no intentions and is easy to handle. 3. According to the article, the protagonist has the same ability as the dream demon. The dream demon can improve his strength by absorbing fear. Why does the protagonist not improve his strength by absorbing fear, but instead improves his entity by absorbing other dream demons? The article says that destroying the dream demon consumes the energy of his dream, but he can increase his mileage. However, absorbing magic does not increase the energy of the dream, but consumes it. So why does it improve the realm? Why not directly absorb fear to improve the realm? Absorbing fear will not kill others, but it will be just like having a nightmare. The article says that the protagonist is not a bad person, but a good person, similar to a stupid college student. The protagonist does not want to absorb the fear of good people, unlike intimidating good people, so fear is needed to upgrade the dream, and fear is needed to eliminate the dream demon. Where does the energy come from? If it is a bad person, there are so many bad people. There are not many bad people in a county with 100,000 people. And you know who the bad people are and how to find them, so it is very contradictory. If you solve these problems, it can be regarded as a good book

The writing is poor, the language is wordy, and the author lacks the ability to tell stories.

Ever since the anchor entered the weird space, I couldn't stand it anymore. I read dozens of chapters and couldn't stand it anymore. Originally, the pretentious writing in reality was okay, but suddenly I wrote about weird space transformation, creating some kind of heavenly avenue, and thrown out a bunch of settings for more than ten consecutive chapters, which was very annoying. Forget it, the key plot is too blunt. A "Ye Ruoling" came out of nowhere and created a dream space for her similar to that of the protagonist, which allowed her to grow by absorbing strange things. To be honest, at this point, the biggest difference between the protagonist and others is gone (the protagonist follows the world system, so there is no need to worry about being weird and out of control). Of course, according to the author's description, the protagonist is Dao Dao, and this leaf is only equivalent to the way of heaven in her dream world. But the problem is that your "Dao Dao" has no difference at all in your article, but instead dilutes the specialness of the protagonist. It's just like the protagonist in the martial arts world who is on the path to becoming an immortal, and suddenly the protagonist spreads his immortality skills.

Some readers found it boring after reading the beginning, as there were too many settings. This is because there is not much water, so it goes in dryly and is very stagnant. This is actually the author's pot. I don't know how to moisten it before it can be smooth and smooth. In terms of content, it is actually very exciting. It is equivalent to the protagonist quietly creating another real world next door to the real world. You just need to take your time, take in the resources of reality, and first cultivate the "nothing" of real void from the "dream" hanging, which means nothing and nothing exists. From "nothing", the dual concepts of "real and illusion" of reality and illusion are evolved, forming the dual realm of reality and illusion. From "real illusion", "chaos" evolved. Chaos is the source and beginning of all things. This series of actions is equivalent to constantly refining falsehood into reality. The Lord of Heaven is also developed to provide the protagonist with the power of various rules in the real world as advanced resources. The creation of the Burial Sutra is also very surprising, but why is it not called Tang San Burial? This can blatantly harm the three disciples! The recent idea of ​​the Heroic Spirit Summoner is also amazing, because the Heroic Spirit world is a subsidiary world of the protagonist's world, and another chicken farm is formed. What I like most is the author's three views, because everything the protagonist does is to help the people he wants to help when he is growing up. If you are poor, you can be good for yourself; if you are prosperous, you can help the world. When you can help yourself, you can also benefit others. It really matches my outlook. Come on! ! ✨ ("\(●-●) \ / 0\ \ (           )"   \__T__/

First-rate creativity, second-rate plot, third-rate writing style. The author's writing style is too poor and not worthy of such a good subject matter 🙂

The author is still not good enough. In the first ten chapters, only one protagonist appears, which is destined to kill 90% of the readers! I thought I would write about behind-the-scenes stuff, but no characters appear in more than ten chapters. What a surprise!

I can tolerate the rest, but it's too long-winded, saying it back and forth in one sentence.

How can I put it this way? The beginning of the writing is quite good, but as I go to the end, I can't understand it more and more. If you look at it for yourself, it's like a running account, and it's still trying to suppress the fighting power.