A City of Wind and Moon

It's really, really, really touching... I love this feeling so much... But really, your segmentation and sentence segmentation needs to be taken seriously. It seriously hinders your progress, I say that seriously. It is strongly recommended to refer to the segmentation method of "Ten Miles of Red Lotus Wine" by Tian Laizhiyuan. When human eyes see text and then convert it into information, most of them will have a reaction period. Some people who are longer will feel that everything they see is too fast, while some people are shorter and will see everything at a glance. This is related to the individual's reading volume and brain reaction speed. Adding blank lines to sections is a very effective method. People with a slow pace will automatically leave time to think due to reaction speed issues, while people with a fast pace will skip the blanks and read the text. To be sincere, your work is really good, even the emotional ambiguity and symbolic description are very good. It would be better if it were more perfect. I found that you are improving little by little, so don't you think it would be a good choice to go back and revise the previous articles... It's a great article, but not many people read it because of such a small problem. It's really a pity.

Your typo... Orz, before you post it, you should check carefully for typos... Why am I so excited? In the previous chapter, I saw that Lou Hongzhuang's late father was Jing Yuan, and this chapter turned into an elopement for love... - - Random thoughts...

The writing is very touching... A bit like the early days when Tian Lai Zhi Yuan wrote Shen Jade. But... If you don't learn to divide large paragraphs into blank lines, if you don't correct the areas that don't make sense, if you can use short sentences correctly... I bet the performance will be better than it is now. You can read carefully the Danmei of Tianlaizhiyuan, especially the two articles by Chonglian. There is a lot of knowledge you can learn from what she wrote. Also, slow down the pace a little more. The reason why some people feel that it jumps is because the pace is too fast and there are things in the middle of the ideas that are not written out. Finally, keep up the good work~~

I feel that your article is very jumpy, especially the connection between chapters is not good, and it feels very complicated.

That dragon is the heroine's mother. Who is she the father of? Is she the child of someone she doesn't love?

( ⊙ O ⊙ ) Ah! Is it dad?

This Xiao Moumou can't be her father, right?

Sofa. . . . Good book

Your stepmother is outrageous OJZ

Is Nanzhu dead?!!! I guess it's going to be physically and mentally abusive!