Tokyo's Number One Heartthrob

A full order has been made, and the batch will be issued. There are not many good books in the light novel system about scumbag men, and this one is barely among them. Advantages: The author's writing is very good, and he has collected all the basic knowledge related to the profession; the refreshing feeling of upgrading and crushing the system flow is also well reflected; the basic character design of the heroine is also clear. One of the few works in this series to survive subscription. Disadvantages: I feel that the author has limited experience and limited knowledge of how to deal with emotions. Basically, all the favorability comes from Mu Qiang and Fenyan, and all problems are solved by locking the favorability. These two questions triggered a series of questions in the author's subsequent emotional drama. The author's initial design of the heroine is quite clear, just 12345 plus half a 6. No. 1: Taimei + was bullied + clean and tidy, personality: strong dependence, which is more consistent with the setting experience, and is the only one who has not collapsed so far. No. 2: Teacher, this problem has arisen. For a character who can withstand the pressure of her parents and choose a career she likes, and resolutely resigns for what she loves, it is normal for a heroine to not accept sharing, but to not accept sharing makes her miserable. It is abnormal to be unable to let go. It is unreal for a strong and independent woman to not be able to lick a wound clean. It is even said that she just can't let go of the male protagonist. Then her way of handling it seems too weak and incompetent, and it is seriously inconsistent with the experience setting. No. 3: Figure skating genius + world champion. The most basic thing for a person to be a world champion is to refuse to admit defeat and have strong initiative. The proactive pursuit of the male protagonist in the front is very consistent with this setting. He boldly pursues bold love, but what about behind? He is also a self-pitying love brain, and his active pursuit turns into active concession. He cannot understand how such a character can strive to be the best in the world. No. 4: The daughter of a chaebol + a bird in a cage + a big woman. There are not many scenes. Being able to accept the position of a big woman is consistent with the setting of a chaebol woman. It is okay for the kendo gym to take the initiative to declare status, but it is not a brainer to accept that the male protagonist kisses other female protagonists immediately after declaring his status. It belongs to him and he allows the male protagonist to slap her in the face just after setting up the score. The previous scenes are all in vain. The bird in the cage is the reason why the male protagonist can abduct No. 4. The story of the bird in the cage is written, but the character of the bird in the cage is not written. In the entire No. 4, The temperament, skills, and aura that a chaebol's daughter + a caged sparrow + a big woman should have are completely gone, leaving only a noble love brain. No. 5: Agent + Best Friend No. 2, Well, theoretically she should be the female character who is purely attracted by the protagonist's talent. However, every heroine has played this trick to death, so she has become a supplement, and can only serve as a female best friend to No. 2 And herself. Ji Tiandu came to get the role, and the emotional line has not been fully developed. I can only say that the Japanese entertainment industry is so clean, and there is still the existence of the White Lotus agent. In fact, the author can expand on the complexity of the agent circle, and it feels that it can better reflect No. 5'S ability and love for the male protagonist. No. 6: Just appeared on the scene, bitch+tea positioning, just plan to go to the male protagonist's office to break the big defense. The male protagonist's popularity is not his own popularity. The resources of a large agency are incomparable with those of a small agency. Making money in the agency does not mean that he can develop well in the past. If he plans to borrow the light, will he not be afraid of being shone in the shadow? I suggest the author reconsider this part of the plot. At least the transfer of No. 6 To the agency must be seen more reasonably. Summary: Locking the favorability factor is used to simplify emotional dramas. It does not require a process, only results, and is used as a prerequisite. When writing other plots, you need to unfold the emotional drama, and then write the detailed twists and turns. However, once you unfold the favorability factor, it is still locked. How do you write your twists and turns? It is completely impossible to deduce the character and experience of the protagonist, and can only distort the basic character design and write a bunch of love brains, love brains, and love brains. Suggestion: Re-divide the favorability improvement value of each strategy and implement the strategies in stages. It is difficult to achieve the full value and lock it in at the beginning. It is not easy to spoil the plot. The subsequent plot can only be realized by creating a new female protagonist. It is easy for the female protagonist to be homogenized + multiple conflicts are difficult to control. Redefine the needs of each female character, No. 1 Is dependence, No. 2 Is motherhood, No. 3 Is heartbeat, No. 4 Is freedom, No. 5 Is appreciation, and No. 6 Is greed. Let the male protagonist provide different emotional values ​​​​to the female protagonists to achieve the diversity of characters. Reorganize the male protagonist's character, set the main tone, and add the hardships in life, add weaknesses to the male protagonist, add real-life value to each female protagonist, support each other, overcome difficulties, and let the male protagonist save some blood and tears to complete the final strategy. One inch of harem means one inch of blood, one foot of white silk and one foot of heart. Why open a harem without exchanging lives? I guess this book is in need of an overhaul. I look forward to the author's next book.

Can you lift me up?

Koyuki

Wife

I chased the book all the way without vomiting or feeling unhappy.        ，， But what happens next? Author, go and take a look for yourself, what have you written?                                                 From the time Ichinose became famous for his photos to the time when Ichinose participated in the beauty pageant, how long have you been involved in it?                                                                                       all all all all are all in the family of si fengyuan, but how much can be written about this branch line? Have you ever written?        ，，""        ，，？ Now the protagonist feels like a frog in a well, who can only hang around a few women. Other authors are also good at it, but in the development of the plot, you are developing the plot in water.        ，，，

I haven't watched it for a long time. I watched the Kyudo Tournament and stayed with it until now, and then I just finished the rest of it. After watching it for a while, it became more and more strange. I think the portrayal of the female protagonists is basically okay, except for Ninomiya, which I can't understand. I just felt that the plot of her pulling Igarashi for the male protagonist was a bit tough. Now the biggest problem for me is the male protagonist. I thought it was good before because of the continuity of good memories, taking the heroine to various places. Now that we have brought the heroine together, it is either the Shura field or embarrassing. The most important thing is that I feel that the image of the male protagonist is a bit broken. I feel like a very responsible adult before, but now I feel very uncomfortable. I feel like I am useless except for the system, and I feel like I am just pursuing beauty. The persistence and hard work I put into getting into Tokyo University, and my clear understanding of life, feel like I have been completely buried. Didn't I say it before, this is a tool to create beautiful memories between two people. It can only be said that it is a pity that the peak ends at the Kyudo Conference.

I don't feel as affectionate as Ikebukuro Daiichi

I haven't watched much since I got to the competition. It's a bit boring and not interesting. I don't know why.

This is the most responsible male protagonist I have ever seen. If you want to have a harem, be open-minded. Just let yourself become a better person so that others don't leave you. It doesn't matter if you don't want to accept separation. The male protagonists in other novels are nothing but bitches and bitches. I don't have the ability to be a good heroine, so I try my best to be good. It's even funnier if you can't accept it. No matter where or in any dynasty, strong people have a lot of resources, regardless of gender. I will accept a lot of prestige when writing about strong women, as long as I don't write about women and don't abuse myself. Strong people regardless of gender

I feel that the recent plot can be said to be that the author has played a good hand to pieces. The most attractive dating tasks and emotional lines at the beginning have basically disappeared, replaced by endless office career development, and it does not promote the emotional development of the protagonist and Runa Chizuru (at least it is too slow, I feel like there is nothing). In order to make up for the lack of emotional scenes, the author desperately added Ichinose's scenes. What are the consequences of doing this? Everyday life is endless, and too much description will inevitably lead to too much repetition, making readers gradually get tired of, or even disgusted with, the image of Ichinose. I feel that the author has completely failed to understand what readers want to read, or what the advantages of his book are. What readers want to see is the active interaction between the protagonist and different heroines, which leads to a series of developments in different fields and different daily lives, rather than catching Ichinose to death as a sheep or the piano office. This is not entertainment! At least we didn't write this book to this point because of this. If you really don't know how to write it, then please honestly finish the emotional lines of the existing heroines. Even if it is a bit reluctant in the end, we can accept it. It is better than the current procrastination and unfinished situation.