Naruto: The Twin Children of Destiny

After reading it in one sitting, I was surprised that it wasn't popular. There is a lot of emotional sustenance from the author in this book. ... But then, when I think about it carefully, I feel like a piece of jade that has not been polished to fine enough quality. Maybe Qingshui will become a kind of feeling for me in the future... I look forward to some degree of conflict and difference between him and Obito's character, and to understand the identity and part of it. The details of how this will come about will have to be seen later. All in all, loved this book.

I'll take your first ten thousand reward~

This book came to me on a whim on December 1, 2018. I was so inspired that I immediately conceived the outline and uploaded it in code. It's rushed, but full of enthusiasm, and I want to stick to the end of this story. Originally there was still a first half to this story, but considering that when I was a child, I was a genin and chuunin enjoying myself there... I simply started writing from the breaking point of upper nin. As for updating, we currently cannot do it twice a day, but we can guarantee one update a day, and I will write more if it is empty. I need your suggestions, discussions, and evaluations. I will read all the comments you write, read them carefully, and finally find time to reply in a unified manner. Also remember to give recommendation votes. Without recommendation votes, I feel that what I write does not have a sense of recognition. I don't hang around, I don't play in Tieba, and I don't have any writers' groups, Naruto groups, or 2D enthusiasts. I don't know how to promote it and I'm too lazy to do it. So if I think it's interesting, I'll recommend it. I'll be more motivated when I see the number of clicks and favorites that increase every day. To be honest, I check my favorites in the background at least dozens of times every day... Especially for small farmers, one more favorite can keep me entertained for three seconds. I personally feel that I am worthless... Mark it and see if I find this behavior particularly interesting when I look back on it in the future. Finally, a cry from the soul: "Salute our common Hokage dream!! Target collection of 100,000!! Let's go!!"

I have always felt that Uchiha Mikoto is suitable to be a wife

I saw the comment section and read the book again. I personally feel that the rejection of the contract for this book was not very unexpected. To be honest, I only read the first chapter and had no desire to continue reading. It's not that the writing is bad, it's because a guy with a complicated life experience like Kakashi appeared at the beginning... How to put it, I don't know if everyone who watches Naruto knows about Kakashi's life experience. At least I am the type of reader who doesn't know. Because of the anime, I stopped watching it after seeing Sasuke leave Konoha. I know about this cool teacher, but I don't know about his childhood experience. So if the Naruto story starts with fighting, training, etc., There is no problem. But if the original character appears at the beginning, it will still be a very complicated life experience, and the character's experience is not introduced at the beginning of the animation, there will be a sense of strangeness. Because these character settings do not need to be revealed in the first chapter, even if you introduce the background of the world, it will get extra points than if you introduce a character in a long way. The characters are presented through the plot, especially the original characters. I feel that there is no need to use too much pen and ink to introduce the characters straightforwardly. As a reader, I don't like reading this at all, maybe others like it. If you meet the protagonist Naruto or Sakura Sasuke at the beginning, and directly introduce the three generations of their ancestors through narration... I feel like I can write a side story. I focused on reading the comment section and found that readers mentioned that there seemed to be no battle of wits in the book. As far as Naruto is concerned, what I like most is the battle of wits in it. The chunin exam is the climax. In Konoha, I don't like Naruto at all. Instead, I prefer Sasuke and Shikamaru because one is handsome and the other is cerebral. As for Naruto... If he hadn't been the protagonist, he would have died hundreds of times. The most outstanding element of Naruto is the battle of wits. Whether it is the competition between forces or the confrontation of individual strength, it is very interesting. I feel that the protagonist's brains will be more popular. I thought it was very good after reading the first chapter of Naruto: The Savior of the World, and it felt like it was going to be popular. Why? Because there is a lot of wit and wisdom involved, the protagonist is completely cerebral. Later, I added a book to the list. At that time, the book was not popular yet. I was the second or third largest book list owner. I forgot the details. Of course, now that it is popular, there are even bigger books to add to the list. I say this because I want to say that although I cannot write as well as the author, I still have a good eye for reading Naruto stories. Some opinions may be biased, but they should have certain reference value. The above are all personal thoughts and cannot be counted. The author can just take a look at it. In fact, if it is close to 100,000 yuan and it has not been signed, you can consider restarting it. The chance of finishing it is not high, and it is not friendly to readers and yourself.

The writing is quite good, but Kuro Akatsuki is very powerful. Akatsuki didn't cheat Hanzo at the beginning. He was completely doing things to benefit society, but the slogan is relatively loud. Yahiko is a very mature person, regardless of his thoughts or will. The main tragedy of Akatsuki is that Danzo killed Hanzo's men and framed Akatsuki. Hanzo was originally worried about the growing Akatsuki, but now he felt that Akatsuki was lawless and made up his mind to destroy Akatsuki. The people in Akatsuki you write here are all simple and mindless Chuunibyou, which is a bit false.

First of all, the author keeps emphasizing that the protagonist has neither cheating nor talent. Thinking about creating an image of someone who reaches the top through hard work is nonsense. No matter which industry you want to reach the top, talent is the foundation. Hard work can only determine a person's lower limit, while talent can determine a person's upper limit.

I saw the protagonist meeting the Three-Tails in Yu no Kuni. The overall quality is pretty good among Naruto fanfics, but in my opinion there are a few big shortcomings. 1. The character of the protagonist. The protagonist can have mediocre talent and average intelligence, but his character cannot be mediocre! I feel that the protagonist in the book lacks some ambition and wildness, as well as the vision and thinking of a traveler who transcends the limitations of the natives. The protagonist is a time traveler, not a brainwashed native. 2. There is a lack of excitement for the reasons mentioned above. There is no eye-catching golden finger, and the protagonist's mental behavior is not to my liking. Naturally, there is nothing exciting about it for me. 3. Economic loopholes. The first time I read this book, I was dissuaded from reading it because of the economic loopholes set by the author in the first chapter! Now the author has changed the first chapter, but this problem still appears from time to time later! The author must understand that the world of Naruto is not the real earth. Housing prices in reality are not equal to housing prices in Naruto. Naruto is a vast land with few people and no real estate economy. The construction speed and efficiency of ninjas cannot be compared with that of the earth! And ninjas are high-income people! They are the ruling group of people who possess extraordinary power! The money earned over more than ten years of life and death is not enough to compensate for the destruction of the two wooden buildings? The money earned after more than ten years of life and death is only enough to build a sword?

When I saw the Land of Rain, I couldn't stand it anymore. To be honest, the previous abusers are still within the acceptable range. But in the Land of Rain, the author clearly wrote about the psychological description of whether Danzo sending Minato and the others away would be a trap, but he did not take any precautions. Stupidly and desperately fighting with Nagato, and still talking big in his heart, he is not afraid of changing the plot, then you try to change it, you have the guts to say it, but you don't have the guts to do it, in the end, he was beaten half to death by Nagato, which is a set of frustrations. It's really a dog-licking attribute. It would be a bit disgusting if he didn't defect and went back to continue his battle of wits and courage with Danzo. I carefully analyzed Shimizu's position and found that most of the people he cared about were dead, the female supporters were dead, the members of the previous team were dead, and there was nothing left to miss about Konoha except a bunch of bad things. And there is too much room for defection. Kill the root ninja first, maybe you can save Skyfire, and then rebel as a pledge to see if you can save Yahiko, and then go underground with Akatsuki, and then expose Danzo and Hanzo's dirty methods, expose the fact that Danzo collected the Sharingan, intensify the conflict between Uchiha and the village, and weaken Danzo. However, if you forbear and return to the village, with the suspicion of the Hokage in the front and the threat of Danzo in the back, it is simply the best choice. The above are my thoughts after watching the plot of Kingdom of Rain. The author's writing skills are very good, and the combat and character descriptions are good. However, I feel that there is a problem in the design of the protagonist's mentality, which makes him feel resigned.

This... Is a way to die 😰