Coaching in Tokyo

I can't stand the male protagonist's hard work, and I don't feel guilty at all when I accept Suzune's rescue. The girl's dedication is just a matter of men and women. As an adult and a teacher, you should guide her well, whether it is forward or backward, instead of taking the initiative to control the relationship in an ambiguous way and being used to the other party. Originally, love with unequal status is a matter of deep thinking. In the original setting, I think there is still something that can be explored: the high and low of the savior and the saved can actually correspond to the person who teaches and the person who seeks knowledge. The emphasis on spiritual communication is the core of this pair of CPs. It is much better to look and feel than the current forced setting where the woman is desperate for the so-called love and the man is forced to eat soft rice.

The taste of this book is very suitable to my taste, and in my opinion, there is no difference between the writing style and details of the popular Japanese love books. It can be compared with "Seiyuu" and "Daily Love". It is completely high-quality, and there is hope that it can even be ordered for thousands of people. But this is only based on the taste of this book. So why can't it become a big hit? In my opinion, the structure, characters, and main line of a book are the factors that determine the lower limit of the book, while the writing style and whether it can create the kind of flavor are the factors that determine whether the book can reach a higher level. As far as this book is concerned, even though I am very resistant and a writer, I still struggled a lot after seeing the setting at the beginning. Then I continued to read, and then I got the feeling. 1. In terms of settings, the protagonist's starting identity is that of a dying person with a negative mentality. I think this is not very pleasing. The first female character who appears in this book is the protagonist's bad friend, which is also an unflattering point. This point is actually nothing in my opinion, but if it wants to attract more readers, it may be insufficient. 2. The eldest lady suddenly appears and cures the protagonist's disease. It feels like a deus ex machina and gives people the impression that the protagonist is useless. For those who intend to attract more readers, this will have a certain impact on readers who read through vicarious reading. 3. In general, if the author can carefully polish the characters, main line, plot, etc., He can definitely reach a higher level based on the author's writing power. The above are some of my current thoughts. I just saw the author saying that the book will be completed in September or October. This is just my personal feeling and does not represent others. I hope it can help the author. Really looking forward to the rest of this book, and the author's next book. Writing about monsters and monsters is also good, but it doesn't seem to be mainstream at the beginning. Personally, of course I hope that the author will continue writing about Niku's love story next time, because I think the author's story of Niku's romance is really touching and has the potential to become a hit.

Sayuri can't be said to have clearly stated that she likes the protagonist from the beginning to now, but she can always joke about "getting married". In my opinion, her favorability is not low. No matter how careless a person is, she will not make such a joke easily. If she later let the relationship take its course and fell in love with Lily, I wouldn't say anything. Even if they were ambiguous but ended up being drunk and crossing the line, it wouldn't matter. But it's very abrupt here. I didn't expect it to be so drunk. It crossed the line and turned into a lily line. Sayuri was originally in a one-sided situation of being liked. This matter had nothing to do with gender. It was just a person being fucked while drunk, which was quite unpleasant. I was very happy when I first read this novel. To me, it didn't have any bad points, and the writing was good, but this place really felt like a failure.

Being drunk and forcibly having sex is really poisonous. Don't comment after reading Chapter 111. This is clearly a patch made by the author to save it, because before this plot, there was not even the slightest hint that Sayuri was a lesbian. If you find it, I lose. Then in the so-called memory plot of Chapter 111, Sayuri suddenly becomes a true Lily, and the evaluation of the people around her suddenly becomes that she is closer to girls, haha. Then let's analyze the rationality of this plot. A teacher had a relationship with a female student whom he taught before, and the female student was also related to the underworld. If Sayuri's career as a teacher was exposed, it would basically be ruined. Since the lesbian likes Sayuri from the bottom of her heart, she should take this into consideration. She has been struggling in society for some years. Wouldn't she be dominated by her lower body without even considering this kind of thing? I wrote this in the middle of the night. The author had better find the audience clearly. The writing style of this book is okay, and the emotions are quite delicate. As a result, after I put it on the shelves and subscribed, I was suddenly hit in the face by a large section of Lily, which even took up several chapters. I still couldn't stand the scrutiny. I always felt like I had been cheated of my money, alas.

Damn author, why don't you accept Sayuri and Mayama! If you don't accept it, I'll feel good writing it myself

Originally, the writing style was quite pleasant, but something went wrong after the real mountain plot. Not to mention her fascination with Sayuri, her introduction of the heroine to sing in an underground bar was a big problem. The bigger problem was that the protagonist actually thought it was okay. I don't know if the author has some fantasy about black people or if they have low experience and don't understand the impact of the environment on people. Time will change everything. They will be assimilated into the colorful world without forcing them.

The management asked me to comment. I don't know how to comment. I'll perform a hip-hop dance for you. ጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈጿ ኈ ቼ ዽ ጿ ኈ Thank you all

Teacher Takino in the Rain

Translate it into Japanese, refine it, delete it, and submit it to Nikkei Bunko to try. Maybe it will become popular? (Funny)

I remember there was news some time ago. The man and the woman made an agreement that the man would pay for all the expenses while the woman was studying. The woman would marry the man after graduation. However, the woman regretted it after graduation and could not pay back the money. There was no way to say that the man paid voluntarily, and the law would not recognize this agreement. Although I don't know if this is what it means, when I look at the male protagonist, I always have a sense of déjà vu as the female protagonist in the news.