Konoha's Duanmu Baiyun

Chapter 128 So far, I am convinced (; 1_1) A military organization canceled the military exploits of its subordinates during the war without clear evidence and sufficient reasons. As a result, the protagonist does not hate it at all and is glad that this is good. The protagonist has not written anything in his heart. It is hard not to make people doubt that the protagonist is... (I really can't think of an adjective). Is it appropriate to write a protagonist who has a lot of infighting in officialdom now? Another thing is that the Vacuum Sword was given by Jiraiya. Let me ask everyone. Is it reasonable that a person who is called the most perfect ninja (should that be said?) And became the Fourth Hokage still doesn't mean to comfort the protagonist at all? Whether he is out to win people's hearts or not, it is better to do whatever he wants than to say nothing at all. I wanted to write this post in a normal tone, but the more I wrote, the more excited I became. My last question to the author is, I want to ask you to spoil it. Will the protagonist stay in Konoha in the future? You can also write down your thoughts. I also want to read your thoughts. The more I read the book, the more frustrated I feel.

I just finished reading it yesterday, and I feel that the writing is okay. It can be seen that the author is still relatively immature when writing a book for the first time, and the rhythm is not very good. The early stage is too slow, and the late stage is too fast. It feels like the end of the book is over before anything is explained. However, the idea of ​​the book is quite good, it combines the Book of Changes and Naruto very well, and it also depicts the conflict between the low-level ninjas and the ninja clan well, and there are things that can be praised. It would be rated 6.8 Out of 10. Personally, I am picky about reading books, so the score may be a little low, but it is still a pretty good work. I hope the author can write better works in the future.

Let me first tell you how I discovered this book, Daily Introduction, because it is a novel that has been completed for a long time. If it were not for Daily Introduction, I would not have found it. The only advantage of this book for me is that the characters are well created, and the rest are all shortcomings. The protagonist is set as a civilian ninja. He is a real civilian ninja, not the kind of ninja who appears to be a civilian but actually takes the path of Otsutsuki's bloodline in the end. The author himself also said that because it was his first time writing a novel, he was not sure about many things. For example, there are three golden chapters, which are not included in this book. The main character's plot was not revealed until the 20th or 30th chapter. The protagonist's early enemy methods were scarce, and the author's own complaints led to a poor impression in the early stage. It is estimated that many readers who like to read refreshing novels cannot even read the free chapters. And I'm only about a hundred chapters away from finishing it, but the protagonist still can't enter sage mode. Even when the protagonist's important teacher sacrifices, the protagonist can only change 30 to 40% of his chakra into senjutsu chakra. He can't even use senjutsu. When fighting Obito, who had just transplanted Hashirama cells, he was basically pinned to the ground. There is only about a hundred chapters left before the book is finished. I can already predict how ridiculously the protagonist's combat power will increase in order for the protagonist to be able to compete with Otsutsuki. The author cannot grasp it almost 100%. The author blindly wants to suppress it first and then improve it. The consequence of suppressing it first is that the readers in the early stage are finished and the subsequent promotion is not very good. And judging from the early description, the author wants the protagonist to be able to activate eight immortal modes, but so far he can't activate any of them. I can only say that I will still read it (because I have already spent more than 20 yuan). I hope the author can correct these shortcomings in the next book and keep up the good work.

Deep and thoughtful, highly recommended.

Come on, writers, I have been subscribing to support you. I hope you will write slowly like your son-in-law. We are not short of time, but we are short of a good novel!

It is recommended that readers skip Chapter 189 of Part 3. If you read it seriously, it will poison you and make you lose the desire to read any more.

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Is the author serious about the first two chapters? There is no key information at all, and the plot is almost non-existent.

I like this book very much First of all, although it is an unpopular character who travels through time, the original animation design of this character is very exciting. He is an elite Jonin, uses a knife as his main weapon, has a ponytail, has wounds on the corners of his mouth, and has very cool moves. The author deconstructs the cruelty of real life in the world of Naruto from an adult perspective, starting with the ninja clan and civilian ninjas, the ninja village and the ninja village, and the ninja village and the country. In the final analysis, the darkest contradiction at the bottom of the Naruto world is extreme personal force and backward productivity, which leads to the fact that the world must have a pyramid structure and class conflicts cannot be reconciled. To be the protagonist in this world, and to be happy, you must cheat. The author chose to use the concept of Bagua to complete the fairy magic system in the original work. It is assumed that the author has been influenced by the knowledge of Feng Shui and Bagua and created his own wind magic. This kind of cool point takes into account the sense of substitution of Chinese civilization and the rationality of the plug-in. I hope the author can keep writing. I like the current slow pace of growth and hope to maintain a longer growth space. It feels like all Naruto stories become homogeneous once they break through the shadow level and are not far away from being completed, such as "Red Sand"

Why should a waste with mediocre qualifications counterattack? Or are you a commoner, with no resources and no golden fingers, relying on your identity as a time traveler? The world of Naruto does not rely on resources, but only on qualifications and blood. A commoner with no advantages can't figure out why he can rise. So what is the ending of this book?

Reading this book made my eyes light up, and I would like to recommend it to all readers. Many people say that the writing about housing prices in the beginning is very vicious, but in fact, if you think about it, there is some basis for it (after all, there are two things like walls and barriers outside Konoha's villages, and the village area cannot expand, so housing prices will definitely increase with the increase in population and decrease with the outbreak of war), and housing prices are just an introduction. What the author mainly wants to express is the contradiction between the ninja class and the civilian class Secondly, the biggest highlight of this book is that the author perfectly combines the Zhouyi Bagua with fire. The shadow world is integrated, and the Naruto world also reveals the atmosphere of borrowing from our country's gossip (such as the gestures of sealing, and the four elephant seals inside, etc.) The author does not provide any system, or a kaleidoscope at the beginning. The growth of the protagonist's strength is well-founded, and there are no sudden explosions that make no sense For me, this is the best Naruto novel I have ever read. The only shortcoming of this book is that the author's control of the emotional drama is not very good, but it does not affect my support.

Excuse me, is this person? The original anime is called "White Cloud Leaf Mountain". I don't know the other strengths of the Jonin. One-handed (vacuum sword) is really powerful.

If you are a fan, just write a fan. The author always likes to write a long paragraph about his own opinions.

After reading more than 80 chapters, I really couldn't bear to give up the book. There are three main issues so far. The first author has too much personal stuff. He often writes in long paragraphs, and describes his personal understanding of various social issues and the scorn he encounters in life in the book. Sometimes it can even take up half of a chapter. It was very disturbing to watch. Secondly, he suppressed the protagonist hard and even abused him a little. I read novels for entertainment, but the more I read, the more I felt depressed and uncomfortable. The third pair of framework settings for the Naruto world is extremely unreasonable, especially in terms of acquiring ninjutsu. Take fire escape as an example, big fireball, big fireball, flaming bullet. Even Nami Ninja who are not in Xiao Ninja Village can master one or two of these basic Ninjutsu. The protagonist performed well in the chuunin exams, made many meritorious deeds on the battlefield, experienced several battles, and was chosen by Namikaze Minato to be his subordinate. He still only had a C-level Wind Escape given to him by his father, and he made some slight improvements. Is Konoha, the one with the richest foundation and the most ninjutsu, so stingy? Chuunin can exchange for c-level ninjutsu in some way, jounin can exchange for b-level ninjutsu, and A-level ninjutsu and higher level ninjutsu are directly mastered by senior level. This is more reasonable. In addition, usually the second attribute is developed after the first attribute is honed to the extreme and the amount of chakra and physical fitness are greatly improved. More than 80 chapters in, the protagonist still only has one wind escape technique. I made some improvements myself and developed the second attribute, which was successful. . . . .

Hey, this is the first time I read the original version, because it is true that I used to read pirated copies before. After reading this book, I think it is really good, and I want to support it. This book is really good to read, and it should be among the top three Naruto fanfics I read (the other two are Disaster and Tsengigan). First of all, let's talk about the advantages: 1. Early stage: It can be seen that the author has a lot of his own ideas, especially in the early stage, he added a lot of his own feelings. Obviously, he added a lot of his own understanding to the Naruto anime. The one that impressed me the most was "A Dream I Want to Complete Well". It can be seen that the author put his true feelings into it. Although I think many readers will complain about it, I really think it's good. Because I have always felt that we like to watch Naruto fan fiction, but it is definitely not just about Naruto's journey to becoming stronger, and we promote it all the way. It must be more about dreams, about love, about reality, about family affection, about love and so on. Otherwise, in my opinion, it is completely impossible for Naruto fans to remain so popular in the fandom. It is with the help of the surreal world of Naruto that we can express the deeper feelings of each of us (or should we say every social animal? 🤭). Reading a good Naruto fanfic is really the best way to communicate with the author. Reading this book can help you get some of the author's ideas very well. Anyway, this is the reason why I have always liked Naruto fanfics. On this point, I think the author has done a good job! 😃 I may have learned some skills in writing books later on, but I lost a lot of feelings. I am still a little disappointed, but I quite like it. 2. Mid-term: Then there is the road to becoming stronger in the mid-term. I think this speed is still enough. After all, the author wants to keep the protagonist in Konoha, so there must be no frivolous operations such as defection. In fact, I think this is much better than most of the current rankings. Most of the current works are to directly explore the dark side without saying a word, then defect, join the Akatsuki, and then slap in the face all the way. It is very enjoyable to watch it once or twice, but it will definitely become boring if you watch it too much. This speed and method can be said to be neither fast nor slow, and it is acceptable. 3. Later stage: Let's talk about the later stage, regarding the resolution of the conflict in Konoha, this is definitely something that all Hokage fans must write about, and it is the biggest highlight of the whole book. In this regard, I actually think this book is okay, and it is a better approach. The author probably knows a lot because he is a teacher. He has elevated this contradiction, put big concepts into it, and actually solved it. It feels great. However, if this method is not paced properly, it may not be very satisfying or attractive to readers. For this point, you can refer to the Tenseigan. I think it should be the most clever and interesting solution to Konoha's problems among all Naruto fans, so it is so popular. Therefore, the author can consider how to combine the cool points with the big concepts you want to write. I feel that as long as this is done well, this book will definitely be very complete and become a classic or become as popular as the Tenseigan (at least in my case). Finally, I must say that I think the best part of this book is the part about the Book of Changes! This is really the biggest highlight of this book, it's a bit novel. Not only does it cleverly solve the charade (even I don't think it is a charade), but it also sublimates the book as a whole, which completely distances it from other novels. This is very similar to the biography of human ancestors in Gu Zhenren, really, it is amazing! ! ! Not only did it cleverly combine the method of becoming stronger with the Book of Changes, it felt more like a foreshadowing, as if the words in the Book of Changes perfectly matched the plot. It gives people a sense of perfect coincidence, and it is also a principle of life. This will really give readers a sense of astonishment if they read it carefully. But the only thing I think can be improved is that the opening chapter really didn't do a good job of foreshadowing. Introducing these origins, the identity of the protagonist, etc. Will make the plot smoother. There are also those b-squares and the like that appear every time in the Book of Changes. The author can refer to it if he has time. The human ancestral transformation like Master Gu's is real. In my opinion, it is absolutely incomparable among all novels, so I was very surprised to see the author. The key is that your combination of Zhouyi is really good, but it is not handled well in the early stage. Otherwise, the degree of completion must be very high, and becoming a god is also unknown... But, after all, this is the author's first time, which is very understandable, so I must feel that it is the first time to fully order it, and I must support it. As long as you practice with this book and lay it out well, the next book will definitely be better. Of course, this does not mean that the author wants to write full-time. Work must be the first priority, and hobbies and work must be distinguished. However, I hope that the author will turn it into a legitimate version for you for the first time and finish it well! Come on!

The author's model of cultivating immortals through the "Book of Changes" can be said to have created a new system for Naruto fans, and there is no doubt that the training system is perfect. But the author's experience is not enough for the author to change the fate of civilian ninjas. The best thing can only be the death of the people and the government. The author is aware of the superficial problem, but has not figured out how to solve it. This is fatal. If things are done in the wrong direction, one can only do bad things with good intentions. It can be seen from the article that the protagonist relies on his personal philosophy of simplicity to guide himself, or that the protagonist simply has no guiding program and plan. He just works on whatever aspect he sees is not good. In reality, it is one size fits all, and he is probably on the same level as Nehru and Modi. It's flat, but the man's Machiavellianism is several levels better than that of the protagonist, so the protagonist should be on the same level as Mathieu Crécu, the paratrooper president of Dahomey, the predecessor of the Republic of Benin in reality. If you understand the life of this paratrooper president, you can basically understand the results of the protagonist's reforms. It can be seen that the protagonist is not the material for reform. When writing, you must maximize your strengths and avoid weaknesses, give full play to your strengths, and erase the weaknesses. If you don't subscribe, you will be better than now.

The author has too many private things You have to stick to the unreasonable setting and think that everyone is drunk and you are sober and write endlessly It's not like reading a novel, it's like watching a real person endlessly complaining about society I've been poisoned until goodbye

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The situation is too small. People who are always stuck in Konoha are not worthy of talking about peace.

Konoha Jounin Baiyun Morning

To be honest, the writing is really good. The ending was a bit rushed, but acceptable. When writing Naruto fanfics, the most important thing to watch is always the ninja battles. Your book ranks second among Naruto fanfics.

The improvement in strength in the early stage was too slow, resulting in few people watching, and in the later stage, the improvement was too fast, making the plot very uncomfortable. How good would it be to balance the two?

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After reading a few chapters, I wanted to give up. After reading the reviews, many people said that the book was pretty good. I hoped that if I read more, it might get better. However, there were too many boring and personal things in it, so I couldn't resist, so I gave it up.

The author's imagination is huge. As long as a wealthy family dreams of becoming Hokage, they will kill people as young as ten years old? This is nonsense. As long as you find one Konoha, it will fall apart. You are judging the process based on the results! What nonsense!

What is written on the back?

Tsk, I did the Substitution technique on the same day again.

The first two articles and the ones before were well written, but in the third article, I obviously felt something was wrong. The author was a little unfluent when writing the changes of the protagonist. I would like to mention two more points. First, the protagonist also joined ANBU in the third chapter. I don't understand this operation very well. I understand wanting to save the fourth generation and find information, but it is not necessary to add ANBU. After adding ANBU, it will be fine if the fourth generation dies, and there will be no information about the information found. Wen, so what is the use of joining ANBU 🤔 And the part about the old lady in ANBU mission will obviously affect the protagonist's mentality. Zhou Yi, which the protagonist wants to practice, is originally based on mentality. I don't understand how you ruin your mentality. Isn't it good to practice during this period of time? Second point, the protagonist always mentions that Obito is particularly bad... In fact, I personally feel that this has nothing to do with the quality of people. Obito was already crazy when Lin died. He was a psychopath, so it is impossible to tell what kind of person he is from his behavior. Who can tell clearly whether a psychopath is good? Are people still bad people (I'm not slandering Obito, I'm just saying that I can't define Obito as a bad person) As for other small shortcomings, such as Shizune's role is less than Yakushi Nonou's 🤔; although Teku and Kurenai appear a lot, don't always brush them off. However, these do not affect food consumption