People Beat up Whitebeard at the Beginning of One Piece

I like your book very much, but it feels too slow. I always want to fatten up and then kill, but I can't persist. The setting of the protagonist is also good, but when he killed the Celestial Dragons in Xiangbodi, he was too hasty. I hope the male protagonist can kill the Celestial Dragons again. It's really arrogant to see the arrogance of a guy who thinks he is superior based on the achievements of his ancestors but is actually nothing. That kind of person really deserves to be killed ten thousand times.

It's very good. It's difficult to write an invincible novel, and you need to be precise. Among the pirate fanfics and invincible novels I've read so far, they are all excellent!

What I wrote before is very good. If you have nothing to do, just open the properties panel. I think I can see it and tolerate it. But if you write a small section of a four-player battle on top of a battle, write it from your perspective once, then write a section, and then write it from your perspective again. I felt really uncomfortable watching it, the water was so strong.

The opening chapter points out the storyline of KOing Whitebeard with one punch, making the plot of Pig's Foot being spotted by Whitebeard and adopted as his son natural and reasonable. After boarding the ship, the young Pig's Foot attracted the attention of everyone in the White Group. They did not believe that the young Pig's Foot could take on this important task, so someone challenged Pig's Foot. Pig's Foot told them with his own talent and strength that he was not an ordinary child and that he had the strength to serve as the captain of the White Group.

The writing was pretty good, but the timeline was so confusing that I couldn't even figure it out. Ace went to sea when he was 17, and Luffy was only 14 at the time. However, when the protagonist joined the Whitebeard Pirate Ship when he was 8 years old, Ace had not yet boarded the ship. Then the protagonist was outside for a while, and Ace had just boarded the ship when he fought Jack. Luffy should not have gone to sea at that time. Luffy only went to sea three years after Ace went to sea, and then set off to the Empress, and then to the Shampoo Islands. Luffy had already arrived, and then Ace was captured. Do you want to eat during this period? And the protagonist is still 8 years old, and he also auctioned the carp fruit from Doflamingo. You almost always look at the attribute panel one by one. But you didn't write it in. Yuyu Fruit is actually written in. Empress 29's preference for an 8-year-old protagonist is pure nonsense, and an 8-year-old child is almost the same as that Kobe. The writing is quite good, but I can't even understand the time period, and some parts are particularly poorly written. Just these two points instantly turned it into a garbage novel.

I use Pirates to write a story about urban pretense. There is no Pirates who goes to a tavern to drink and forcibly drags a woman to accompany the drink, and then lets a pig's feet pretend to be a B.

I really don't understand, since we want to prevent the death of Whitebeard in the top war and the failure of the Whitebeard Pirates, then can't we solve it directly from the source, that is, get the Darkness Fruit before Blackbeard, wouldn't everything be solved in that way? There is no need for Whitebeard to die, and there will be no war at all.

Emmm... It's really ugly. I read the well-reviewed ones, and I feel like I'm not reading the same book. Maybe I didn't get the point of it...

It's really unbearable for an eight-year-old, so I might as well write about a 16 or 18-year-old.

I feel that Pig's Feet talks a lot, and it would take me a long time to talk about it, or it can be said that the author is limited in word count.