The Substitute's Journey Across the Heavens

It's too streamlined. The protagonist's actions are basically following the characters in the plot. He is acting as a nanny throughout the whole process. The various abilities obtained by using the stand are like using skills in a game. A few years ago, you would have to shout first. When fighting, it doesn't feel like fighting at all. It feels like a character in the game using skills. It's completely Generally speaking, the better fan fiction or unlimited flow works should not mainly describe the three melons and two dates in the plot, but should dig deeper into the background. For example, in the world of ghosts blowing out lanterns, the water may be very deep in ancient times, but when it comes to the plot, it is basically three melons and two dates without any danger. Instead of following the protagonist's team to dig the graves that have been dug countless times in fan works, it is better to rely on force and intelligence advantages to run around, do archaeological research, and dig out various immortal caves that may have existed in this world in ancient times, such as the tomb of Qin Shihuang, various emperors' tombs, various caves and blessed places in ancient legends, and go to various gates. Send someone to look for advanced skills, or look for the big pits dug in the ghost blowing lamp plot, such as the Bronze Divine Tree, Tianmen and other things that may have a high upper limit. Anyway, the protagonist does not consume his own life span. Even if he dies like that, as long as the knowledge he remembers is valuable enough, he will make a lot of money.

Writing novels that give magic tricks to everyone when meeting them lacks a sense of reality and makes people feel fake.

The upper-class and lower-class people mix together and rob tombs. Wudang people will die with their eyes open.

I was also drunk. Wudang sent disciples to rob tombs. Believe it or not, Zhang Sanfeng jumped out and hacked you to death.

This novel makes me feel that the protagonist is a pure eunuch. As a man, he doesn't have much power, he doesn't ask for too much money, and he doesn't pursue power with much intention. I can still understand the woman in the two copies of the Ghost Blowing Lamp world, but you write that two women like you and you give up, and now in the Jin Yiwei world, two more female protagonists like you, and you still have to give up. Then why do you write that they like you? Disgusting readers? Why don't you just not write about the emotional scenes with them or just downplay them?

Seriously, how much the author despises eternal life! The Zhu Xian scroll was really written and made me drunk. Your level of strength has completely collapsed, it's a complete mess

The books involving deadlocks are all bad, and the TV series itself has very serious bugs that even the editors can't fix. There are only a handful of people who have made deadlocked appointments with external sites including the starting point. I once started a popular Hong Kong comprehensive article, but because of the deadlock at the end, the outline collapsed and ended hastily. The author should remember the lessons learned from the past.

Please let me know when the night is over and say thank you.

The travels in the heavens are seamlessly connected to the chat group. Six, it can be regarded as a new book. It is slowly getting popular. I estimate that you can write one or two thousand chapters.

You are getting worse and worse, you can't stand it anymore, and you are ready to give up the book.