The Original Vampire

The setting of this book. The writing and plot are both okay. As a bookworm. It is rare to see a few excellent works. I can't help but want to give some advice. Author's note. The first point is that I have written 200,000 words so far. But the protagonist is still too invested in the surrounding environment and situation. Too much energy is spent on external affairs. This may be related to the general background set by the author. Related to the urgency of war. But for readers. The original vampire. We want to see more development and upgrading of the protagonist in the early stages. In the process of upgrading and development. Meet the right challenges. In other words. The opening should be centered on the protagonist throughout. Constantly and repeatedly create a sense of substitution. Instead of writing more plots, it becomes more political. We click to enter this book about vampires. The most urgent hope is to see the vampire's abilities shine in the other world. Rather than a lubricant to create depressing plots. Goldfinger became a temporary worker who only provided temporary support. Use it as plot lubricant at key moments. There are too few stories about the protagonist himself and his own golden finger. Too little text. It's all done in one go. Instead, too much ink was spent on other people. This is a taboo in online writing. 2 The character creation of the protagonist is indeed very successful. But the essence of online writing does not lie in the surrounding characters. If you always get entangled in the intrigues between the big characters in these stories. Repeated plot twists. Instead, the vampire theme of the protagonist was ignored. We want to see the development of the protagonist's abilities. The effective accumulation of the protagonist's power. Protagonist explores. Collect treasure. Fight monsters, upgrade, etc. But your initial 200,000 words. Most of the space is devoted to war. At this time, put the water numbers in the middle and late stages. Catch people's attention in the early stage. It is still necessary to spend more time exploring the theme of "vampires". Farm, develop. Explore. More words or all the words on the protagonist would be useful.

Tell me your immature views. The author's description of the plot is great, and the excitement is well grasped, but there is too little description of the local customs and customs. Based on the history, geography, and race written by the author, the world structure of this book is actually very sufficient and complete. But so far, I personally seem to have only seen descriptions of a few important cities. I basically don't see any differences between the trolls' appearance, body, communication methods, food, clothing, housing, transportation, history and culture, and humans. What is the geographical status of the North, what tree species are unique to the cold zone, what are the foods, specialties, and humanities and customs of the cold zone? I have not seen it. Regarding the half-elves, I only saw descriptions of the city gates. I also didn't see the forests on the road, the beautiful endemic species in the forests, the half-elves' houses, the way they treat outsiders, the elegance shown in their daily behaviors, or the decoration style that is different from the hotels in the north. I really like the author's description of the plot reversal. It is unexpected and reasonable, and the strategic confrontation between everyone is also interlocking, and it is also refreshing. If you can add the local customs and customs, I think it will create a feeling-this is a real world.

The first three volumes of this book, namely the Eye of Judgment, are all very exciting. The plot is very rigorous. The plot, reversal, character creation, story development, and foreshadowing are all excellent. The writing is smooth and there are almost no bugs. Only a few minor flaws were quickly corrected. It can almost be regarded as flawless. It is a rare and valuable rigorous plot to the lord. I can feel that the author saved the manuscript when writing these volumes and worked hard to polish it. Unfortunately, the manuscript may not have been saved since the middle period, and the level has begun to decline a bit. The descriptions of scenery are meaningless and repetitive, and the adjectives for women's appearance are also the same words over and over again. Compared with the careful descriptions of clothing, appearance, and atmosphere in the previous volumes, it is a bit impetuous, but it is not a big problem. The title of the volume is [Lord of the North]. In fact, most of the plot of this volume is in the East. Maybe this trip to the East should have been a separate volume. Maybe it has something to do with the preservation of the manuscript? What a pity. As I prepare for the orc war later, and then the whole story comes to an end, the level begins to drop almost off a cliff, and the details of the characters are no longer described, and the serious atmosphere of the first three volumes is also gone. As the extraordinary power increases, many problems that did not exist in the early stage also emerge. For example, the combat power system collapses, the protagonist has only one skill in the whole story, and there is no detailed explanation of what the several levels of professions can do. It is obvious that the length of the plot has been reduced and the combat length has increased, but there is no corresponding performance. For example, blood slaves can obviously ignore distance sensing and manipulation, but they do not use this ability to obtain more information. Obviously the main thing the protagonist lacks in the middle and late stages is information, but he does not make good use of the Vampire's ability to obtain information, and even the development of Goldfinger has stalled. Why other professions cannot transform Vampires is not explained until the ending. Even the ability of vampires has not been developed very much. The vampires in the early stage did not appear again in the later stage and were not helpful, such as the Shire Knights. Even if you are worried about being disloyal, can you transform a seriously injured soldier among your own soldiers? Coupled with the title of God's Envoy, immortal life is a great improvement in the army, but it is a pity that he did not do this. Moreover, blood slaves in the army are always a bit strange, and how they get along with normal soldiers is only in detail and not described, which is a pity. As well as related to mage arcana, as the only designated villain in the whole story, Mr. Jin's description of magic is also very brief, which is quite a pity. In the early stage, it was indeed worthy of the "lords fighting for hegemony, and the vampires are just the golden fingers of continuous development" in the introduction, but unfortunately later on it was a bit nondescript, Machiavellian rather than Machiavellian, lords did not farm, and even the description of the battlefield was weakened. To say that the above are minor problems that can be ignored, the saddest thing in the middle and late stages is the collapse of the character and the inconsistency of the characters. The logic of the character who was originally very smart when he first appeared has gradually collapsed... Prince Leahy went from being a fool who had faith and perseverance, did not accept compromises, did not accept threats, and went straight forward, and turned into a fool who repeatedly jumped around and was teased by others. The Duke of Eastland went from appearing as a high-ranking paladin who was determined to cease wars, fair trade and kill decisively, to a headstrong man who knew that he was not good at military affairs but did his own thing. Together with the second fool emperor, he ignored the advice and sent the army to die. In the end, he suffered heavy casualties and thought of sacrificing civilians, which made him look particularly stupid. It is a pity especially for Evan and Anna brother and sister. I can feel that the author has a lot of plans for these two characters. As a result, because of the repeated "Wait!" Plot, the role changes are unnatural, and the readers shout to die quickly, they are really asked to leave early and change the outline. This also causes the rigor and smoothness of the subsequent plot to lose a lot, and also leaves many holes unfilled. It is quite a pity 😐 (What is the relationship between Anna and the Duke of Eastland? What did he say to Anna?) The author himself also Admitting that changing the outline made the subsequent plot collapse, leading to the final hasty ending, all in all, it is quite a pity... Is there any chance to send out the original outline and take a look 😠 There is a small problem in the whole article, that is, although there are alien races, the administrative system, title, military system, speaking style, etc. Of other races are exactly the same as humans. The alien race is actually just a human race with a different name, an alien race in human skin. (What's surprising is that the appearance of trolls is only described once or twice in the entire novel. If I remember correctly. As the race that occupies the most space in the first three volumes, I don't even know what they look like...) Oh, by the way, there is another small problem. After the sacrifice in Falling Eagle City, my sister never appeared again. She left to find the protagonist before the sacrifice, but at the end even Xiao Bai The housekeeper appeared again, but my sister found no such person 😠 Unexpectedly, I missed my brother's wedding and never saw him again. Valla would have a role later. The ending is very rushed, and it can also be said to be unfinished. There are many holes left unfilled. What is the real life experience of the male protagonist? The Orc War in the West serves as a transition, followed by the Southern Chapter, the Mage Chapter, the Elf Chapter, and the final reveal. I feel like I can still write a million words...😐 In summary, the first three volumes can be rated 10, which is very exciting. It can be played in the middle and late stages, 7 points, which is relatively average. The ending is only 3 points, it's a rush. Overall personal score: 7.5, the first three volumes are very good, but they are anticlimactic, but the first three volumes are very good... It can also be regarded as a relatively excellent work. The emotional drama is well described. After being mentally prepared, it is worth watching.

The name is not very attractive and does not match the focus of the book. The protagonist only explores the vampires as much as in the introduction. Readers who read the book for the vampires will be disappointed. Just like "The Man in the Dog Road" is not a dog, I hope it can be renamed, "I Just Want to Quietly Develop Blood Descent" might be better, I think, but the conditions do not allow it, it feels suitable. The content is smooth, the writing is good, and the logic is strong. I felt good while reading it. Personally, I think the biggest highlight is the conspiracy plot that unfolds from the beginning. The experience is very good, but the author should think about it after writing this plot. It is unscientific to write lyb for all members, and he still needs to write some other styles of supporting characters. The following detailed review may contain spoilers: There are a lot of reversals in the article, so you cannot easily define someone based on your first impression, but conversely, it is also easy to whitewash the character. To inoculate against possible whitewashing, the author must not be too protective of the characters. The author mainly writes about the plot of the struggle for hegemony, but the description of the war is relatively vague. I feel that since the author has set the direction of his own writing, he must of course strengthen his knowledge in this area. As of writing the latest chapter, I haven't seen particularly outstanding battles and command. The protagonist develops the army and tells his subordinates to expand the army to 3,000 cavalry and 5,000 infantry, but then there is no follow-up. After a while, the protagonist has so many extra soldiers in his hand. Only one supporting character in the army has a name, and the rest are just tools and consumables. It's too simple. It is recommended to add some tool perspective. The identity of the vampires can only be considered as a supplement at the moment. The protagonist has collected less than 40 vampires. Is the role of being used as a real eye in other cities? The author could consider infiltrating the vampires into potential enemies. Just keeping them around seems to have no effect. Low-level enemies can be dealt with by the army. What is the use of these vampires below level 4 when high-level enemies come over? The protagonist needs resources to carry around with him. It's not a good idea to use other people's resources to cultivate your own power and isolate the church. Personally, I suggest that after defeating the trolls, you should quickly study how the vampires can improve their strength and disperse them all. The separate blood descendant army and blood slave army may be interesting, so look forward to it. The cat scene is very strange. Now that I see it, I don't understand the meaning of its existence. Can an ordinary cat sleep next to the stove despite having its fur scorched? If it's not some mythical beast or something, it would be really poisonous. I don't want to see this kind of cliche plot. The first girl has become a vase, and is more naive, and prefers Elsa. I kind of don't understand why the protagonist likes the female lead and insists on marrying her. I don't think she has any charm. Let's break down what the heroine has done since her appearance: she fought with the protagonist in the north and threw out a few magic spells; she met the remnant army on the road and her heart burst into tears. She did not abandon everyone and relied on the protagonist to fight to save the deadlock. She was deceived by the protagonist; she felt sorry for her uncle. ; Being married to an elf by his second father, he performed "Don't fight anymore" on the spot, stopped the protagonist, saved the enemy, sulked on the way to see the bride, and put a hat on others in the palace; the whole battle in the elf city was soy sauce, and it was all saved by the protagonist; in the Ice Rock City, Shen Shen. That's it? Heroine? To be honest, I really don't like this character. From what I saw, I really didn't realize how much the protagonist liked the female lead, and she only had her last name. I personally hope that the author will write about Elsa, mainly out of recognition (si) and (xin). Elsa's character is more three-dimensional than the female protagonist. Compared with the female protagonist, Elsa helps the male protagonist much more, and she also has a child first, which is not so good. Three accounts have been subscribed for the first time. Come on, author, I will support you by watching the ads.

This book is a must-read for those who like vampires! Absolutely great article! The flavor of Game of Thrones and the flavor of the old Western aristocracy is indeed written. The setting is very good, the author's writing skills are very good, and the plot is also well conceived. Good books about vampires are too few and too rare. Many book friends said that the book became a god in the early and middle stages, but was rushed in the later stages. But to be honest, I saw many book reviews in the middle stage that said the plot was slow. I understand that the author is not a full-time writer and writes slowly. It will be uncomfortable for readers of such a good book to wait for updates, but this author is also easily influenced by readers. The rush of the middle and later stages of this book has a lot to do with these impatient readers. The author and his hemorrhoids cannot be entirely blamed 😂 Finally, I saw the author's reflections and summary when he finished the book, and I look forward to his next book 😁

This book is intended to be an epic fantasy, but to be honest, the fantasy part is a bit unrealistic. The fashionable and rich themes of Blood Tribe and various film and television acg settings are too conservative. I almost forget that the protagonist is not a normal person. Indeed, I think the plot part is very good. The writing is also good, and it can be seen that it is suitable for historical works and ice. There has been a lot of research on books like Fire, but to be honest, it is just a plot book with a thin layer of blood clan skin. There is no problem in writing it like this. But to be honest, the personal charm and image of the various characters in this book cannot support this kind of pure plot story, and the world view is not low-magic, so if more effort can be put into the fantasy writing, the look and feel will be much better.

I like this kind of writing so much😍

Fake vampires: think about sleeping with humans all day long, have a frail appearance, dress up to please the dead house; Real vampires: full of powerful muscles, think about how to conquer the world all day long, let a bunch of macho men follow them wholeheartedly, very confident even in the face of the invincible platinum star, wryyyyyyy! ! ! ! ! ! Repost someone else's words

Colin Angelet

The half-elf queen in my mind😃

I've read this book quite a lot, but I feel it really doesn't match the title of the book. I feel like it's just for resurrecting myself in the skin of a vampire.

Recently, many book friends have been saying that the plot advances too slowly. They don't want to see conspiracies, chases and escapes, but want to see the protagonist develop a vampire clan. For this, I first apologize. The previous plot is indeed a bit slow, but I will speed up the progress later. The protagonist will soon have his own territory and will also discover ways to develop descendants of the vampire family. However, the development of some of the previous world views and the appearance of important characters are still necessary. I don't want to write the kind of cool novel about developing blood descendants without thinking and then violently attacking them. I can only say sorry to the impatient book friends. I hope you can find the books you want to read elsewhere, and please don't abuse me, I will delete the post and ban you!

The real name of this book is "Who is My Mother-in-law?" ! !

This book is so popular, why isn't it popular? I keep an eye on the clock every day waiting for updates. The last time I read a book like this, I was so stupid.

After reading more than 300 chapters, I can only say that the vampires are so weak that they will be pills sooner or later. The pig's feet are like a fool holding an interstellar cannon but always following the civilian spaceship. However, the plot is compact and full of twists and turns, and the character creation is okay. At least Vera is a competent flower vase.

I just caught up with the latest chapter, it's very interesting. But there are so many tricks and tricks, which really makes the show less enjoyable. To be honest, with the endless tricks in the East, I only read the protagonist's frustration. The protagonist's vampire ability is a joke... Alas, I felt a little unhappy after reading the latest chapter. I felt depressed. I'd better take care of the half-elf plot for a while. I can't continue reading 😥

We are now recruiting for supporting roles 😁 The format is as follows, the more specific you write, the greater the chance of being accepted! Name: Race: Occupation: Appearance description: Character background: Let me state that after the supporting actor is adopted, certain modifications will be made according to the plot, and it will not be completely consistent with the original description. Okay, everyone is welcome to contribute👏

It's really strange, but whenever the author wants to downplay the content of the novel, I often feel that the depiction is more attractive. Take this book as an example. The author wanted to downplay the vampire's ability and focus on the main character's struggle for supremacy in another world. However, after reading dozens of chapters, I really didn't feel that the author's struggle to cherish the resources was very interesting. On the contrary, the exploration of the vampire was fascinating. In my opinion, the core attraction of the content of secular hegemony is farming development, and then describing how the people at the bottom are grateful to the protagonist and achieving dimensionality reduction against the indigenous people. Otherwise, the author's writing style is superb and his knowledge is rich, and he really wrote the epic feeling of aristocratic struggle. However, the core of Zhenzi is the exchange of interests and involuntary control, and the blood of the kingdom is shown. This book did not see it at all. To be honest, the title of the book is Blood Clan, and the content is well written. The author might as well focus on depicting the content of Blood Clan... (PS: The main character in the beginning of Wenzhao's The Lord of Mysterious Tribulation always wants to avoid the secular world and focus on the extraordinary. On the contrary, I think the content of the secular struggle is better written. The extraordinary is full of mystery and the shadow of I am God but has no highlights)

Presumably the original vampire does not refer to the protagonist, but to the Lord of Glory. Let's connect it. The outrageous affinity with the Holy Light can only transform knights and advance by drinking holy water. The Lord of Glory dies, the protagonist rises, and believers of other gods suddenly start to cause trouble on a large scale. All of this is connected, and the scheming frog keeps touching your belly! You are the reincarnation of the Lord of Glory. Glory is the original vampire. Maybe it is like the devil's law. Glory is also the first time traveler. You are just practicing the trumpet!

It's unfamiliar in the early stage, but it's a god in the early to mid-term. It has very good plotting and plot arrangements. It's worth subscribing just for this part. In the middle and later stages, I started messing around and eating books, and finally, like many authors, I fell into a vicious circle of reversal for the sake of reversal, and it was completely unfinished This book can also be called "Biography of a Dutiful Son" (there are more than a dozen episodes of patricide from beginning to end), "The Thief of Cao is actually myself" (the protagonist's lovers are all young women)

Mr. Jin should be the protagonist, charming, with a story and background. Women are devoted to him. The son of a small man who has great destiny. Act decisively without leaving any consequences. He is talented in creating his own spells. The protagonist is like a clown, a rich country man. Women have their own ideas besides vases. The advantage was that someone pinched my heart with my backhand, and I had no choice but to resurrect my life. All kinds of cheating still stretch the crotch, and cheating does not rely on intelligence, but on talent.

The complete body of the protagonist in my mind

This book perfectly explains what it means to write well-written novels that are all the same, while those with poor results are all different. . . . This is also a common problem of quite a few Qidian authors. After all, there is nothing wrong with the writing, but they insist on adding something disgusting to the plot. . The whole novel does not read like a novel written in the 20s, but instead resembles a novel written in the 00s. There is also the classic plot of the girl you like being identified as someone else, which seems really outrageous. Reading all the paid chapters gives people a sense of powerlessness. The author clearly gave the protagonist a vampire status, but deliberately suppressed the protagonist's growth. One moment, he can advance to another level by drinking other people's blood, and then he can't. Then when he reaches the second level, he falls back to the first level because of his first embrace. In the end, he changes back to the third level because of drinking other people's blood (this change is even completed within one or two days). What is going on? Did the author eat fungi when he wrote about this kind of jumping around combat power? Moreover, the identity of the vampire did not bring any benefit to the protagonist at all. I even read the paid chapters until completely removing those so-called extraordinary abilities from the entire book did not affect the progress at all. So why didn't you just write about the Middle Ages? Either give the protagonist some trump cards, or let the protagonist develop, destroy troops, and upgrade. The protagonist is such a weak third-level knight. He wants strength but no strength, no territory, no army, and no army. As a result, the protagonist has to beg for the daughter of a duke, and participates in the politics of a country every day. What is this? Are you so overestimating your abilities?

The person in charge... Do you understand?

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Although the ending is rushed, it is not a bad ending. It just tells the story at a fast pace. Except for the last small part, the previous part is really exciting. The author can't help it due to physical reasons.

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