The Ice-Harvesting Clan of the Ninja World

The author probably isn't a full-time writer, right? Otherwise, how would they survive without making money? With their increasingly stream-of-consciousness writing style, it's no wonder they're getting laid off... The style of the beginning of *Red Sands* was quite good, a normal shonen manga fanfiction light novel... I don't know why it started to feel rambling and verbose...

The writing style is too varied; it's engaging but tiring to read. If it were a physical book, I would happily brew some tea and savor it slowly on a weekend afternoon. But on my phone, I prefer to read some light and easy text quickly.

Having read around chapter 200, I have some thoughts I'd like to share with the author. First, let's be clear: author, you have a strong understanding of the Naruto world and your own unique ideas. Having ideas isn't a bad thing; authors with ideas can create something different. However… I need to remind you of something: you're writing Naruto fanfiction!

It's been a long time since I've been able to pick it up again. The author has his own understanding of the Naruto system and can barely make it coherent. But this thing also contains personal opinions, and some of the author's worldviews... Moreover, regardless of the protagonist's background, he genuinely places himself in the position of a ruler, which makes me, a mere commoner, very uncomfortable. So that's how it is.

I glanced at it, and stopped reading around chapter 200. It's not that the book itself is bad, but there's one plot point I can't accept: the cousin is pursuing Uchiha Mikoto, and Mikoto, for the sake of her clan, is about to agree. The protagonist supports and encourages her. Realistically, their actions are understandable, but what's the point of writing this plot?

I especially love the author's *Red Sands*. It doesn't rely on mindless wish-fulfillment, and the plot, along with the author's reflections and interpretations of the Naruto world's background and core themes, shows originality. Kishimoto doesn't know anything about Naruto. I just discovered he's started a new book. Keep it up!

There's so much garbage in Naruto fanfiction these days, all the same old overpowered characters and precognition plots, just copied conspiracies and nonsensical nonsense. Only a few Naruto fanfics actually have any insightful or thought-provoking ideas. Does anyone have any Naruto fanfics to recommend?

The previous book, "Obsession Incarnate," featured a stunning Nine-Phoenix incarnation. The chapter where Daimaru and Itachi Uchiha fought, with Susanoo battling the nine-headed phoenix, was absolutely stunning. Should we still work on this book?

Why bother writing Naruto fanfiction if you're going down this path? It's a thankless task.

The biggest problem with this book is that the protagonist gets entangled with Kaguya right from the start, essentially taking on all of Kaguya's karma. If it were just a conflict between Kaguya and Hagoromo/Hamura, that would be one thing, but what about Black Zetsu's actions? Are we expecting him to bury the whole truth? If that's the case, the protagonist becomes a complete villain.