The Mountain That Isn't There

Total score: 82 Author: Zhizi Zhiyu Type: Virtual online game Reviewer: Yu Yun Number of words read: 220,000, 100% (the book review only covers the first volume) General comments: Online game skin, soft science fiction, it has rigorous and meticulous rational logic, but also has humanistic content that triggers thinking. The creative subject is slightly misaligned with the overall younger aesthetic subject, so that a popular theme and story has become a niche text, which has to be said to be a pity. Main contents: Online game version of Theory of Evolution + Online game version of Resident Evil + Online game version of Prince's Revenge. (The author himself has shown the outline, so it's useless if you don't use it.) Detailed review: Title & introduction: 8/10 Compared with other online game article titles that are seriously homogenized , this title is more concise and atmospheric, (in my personal opinion) it is highly recognizable, loud and smooth, and you will remember it at a glance. Moreover, the keyword "Buzhou" (mountain) directly refers to the fans of "The Classic of Mountains and Seas", which has a unique appeal to specific readers. The lengthy introduction is in sharp contrast to the simplicity of the title. If you ask me, it is better to stick to the "literary youth" style to the end, show the author's writing characteristics in the introduction, and carry out certain screening to avoid some readers who are accustomed to reading novice articles from mistakenly entering. Genre score: 3/5 It's not appropriate to classify it as reality, nor does it seem appropriate to classify it as a game. It's really hard to classify this kind of text that has dual lines of reality and games and the two are equally proportional. Generally speaking, online games are more prominent in the interactivity and confrontation between people than stand-alone games. For example, in Richard Barth's role theory, players can be divided into two categories based on different interaction objects: killer types and social types who interact with other players, and achievement types and exploration types who interact with the game world itself. From my personal point of view, the author does not want to rely on simple numerical systems such as rankings to reflect this different interaction. However, if the systematic expression of the game world is too obscure, it may cause some readers who are accustomed to seeing numbers to be unable to distinguish the boundary between reality and games. In particular, the narrative structure of this article is too jumpy, which can easily lead to incomprehensible misunderstandings. Basic skills: 14/15 There are very few typos, the use of punctuation marks is also very standardized, and there are no ill sentences or weird rhetoric that will affect the expression of information. In this regard, it can be said that the basic skills are solid. Many metaphors are so vivid and accurate that people can still recall them after closing the book. This kind of skill is still quite rare in online literature. The writing style tends to be relaxed and humorous, with wisdom found in the plain and simplicity found in the joking, giving it a sense of ingenuity but not craftsmanship. As for those who comment on this article's "literary youth", they have never seen real literary youth. The author's age has obviously passed the stage of life where he "expressed his sorrows in order to compose new words", but he has not yet reached the stage of "but said it was a cool autumn", so the writing style is a bit inconsistent. Sometimes it is a joke, sometimes it is a profound discussion of the philosophy of life. This language style, which may be called moderate, has no appeal to younger readers, and is a bit frivolous to readers who pursue text texture and thinking. On the whole, it is a kind of text that is very suitable for telling stories but not suitable for talking about people's hearts. The flaws are not hidden, and the author's personal style has gradually taken shape, which can be said to be excellent writing. Opening: 6/10 Let's first talk about why some readers find the opening very discouraging. Things like the Three Golden Chapters are definitely not applicable to this article. For the time being, I will only analyze the difficulties and poisonous points of the first chapter for some groups of readers. At the beginning of the story, the protagonist Jiang Ruo enters the game and sees Buzhou Mountain. Game scene, time point (1). Quickly enter the memory, thinking of the orphanage and the mountains behind the orphanage. Realistic scene, time point (2). Thesis defense, introducing the core concept of this article "evolutionary algorithm". Realistic scene, time point (3). The four senior brothers went online from the dormitory to the barbecue restaurant. The real scene changes to the game scene, and the time point returns from (3) to (1). In terms of text structure, the first chapter is a very exquisite circular narrative structure, which also opens three important story lines of the entire novel: the past tense life experience line, the present tense real-life entrepreneurial line, and the present tense game exploration line. At the same time, four members of the protagonist group appeared, including supporting characters Meng Shugu, Professor Jinye Company and others. So why are you being persuaded to quit? There is too much information. When many people read the first chapter of an online article, they have the mentality of appreciating cheats and cheats, that is, paying more attention to the characters than to the story itself. However, in this opening chapter, the narrative structure is complex, there are many characters, and the hook is open. However, the hook is too high-end, and there are no distinctive character traits. Therefore, the first impression will be that "you can't understand", and you will give up your patience and interest in exploring the subsequent chapters. Therefore, from the perspective of online writing, the quality of this opening chapter is not high. But from a literary point of view, this is an opening chapter that very much demonstrates the author's skills and writing attitude. Plot: 18/20 This is a very subjective high score. Of course, it is also to encourage the author. I understand your narrative structure and think this narrative structure is excellent, and I am willing to continue reading. But from the perspective of the mainstream public (?), It is recommended that the author add a dividing line or blank line when traveling between different timelines, different narrative perspectives and scene environments. I don't believe there are still people who can't understand this. In addition, this should not be a long story that can support a million dollars (if there is an online game version of Yin Ying Zhuan, pretend I didn't mention it). At the same time, I also hope that the author will start well and end well, and not waste the word count. Character design: 15/20 Compared with the exquisite story, the character design in this article is not eye-catching enough. Due to the proportion of the protagonist Jiang Ruo's role, coupled with the twists and turns of his life experience and the reflection of his personality copy "Three Thousand Questions", the overall image is very full, and he is a character worthy of further study. But other than that, the characters are a bit thin, especially the other three members of the protagonist group. When I read through the plot for the first time, I didn't remember the names of these people. When I sorted out the plot in my mind, I just used "male supporting actor" instead. When I was preparing to write a book review, I took some notes and discovered the weakness of the character design in this article. To sum it up in one sentence: there are no characters that must exist, only tools needed for the plot. The phenomenon of character toolization is a bit serious. Three-dimensional and real characters should be irreplaceable in the plot, but each person in the "protagonist group of three" and later the "medical student group" does not exist as a separate individual, but as a whole concept. The same sentence can be said by supporting character A and supporting character B. This is no problem in promoting the plot, but it is difficult to distinguish different characters in terms of language and behavior. If the same sentence can only be spoken by supporting character A, different characters can be created from the details, and as the plot unfolds, the characters' images will be distinct and prominent. In fact, this kind of problem appears in many online articles. If a villain is needed here, a villain will appear; if a helper is needed here, a helper will appear. As long as the plot requires it, there is no need to consider the character's inner personality and behavioral motivation, just let him appear. Thanks to the author's own writing style and plot structure, the flaws in the characters have been covered up to a certain extent, but as the story continues to develop, this rough design of the supporting characters may lead to the collapse of the description of some "big scenes" where multiple characters confront each other. Creativity & Concept: 8/10 The idea is very good, but the logic is not rigorous enough. For example, the grandfather paradox was briefly explored in the later part of the first volume. When examining the impact of the "past" on the "future", the results were mostly inferred from a single factor (this is basically a taboo in historical science), and there were really few parameters. However, this is not hard science fiction in the first place, so there is no need to nitpick on this issue. Relatively speaking, the direction of the plot of the protagonist in the article is more worrying. The happy ending seems hypocritical, and if it is too real, it can easily lead to arguments about three views, especially when it involves certain moral ethics. Emmm... I remember that Prince's Revenge is a three-part novel. The killing ending is coming... Subjective comments: 10/10 I very much appreciate the author's involvement in the dislocation and disconnection between technical level and ideology in the second half of the first volume, because to be honest, this is also my objection to many rebirth of a powerful country. It has never been said that when a person returns to a certain era, what technologies and theories he brings will definitely make a qualitative leap in the technology of a field. Lacking the necessary cornerstone of social ideology, the lessons learned from countless failures, and the lack of a solid foundation of materials and equipment, this daydream of rejuvenating the country through science and technology can only build a castle in the air. Sooner or later, like the Gaishan tribe in the article, it will become a sick and torn society, and will eventually be cut off by history. Probably due to an occupational disease, I actually read this novel as a social experiment report. After all, a lot of the content in it is too consistent with various humanities disciplines. Good books will always be discovered. Don't worry that your novels cannot cater to some people. Believe that some novels are also selecting qualified readers. Come on~

The first volume is finished. Do you think about slaughtering the fatteners?❤️

Crying in the storm❤️Thank you everyone for your insight into the street❤️

This book is so good! Sir, have you written other books before? Or if you like it, it's fine. I've been recommending it in the recent book shortage.

Come on 😊Good night

The writing is good, the game is good, the mind is big, the plot is good for the game, but the reality part is bad Personally, I don't quite understand the meaning of writing about things outside the game in such detail, and what is the special meaning of including memories? I came to watch the game. I am not interested in the protagonist's past, especially the tragic past. I felt like I was eating a big meal when I suddenly took a bite of bitter melon. It was a pity to abandon it. It was so bitter to eat. I will still support it. After all, it is a rare good book. But can you reduce the description of reality? Most people who read this book mainly watch games. People who read reality go to the urban channel. Reality is so skinny. I don't want to look for reality in my childhood.

The creativity is there, the writing is there, and I feel like I have an outline after reading the introduction. It all depends on the plot. Once the plot is written, the book will at least be a source of information.

I don't understand the setting. If the time flow in the environment around the player is accelerated, how can we interact with NPCs and monsters? For example, if the time in the protagonist's environment has sped up more than three hundred times, then in his eyes, the behavior of NPCs and monsters has also sped up more than three hundred times. How can the protagonist still fight monsters and communicate with NPCs?

I don't have much money, but it's definitely possible to book a full subscription. The author must keep writing. There are very few novels that can be read calmly, let alone game novels.

I have read a few new books I discovered on investment. They are good, not bad, and quite interesting.