Once, I Wanted to Be a Good Person

I saw the single chapter explanation you opened in the middle... I feel that you are also tired. The book is not RMB. No matter how good the novel is, some people don't like it. Anyway, I think it is good now that I have read it. It is quite interesting. I believe there are still a silent majority. To borrow a sentence: Don't like them silently, because those who hate them will not hate them silently. (Don't worry too much if you are critical, occasional quarrels can also increase your popularity) So I choose to vote monthly, and currently I can only vote 2...

Unfortunately, I can't control it anymore. Genuine readers are picky. In the early stage, the map was unfolded like a small map detective investigation, which captured the readers' desire to explore the plot and the world view. The most important thing is the strong oppression of the world, which makes people always want to find the happiness of the protagonist to break the situation. This is also the secret to being able to become a god by martial arts, and this book also has it (I feel that this is the reason why this book has always done well in the early stage?) Unfortunately, since the so-called "identity exposure", all the previous efforts to improve the plot, and the world that has been paved by efforts have suddenly become useless things that can be abandoned at any time, just like you have been working hard for half a life and suddenly said that you are the illegitimate son of the richest man, and you just lie flat. From then on, the book turned into a pretentious and slap-in-the-face text, a pure white text. The separation between the front and the back of this book is obvious. The whole book can be said to be divided into two parts. The former part is for elite readers, and the latter part attracts novices. Especially the description of the heroine (really too fragmented) I changed the map and failed to grasp the plot. Seeing the decline in grades, I want to go back to the old way of solving cases, but your solving the case has become a slap in the face. You have to pull up your identity and become a family, and you should have a behind-the-scenes operation, but the setting of your golden finger is contradictory. The great power is attributed to you, but you are suddenly given such a big background. (I don't know how to put it, but this is how I feel), the most critical oppression of the world is gone, and the lighthearted white text may not attract old readers. It is better to follow the path of a single husband. Personal power becomes a god, and resources are given to the outside world. I also want to ask, at the beginning of this book's world view, I thought it was a desperate oppression, but I found that it became easier as I went on, and in the end it became a slap in the face. The battle between the two worlds that protects the world feels so-so. The invasion of demigods is just like the game. The resistance is brutal. I don't see the sublimation of the theme. What I see is inexplicable internal fighting. Is this really what the outline looks like? It's a pity after all. Originally, it was a lot of fun to pursue books in the early days, but now when I open the catalog and look at the titles, I don't even have the desire to click on them. Exploring the unknown is what interests me, and pretending to be cool may not suit me. Spray lightly. . . . . .

The author has really improved a lot. This book made me feel excited. Then I went to read the author's old book. I almost died of poison and almost sent him away. It's not like it was written by a person. I have grown too much.

The beginning was really amazing, I thought it might be a masterpiece. In the previous depiction, Bai Zhi thought she would be a dark-hearted lady with double A in intelligence and intelligence, but she turned out to be a brainless idiot. The power system feels very vague. I still don't know whether it is low-level martial arts or medium-level martial arts. I can't tell the difference between awakened fusions. I don't know how destructive power ordinary people have at each level. What level does the protagonist have to go all out? When facing the enemy, I don't know whether I should be nervous for him, which makes people feel very immersive. The emotional scenes are also very bland, and the writing skills need to be improved.

In the early stage of the work, there was a tendency to become a god. In the middle stage of the work, it collapsed after the death of Mr. Bai. It felt like a different author. Everyone is a book reader. Only when they see a style they like will subscribe to follow up. After the middle stage, it turned into a brainless novel. I wanted to give up reading many times, but I found that there were more than 200 chapters left in the finale. The main line of imagination is still okay, but the character interactions that should have been in the middle period have disappeared, and the golden finger has really become a golden finger that has everything it lacks, just like a wishing machine. There are many pitfalls that the author did not add, such as whether Si Miaomiao's life experience has been restored, whether the identity of the devil has been confessed, whether physical ascension is the way to become a god, etc., Or the author himself added it in his own mind without specifying it, thinking that we all understood it and made up his own mind? The recommendation is to see the death of Mr. Bai, which is directly regarded as an invasion from outside the territory, and the human world is unable to resist, and the whole book is completed.

Before chapter 100, it is blameless. Before chapter 200, its flaws will not hide its faults. After chapter 200, you will become the eunuch of this book. If the author really doesn't know how to write mindless and cool articles, let me teach you how to write them. When you first enter the spirit world around Chapter 270, don't do any massacre. Just select the strongest ones from the 23 demigods to control, and then take turns to control the torture and dig out all 23 demigods. Then take off in a wave, and then sneak attack on the venerable, and then collect 12 demigods. Or, if you make yourself a god, you can open a big map. In the new map, you can copy and paste it according to the beginning of this book and write it again. Then you can connect the previous books. Several protagonists will make guest appearances, and then jointly deal with the rules of the world. Finally, a new world will be opened, and the whole book will be finished. Isn't it better than the one written now? ? ?

The early structure is quite good, and the process of using abilities to investigate cases is very attractive. It can be seen that the author is very good at depicting the "fighting of wits" and "strange fights" in the style of Hakoba. The stories of Emerald City and the Security Bureau left a very deep impression on me Even in the middle and late stages of the game, there is the ingenuity of framing blue blood at the auction. But starting from Huayang, the character development got really bad. First of all, the character He Weidao broke away from the halo behind the scenes and became very fragmented after entering the main line. There are two labels hanging on him: a sacrificer who will do whatever it takes to control the future for mankind, and a conspirator who communicates with outsiders to attack local demigod heroes. Although the two labels of He Weidao are reasonable, the creation of this round character can be said to be quite failed. It feels to me like it is pinched together and not full enough. Then there is Mr. Bai. He did not use enough pen and ink to shape his character, which made his death in battle and declaration... A bit strange. In the early stage, he usually only shows half of his figure, describing his evaluation of something or someone. This is no problem, as he is the master behind the scenes. But his death in battle was sudden, making it difficult to create a touching atmosphere. Thirdly, regarding the creation of the heroine and supporting actress, I personally don't think there are any particularly attractive characters. The portrayal of the Flower God can be given a higher score, because her interaction with the protagonist is more natural; Bai Zhi and Bai Ling have too few scenes after the middle period. In fact, there are still many things that can be explored, and they can only be considered as passing standards; Miaomiao's transformation from weak to the core of a religion is completely It is clear but not descriptive, and there is no desire to convince people. Including the later appearance as a "Steam Girl", I had no feeling at all; in the end, I really couldn't hold back the "Loser Group Champion" of Frost White Venerable, who was included in the harem for the world's responsibility, eh, ugh. Finally, there are the demigods from the outside world. Entering the Ascension to God chapter, once the number of demigods in the outer world increases, they fall into the dilemma of "As many as dogs, walking all over the ground" like in the Internet literature. On the one hand, his intelligence is not very high (he doesn't even have an intelligence level lower than Dai Heigaluo). Basically, he turned into a comic as soon as he was arrested and put in prison. It doesn't match the atmosphere of all-out war at all. Then let's consider another aspect. If intelligence is not enough, there must be some pressure from force. As we all know, the enemies in the red-haired monster's works are basically brainless, but their force and description put a lot of pressure on them. The big BOSS is full of blood when it appears, and the protagonist bucks the trend and kills them. The feeling of satisfaction should be given. But the protagonistwas easily caught, killed, and brainwashed (I personally dislike the setting of wanton control). There is no sense of accomplishment in seeing the protagonist defeat them. This makes the whole process leading up to the Realm War look very childish. It is not an exaggeration to say that it is same as chewing the beans. Let's talk about the issue of world structure in the later period. Similar settings such as "demigods" and "outland" are really ordinary. There are many people writing about them, and everyone will get tired of them if they eat too much (and it is not too inconsistent to take two or three books with such settings and swap the plots in the later stage). The result is that the later stage of writing works with this kind of setting is a competition of writing skills, and the author's plot advantage cannot be used. The last thing I talk about is the atmosphere conflict between serious clan warfare and comic enemies. In the invasion of foreign lands, the human warship crashed for free like the Victory. Judging from the setting of 300,000 human soldiers on a human warship, losing so many people is really a bit sad, right? But the enemy on the protagonist's side is just like a comedian, and the passing of those people feels like it has no meaning, it's a special child's play. This further leads to the protagonist's declaration that he wants to "end the war" to be unconvincing. It is like shouting slogans, which detracts from the shaping of the protagonist. Overall, I think this book can score above 80 points in the early stage. The plot is very interesting and the protagonist is very charming. But I can only give a score below the passing line for the story after transforming into Yang. It is not only boring but also somewhat ruins the tone of the entire story.

Test poison, Shennong posted. The first chapter really surprised me, especially the reversal at the end, from a detective to a criminal. I even thought this should be a masterpiece. After reading forty or fifty chapters, the problem gradually came to light. The author should not be too old, middle-aged or below. The first question is not a problem, because it is purely my personal preference. It is very annoying that "Autumn's sack" appears twice. Every time I see this word, I have to exit the novel interface and spend ten minutes to sort out my mood before reading it again. I hate all Japanese things. So it's my personal preference. The second question is a big one. The description of the fight and dialogue with the "Forest Ranger" made me extremely embarrassed. My scalp was numb. This book is not an urban novel. There must be a lot of fighting scenes later. If the description of the fight and dialogue is not improved, I dare say that at least 80% of readers who are more than ten years old will lose at least 80%. In terms of characterization, the writing style is still clear, and I haven't felt that the portrayal directly touches the soul. But it may be temporary, after all, I read less. The writing is not competent enough. For example, the self-inner monologue in this screenshot is a bit self-proclaimed and not competent enough, which drags out the drama. Overall, the writing style is a bit more tender, and the story and ideas are very attractive. Let's take another look.

It can be seen from this book that the author is well prepared, but there is a problem. Don't be too attached to the readers' complaints. Most readers are silent. It is impossible to revise a book to satisfy everyone. It will only deviate from your original outline as you revise. When the outline collapses, the silent majority of readers will abandon it as the content deteriorates. Your grades will also drop, and your mentality will be even greater when you sit down... So since you are well prepared, you don't have to worry too much about the readers' complaints.

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