Quantum Will

I've read less than a hundred chapters, so I'll briefly share my thoughts. Personally, I feel that the author's priority in shaping the characters exceeds the consideration of the rationality of the plot. It is obvious that in order to deepen the character, more dramas and dramas are added continuously, until the drama becomes more important than the main role. It seemed like everyone was a boss behind the scenes, which made me feel the fear of being dominated. If this is the effect you want, just pretend I didn't say it. Those who have appeared so far and have names are almost all main actors, or they all have the possibility of continuous exploration. For online works, writing like this is really tiring, and readers will have a hard time reading it. There were too many names to remember in a short period of time, and too many characters that seemed important. I just don't know how many of them will really be able to retain enough roles if we expand further. Although the author's writing is very strong, he can flesh out a character in just a few words. But this fullness can also turn out to be a wasted effort. Disposable characters can save some pen and ink. If it is possible to reuse, you can also wait until next time to add explanations. It should be appropriately plump according to the needs of the plot, and there is no need to give the main character treatment at the beginning. The reason why I say this is a small problem is because your writing method makes you invest too much energy into the characters, resulting in too little consideration for the plot. You have applied many classic models, but the values ​​behind the birth of these models are actually different. In the novel, there is a mysterious and powerful organization that seems to be behind the threat to the federation around the world. Ordinary people are not eligible to enter the Central District. If they fail in the draft, they will become repairmen. The polarization appears to be profound. Titan is obviously not a virtual reality VR, but closer to an augmented reality ar. But the physical fitness is all digitized, and the elderly can walk quickly, which makes me feel a little confused. If you are not using your own body, then what is the purpose of this kind of military training? Entering the college draft model seems to be about personal heroism. But the subsequent training model will definitely be to strengthen cooperation and train tactics. All countries possess destructive weapons, and it is impossible for a real war to break out. The purpose of selecting and cultivating talents should be to create a perfect team to handle small and medium-sized operations. It is conceivable that the organization behind the scenes must have ace soldiers with extremely strong combat capabilities, but the Federation seems to have no way or difficulty in dealing with such an opponent. So in the later stage, you should fight in reality, and you must use your own body, not virtual values ​​​​in the game. So I don't quite understand, what's the point of training these children? How do you go from a game master to a super soldier? Okay, I'd better keep watching. (Continuously updated)

To be honest, I think the writing of this book is worse than that of Carved Marks. The early and middle stages are well written, showing the background of the world bit by bit, with a clear main line goal, slowly revealing the background of the protagonist, and interspersed with some small sub-plots. The rhythm is very good. After returning from Japan, I felt completely lost and had no idea what I was writing. There are too many inexplicable supporting characters, which do not contribute to the plot at all. Writing about Luoyi can also lead to the confrontation with disaster and enrich Xiao Luo's background and image. But watching the battle between becoming the "most powerful person" and the "organization" later made my head hurt, so I skipped to the ending. Well, I went to jail because of the drunken incident in the association. The development of the story was so weird that I skipped the fight in the middle without watching it. Then I realized that so many previous chapters were just to introduce the protagonist of the previous game and explain the source of super powers. I fainted. Then I went to Northern Europe. What gods and holy weapons? I was speechless. You've separated the plot too much! ! Some scenes are also funny for the sake of being funny, and the main characters become completely funny. The main plot and world view created before were completely abandoned, and it completely turned into a random fight. Later I looked at the catalog and felt that there was still time travel, so I gave up. I hope the author's new book will make some progress

Isn't it a shootout? Digress

My mother sold it in batches, and after raising it for several months, I forgot the title of the book. I have been looking for quantum warfare, atomic consciousness, atomic war, and atomic will. Then I never found it. Later I searched Chiyo Chiyo on Baidu. Then there is quantum will. I originally wanted to search Wang Chen on Baidu, but there were too many names and I couldn't find it.

I'm still finishing it slowly, but after reading some of this chapter, I expressed my support for the author's writing style. What else is left of the same routine text except a momentary stimulation of the cerebral cortex? Is a novel without the author's painstaking features and spiritual connotation really interesting? How much do you remember after reading it? How many people have you seen in real life who are the kind of villains who are brainless and get slapped in the face? What I like about Peach Blossom is that the supporting characters also have stories, with flesh and blood, such as Gu Xiang, who are both enemies and friends; such as Fatty, who will not belittle the protagonist in order to set off him, and will not be willing to make progress. This is proof that the author treats every character he writes with care. Villains who are slapped in the face for the sake of being slapped in the face have no soul. (But some concise and clear descriptions and foreshadowings in some cool fights can be appropriately incorporated. For example: how to arrange the structure of the plot, how to unfold the entire world view: the competition between the major federations, subsequent competitions or tasks, and how the final potential war is thrown out one by one or together, which can give people a sense of expectation that the protagonist will gallop into it.) And although Taohua is suspected of controlling the harem, it can still be accepted happily. 🤝 But I don't think pretentiousness and slaps in the face are necessary elements for good writing. Too many of them would be boring. Are there any popular Mystical Lords now? Good articles all rely on characterization and story or unique writing style. These are all based on the careful consideration of one's own characters and the elaboration of the story and plot arrangements. Taohua's writing style and seriousness about each character, and his interesting daily clips can also make people laugh while making them laugh. Not every author has it, and it is his unique advantage. After that, you can work on the theme, story setting and plot, how to enhance the protagonist's sense of substitution, set goals for him at each stage, combine the tension before preparation with light daily life, the appearance of supporting characters and more interaction with the protagonist, so that readers are eager to continue to understand the development of the story, etc. There are many areas for improvement, and they are all more attractive than superficial pretentiousness. Why should we cater to some people who have little experience and immature minds, while leaving others to write about the protagonist's character that they don't fit in and don't like? --The reason I write so much is that I hope Taohua can calmly analyze her own strengths and areas for improvement. She can look at the works of other great masters and do more publicity, but what everyone is writing is not necessarily good or suitable for them. Learning from each other's strengths, carefully crafting stories, honing writing techniques, and adhering to one's own style and original intentions are the right ways to not be lost to everyone. I said in the first book that I will always read your novels. I hope this book can also have a good ending, and the next book will go further. ✊

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Game? Modern magic? Fantasy? What the hell is the introduction?

Now I realize that this story takes place in the Red Alert world without Comrade Yuri. No wonder the technology tree is so strange, and a super scientist can create inventions that transcend the world.

If Qian Qian had the body of a mechanical life form, she would then form Wang Chen's left hand. Emmmm Then Wang Chen can achieve full-level cooking skills, full-level mechanical engineering, full-level wilderness survival, quick access to information, and unconscious self-defense... Xiaoyou: System, I can't beat her, she's cheating

I don't know how to subscribe. It's obviously a pretty good book, but it feels like it's not popular in reviews or lists. As a bookworm for ten years, this is the first time I've felt this way. . .

A suggestion to the author, don't put the book in the fantasy category. Use the modern setting in the city and the ancient setting in fantasy. See how the mystery works. Write a good introduction, preferably one that is attractive. Almost all readers read the introduction first when looking for a novel. If they think the novel may be interesting, they will read the content.

I looked through the bookshelf and found a book that hadn't been updated for a long time. I looked at the results again and saw that they were much better than Taofa. Only then did I realize that Taofa had no tj and it was really good for us.

My brain is crazy, Mingxue can't be so cute, I want to suppress this stock Ji Mingxue's daily life: At 7:28:58 in the morning, after the bracelet vibrated for the first time, Ji Mingxue rubbed her eyes👀, looked at the time, and her super power was turned on Di_- 😒 Turn off the alarm clock of the bracelet, straighten the quilt, go into the bathroom, and rub it Rub your hair, tie it up a little, take off your pajamas, and put on regular clothes; after brushing your teeth, remove the cup; get a wet towel to wet your face, remove the towel: change out, take out a dozen cosmetics, dress up in the mirror, stuff them back; put on your coat, open the window, find an angle where no one is around, walk down the wall, go directly to the teaching building, and go to the toilet on that floor first -_Di Turn off the super power Put on your makeup again, take a cold look at the students who are still running outside, and then look at the time, 7:29:40, it is still a little delayed, I turn it on again, enter the classroom, turn it off, and take out the textbook. At this moment, the bell for morning self-study rang gracefully. 😎

Ji Mingxue's stocks soared! I want to buy it! Xiaoxue is the best in the world!

Is Qi Shi the one who finally killed Scarface? ... The other origin ability user is Scorpio? Can gallbladder ablation dissolve abilities? The mirror man's ability won't just disappear... It feels very suspenseful, such a good book...

Quantum Will's daily treasure play is still readable, but the main plot is terrible. The main characters feel like they are wandering around without purpose, and there are several power systems mentioned, but in the end they are of no use (yes, I am talking about mechas). Finally, the front of the book is completely different from the back. A good internet-addicted boy playing a game suddenly turns into a bad guy trying to save the world. The front is completely meaningless 😅 Maybe the new book can consider the main line to be slightly clearer?

By the way, Miss Li Ya's character is so attractive~ She is naturally silly and heroic~ Such books are relatively rare nowadays. I still remember the time when three fantasy/science fiction novels with the theme of "Galaxy" appeared at a time~ It is fun to read them~ But now most of the authors who write such books are conscientious authors¿ Compared with good books of the same level, the results are slightly worse~ I also recommend a similar good book "The Road to AI Awakening".

The story development and character creation written by Taohua are very good, but I feel that there are many inconsistencies in the setting, so here I will continue what I said in this chapter and complete some setting points that I feel are inconsistent, or should I say? Let's open a building. This is where the testing team reports bugs and lets Taohua fix them? 2333

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It's a really attractive work, but a lot of content and images make me feel like it's a mixture of "The Forbidden City", "My Hero Academia" and "Total Avatar", and it feels a little messy in some places. . . And in some places, there is a feeling of writing wherever you think of it, such as some characters and nouns, such as Xu Ziqing, when he first appeared, he pointed out the protagonist's bond with the fat man, and told the protagonist that he would find a way to replace the protagonist, which gave people a cool feeling. However, after school actually started, he immediately turned into the stubborn monitor in "Wo Ying" Another example is the image of the "cheating team". People with cheating abilities, Ji and Li, can be said to have appeared at the beginning of the article, but the word "cheating team" only appeared after the protagonist and the second team actually fought. And as soon as the word appeared, it was as if all the NPCs in the story knew the word overnight, giving it a subtle feeling. . . In short, the work is really an excellent work, but if I had more time to polish it, I should be able to achieve better results.

Come on, Taohua, update 😁 The daily recommendations and monthly passes are all given to you, why don't you give me a pin? Dear! I fully support you!

Not enough, not enough... Please fill me up with peach blossoms! (ಡωಡ) Give you a ticket

Zhou Ke, Xiao Ao has a very high appearance rate, Qian Qian Mingxue QAQ 131

I reached chapter 121 and replied to "Nine Leaves" about this chapter. Personally, I think it's normal to make suggestions when you have questions, but please use your brain first to clarify the basic settings and target audience before commenting and questioning. You can communicate directly with the author, or it's better to continue reading with questions, otherwise it's really a no-brainer. But the fact that some people have raised questions like this shows that Taohua's book is at least quite attractive. No matter how he speaks, aside from the dross, some questions and suggestions are still worth accepting. I hope they will have a positive impact on Taohua's future writing. I also feel that the rhythm, foreshadowing, and fighting scenes written by Taohua have improved compared to the previous book. There will not be a very abrupt ending. I feel that the description length can be lengthened a little longer and the rounds will be more enjoyable. However, this is just the beginning, and it should be more exciting in the future. The world view here has not been fully developed. I hope Taohua will have a wonderful ending ✊

April is indeed a peach blossom lie

To be honest, after seeing the early content, I was still wondering if this was a magical urban novel. I don't want to belittle urban writing, it's just a matter of personal likes and dislikes. I felt relieved after seeing what happened later. Shili is still the same Shili, with passion and friendship, hard work and victory. Of course, there are also the intrigues and tricks that everyone loves. Seeing a lot of people complaining in the comment area, I would like to say that all new readers, please don't pay attention to the previous dissuasion. If you endure it and read the midnight volume, you will fall in love. If you think about it carefully, in this book, the organic girl, the insect girl, and the super-powered girl have vitamins at work! If you think about it more carefully, this book contains super shady plots and plots by evil forces. Vitamins are at work! However, I feel that this book doesn't have enough funny jokes. Although the daze character is very cute, and the protagonist is quite good at making cold jokes. After blind analysis, I decided to buy Zhou Ke shares.

A nice book with a relaxed style. I like the character Wang Chen.

If he goes back to save his girlfriend, the direct result will be that Wang Chen will not be able to get the initial time ability, and then... Meow.

I know a routine called: A good old man is in charge of an association and advocates peaceful development without waste. However, he has a good friend who is at odds with his philosophy and advocates brutal combat levels. Therefore, he and the good old man have a big quarrel, and each of them comes up with examples to make the other party agree with him. But one day, the good old man was deposed and a good friend came to power. Day by day, the association gradually changed from peaceful and happy to full of tension and depression. The strength of the association became stronger, but the hearts of the people were not as strong as before, so people in the association began to leave, transfer, or go it alone, until one day problems finally occurred, and a traitor betrayed the association. Although the association did not suffer too much loss due to its strength, it was like Pandora's box. Problems and troubles kept appearing. At this time, the good old man appeared again and helped his good friend solve the problem. The good friend thought that the good old man would take the opportunity to regain his position. But the good old man continued to stay in the association without saying anything. The appearance of the good old man has alleviated the problem to a certain extent, but the root of the problem is that cruel fighting does not suit the style of this association, so the problems are still increasing day by day. This is when the good friends of the good old man begin to understand this truth. What will this association eventually become...

It's a bit messy at the end and I can't understand it. That is, everyone is fascinated after entering the game world.