Song of Unrestrained Living

This kind of opening, in which the protagonist is weak and bullied by the villain and even the child's love interest, is easy to dissuade people. After all, the current routine of the novice novel about breaking off an engagement is known to be disliked by people. Although your article is not a novice novel, the beginning of it can easily be regarded as a novice novel and scare readers away. The author may consider changing the beginning. Friendly suggestions

Raise your hand here if the mask is in trouble. Jie Chao Da Da has three consecutive books on martial arts and fantasy. I sincerely hope that after finishing this book, the next one will be about modern fantasy or Western fantasy. ( ๑ŏ ŏ๑ ).

Anjia likes Xinggui because of the life she dreams of. This feeling cannot stand the test, so when she gets a wealthy life and something unexpected happens, she is immediately shaken. Anjia is not heartless, so she will definitely feel guilty, guilty, and confused, and material things cannot make up for all this. Rose likes Xingku because she pursues strength. She only values ​​people who are stronger than herself. Among the people she knows, the only ones she knows are Shen Zhe and Xingku, so she chooses Xingku. But love is not all of her, or even only a small part of it. She is a Long Aotian-like character, and what she wants most is to control her own destiny. So her path is to become a centralized queen. Meng Qingmi likes Xingkui because she deeply loves Xingkui's previous life, and she regards Xingkui as his previous life. However, I believe that marriage in the past life is only a fetter in the future life. It is possible for father and daughter, close friends, husband and wife, brother and sister, and even enemies. The past life and the present life are two independent people. Testing this feeling is very simple: if Xingkui got Wu Ax's memory by accident, and now a real reincarnation of "Wu Ax" pops up, just see how Meng Qingma reacts. She will be entangled and distressed, but she will eventually return to Wu Ax. (Of course, this assumption is impossible. The Skeleton God personally verified that Xingke's life experience was the reincarnation of Wu Ax) So I think the one who truly loves Xinggui himself and is willing to sacrifice everything for him is Sister Xiaozhujiu. However, love is so unfair to her. She has always been in the bitterness of "asking for something but not getting it" and cannot get rid of it. Xingke doesn't love her. She once made up her mind to drink fire dragon water and become a man in an attempt to bury this love. However, God didn't give her this, and by some strange combination of circumstances, she turned back into a woman, so she finally decided to accept herself and her love for Xingke. She said: "I will give him everything. I don't want anything, as long as he is good to me." Her wish almost came true, but the curse of the fire thief made her reject the body with her own hands. She finally made up her mind to confess, but the response she received was still a cold rejection. She is so pitiful. When I saw this, I almost didn't send a pound of razor blades to the author. I think Xingkui owes Zhujiu an emotional debt. He doesn't know what Zhujiu has to do because she loves him, even though it is unnecessary for Xingkui and is just a burden. As a man, Xinggui is too single-minded and sage, so that he lacks the passionate romance of men and cannot give Zhujiu any tender comfort. He felt that it was his responsibility to Zhu Jiu to cut through the mess quickly and make her forget about this unrealistic love. You can do this to Rose, but to Zhujiu, is this really okay? Actually according to my idea. . . If Xingkui is not the real reincarnation of Wu Fu, and Meng Qingmi and Wu Fu leave, Xingkui loses the last possibility of humanity and completely becomes a fire thief. He leads the fire robbers to farm and fight back, and then harvests humanity from Zhu Jiu and becomes an adult again. However, the Skeleton God denied this possibility and settled for the next best thing. Meng Qingma became bigger and Zhu Jiu became smaller, and everyone was happy. But the hateful anti-harem party😭. . . .

The most interesting thing about the mask novel is that they may have their own sins, but they are essentially good people Many readers say that none of the women in the protagonist is a good person The first Meng Qingya, waited for four hundred years, then gave up love for the world, and finally sacrificed herself to become the new Sanqing The second Rose can be said to be a great representative, and in the ending it is like Asuka in "Eva End", she made it clear that she fell in love with the protagonist from the beginning Even though the protagonist was still an ordinary person who had not awakened at the time The third Zhujiu, except for marrying several women to act as a man, and then letting his brother have sex with the women, he basically never did any bad things The fourth Bai Xueer, except for wanting to sleep with the male protagonist, she basically never did any bad things, except for becoming a fairy in the later period and eating a few souls, but in the end she sacrificed herself and saved a lot of people The fifth Meng Ruling, she has never done any bad things, she is just a silly sweet lady

This author's writing is so awkward and uncomfortable to read.

At the beginning, the child's IQ is low, his logic is not enough, and he is a little savvy. It's easy to write when you write it. I write wherever I think of it. What do readers think? The first three chapters describe being bullied by children in large sections. One or two sentences would be enough. What's the point of writing it in such detail?

The more I watch it, the more uncomfortable it becomes. The characters have no IQ. Some things can be solved by talking about them, but they just don't talk about them. Some people, who already know they are bad people at a glance, insist on talking about it. It seems really worrying (")

She suddenly stretched out her little hand and smeared it on Goshawk's face. There was an undeniable determination in her movements. Goshawk felt relieved for a moment, as if a heavy burden had been lifted off her body. His lingering past, the cowardice hidden in his heart, the murderous intention of thunder and fire, and the lingering guilt were all gone with this light touch.

To be honest, Jie Zhaojun's description of deep love is still lacking in warmth. Why don't I always feel how deeply Bai Xue and Xing Kui love each other?

I really can't understand it. In the end, Xingke actually didn't kill Yuan Hui. It really disgusted me. I really couldn't accept it. This is the most disgusting thing I've read in this book. It's even more disgusting than the male apprentice suddenly turning into a woman and dancing with the master.