Looking Forward to Another World

Really, I didn't want to say it at first. I'm not happy to say it. I'm not scolding it. It's just a complaint from a book fan who has been following Luo Qing for so long This book, let alone the aggrieved people mentioned before, is normal to be a grandson before you have no strength, but since you become a sword master, there are really a lot of plots that reduce your wits. The description of how strong the strength is, the stronger the sense of disobedience! What is the latest chapter about? I said before that I was scared to death. This chapter makes me think that tying up a maid is nothing. It also talks about how awesome that follower is. Even Zhenguan Sword Master can't see through it. He is hiding something. Please, have you ever seen a 17-year-old Sword Master? Can this kind of comparison be made? Can it be inferred using common sense? Why are you so awesome and still following this idiot who only knows how to play with her family's territory? ! Really, I have never read a book and felt more and more frustrated as I read it. It's okay if you want to advance the plot, but consider the identity of the villain. Marquis, nephew of the sword master, who can risk everything for a woman, I don't think so. I know how to describe it. The protagonist is now like a turtle. He can stomp on all cats and dogs. He is the most powerful warrior in the mainland and the youngest swordsman in history... It's like telling a joke Really, I feel like I can't read it. I'm afraid of internal injuries if I do it...

Recording poison spots, Chapter 122, the heroine's brother has a video of her sisters taking a bath, and there seems to be a video of sleeping and changing clothes. Although I don't know why a veteran author suddenly had a headache and stepped into such a big poison pit, but this operation is indeed disgusting to me. Ruqing, you make me spend money to watch the original version like a clown.

Generally speaking, I don't have a problem with the author wanting to make a story too watery, as long as it's not too watery and the plot is interesting. I really couldn't stand it when I saw Chapter 573. There were only two moves in the whole chapter, nearly a thousand words were used to calculate the combat power conversion level, and another half chapter was used to introduce the life strength and sword skills of the opponent. It seems that this enemy is so important in the future that it needs to be described carefully, but in the end the enemy is gone in the next chapter. There are many such miscellaneous fish in the main world. When the protagonist's combat power is overwhelmed, do you still have to spend a lot of time describing a miscellaneous fish that will disappear in the next chapter? Otherwise, it is just an inexplicable introduction to the world view and the relationship between certain nobles, but this part has no connection with the subsequent plot. If you encounter this situation often, you will know that the chapter has been updated. At a glance, you will know that the author is in trouble again in this paragraph and is trying to make up the number of words in the chapter. In many cases, the dialogue between characters in a chapter does not exceed ten sentences. It is full of narration-style explanations, combat power conversions, introductions to Zaoyu's skills and equipment, rhetorical questions and self-answers that can make a sentence longer. I only feel that 40% of these two million words are of this low-level kind. I can feel that the author is deliberately being dumb and doesn't care at all, and he doesn't even care whether the narratives are interesting or not. It feels like what I spent money to read was not a book by my favorite author, but mostly hydrology that was nutritious and uninteresting. Every day I look forward to the day when he can pick up his previous writing style, write interesting paragraphs, interesting character interactions, and portray the characters in the comic as well as the original, instead of meaningless narration. This way of writing can produce more words, allowing the author to update stably with less effort. But what is all this written about? A half-good, half-bad finished product? In short, I can't stand it anymore. There is no need to spend money on this book. Other comics or original authors are more worthy of my support. I have deleted the book from my bookshelf. The above is just my personal opinion.

Writing originality is not a problem in itself. After all, there are many fantasy novels that are very popular, so this is not a dead end. So what's your problem? Why do they say you can't do it? Personally, the problem lies in the character description. Too many characters Not prioritized Names are convoluted (It is not a problem for Western Fantasy to use foreign names, but at least use commonly used ones? These seem to be made up, no one can remember them) Names are easy to mix up (many names have homophones or even the same word, which is easy to mix up) Insufficient description of characters, each character generally only has one or two attribute settings, and nothing else. Take the light novel as an example, you wrote Date A Live. Everyone knows the crazy three among them. One and Ten also have their highlight moments. The fourth is the group favorite, and the fifth is the younger sister. What about the others? How many impressions do you have of those who almost appeared and then exited? Unfortunately, the original characters you wrote are at most level four or five, and most of them are at the "other" level, which is not deep enough and makes people reluctant to memorize them. But it will bubble up occasionally, and if you don't remember it, you will be confused. These issues are covered up when writing fan fiction. After all, even if your description is not enough, readers can complete it through the original text. But when writing original works, this is a fatal problem. Personally, it looks messy and tired. I don't know whether this is because you are not capable of writing characters well or because you are not aware of it and are still using the writing style of a fan to write original works. But the final result is that the story is well written but the person is not well written, and the fandom is ruined by the original work. As for the problems of water and rhythm, I think they exist but not big. Readers have the means to solve these problems themselves. But there is nothing we can do about the character issue.

This book is really bad. To be honest, I didn't think much about some of the character introductions, setting explanations, and background introductions. But when I introduced it, I went back and forth to write the things I explained. Several paragraphs of introduction can actually be done in one sentence. The plot is dragging. As far as I can see the protagonist and another sword master duel, I have written about 10 chapters, and 5 of them are parallel imports. It's not that I haven't read the author's previous books. "The Summoner of Miracles" is the first book I've read by the author. I feel pretty good. At least the plot arrangements of the various animations are reasonable, and there's nothing strange about the delay in the introduction for so long. I've also read a little bit of the last two books, both of which are more flattering. I thought it would be better if the author re-wrote the manga. Although the plot was passable, the various characterizations were not as detailed as in "The Summoner of Miracles". It felt more like it was just to make money, and it felt like it was just passing by. In Chapter 417, the protagonist's sword was given the wrong name, and it has not been changed. It makes people feel that the author's attitude towards this book is very casual. After all, the hot reviews of that sword are in the name of the sword.        ，，，，，，， It is normal to be criticized by many people. It is even more normal to be scolded. I also scolded me. The watery plot is just to cope with it, but I wrote the key locations wrong, and some book reviews pointed out that there were problems, but did not change them. This is really a matter of attitude.

Ru Qing's books have never been the kind of high-octane, adrenaline-filled books that are hard to agree on. Each character in Ru Qing's works has some shadow of the previous work, but can be regarded as a separate individual. But there is only one thing. Every character in Ru Qing's works has some shadows. They are all normal people. They will seek justice when their friends are bullied, they will help the weak when they can, and they like to live their lives quietly without intending to target anyone. Of course, there are also big and small high-profile scenes, such as saving the big brother at the beginning! If you like those high-burning games from the beginning to the end, I think you can avoid that. The people in Ruqing's works are all normal people, not murderers.

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As the title says, it's so special that the water can no longer be described with water. It can only be described as sea. It seems that I can only continue to raise it for another year and then come back to check.

It seems that the watershed in this book is before and after Demon Slayer. Before entering Demon Slayer, I really thought this book was very good and I kept reading it. But the content of After Demon Slayer is about heaven and earth, and the number of words is the same as the content. I can only say that I am quite disappointed. It seems to be updated three times a day but the actual number of words is only one update.

I like the author's writing style very much. The previous chapters made me feel like I couldn't stop reading, and I still couldn't finish reading it. But these recent chapters have made me feel a little uncomfortable. The first point is the male protagonist's combat power. It was a bit too weak. Personally, I feel that Li Ge has always impressed me with his combat power. Xiang, after all, can compete with the Sword Master, and he should be able to win in a fight. After all, he is immune to various abnormal conditions, and has amplification, and with healing spells and various magics, a local Sword Master without magic should not be able to defeat the protagonist, let alone a regular swordsman. The second point is the issue of the heroine being attacked. The heroine is positioned as a national nuclear weapon. She dares to take action against nuclear weapons and even does what everyone knows. This is really unreasonable. If the two parties get married, it will not be of any benefit to the king. But what if the heroine destroys Basolo or leaves in anger? No matter what the heroine does, there is a risk of problems with her own nuclear weapons. It is completely impossible to allow it. The most normal solution should be to dare to take action. The king will directly make Basolo disappear. The heroine does not even need to take action. This plot is a bit too unreasonable. I hope Ruqing can push the plot to be more reasonable. I like your novel very much. Come on, I want to watch the anime plot later.

Gaining knowledge, it turns out that upgrading is just for newbies. Everyone who has been exposed to online games knows that leveling up has always been done by skipping levels and monsters, and even if it doesn't work, it's still leveling up at the same level. And this book is actually written by a newbie and says that it can improve his skills. I want to ask the protagonist how fast he can kill these passerby swordsmen. What can I learn from this situation? Since Demon Slayer until now, I have been saying that I want to travel, so why are you playing in the mud and sand in the kingdom without setting off? If you want the plot to be delayed, just say so. All I can say is that I was completely disappointed, deleted the book and ran away.

I have one thing to say, it's too fluent, there are too many explanations for the supporting characters and settings, most of the follow-up is only three-fifths of the explanation, so be careful when entering into a battle that requires more than ten chapters. If you have enough coins.

After catching up with the latest chapter, I can only say that if I didn't write Demon Slayer, I think this book is better. Demon Slayer is not flattering. Of course, I also think it is good in the final duel. I simply deleted Demon Slayer into a new sword and practiced a new breathing method. I would get full marks with Duel.

Comments on the reading experience of the 200 chapters of this work (only my personal opinion) Compared with the previous fan novels, the story development routine of this work is more inclined to "Miracle Summoner", and the character's power system has grown rapidly (taking into account that the later author may write about the world of type moon) The upper limit of power should be quite high. With the three works of "Straight to Death", "Miracle Summoner" and "Omni Fantasy", they lack some sense of substitution and some depth when entering the anime world as copies. The character does not have the same style as in previous works. The character's arrival is not integrated into the background of the anime world, and is more directly used as a source of power. Since I've only written about two anime worlds, that's about it for now. The anime world should run through the story line of Ru Qing's writing. The world of Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba is not described too much. From a personal reading sense, it is more like a popular animation work being written to fulfill part of the readers' expectations. Although this game does not have the brainless coolness of a single blow, it is not far behind, and the improvement in strength is quite rapid. The enemy also displays a crushing style of play. If you love the book "Straight to Death", then you can lower your expectations appropriately for this book. From the current point of view, as for the anime world, the author's protagonist has not been integrated into the anime world. It is just a further enhancement of the power system and a pure feeling of playing a copy of the game. But if you prefer the style of "Miracle Summoner", then this book can raise your expectations. Considering that this is Luo Qing's first novel to return to fan fiction since her original novel, I still have great expectations. I hope Luo Qing can regain her form as soon as possible. As for the current plot development of the main world's story, it currently only revolves around the mysterious organization that assassinates the protagonist as the boss of the world line, and the reader has only passed two worlds and is close to the peak of the current main world's force value. I am worried about this. So I am curious whether there will be any major changes to the main plot after this work reaches chapter 350. Because from the previous fan works, the main world is in a state of development with the anime world as the core. The power system and world framework are relatively complete. In addition, the story is familiar to the two-dimensional companions, which will also bless a greater sense of reading anticipation for future development. Even if the missions in the main world are not very exciting, there is no story. For example, in the book "Straight to Death", the main god space does not have too many story descriptions, but the characters have a profound integration with the animation world and the bonds between the characters (not that the heroine did it for nothing) , at least it solves the character-related world, plus the bonus brought by entering the character background of the world) The original main storyline of this work is indeed worrying, and the sense of separation from the anime world is relatively serious. It is recommended that friends who support this work treat the first anime world "Looking for Encounters in the Dungeon" as the main world, and the impression will be much better. According to the development and timeline of this anime world, plus this anime has been updated for several years, the story line is also very long. If Luo Qing continues to write in depth, the look and feel of the work will still be good.

Luo Qing, stick to your own pace, I will support you

I can't read it, I'll be hurt internally if I read it again. Is the author male or female?

It feels right, it feels like a girl's summons

I would like to call you Water Goddess Aqua! ! !

In this current state, I cannot go to the slime world even once.

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Really don't always think about originality, it's better to return to your original intention. Think about how much information you have researched in order to write a variety comic? Are these things wasted if not used? Animation fans are the king, write well and don't let down your original intention. I didn't support this book much before. I definitely support it.

It is difficult for many fan authors to excel in original writing. Authors are also in this strange circle, but don't be too discouraged. After all, there are many fan authors who cannot write well.

Of the author's six books, I've read the early ones for Girls, the late stages of Fantasy and Summoner, and the middle stages of Demon King. It is said that the author's peak is to die directly. I think so myself. I hope the author will achieve greater success with this book.

I think what people say about original garbage is that it's just too slow. You can write many chapters about one thing, and the rhythm is a bit disgusting.

Do you guys have any recommendations for better two-dimensional comic novels? Luo Qing's writing has been a bit stretchy lately, I plan to take care of it for a while and then come back.

Well, after reading the wrong volume, I thought that the main world was also a fan world. After reading a few pictures, I realized that it was original. At present, the main world template is too old, with swords and magic, eldest ladies, and family fights. You will know the situation without reading the later ones. I can only say that I will wait and see for now, but there are so many settings in the main world. If I skip the volume, I am really afraid that the protagonist will change too much and I will not be able to read it. Alas...

Ye Qinghui, this author is good at everything, but it's easy to be overwhelmed by building your own worldview. It's better to write a comprehensive comic. Welcome back to the fandom area.

I can't stand it any longer. Now I'm back to the land where I made a mistake and directly sealed my power to level 5. I find an excuse to pretend to be a pig and play house with a group of people and then play hard. The protagonist is passive in everything he does, and never takes the initiative to make calculations. He goes all the way recklessly, and it is clear that his strength is already in place, but he does not take the initiative and attacks passively. He is plotted in various ways. However, some of the calculations are really stupid and disgusting. His combat power is also deliberately suppressed. He is stuck at level 7 for many chapters. The supporting characters in the main world are also disgusting. Among them, the princess is the most useless. As a follower, her personality is too soft. She keeps saying she feels guilty, burdened, and sorry, but in the end she still does the same shameless things. Her words and deeds are inconsistent. Afterwards, the conversation with the protagonist is always a review and summary. I feel guilty, and then my head is touched, and I seriously suspect that my head will be touched bald. There is no sign of regret or change in my actual behavior, even if I have the strength. I don't know why I create such a disgusting image, but the main plot of the main world is the princess. The most speechless thing is that it's over 2 million words long. The most intimate thing the protagonist does on his own initiative is just holding hands. He is ambiguous as a girl. They both sleep in the same bed and do nothing. If this were placed in some games, it would be awkward to see that the main character is dead and has not run away.

In this way, Luo Qing, stop thinking about your original palace-fighting plot in the main world that stretches your hips to the extreme. It's embarrassing and poisonous. You've already bought a few originals, haven't you realized it yet? ! ! ! The plot of the original world is really too ridiculous. The plot of Aisi versus the owner of the 37th floor can be said to be a logical disorder. The plot of the original world is really bad in terms of writing style, plot rhythm, plot layout, formal logic, plot design and so on. It is so bad that you can't watch it without thinking. Luo Qing, you have written several original books, don't you think it's worth it? ! Political conspiracies, power struggles, etc. Require weighing the pros and cons, careful consideration, ambush, pulling lines, layout, etc. Are not what you are good at at all, and you cannot write at all. If you were really good at originality, you would not come back and continue writing comics, and the reputation of those few books would not have plummeted. When writing fan comics, you should write fan comics and stop talking about your originality. At this stage, your writing power, thinking, and knowledge do not support you to write such originality at all. If you really want to practice, open a separate book and write an original short story of about 300,000 words. Write what you want to write there, practice there, and write it there when you have ideas and inspiration. Anyway, it is to practice writing. I don't care about perfect attendance, just write some when you have inspiration and ideas. There is no need to practice with the novel you are currently working on. If you continue to experiment with this one, you will have to read this one. It will disgust you and us readers. That book is written and we readers can also read it and give you some suggestions and opinions. Make money and practice writing without delay. We readers will not be criticized. You also wrote what you wanted to write. My suggestion for the current plot of the main world of your book is to directly remove the protagonist from the vortex of conspiracy and disputes, and directly hide behind the scenes anonymously. The protagonist finds a reason to go out to practice on his own, increase his strength, or fake death and escape outside the vortex, etc. When you have the strength, use hard power to crush and take revenge; Practice strength in other worlds, develop strength, practice and travel in the main world while looking for opportunities for revenge and the mastermind behind the scenes, directly crush them with strength, fight when you find an opportunity, and then get up and go to other worlds to practice. During the journey in the main world, you will get to know some people and find your inner desires. Some small plots or side plots will occur during them to expand your small team. You can also design some adventure plots in the main world, explore certain dangerous places, discover the truth of the main world and the source of the Rubik's Cube, meet some partners to find your own direction, and slowly explore the plot in the form of a road movie. You can also use the Rubik's Cube to bring friends who are willing to follow you to this world to form a team, family, and adventure together. Just like your "Girl's Call", you can also dig deeper into the main world. You can write something original in this book if you want the truth, but intrigue plots are really not for you. Don't write it. Just write an original adventure story to explore the customs of the main world and the reasons for your time travel. Do it in the form of a road movie, just like "Blessings to a Beautiful World". It is definitely better than adding all kinds of intrigues and political struggles. Most of the fans of your novels are fans of animation and games. Not many people who like to read these like your childish intrigues and political power struggles. Really, you should really think about the plot and connection issues of the main world. Really stop thinking about your extremely poisonous original palace fight plot, I beg you.

I've read ten chapters, and I wouldn't say it's boring, but it's really boring, and it's a pity to abandon it if it's tasteless.