Red Dust

I have read a lot of Naruto fanfiction, Heroic Ninja Turn, Konoha Sealed, Konoha Insect Master, Konoha Aoki, The Strongest Kakashi, Genius Sakura, The Strongest Water Release, Itachi God Reappearance, Payne's World, Konoha Ink Marks, Dark Dawn, Line Release, Konoha Cold Wind, Byakugan Princess, The Last Ninja World, Super God Hinata, Naruto the Savior, White Fang Flash, I draw comics in Naruto, etc. There are many more that I can't remember their names. They have traveled through time and become characters who have appeared in various comics. There are self-created characters. Some timelines are very early. Some timelines are at the beginning of the plot. Many are written about Konoha, some are about the country of water, some are about the country of wind, and all kinds of countries. I have read them. Some are dark, some are cool, some are funny and light, some are conspiracy. I have seen too many. The author wrote this one today. I read it until the end. What can I say? Personally, I think it's pretty good. It's not too poisonous. Really, many people say it's too watery. Maybe the pig's feet are too weak, but to be honest, I'm really tired of seeing those 3-year-olds with higher chakra than genin, higher than chunin, who can go to the battlefield at the age of 7, and shine without any sense of disobedience. They kill all kinds of people or start flirting with girls before their hair is fully grown. Especially those who are obviously children and can seduce a mother-in-law like Tsunade. They are really heavy-handed. Otherwise, there are various systems and various fruits of One Piece. You were obviously an ordinary person before time travel. You even struggled to do 50 push-ups. Now that you are here as Hokage, you can actually have all kinds of self-discipline and all kinds of hard work. You can even surpass Xiao Li Kai's almost perverted training. What do you think? Come on, author, and write well. So far, it's really good. Write slowly. Don't worry. Keep this pace. Naruto doesn't have to be passionate in every chapter. I'm used to seeing those. I'm really tired of pig's feet. Practice slowly until the right time. Let's strengthen it. It's interspersed with daily life, it seems pretty good, keep writing. It's one of the few better Naruto fanfics in recent years. I don't like the above personal opinions, so don't comment because this is just a personal opinion and does not represent the public book lovers. There is no need to go online. Do you read books? Everyone has their own preferences, but it's rare to meet someone you like.

It's very good. The writing and characterization are good, but the plot is too slow and watery, and it's not exciting enough. . It's useless in fan fiction. It's a pity to abandon it if it's boring to read. I've read more than 300 chapters and can't stand it anymore. It's too bland.

What's curious is that Naruto was written as an idiot when he first appeared? I didn't notice the nonsense in the original work, and directly gave the second pillar a set of skills, making the second pillar think that these people were ruthless people who exchanged blood for blood... During the chuunin exam, the protagonist sabotaged the exams of several people in Konoha. I really can't figure out why, just to show off? So this trick is really about defeating the eye, and it can control Ino's heart-changing technique. I don't know how strong the protagonist's chakra line is. Afterwards, in addition to being in the limelight and being remembered by a bunch of Konoha ninjas, I finally understood why the protagonist's team was always in sudden and inexplicable crises as mentioned at the beginning. What Naruto said afterwards made me think that Naruto was an idiot, and he was not at all as naive and nonsensical as in the original work. Although I saw the author's words in this chapter's description of "write whatever makes you happy", there are some comments that I still want to express in writing.

After three days, I rushed in and killed the fattening chapter. Coming from The Savior (it's a pity that when Lao Fan wrote The Savior, I was so ignorant that I didn't participate in the reading immediately). Lao Fan's writing is no problem, and the plot and overall view can be held well. There are still some regrets: 1. The fighting is not exciting enough. The description of dragons fighting in the wild and burning blood during the fight is not enough. The more representative one is the battle between Daimaru and Nefeng. Daimaru (or Lao Fan) finally showed us his unique skills (even with reservations?). Makoto Yue and Yashoujo have cool and explosive skills, and as a chuunin, they can threaten jounin with just these combos. I really felt some excitement at that time. But unfortunately there is too little description. What a pity. This place mainly describes the destruction of scenes, sudden changes in the environment (what are the storms), psychological descriptions, the surprised and shocked expressions of the viewers, and the explosion of special effects. Of course, it is okay not to write these, and it will not affect the plot, but if you write them, it will really make the article more immersive. (I hope that Lao Fan forgot to write, or that Lao Fan is in the atmosphere and I am still in the third layer. I will write a little bit in the early and middle stages, leaving the fiercest battle to the later stage. If this is the case, it would be best, as if I didn't say anything) 2. The grasp of the atmosphere has been neglected. It's not dark enough when it's supposed to depress the readers (it's not dark enough), it's not festive enough when the enemy is supposed to be happy, and it feels a little tasteless. In fact, once this place is written, the article can be greatly polished.

I always find it annoying when I see the main character competing with Gaara. He keeps repeating from beginning to end that he can't beat Gaara and that it's too early to defeat or injure him. The result was a direct crush, and the protagonist was almost unharmed. That's ridiculous. I fought for a long time, but Gaara didn't move from beginning to end? Then what's the point of your previous description of him dodging and hiding underground? His sand was also a decoration, and the magnetic escape at the back played a role. This is Gaara's home field. There is sand everywhere. The protagonist can use sand ninjutsu to sense Gaara who is hiding underground. As a result, Gaara becomes a blind man, gets beaten with his eyes closed, and is in a hurry. He is still a shadow level, and he is almost a genin Gaara. The protagonist is really invincible. Too rude. The front is bragging wildly, and the back is crushing it forcefully. It's like the return of the Dragon King. What do you think?

After finishing the update, I just went to the Dou Po Douluo fandom area and came back with a lot of emotions. Times have changed, but I believe there are still many authors and readers like me who have not changed. I don't insist on some lofty system, golden finger, grandpa treasure, I just ask that the combat power is not broken, and the logic is at least passable. I don't insist that the protagonist be handsome, watchable, and not ugly. Not to mention remembering the knowledge of the earth, I am already a top student in 211 985, and my talent is extremely strong after time travel. All the important supporting characters are beauties and wives... Such a [template]... Oh! I don't say that this book can confer gods, forget it, and I won't compare this book with Zichuan's Exotic Demon Doctor or anything like that. I just want to read a book that has a certain tension, a fairly self-consistent logic, and barely any twists and turns. It's poisonous, and small loopholes don't matter. It's not highly toxic, and it just crushes the reader's IQ. I just read books as usual and get passionate and moved by the literary world, that's all. As for the so-called [Shuangwen Template] [Life is already miserable, just relax when reading novels]... I just want to say that meeting each other is fate. It is fate that we can meet here, I can see Lao Fan's book, and readers can read my book (forget it being the first recommendation, I don't think this thing is reliable). If you don't watch it, you won't waste your time. If you are working full-time, it may be more stressful. If it is a trainee sign and talks arrogantly and unreasonably (in recent years, it should be called a troll), instead of pointing out opinions with reason and evidence (just like [Blue Eyes] before) or [I am the author's biological father, so I have an obligation to guide the author in writing a book]..., I will most likely not pay attention to it. There are not many book writers who can still insist on this writing method! Lao Fan, here's to you, I'll give you 1,000 coins. Maybe I said a little too much, sorry.

I have read so many fanfics, and this one is the most creative. The concept is very unique. I hope the author can write in his own style.

The choice of the protagonist Daimaru is very interesting. In the normal plot, a supporting character who is reincarnated in the dirt becomes the protagonist in this book, and he is still chasing Temari, and Shikamaru is green.

This is the Japanese light novel I really want to read...

I can't understand the author's explanation of the drought in the Land of Wind. The western ocean monsoon can blow away water vapor to create an arid desert. It is difficult to explain. It is not an inland wind. Coastal baselines are all temperate marine climate zones, such as Western Europe. For example, Atlantic water vapor is carried by wind to the far interior of the Eurasian continent and under the Tianshan Altai Mountains in Xinjiang, forming the fortress of Jiangnan with abundant water and grass. It is better to say that there are tall mountains between the Kingdom of Rain and the Kingdom of Wind, which form updrafts but are difficult to cross the mountains. The altitude is very different from the plateau of the Kingdom of Earth. Use the Tailed Beast Jade and Earth Release to dig into the mountains and dig into the ground to open up the passage of water vapor to and from the Kingdom of Water, killing three birds with one stone once and for all.

Although I am an old prostitute, I will not do it for free if the novel is good and appetizing. Come on and write!

Farundehou

The book is very good, and the plot has not been so good for a long time. Only when he faced the two female team members, he explained it very clearly. He did not warn others about prying and shared everything. This is a shortcoming, but he is already in front, so there is no use saying anything. He just looks really impatient.

I just went to the Douluo Dou Po fandom area again on a whim. They are all a group of people with apprenticeship signs who have not reached lv3. They don't even have nicknames. They are just book friends XXXXXXXX expressing their opinions: [If you don't want xxx, you should kill xxx with xxx] [Marry xxx, but if you don't marry me, I will be released] [The author should write xxx, it would be boring if you don't write xxx] I'm done. These people with trainee signs, who are not even at lv3, and who don't have nicknames, are all great writers in the literary world. Yeah, it's my colored pen. It's a pity that you don't win a Nobel Prize for Literature. No, it's because Nobel's standards are low and not worthy of your intelligence and foresight. [Before time travel, you must be a 985 211 graduate and get a doctorate from a famous international university in the world. After time travel, you must bring the system. You must memorize the plot word for word and remember all the knowledge before time travel. The person must be stunningly handsome and the family must be prominent. At least he must be a young man. And the talent of the protagonist must be awesome. It is easy to learn anything quickly. There must be many girls, and they must be brainless. In other words, as long as he has a name. The slightly prettier supporting characters are all the protagonist's harem] You are both dads, so you are all obliged to guide the author in writing the book. I can't learn from your wisdom. I'm too stupid. I can only read Lao Fan's books. Well, a fool like me is not worthy of reading the book review section of Douluo Doupo. I really can't learn it!

The beginning is very readable, there are very few Naruto books with Suna Ninja beginning, and the author has written novel ideas that are very commendable. However, the plot completely collapses from the middle to the last part, and I suggest new readers to abandon the book after seeing Onoki defeating Onoki in the Northern War. Ultimately, the reason is because the author hopes that even though the protagonist appears as a time traveler and his strength reaches the super shadow level (the main plot of the Akatsuki organization has not yet begun), the plot of Naruto still proceeds almost according to the original plot. If it were just like this, the problem wouldn't be big, it would just be like pirates following the ship. The key author completely absorbed the most criticized "blood theory" of the original work. Your efforts and your choices are completely unimportant, as long as you give birth to a good child, others will fall into the lap of the aristocratic family. The protagonist is already beyond the movie level, and has no idea that man can defeat God. He thinks about how to hold Naruto and Sasuke's thigh every day. The final big boss is Kaguya Otsutsuki. The protagonist made a series of preparations. In the end, it was Naruto Sasuke who defeated Kaguya. The preparations of the protagonist seemed to be ineffective. Similar to "Three years after I graduated, I bought an apartment in Shanghai through hard work. I paid 100,000, and my parents paid 10 million." I have already been fed the blood theory of the original work, why should I be fed it again by the fans

This is the Daimaru I imagined!

Aka no Sadust Daimaru, are you feeling immersed?

This author wanted to write a book to make money but was unwilling to cater to the readers. He wanted to write a web article but also wanted to have a deep style. The result was that everything was different and awkward, especially for the new book. Whenever he had the opportunity, he couldn't wait to publish his crappy thoughts. He pretended to be dead when others refuted him. He was a very sick young man, and he could compete with that Hongye Zhixuan.

Damn it! Lao Fan actually opened a new book! Four recommendations, keep it up＾0＾~ I think the titles of the books are "Savior of Sand Hidden" and "Red Sand Sculpture" 🤭

Personally I don't think the recent plots are very watery, and I don't even think the previous plots are very watery First, Masashi Kishimoto is also a writer. Naruto is a serialized, high-pressure commercial work. This model has certain damage to the logic and integrity of the work itself, so I want to write a Naruto fanfic well. We must face the loopholes in the original work itself and repair them without destroying the literary value of fandoms, which are independent but dependent works Secondly, I think the author's recent plot is a deconstruction and reshaping of Naruto. It is about how to find his own way in the corners of the original world with few depictions and few constraints. The characters used by the author are all like this, and his success can be seen in the creation of Kurama and Saya. The same is true for Daimaru's recent interpretation of mythology and so on This kind of reshaping and filling is a very good fan spirit. It is the essence of this book and requires a lot of energy to conceive and repeatedly consider Thirdly, it is very rare and extremely rare to achieve excellence in straightforward descriptions. Foreshadowing and side descriptions are essential to making the plot exciting, or at least logically smooth. Without the seemingly "watery" Q&A with Yakumo during the escape, how could there be as much excitement as today's women's fights? And I think that these things that have been spent on, even if they do not directly promote the plot, still reflect the author's hard work and cannot be counted as superficial. Although today's online articles have their own influencing factors, they are still literary works after all, and many techniques are indispensable To sum up, I personally think that the recent plot/exploration is very good, and I was personally attracted to this book for this reason. If the author wants to make a career in Noda's Infinite Streaming/Main Naruto novels in the future, please stick to this path.

It feels a bit like a eunuch. . . To be honest, Sand Ninja had a really amazing start, but then there was too much to write about in the middle, it was too mixed up and not refined enough, and then the ending ended in a bland and abrupt way. . . What a pity. . My grades were passable at first, but then after the exam and the Iwa Ninja fight, I started to learn all kinds of water routines, water theories, and various interpretations. . The interpretation is fine, and the second design is complete, but when I repeat it again and again, I am really speechless (especially the artificial garden and lunar orogeny, which are just tools. Just explain the setting, explain a few chapters, and repeatedly talk about the theory, so I think it is true). . . I hope the author will be more concise later. If the story is well written and the setting is streamlined, it will be perfect. . .

People often give me opinions, saying that this is not good and that is unreasonable. They give me advice on how to write a Naruto fanfic, how to arrange it to make it more enjoyable, and how to set up golden fingers. To be honest, after writing the first Naruto fanfic, I didn't originally plan to write a Naruto fanfic. All the information I collected before was deleted, and the setting of the first book was almost forgotten. So this book of Red Sand has nothing to do with the first one. Someone asked me why I wrote tens of thousands of words and didn't point out the golden finger. I didn't even have a clear main line and didn't know what the protagonist wanted to do. ​ Style question! I think rebirth with memories is actually the biggest cheat. If the cheating gets bigger, adding a redundant system, a magical skill or something, it simply destroys the balance. As for the main plot, I actually write to make myself happy a lot of the time. I just let it go with whatever feels good, the rhythm, etc. They are just genin. The safety of the ninja world is in danger. It is the protagonist's turn to speculate? At least there's no need to think about it now, right? It is so tiring to survive after traveling through a time travel, and the protagonist is not like the protagonist in the previous book who takes the risk of death at any time. He is always ready to fight and must use any means to improve his strength. The protagonist of this book travels through more than ten years, unlike the previous book which only had a timeline of seven or eight years at the end. The protagonist is very stable. As long as he doesn't seek death, he will basically not die. So why bother messing around? Say something to make everyone unhappy. As for the protagonist of this book, I would rather let him steal beautiful women and start a harem than write boring dramas like beating up the Ten-Tails Jinchuuriki and saving the ninja world. Upgrading to fight monsters and kill rebellious ninjas, grab the Sharingan and catch tailed beasts, punch Obito and kick Madara, unify the ninja world, etc. It's boring, okay? Trying with your female teammates, wouldn't it be nice to look like someone with blonde hair and long legs? Let's wait until the beauty is embraced and then think about the next step.

Lao Fan, please stop putting it on the shelves. You have to work hard to put it on the shelves and add more updates. If you add more updates, you will stay up late, and if you stay up late, you will become bald... Isn't it good to have sex for free?

The number one girl group in the ninja world!

By the way, did Naruto really work hard? First of all, the Bagua Four Symbols seal will continuously convert Nine-Tails' chakra into Naruto's chakra. It's a bit ridiculous that a jinchuriki requires a large amount of chakra, but Rin can make a counterexample. Besides, no matter how much chakra a baby has, how much chakra can it suppress the Kyuubi? He is born with good physical strength, which means that general physical skills are no problem. The shadow clone learned quickly and reluctantly thought that the compatibility was high. Later, when facing Neji, he relied purely on the nine tails to cheat. Is learning Rasengan considered hard work? After a few years away from Konoha, he basically strengthened his taijutsu, and Kakashi would have to teach him chakra changes in the future. In the end, Kyuubi was inexplicably convinced and became the perfect Jinchuriki... Before, my parents collected a large amount of rent from Kyuubi in Real Waterfall. So did he really work hard... I think Hashira worked much harder, at least at the beginning of Shippuden he was at the level of a jounin without relying on blood stains. Neji died because he believed in his mouth escape. Compared to Sakura, she did not believe in Naruto's mouth escape🤫.

Not very good, the plot started to become stilted and dragging after the chuunin exams.

The backend is really neither Hokage nor ninja. . . If we change the historical background, it is the historical struggle for hegemony that talks about how a country develops its economy and achieves hegemony through reforms. . .

The male protagonist is pretty good except in front of Temari. He is a very arrogant male protagonist. I feel that Temari is a failure. He has inexplicable emotional scenes, and his character is too boring. His personality is boring and boring.

To be honest, it is unnecessary to emphasize the savior's strong luck throughout the article. Although the world view is like this, there is no need for fans to follow it. Then the original Jiraiya died, how did you save it? Don't readers want fans to supplement the original work? You've saved me, but why don't you change the disgusting lineage theory in the original novel? I wonder if everyone is annoyed by this?

Very good book, almost missed it. It's bland but good, it's a masterpiece among fans.