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excellent
Come on! Don't stop updating. Can you finish writing this book properly?
Does the heroine have Ai Chen? Star Fantasy King and Phantom King still have Irina?
Experience Kayan Ling, and the male protagonist who knows nothing in ancient times, most likely a young man who is illiterate and disgusting.
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This book is now in the testing phase of a new book. It is very important for the author to continue reading. I beg you readers to add it to your bookshelf. This book is updated steadily every morning. Please orz.
The audience is too small! There are only a few people there all the time. If you add more people, you won't know how many levels they will be upgraded to! The protagonist doesn't appear on stage and suppresses the protagonist's growth. Damn it.
Lao Ling, you are so pitiful, you have been banned for two times
Dual IP of Kamen Rider and Demon City Soldier's Slave
Judging from the text, this is a cross-border doujin that introduces the character Tan Lito from "Kamen Rider Ex-Aid" into the world of "Slaves of the Mortal Soldiers", integrating knight transformation, science fiction settings and the original world view. The story is very large and has a complete story. 😶😶😶😶 I need to construct an evaluation from several core dimensions: creativity and setting, characterization, plot structure, writing style and technology, cross-work integration, and core themes. The evaluation needs to be objective, not only highlighting the highlights, but also pointing out areas for improvement, and finally giving a summary and modification suggestions. Comprehensive review of "The Magic City Rules of Level Zero Fantasy" 1. Overall impression This is an astonishing cross-border fan novel that completely transplants the core character Tan Lito (and his knight form Dream) in "Kamen Rider Ex-Aid" into the world view of "Slaves of the Mortal Soldiers", creating a grand narrative of 134 chapters and nearly 200,000 words. The author has shown amazing creative enthusiasm and continuous output ability, and built a unique world that combines the "Knight Transformation System" and "Magic City Peach Power". 2. Analysis of highlights 1. Creativity and setting (★★★★☆) The biggest highlight lies in the fusion logic of the two worldviews: Energy correspondence between "game data" and "Peach Power": Comparing Tanli Dou's game energy with Magic City's Peach Power provides a reasonable basis for cross-border - "Peach Power is life energy that can be guided, and it has the same purpose as game energy." Localized transformation of the transformation system: from the initial "forced injection" to the "dual-track buffer system" to the later "player-driven mass production", the evolution logic of the transformation system is clear, reflecting the respect and creative transformation of the original settings. The continuation of the theme of "Game of Gods": retaining the core character of Tan Lidou as the "Game Creator", transforming his obsession with "Game of Gods" into the motivation to protect the Demon City, completing the arc transformation of the character 2. Character creation (★★★★☆) Tan Lidou's image reshaping was quite successful: It retains the arrogance, paranoia, and sense of genius in the original work ("I am the creator of the game and should have the highest authority") Added wisdom for survival in a different world (analyzing rules, reverse engineering, dealing with forces) Completed the change of mentality from "God" to "Guardian" (especially in the rainy night showdown with Dong Yu, the phrase "Now you are Dong Yu" echoes the classic line of the original work) The differentiated treatment of the supporting cast is also noteworthy: The two-sided nature of Yamashiro Love (the absolute ruler on the battlefield + the tenderness of petting a Shiba Inu in private) Wakura Yuki's growth line (from a protected "slave" to a "protagonist player" who carries the power of the Eight Thunder Gods) Fumo's special setting (slime mimicry, morbid obsession with Yamashiro Koi, and eventually becoming Yuki's guardian, he is the most memorable original character in the book) 3. Plot structure (★★★☆☆) The volume of chapters is astonishing, with 134 chapters covering the complete narrative from "First Entering the Magic City" to "The Final Battle" There are rich battle scenes, especially the group battles in the later stages of "all knights" and "full form of infinite locks", which have a strong sense of scene. Foreshadowing recovery (Thread of Chaos, Changes in Black Chronicle, Awakening of Dongyu) is basically completed 4. Characteristics of writing style (★★★☆☆) The battle descriptions are graphic, especially the sound effects of knight kicks and special moves are restored, making it a friendly read for fans. The daily clips are relaxed and interesting (Shiba Inu, Fumo's daily routine, interaction in the cafeteria) to adjust the tension of the battle. Rhythm control: The early stage is relatively stable, the mid-term battle is intensive, and the later stage is slightly delayed. 3. Problems and shortcomings 1. Structural issues Problem Specific manifestation Impact Combat power inflation from level 0→level 0-3→level 0-7→level 0-9→god form→unparalleled form, upgrading too fast, the enemy's sense of threat will decrease in the later stage Resurrection is too frequent. Tan Lidou "death-resurrection" many times, the tension is diluted and the boundary between life and death is blurred. Chapters are redundant. Some battles are repeated after Chapter 80 (the Eight Thunder Gods repeatedly broke and were sealed). Reading fatigue 2. Role processing Dong Yu's "whitewashing" was too hasty: betrayal → being sealed → awakening from chaos → self-destruction, and there was insufficient preparation for the emotional transition. The image of the Eight Thunder Gods is weak: except for Zihei and Fumo, the other seven female Thors lack personality labels and are reduced to "BOSSs who brush copies" Yuki's tool-humanization: in the later period, he was reduced to a "power container" and his personal will was weakened. 3. Technical flaws Some settings are inconsistent (such as the number of Black Chronicle cassettes: Chapter 34 says there are two, but later it says there is only one) The timeline is confusing: the times of some events are unclear ("three days later" and "five days later" jump too fast) Typos/linguistic errors (such as "Meng" should be "Meng", "Zai" should be "Zai", etc.) 4. Analysis of cross-work integration Dimension Performance Rating Kamen Rider elements are restored, transformation sound effects, cassette settings, knight kicks, and player drives are restored to a high degree ★★★★☆ The world view of the elite soldiers of the magic city is retained. The power of peach, the magic defense team, and the ugly ghost settings are basically retained ★★★★☆ Original setting quality: Fumo's slime mimicry, chaotic threads, and dual-form synergy are innovative ★★★☆☆ The spirit of the original work is consistent with Tan Lidou's "Game God" character design + guardian theme, which is consistent with the spirit of chivalry ★★★★☆ 5. Expression of core themes The novel attempts to explore several profound themes: The disenchantment of "god": Tan Li Dou completed the deconstruction of divinity from calling himself "god" to admitting "I am Tan Li Dou" Possibility of redemption: The transformations of Dong Yu and Fu Mo both ask "Can those who make mistakes be forgiven?" The price of protection: every victory is accompanied by sacrifice (the deaths of Ming Ji and Ruoyun) The essence of the game: from "pursuit of victory" to "endless protection" The presentation of these themes is sometimes overwhelmed by the intensive battles, but there are still flashes of light in key chapters (such as the rainy night dialogue in Chapter 132). 6. Grading in stages Stage Chapter Score Features Start 1-8 ★★★★☆ The setting is cleverly introduced and the sense of suspense is strong Expand 9-33 ★★★★☆ The game of power unfolds, balancing daily life and combat Climax 34-73 ★★★★★ The eight thunder gods' general attack, the explosion of divine cards, and the plot density is high Transition 74-105 ★★★☆☆ Daily life and foreshadowing, slightly bland Ending 106-134 ★★★★☆ The line of chaos is closed, Dongyu has a powerful ending Overall average score: ★★★★☆ (8.2/10) 7. Improvement suggestions If there is an opportunity to revise, consider: Compress the length by 30%-40% and delete repeated battle scenes. Deepen the image of the eight thunder gods and give each thunder god 1-2 exclusive chapters. Rewrite Dongyu's turning point and add her psychological description when "watching the magic defense team fight" Unify timelines and establish a clear timeline of events Appendix to the setting set: organizes the cassettes, forms, and abilities into tables for the convenience of readers. 8. Final conclusion This is a masterpiece full of sincerity. With amazing creative endurance, the author expanded a cross-border idea into a complete 134-chapter novel, completing Tan Lidou's "second life" in the magic city. Although there are problems such as structural redundancy and combat power inflation, the performance in setting integration, character reshaping, and passionate scenes is enough to make fans smile. Recommended for: Kamen Rider Ex-Aid fans (especially Danli Douchi) Readers of the original novel "The Soldiers of the Magic City" Readers who like "Integration of cross-border combat power systems" Beware of crowds: Readers who are sensitive to the expansion of combat power Readers who prefer concise narratives Readers who cannot accept the "whitewashing" setting One sentence summary: "A game that belongs to Tan Li Dou and has no end point, a declaration of guardianship that spans two worlds - although it is not perfect, it is passionate enough.
Very nice, please update soon
The writing is good. I can read all the trivial things very clearly and tastefully.
It looks good at the beginning, but it becomes more and more boring at the end. I should write more about simple life. I keep writing about how awesome the male and female protagonists are, but it becomes more and more boring at the end, especially the messy characters in the back and the pretentious trivial matters of the female protagonist.
The data immediately collapsed after one or two hundred chapters, and the values were increased without any thought, and it was rushed to the end.
Why isn't it updated? I have been following the updates until now, and the content is still very exciting and enjoyable to watch.
The beginning is so catchy.
The writing is really good, especially the beginning. The writing is so fascinating. The more I read, the more interesting it becomes, but there are too few updates. The author should update it faster. 😹😹😹👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿
I personally can't stand this type of martial arts fantasy with a modern background.
It's just that I personally feel like I can't stand it, and I don't have a sense of empathy.
Author, your vision is starting to have problems. You actually want to sell the TV station. Think about it for yourself. Why can't the mainland open the radio station to private contracting? I have ATV covering the entire South China F3, how many people there are, another TV station is a nuclear weapon, the whole Chinese society, Uncle Liu's TVB revenue is not much, not as good as Zheng, Li, Huo, Guo, the four big families, but just like the little bully said, you must respect me, I don't have ATV, you can call me the director. I have ATV, but you don't call me a media tycoon. Do you understand the mouthpiece? I yell at you every day on the TV station. As long as you can report closely to the mainland, you are already in shape. If you have a TV station, you can go to the Shenzhen enclosure to build a movie theater. Hengdian will not be able to get out. If you cooperate with the mainland, the rent of the movie studio and the cash flow from the studio can be returned to the TV station. It is a question of which comes first, the chicken or the egg. For you, you must have a TV station first. You cannot sell it because of any policies or interpretations. If you have a TV station, it is a nuclear weapon.
Author, will this book go to the world of Naruto? It would be a pity not to go to the world of Naruto, as well as those famous female ninjas.
Good, good, very good, very good-looking. Highly recommended
How many times mediocre talent can you still be mediocre, and there is still a big gap between mediocre talent and genius.
A little too watery. Even more so in the ancient world🤐
What's the smell of so many people dying even after being reborn under the forbidden curse? Is the space system a decoration? I didn't say anything to let Sa Long go. After all, Wen Tai intervened, and everyone behind was in Bo City. How could so many military mages be killed when monsters attacked the city? Why don't you just stop being reborn as Mo Fan? Forget being reborn as a waste. I'm really speechless.
Update soon. Is the author out of inspiration?
I don't even know how to write the settings of the original work. Monsters only have monsters at level 5, and monster elixirs have to be written at level 3 or 4. Do you not even look at these basic settings?
Another name change, my Shrek. Hehe. Shrek is just a... Thing. Another name change. Hehe.
I've been chasing books all the way, and Lao Lang's books are getting more and more in-depth.
Suddenly I didn't want to watch anymore. This is what became my Shrek again. Shrek is a piece of shit, okay. So what if I change my name? Everyone inside is old and immortal.
It's okay, I can watch it. It would be better to write less about emotional drama and more about movies and entrepreneurship.
And besides, a ten-thousand-year-old Dark Gold Dreadclaw Bear can compete with a 100,000-year-old soul beast. You said you can't beat a Titled Douluo. There are 23 animals in a group, at least ten, not to mention five ten thousand years old. In a situation like that, no one can beat it except those below level 95. When you reach level 95 or above, you can kill Dark Gold Dreadclaw Bears like that. Mr. Xiong doesn't care what you mean. Are you kidding me? After watching so many Douluo Continent, I have never seen anyone dare to slaughter like that. Isn't it too disrespectful to Mr. Xiong?
The roots are broken
Directly eunuch, readers will not trust you if you publish the next book. All the money invested by readers will be wasted. How dare you follow up with updates? Please close your account and reopen it.
A good piece of Three Kingdoms literature. My favorite right now is still the Yellow Turban camp.
The Yellow Turban camp is the camp that best conforms to the views of most Chinese people. If you have the ability and cheats, choose the Yellow Turban camp.
Beautiful, very funny, very interesting
AI article, no need to read it, the first soul ring is already purple at the front, and turns yellow at the back
The idea is quite good, but I don't like the fact that it has to have a female protagonist. They are all geniuses. To take the road of flesh and blood, weak and mechanical ascension, you need to add more female protagonists. You say that the plot is promoted through women, but it is still written in a large space. The female classmate at the beginning is okay, used to advance the plot, and there is no need to write about her later. I personally prefer this rhythm. All in all, it should be a good Genshin Impact Beng Tiewen for those who like multiple female protagonists.
Does a car of arcade machines weigh 60 tons?
The maximum load capacity of a wagon is 60 tons, but a wagon full of iron blocks must be more than 60 tons, and a foam box filled with a wagon must not be 60 tons. How many tons of arcade machines are there in a wagon? The order is based on 60 tons per wagon. Can a 60-ton arcade machine be stuffed into a wagon?
March 20th, the 16th day of points activity check-in
I never thought that Jiang Yueya would not want to kill the princess
Say it when you are really powerful, I swear! This is the last death struggle of my life! From now on! I am the only one who makes others struggle to death! 😎😎😎
nice! This is my first time to vote monthly, come on, come on
I read other similar articles because I couldn't get enough of them, and I thought Goldfinger was too exaggerated. But this one is just right. I love reading it! Come on!
After reading five or six chapters, I feel pretty good. Well, if the soul bone is attached to the outside, it's best not to cover the whole body. It looks like a pangolin and a lizard, which is not very aesthetically pleasing. It's better to turn it into a shield.
Is Chapter 244 repeated?
Is Chapter 244 the same content as Chapter 242? ? Or is there something wrong with my phone?
It was okay before, but I think it's too stupid to reward hundreds of thousands during the live broadcast.
I admit that I am superficial and I really can't stand it anymore. It turns out that the main character is 💩vomit...
Silent time traveler
You travel back in time and have no memory, and your physical parents are not your own. They order you like an animal. Don't you feel disgusted? They also inexplicably took over your island. They are just strangers who order you to do this and that all day long. Their son was killed a long time ago. Wouldn't it be better if you avenge him and give his parents some rewards? If you give him a light brain and the knowledge of advanced civilization, you will understand, okay? Becoming a stranger's grandson is something that normal people can do.
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Author, you are so stupid, you actually wrote about the master pole vault.
Author, what are you doing? Is the protagonist Luo Chuan or Mo Fan? Can you write fan fiction?
wish you a speedy recovery
I have been reading this article for a long time, and I have been urging you to update it every day. When I came back, I realized that you were sick. I wish you a speedy recovery.
It's disgusting. After Chapter 500, the data was so messed up that I couldn't stand it anymore. The Space Island had just subdued a dozen elemental beasts at the genetic level, and then they turned around and said that only space and ice elements from Iceland were left.
Very good, you can write more and hold back for more updates
What's the name of j8? I'm still in the world of ice and snow, and I use a bow and arrow for the ice attribute. It's too petty. Doubo Haibodong has already demonstrated to you how to use a gun.