Fairy Cage

I felt a little disgusted when I saw the back part, so I said it would be fine if I gave the male protagonist two girls. The girl pretended to be innocent, so that's it. I also gave the male protagonist's future master to lick, literally licking, which was a bit disgusting. It's better to just give his master to the male protagonist to sleep with, and just give him some more sex.

The writing is quite interesting. I read it directly from the first chapter to the latest chapter in one night, and I still have endless thoughts. I would like to record some of my feelings. At the beginning of reading, Three Thousand Worlds, the world captures fragments to enhance the background, the Taoist court on earth and the heavenly world, and heresy. These factors together almost made me think it was a Taoist version of a novel about luck and becoming a god. In the middle of the book, the author also added some things about studying things to gain knowledge, Yangming's philosophy of mind, and dialectical materialism, which are a bit interesting and can be regarded as a feature of this book. After reading the latest chapter, I feel that there are several flaws. First of all, the book's "meat drama" writing is strong but the daily fighting writing is lacking; secondly, the writing is clearly good at the beginning, and both the supporting characters and the protagonists are described with flesh and blood. However, after reading the middle, it gradually becomes a harem novel. I don't know whether it is the author's compromise or a helpless move. Finally, I feel that the plot lacks tension and is a bit dull and run-of-the-mill. After reading, the plate of the novel has not been opened yet. Maybe the author has other foreshadowings yet to be known. Although the harem novel can attract readers for a while, it is difficult to stick to it. One or two beauties are enough, and it is better to be less than too many. Of course, these are just some of my hasty and superficial opinions. It is up to the author whether he sees it or not, and whether he accepts it or not. Finally, full subscription and monthly pass are attached.

Lai Jia: The following opinions are purely personal nonsense. If there is any conflict, you shall prevail It is attractive at the beginning The Tao Tongqi has some brains The Taoist period is barely watchable The Taoist period relies on the defense I won't be able to stand it in the future 1. I couldn't write something weird if I wanted to, and all the scenes of hunting for novels were passed through in one stroke In the later period, there was no weirdness at all, and the practice was obviously so evil, but it still reads like an ordinary fairy 2 , I can't describe the battle of wits, and I have to figure it out to see through the plan The plot after using up the good ideas I designed reminds me of the fear of being dominated by DC's father Wei Yixiao 3. I can't write characters, the same type of characters One appearance All teachers have one character, all ghosts and gods have one character, all dandies have one character, and all harems also have one character Summary: The first three chapters have the appearance of a great god. If I delete the first three chapters, I think I will give up if I can't read the subscribed chapters.

When forming elixirs, do you have to show how smart you are and force yourself to pretend to be a pig and eat the tiger?

As expected, he peeled off the skin from his whole body, and then used it to transform into a transformation technique, a transformation technique. The painted skin doesn't count, you have to use it casually. But what about your own skin? How does the raw skin grow? ?

Just like squeezing out toothpaste, a little at a time, I took it

Throw the soul-holding girl into that world. . .

It's good to read, but it's too short. I finished it in one go. The author will update it soon.

I went there and suddenly found out that Cuckoo had released a new book. I hope Xian Lu can be finished!

It looks good, but the update is too slow. I really like it. .

It's okay, just wait for the update, update, hahahahahahahahahahahahaha!

Clothes! Ask me a question that cost me two cents Just ask a question in two words Move forward 🈚️ This is really a waste!

It's very well written, but it's too late to update. I have to wait until almost 12 o'clock every time.

This book won't be as eunuch as the last one, right?

It's so well written, one chapter is not enough 😍

To give a brief evaluation, the first 300 chapters are of high quality and have a high level of completion in Wanding. However, starting from the promotion to Taoist officials, the plot begins to collapse. This book is said to belong to the weird cultivation of immortality, but in fact it is still an ungrateful practice in traditional cultivation of immortality. The self-created Four-Nine system comes from the Thirty-Six Methods of Tiangang and the Seventy-two Methods of Disha. You can also see the shadow of Shushan Mountain. It should be said that the setting is quite ingenious, and because promotion is more interesting than traditional "upgrading", it is actually more convenient. The characterization, plot description, and setting of the first three hundred chapters are all excellent, even if there are some minor problems. However, starting from the promotion to Taoist officials, many of the author's habitual problems began to be exposed. After Jin Dan, his performance plummeted and the plot continued to collapse. In the end, he had to cut the book. If you open the book carefully, you will find that this book mainly has the following problems: 1. Emphasis is placed on technique rather than Tao, and the technique system also lacks continuity, with a hammer in the east and a mallet in the west. The only thing that can be said to be enlightened is the description in the Taoist Academy about "investigating things to achieve knowledge", which is rarely mentioned at other times. The skills he practices are not very systematic, and even the level setting of the skills is very problematic. 2. Lack of continuity, lack of continuity in various senses, including plot, power, cultivation, etc., Not to mention the collapse of the combat power system. This book changes places almost every volume, almost every major realm, resulting in many settings not being developed at all. And every time I change places, I almost completely abandon the previous accumulation, leaving nothing behind. Every time you change places, you have to start over from the bottom, which is aesthetically exhausting. The differences between different realms and the differences between different statuses are not written. I actually don't understand why the author is so obsessed with writing without leaving any room. This is almost the way of writing Shuangwen in ancient times. Even if you want to change the map, you can war between Tao palaces, open up new Tao realms, find Gangsha, or even the simplest, in the name of opening up a plane. 3. This leads to the third question, why does the author frequently change maps and even change forces. In fact, it's because the author is very bad at writing copies and fighting. Especially in battles, the author writes about either being crushed or being crushed, with the combat power collapsing, and there are very few evenly matched battles. The same goes for dungeons. Almost every dungeon must have extraordinary gains instead of normal gains, which also leads to aesthetic fatigue and is unreasonable. At the same time, in order to go back and make up for it, you can only abuse the owner even more unreasonably. 4. The rhythm is both fast and slow. Let's talk about slow. In the early stage, I really didn't even have time to breathe. It was always refreshing and breaking. But let's talk quick, when I look at the training system, it takes more than 400 chapters to establish the foundation, and the first part of the book is all about Qi training, which is seriously top-heavy. It's normal to not be able to write anymore later on. Either not to connect with the ancient cultivation system, or to advance the foundation building to the third level, or a little further ahead, and then advance the subsequent golden elixir appropriately, or write down the difference between the several changes of the golden elixir and the previous ones. It is normal to use all the routines during Qi training. If the details are not appropriate, it is normal for the mind to be unable to keep up later. If the author wants to go further on the basis of Wanding, I think the main thing is to 1. Make an outline before writing. You can't just write whatever comes to mind. Just for the sake of fun, you can't just think of a good idea today and write it, regardless of whether it is fragmented or not; 2. , Be detailed and have a plan, speed up the progress in the early stage, or just maintain one or two hot spots, put the main ideas and hot spots in the mid-term, and control the rhythm; 3. Learn to write mediocre or plain, and the hot spots are not enough, unless the output is stable like the Eagle, and the volume is large and the management is full. When there is speed and slowness, writing the slowness well and the plainness well will show your skill.

Ninth level. Taoist boy. Fetal breath 1. Literally read and hyphenate - enhance memory 2. Like a wolf and tiger - gain the power of monsters 3. Copper tendons and iron bones - strengthen the muscles and bones 4. Cut hair and cleanse marrow - control blood energy Eighth level. Taoist disciple. Qi training (Part 1) 5. Swallow gold and wear jade - swallow spiritual stones to absorb Spiritual Qi 6. Not immune to water and fire/water and fire do not invade - digestion ability 7. The heart has seven orifices/the heart has nine orifices to enhance the senses 8. Return essence and nourish the brain - take the essence of the whole body to nourish the soul in the brain Seventh grade. Taoist priest. Qi training (Part 2) 9. Dispel the animal nature and condense the Yin spirit 10. Day and night tour - use the moonlight to burn the soul and strengthen the Yin God 11. Chasing the wind day by day - the Yin quality weakens and the Yang quality rises, which can release the Yin God 12. Leaving the ground to fly/flying into the clouds and riding the mist - breaking the inseparable shackles between the Yin God and the physical body Level 6. Taoist. Foundation building 13. Installing a furnace and setting up a cauldron/opening up a purple mansion A kind of lower spiritual root steals power and opens up the Purple Mansion 14. The five internal organs condense the evil spirit and the earth evil spirit condenses 15. The six internal organs refining the gang and the heavenly gang refining 16. The Samadhi True Fire and the Gang Sha merge into one, igniting the three treasures and turning them into "true fire" Fifth level. Taoist. Golden elixir 17. Dan Cheng Long Tiger One uses itself as a cauldron, the Samadhi True Fire Fire burns the evil spirits to refine the elixir 18. Eat wind and drink dew, the spiritual energy will not be exhausted 19. The appearance will remain in full bloom for a moment, and the regeneration power will be strengthened 20. Fetal transformation will reduce the animal nature of the spiritual roots, and return to the innate nature the day after tomorrow Fourth level. Sanxian (human immortal/ghost immortal). Transformation into gods 21. Corpse dissolution Resurrection - reincarnation and seizing the body 22. Golden light from the ground - escape technique 23. Dharma, heaven and earth - strong physical body 24. Disaster kills three corpses - three corpses of spirit and spirit Third grade. True immortal. Harmony 25. Three flowers gathered at the top - three flowers of great medicine, immortal medicine strain 26. Reversal of yin and yang - consumption of immortality, overturning Inverted Yin and Yang, life and death, living dead, flesh and bones 27. Gathering and dispersing at will - the whole body can become a ball of true energy, gathering is the form, spreading is the air flow 28. Youshen Yuqi - in one thought, you can teleport to the world you want in your heart Second grade. Earth Immortal. Mahayana 29. Five Qi Dynasty - the body has five Qi 30. See through the wall - eyes emit light and see into the void 31. Call for wind and rain - bloody storm 32. Move the stars and change the buckets-meal the stars and eat the bucket First grade. Immortal. Overcoming the tribulation 33. Opening up the cave 34. Mediating changes 35. Following the words and the law 36. Feathering and ascension

The gap between this book and the author's writing is so great that it's so serious that it's disappointing. The first volume, the beginning is very good. The flavor begins to change as you go on, and it no longer has the feeling of the weird world of immortal cultivation with all the weird magic practices at the beginning. The Yu Lieyu who was struggling step by step at the bottom is gone. He died in the second volume. In the subsequent plots of the supporting female protagonists and masters, was Yu Bapi directly taken away from him? Resurrected from a dead body? Why did he become Teddy Yu? Write less about women. It's really not suitable for you. Write a good book just to attract those few readers who are obsessed with sperm? Perfect your setting. You don't have to write a long novel, 2 million words. A fast-paced ending is also acceptable. Describe the world of immortality that you, as the author, imagined, and then steadily design the main plot of the plot. How can you achieve such results like now? In my opinion, the most attractive thing about this book is the setting. What you can see is the author's wild imagination, which brings out the strengths of this book. It's not too late to adjust the direction now, so don't go down the same old path as this book.

It is an underrated novel. The author is excellent in the early and middle stages. It is a pity that the female character wants to write the characteristics of a female character, but once she gets involved with the male protagonist, she becomes brainless, and there are too many unnecessary ones. Sometimes it feels too good, but compared with those brainless systems around (those novels will brainlessly upgrade and gain experience), the novel is much better. You should be ranked in the top 10

I feel like I've been writing this routine for a long time. Don't always just join a force, and then just attack this force. It has been causing trouble to the Immortal Palace for so long, and then it enters again, and then it is said that the boss of the Immortal Palace ran away with his sword. Then why did you write this paragraph? Are you just giving benefits to the protagonist? It's not necessary. Just keep the Immortal-Destroying Sword and give the protagonist some protection. That's okay, just think about it. Heishuizi in the small town ran away and went to Qiangong to find that Qiangong's direct line was gone, and there was only one unreliable Zizhuzi. Heishuizi, who was secretly running away, was unexpectedly brought to the department. As a result, he did not occupy the second senior brother's team and stood in the first senior brother's team. Then the eldest brother is out of position and irresponsible. In the end, Zi Zhuzi's elixir became a high-grade one, and he immediately threw out a bunch of high-grade elixirs from Taoting, implying that he could not protect the protagonist. Then ran to the Disaster Domain. Here it is again, are you winding up? Can't you take a break?

Peach Blossom Fan, Sorrow for the South of the Yangtze River I once saw the orioles in the Jade Palace of Jinling crow at dawn, and the flowers on the Qinhuai Waterside Pavilion bloomed early, but who knew they would fade away easily! Watching him build a Zhulou, watching him banquet guests, watching his building collapse! I once slept in this mossy and green tile pile, watching the rise and fall of fifty years. That Wuyi Lane is not named Wang, the ghosts of Mochou Lake cry at night, and the owls perch on the Phoenix Terrace. The dream of a broken mountain is the most real. It's hard to lose the old environment. Don't believe this map revision! Make up a set of "Sorrow for the South of the Yangtze River" and sing it until you grow old.​

Ninth Grade·Taoist·Fetal Breath Literacy and hyphenation Like a wolf and a tiger Copper skin and iron bones Chopping hair and washing marrow Eighth Grade·Taoist disciple·Refining Qi Swallowing gold and wearing jade Do not avoid fire/water Fire does not invade The heart has seven orifices/the heart has nine orifices Returning energy and replenishing the brain Seventh Grade·Taoist·Refining Qi Wandering day and night Driving things to the secluded place Chasing the sun and chasing the wind Leaving the ground and soaring into the sky/flying into the clouds and riding the fog Level 6·Taoist·Building the Foundation Setting up a furnace and setting up a tripod/opening up a purple mansion Condensation of the five internal organs Refining the six internal organs Samadhi True Fire Level 5·Taoist·Building the Alchemy Elixirs becoming dragons and tigers Food Wind Dew Drink Appearance will last forever Fourth level • Loose Immortal Third level • True Immortal Second level • Land Immortal First level • Golden Immortal Escape and ascend

What I saw on Douyin

This book is a typical example of a high start and a low start. It has a stunning beginning and gradually becomes a routine practice. Until the Black Water Taoist kills the lizard and goes to the county town, it becomes more and more difficult. Especially after returning to the county town, the writing about returning to the family to pretend to be very blunt and incomprehensible. I hope the author can clarify his thinking and don't simply add up the word count, otherwise the book will be ruined.

After leaving Blackwater Town, it was all the way to Long Aotian, pretending to... Slap in the face... Having sex everywhere, pulling out... Ruthless. The most outrageous thing is that I said before that the master is so important. From now on, the family property must be left to the apprentice, so respect it.... The second part is that I completed XOXO with the master through the alcohol bug, and I wrote it as if I didn't know anything. There was a lot of fire all the way, and after the pretense, it was bumpy all the way and then slapped in the face, and then I found a female nun, and then it kept looping, I was tired of watching it, and I kept nesting dolls Except for the plot in Blackwater Town, which was good, the rest of it felt like it was written by a different person, almost like an assembly line, and it kept nesting dolls, Long Aotian. Also, I was seriously discussing the plot earlier and said that the plot of Blackwater Town was very interesting, but later it was like a different character was replaced,

Damn, why are you so beautiful?

The harem novel is so disgusting and incomprehensible. I thought it was as good as the previous one, so I gave it a bad review.

It looks good in the early stage, but after the novice village, it's garbage

Immortal cage? Fairy prostitution, pretending to slap the sleeping woman in the face, what kind of thing is written in Blackwater Town?

Just change your life and call it "Xian Pao". It's quite speechless. It's a woman who can't escape 😅