There is a Progress Bar in My Cultivation of Immortality

The main character is okay with the master, the writing is okay, and as I continue reading, the poisonous points are acceptable, but I've only read a few hundred chapters. The poisonous point is that the author really doesn't like supporting actors. Among the supporting actors beside the protagonist, Wu Laodao succeeded in ascending to the next level, but the rest of the protagonist's brothers and sisters all failed? Is it necessary to lick women like that? The female character in the book has a 100% success in breaking through. The protagonist accepts two apprentices, one male and one female. The male fails. After the female fails, the male protagonist takes her from a person near the foundation capital to the first level, and then gives her everything. The two female apprentices accepted by the protagonist's female disciple are hilarious. She favors one who is good and one who is not. None of them were taught well. As a result, when her two apprentices broke through, she didn't care. The protagonist was like a licking dog. The two female apprentices all failed to break through. The protagonist tried his best to save them and forced them to break through. In addition to this, there were a bunch of female characters who had a 100% breakthrough. If the breakthrough failed, the protagonist was there and tried every means to let the women survive and break through. The male character and the protagonist's senior brothers all failed. The female protagonist was concerned to death and was ready for everything. Zhao Qing, the male character, the protagonist's junior brother, had perseverance and a sense of morality, but was weak. He survived the formations that the protagonist brought back and became qualified to practice. He worked hard and did everything the protagonist arranged. He has been managing the sect conscientiously for 5 or 60 years. As a result, the main character What is a horn? When others break through, the protagonist doesn't care about anything and doesn't check to see if there are any problems. As a result, he was plotted when he broke through and his technique was used to fake his death. The female character does not need to be reminded by others. The protagonist takes care of her carefully from beginning to end. The protagonist who breaks through is right next to him. If he fails, he will go over and help him to force a breakthrough. In a word, the woman cannot die and the breakthrough must be successful. You said that Zhao Qing was the protagonist's first breakthrough and he had no experience and was plotted against. That makes sense, but what about next? Things have happened once, and the protagonist is still the same as before. He doesn't care about the male's breakthrough. If something goes wrong, the protagonist will be angry and furious every day. Needless to say, the female, the protagonist will take care of her every step of the way. Several times later, the protagonist's disciple, the male will not care. As long as the male's breakthrough is death, the female's disciple will be 100% successful. If it fails, the protagonist will take action, save her, and break through again.

Even though the writing is good at first glance, I always feel very confused after reading it. I can't clearly see what I'm writing at a glance. I'm confused and I don't know where the problem lies. I looked at it carefully again. It may be that the description often changes too quickly, and the correlation between sentences is not particularly great. In many paragraphs, the subject in the first half of the paragraph is this person, but in the second half of the two sentences, the subject suddenly becomes the subject. He becomes another person. In some paragraphs, several characters appear, which makes it look very awkward. I glance over it and don't know what I'm writing. I have to go back and read it again. This happens a lot. I can only say that although the writing style is good, the story is not told particularly well. It doesn't have the feeling of being narrated. It's a bit too concise and jumpy. There's also a problem with the segmentation. It's better to keep it in one paragraph. The subject is the same person, otherwise it will affect the reading... Overall it is good, watchable, and has potential, but it is not good to have too many court scenes. After all, it is a fairy tale, and the readers of fairy tales are usually not very interested in political battles. It can be the law of the jungle, you kill me and I will kill you, but it is better to avoid the political battles in the court, a bunch of messy positions and calculations, I think it belongs to the spy war genre. The reader's preference is that the number of words is not very large yet. I hope there will be less court in the future. In the category of immortality writing, even if the political struggle is written well, it is really not very pleasing. The next door is the immortality essay. Those who seek immortality must enter the court as officials. There are various political struggles. The political struggle part is well written and true, but it has been criticized miserably. The score is not high. It is not that the writing is not good, but that it is in the wrong category. Choice is more important than hard work.

This kind of book talent is called Xiu Xianliu. Cultivation itself should be more and more difficult the more you practice, and you look down on the common people and regard all things as ants! It's not like today's mortal flow. I don't want to say anything. It's been more than ten years of practicing Qi, more than ten years of foundation building, and more than ten years of golden elixir. It's outrageous that they are all fast and casual. What's even more outrageous is that there are people who practice faster and faster? I have practiced Qi for three or four years and Golden Pill for two months. In my personal opinion, you cannot call mortals to cultivate immortality at all. You should call monsters to cultivate immortality. This book is a breath of fresh air.

Officialdom novels disguised as cultivating immortals, but at their core are officialdom principles summarized by various so-called experts. The problem is that only the parties involved know their true thoughts. The author's writing skills and experience are not strong enough to truly describe them. All officialdom novels have this problem.

It's well written, but I don't know why, but it just felt too bland. It doesn't feel like a time-traveler, acting like an aboriginal, I don't really like this type of thing.

All the friends and apprentices around the protagonist are female and all the male ones are basically failed. Is the author female? Is the pen writing by hand the word "man in the world"?

In the early days of practicing, my state of mind felt a bit strange. It was similar to this kind of practice. Just like when you work, you insist on something, and then persist until you get tired of it, or even feel disgusted. It's a bit uncomfortable that you don't want to persist, and then you have to suppress this emotion in your heart and continue to persevere. The feeling of holding on, and then the state of mind almost comes into play at this time. Suppress similar feelings during practice, and then continue to practice under pressure, and then stop until you are about to go crazy. But if you continue to practice forcibly, you will go crazy. That's it. Anyway, it's quite interesting to watch.

The time span of my recent practice has been too big, and I'm afraid the author's writing will be ruined.

Very good-looking, fits my idea of ​​what a monk should look like

It's really annoying to write about cultivation without the help of a corrupt imperial court. ,