Spirit

I have so few collections, sorry for the huge word count.

Why is the heroine so brave? She just carelessly left because of her compassion for the deceased and her desire to know the truth without the means to save her life. If it happened like last time, she would have died (if it wasn't for her). She didn't know how to cherish her own life, thinking that the spell could drive away nightmares or ghosts, so she went there. I don't know where the confidence came from?

I clicked × when I saw Chapter 8, which seems to be the end of a story. Girl, the supernatural you wrote has no feeling, no cowardly atmosphere, it is plain and plain, as if everything is told, without leaving the readers with suspense, guessing, and panic. Because this is my first article and it is a subject I like, I was quite surprised. I clicked on the first chapter, and it's still acceptable. But girl, I'm not trying to discourage you. You should try writing about other subjects first. Once your descriptive writing skills have improved, you can start writing about supernatural ghosts. Most people definitely don't watch this for the romance, but girl, the first eight singles of yours have too much interaction with Yan Mufan. Everything and everything comes out of their mouths, and it doesn't arouse people's nervousness and desire to continue watching. Your description is not strong, the atmosphere is not there, I still can't feel it. Cut out another paragraph and show it to Nai. "Help!" He banged the wall hard and shouted in horror. Just because I was too tired from doing the questions, I closed my eyes and took a nap. When I opened my eyes, I found that I was no longer in the original position. The place I was in was as big as a classroom, but there were no doors, no windows, and no ceiling, but the wall could not be seen to the end at a glance. Just such a scene made the girl start to scream, and then, pieces of paper fell from the sky like snow. The girl had no intention of seeing what it was, she just wanted to find a way out. First of all, your personal pronoun has been swallowed up and gone, which looks very embarrassing. Secondly, your thriller and horror are not strong enough, it is too simple, and strictly speaking, it is a bit childish. That's the feeling you need when writing about the supernatural.

Mr. Rabbit, I want to reveal some secrets to you. A long, long time ago, when I first started writing, my choice was romance novels. As a result, I couldn't write the word "love" correctly no matter how I wrote it. The novel is very empty and weak. The characters are all monotonous. Then one day, I was very bored, so I casually wrote a horror novel, and it got out of hand. I like articles on this subject very much. I like writing and reading. When I read your article, I was looking forward to it. But when I saw this, my mood could only be expressed in two words. Oops. Horror novels are difficult to write and difficult to write. Moreover, this subject matter is relatively unpopular in JJ. In my mind, the concept of horror does not mean that the presence of ghosts in novels is considered horror. Who says ghosts must be scary, but also very cute ghosts. Horror focuses on a psychological atmosphere. Let me ask the author, when you were writing the article, were you ever scared by yourself? Let me ask the author, when you were writing the article, did you ever have nightmares? I would like to ask the author, when you are writing an article, have you ever felt as if there are a pair of eyes staring at you from behind? Of course, a good horror novel does not mean that you scare yourself. The key to a successful horror novel is that you must make the readers feel scared. Many authors who write novels have rich imaginations. But his imagination is often inconsistent with his written expression. Such a novel can only be written in two words, boring. Regarding this novel, I will not express any opinions on the content. I don't recommend you to practice this article. Why, because if it needs to be repaired, it will be a big project. If you have this time, you might as well come up with the next story. Mr. Rabbit, I love horror and mystery writing, so naturally I am very picky about this kind of writing. I suggest you stop writing now. Read other people's horror articles. See how others describe it, see how others exaggerate the terrifying atmosphere. Also, since it is a horror novel, there must be suspense. And it has to hang on people's heartstrings. Mr. Rabbit, I remember that there was a period of time when Kavin was in full swing. I chose to watch horror movies for a month. Since you have chosen this subject matter. I also like this theme. Just throw yourself into that terrifying environment. That's how I got here. Keep up the good work. If you have any questions, you can ask me Q. There is in BS.

Didn't the male protagonist save money for his grandfather, but he was generous in spending money for the female protagonist. Sure enough, love hurts money.

Seeking death again... There are so few comments, and no one is complaining.

Why do you need to take off the bracelet, even though there are such serious consequences?

Ah, why did my comment disappear?

He also complained about how useful the bracelet is. I feel like the heroine is too ungrateful. She has no emotion at all after wearing it for so many years.

The heroine was clearly frightened and even bitten. She still couldn't bear it when she saw the ghost being caught. Gosh, what kind of virgin is this heroine? I haven't seen such an irritating heroine in a long time.