Immortality Begins with Inheriting the Qi Training Sect

Woc, it's so poisonous. You just say that this person is a mortal and then you don't know what it means to poison the foundation. This Ta Ma is a Qi Refining monk who has been practicing for 20 to 30 years. He just slaps his head and kills Ji Zhu? It's like a thirty-year-old chemistry doctor swallowing a piece of sodium metal in his stomach. Moreover, this Kang Rongquan is not a child of sixteen or seventeen years old. He is already at least twenty years old. He only has spiritual roots but no brains? I spent more than fifty yuan to read this thing. Can the author refund my money?

It's pretty good, the description is detailed and precise.

More than 480 chapters later, Kang Dabao is still wandering around building the foundation. Although many battles across levels are described, the overall pace is too slow. So what about Qin Guogong, the old bird of the Fei family, and the geniuses of various families? If they have high combat power, they can do it; if they have outstanding talents, they can do it; and if they practice fast, they can do it. But does Kang Dabao lack the source of nourishment now? ! Who can compare to the jade leaves that build the foundation and the strong foundation? ! Why is the cultivation speed so slow? Excuse me? ! Now a Laozi Tie Liuyun has formed elixirs? Do you dare to say that you didn't suppress the protagonist? 🤐 And, moreover, this book is Sect-ryu! Zongmen style! ! Zongmen style! ! ! 🤐 Every few years there is a big war, and then there are the plots about cherishing disciples, killing enemies, and farming plots. It can only be said that there are very few plots. There are also long talks about the game between the parties and the situation in the court, which all deviate from the topic😴😴.

Brother Shaobai, please write less about cross-level battles. It's a good book. Seeing cross-level battles makes me want to vomit. After decades of cultivation, I was slaughtered by cross-levels. I have cultivated to the point where I'm tired of cultivating immortals? The style of this book is not a cool writing style, an adventure style, but a layout flow, relying on the head to grow the flow. Why are Zhangmenlu and Xuanjian so attractive to readers? It's not based on passionate fighting, right? People are willing to take the life of their opponents as their own and not their own. Don't be afraid to write down a few disciples to death. The description of a strong opponent can make the work more brilliant than three or four mediocre disciples. The last monthly ticket, the recommended ticket, is presented.

That's not to say that I won't let you talk about the general trend of the world and the game between all parties, but to describe it in such a long length will miss the central point of the book. If you just want to write it this way, you might as well give Kang Dabao a casual cultivator status. In Zongmen style, the content of farming development is a big highlight, but the length is very small. The grand world view and situation can be the lubricant to advance the plot, but they cannot take up too much space. It's almost 500 chapters, and it's embarrassing to see this kind of nondescript style. It's said to be a sect style but it's not, and it's not comprehensive in the Machiavellian style. It's not completely pleasing to both sides. As a result, my grades are not going up, so I have to keep writing. Up to now, I don't have much enthusiasm to start. It's tasteless and it's a pity to abandon it😕😕🤢

Overall, I can read it, but I have to skip reading it because the writing is too detailed, even a passer-by who gets hooked after a few chapters is described in depth, which is very unnecessary. Most people feel that the first part is very good, but then it looks ink, wordy, and watery. In fact, it is the same, but it is too detailed, loses the priority, and loses the sense of rhythm. The same rhythm and meticulousness will be saturated! The highlight of this book for me is that it is meticulous, but its shortcomings are that it is so meticulous that it does not distinguish between priorities, levels, and rhythms, and it is too meticulous, and everything is too much. . Too much, too full. It is recommended that the author read some books with a strong sense of rhythm. This book is a pity. First of all, sects are relatively chaotic and can be divided into several lines. Each line highlights a few people, which makes the sect part easier to write. Secondly, the leader must make good use of talents and is divided into several parts internally, such as the line leader, the law enforcement hall, the library, and the biography. Important figures such as Gonglou and others are in charge of their own affairs, and you are in charge of everything. If you don't work hard in cultivation, you will really be nothing but pig's feet if you don't die. The other person will be dead long ago. Also, in terms of rhythm, it is okay to practice Qi to build the foundation for more than 100 chapters, and it is almost 400 chapters to build the golden elixir. How many people are still looking forward to it? I either gave up or skipped watching it. It was obviously about cultivating immortality, but it turned out to be a plot + war. It has no fairy or chivalrous flavor! It's all dynasties, sects, and aristocratic families fighting for territory. . The more I think about it, the worse it feels. .

This writing style is so disturbing. Why is it written so strangely? The description of the fight is also very strange, and the plot transition is also very blunt. The protagonist obtains the Golden Finger Hunyuan Gourd and the process of obtaining it are very bizarre. As far as I'm concerned, I really think this thing is worthy of being something that can only be found in novels. Fuck you in reality, it's really outrageous, too outrageous, I'm really in reality, let alone reality, I don't even dare to think like this in my novels, it's too illogical. Although you can write whatever you want in the novel, I was convinced after writing it like this. I couldn't bear it. I really just received a wave of cultural baptism by the Lord of the Desert. My horizons suddenly improved a little. This wave was deliberately lowered. When I looked for books again, I still couldn't withstand the impact of this book. Speaking of which, there are many people who have read this book. Ah, the 1,000 monthly ticket seems to have results. I thought that if there were too many, it wouldn't help you to come one after another, but I wouldn't be like that. The result was written, and I felt depressed after reading it. Really, before I took the train, I saved several offline novels, and you are one of them. Oops, I didn't read it in vain. It's really numb. I think that the author's current achievements are definitely not because of how awesome he wrote in the past, but because he may have changed later. I really think that after reading the early stage of this book, I watched the section where the protagonist gets the golden finger. I really feel that the long section from the beginning to the golden finger is really too stiff, and it fully reflects the level that a new author should have. I really think that the author The level of performance at this time, no matter how many books he has written before, what is reflected now is really the level of a new author in my eyes. Damn, it is really too stiff. Damn it, I hope the author can work harder. I don't think it is right to say that. I can only hope that the next book will make us all feel good. I also wish it to be better written, so that I will enjoy reading it more and the author will make more money.

It's good-looking, and the arduous journey of the low-level monks is described in detail, and it has the flavor of Lao Qi! !

Name changed? Where is your chicken-feather gourd? Is it the same gourd that took one puff of air and drank three glasses of water? To be honest, there are too few descriptions of the younger generations now, and they are all children from certain families. As for the new recruits, I only wrote about Tang Jiu, who gave a little mention, and others gave some words. In the past, it was very uncomfortable to die if one or two died, but now it is not taken seriously when a good guy dies of one or two hundred. Also, Lao Kang and Xiao Jiang are about to form elixirs. How to obtain resources? It doesn't matter whether they are from the Fei family or the Duke of Guo. The author should think carefully about how to write this exciting point.

Overall very good, main advantages: 1. Writing style. It can be seen that Lao Bai's literary skills are quite good, and his choice of words and sentences are refreshing. The reason why I read it is that there are a few sentences in the first chapter that attracted me. 2. The setting is good. Whether it's gold fingers, combat power, or the different levels of foundation eggs, I think the overall settings are pretty good, and they haven't crashed so far. 3. Transition. The more difficult thing about describing group portraits is that there is a fear of a hammer in the east and a stick in the west, which will give people a strong sense of fragmentation. Lao Bai learned from the writing method of Dream of Red Mansions and followed A's perspective. After meeting B, he switched to following B's perspective. The transition was more natural. Of course, compared to the top ones like Zhangmenlu, Xuanjian, and Chixin, there are still a lot of things that need to be worked on: 1. There is not enough grasp of the importance or priority of the plot. It is too detailed, and the word count is suspected of being too high. For example, the over-exaggerated description of some scenes is really unnecessary. Things that are not directly related to Chongming Zong or Kang Dabao do not need to be so detailed. If the copy has little significance to the main plot or character creation, you can write less or even worry about such a copy. 2. Burying the thread is not good enough. Although the appearance of Hei Lu, Kuai En's spirit body, and Uncle Lian were not completely without foreshadowing, the clues were not buried well enough. Lao Bai originally wanted to express the dark side of things, but it gave people the feeling of a mechanical deity. One or two times can be explained by the sect's luck, but three times is a bit too much. 3. The swordsman is not ruthless enough. The sect's battle survival rate and foundation building rate are too high, and most of the swordsmen are fringe characters. The development of a sect or a family should be an ups and downs. In fact, everyone can use the knife except the protagonist. The better the character you create, although many people will criticize you for the knife, the more successful your book will be. Lao Qi and Ji Yue did this very well. 4. Excessive pursuit of character creation. It can be seen that Lao Bai worked very hard to create group portraits of thousands of people and faces, and overall he did a very good job. But there are some bad points, such as the Kuang family being mean and ignorant, Duan Anle being mature and stable, etc. Lao Bai has said it many times or borrowed words from others to say it many times, but the character's character is established with words (such as Jin Shilun's words and deeds when he was a young swordsman, Zhou Yixiu's murder of his wife and stepson) or a sentence ("You thought I couldn't remember the scar on your neck in Huolong Taoist, Mr. Kang in Nopingshui, please tell me if this can be counted as part of the Ye family"). It's a good thing to give different images to different people, but after all, there are too many characters. It doesn't matter if they can stand up, or if they can't. Repeatedly emphasizing it feels like it is failing. The above are all purely subjective personal evaluations. Thanks again to Lao Bai for bringing us a good book. Keep up the good work.