Jade Sword Book List

See Chapter 15. The work is very special. I suggest you listen to Mika Nakajima's "I Also Thought It Was All Over" to understand it better. The author's writing style is a bit green. Under normal circumstances, the heroine's obvious depression is not enough to carry the main plot. In addition, the relationship between the characters is not well connected. For example, Bai Lian should be hypocritical first and then break up, while Qing Xuan should be withdrawn, cold and arrogant before becoming kind. But the charm of the heroine in this article exceeds that of the author himself. Her painful words are just right, like an empty mountain with nothing left and only one cold plum tree left. This special care even obviously covers up the author's relatively empty realism in music, dance, and acting. It is also difficult for the male protagonist to enter the structure. It is impossible for an idol not to talk about basic music theory, but for an empty and sad woman, she dare not even raise her head to look at the world. Therefore, the book is very special, and the shortcomings of the full text are obvious, but this girl is particularly heart-wrenching, which makes her life stop. The author decides what to do. If he doesn't arrange it well, he might be hacked! The book list has been collected, and we are fans of each other~

See Chapter 15. The writing style is very good. Due to the unsmooth camera transitions in the previous article, it is difficult to understand the protagonist and the concept when reading. But when I saw Yi Meng Huang Liang, I liked the artistic conception very much. It is very difficult to modify. It requires a cycle of dual perspectives to capture love at first sight. The opening structure must be adjusted, and the legend should be attached to the meaning to make it simple. Then the names of the two girls still have to be considered, there is no point in stealing the spotlight. Then the male lead makes a clear point, and finally there is a classic meeting. Next is the inner layer. It is easier to enter the maze, so that the reading feeling goes directly to the artistic conception of Yi Meng Huang Liang. In a dream, it is necessary to unfold the affairs of the dynasty and talk about life, old age, illness and death. This scene must be determined to be the male protagonist's love and hate between dream and waking. Then he leaves the mountain and dreams, and picks up the heroine with a beautiful smile, which is a masterpiece. Going out of the inner ring to the outside of Nanman Mountain and returning to the real story, it is extremely real at this time, and then unfolding to the subsequent events, readers will be very satisfied and curious. Small opinion ~ I am a mutual fan of my humble works, the book list has been collected

I saw Chapter 17. I reviewed the previous book, but of course, I didn't survive the book review evaporation incident. The author has made great progress in this article, and the subject matter may be particularly ideal, so the passion and writing style in the work resonate, which makes the first dozen chapters coherent and expressive. To improve, the barrier between writing style and core should be penetrated, which is the author's expectations for the character. For example, the most obvious chestnut is that Mr. Xiao suffered tremendous grief, and that mountain-like pressure did not penetrate into his character. Although the protagonist's character changed as his life experience was revealed, the tone of the writing was not followed up in time, resulting in the protagonist's conflict. For example, on the night when I learned the bad news about my mother, there was a scene where the person under the lamp looked like a ghost and turned into a demon by pressing the knife, which was very good. The one-armed man was pleased with his anger and could profile him. The princess's feelings for him can be written in a more direct and pure way. Characters don't follow the author's mind, but their soul. This barrier also leads to some structural problems, such as the steppe ruthless man should be dismantled and the bloody counterattack should be exciting. For example, you should have a wolf-like desire for the princess, get it and snatch it away! For example, One-Armed's men actually died in battle. He was disappointed not so much in the grasslands but in the Central Plains. The scholar should also have a deeper understanding of the princess and a process of change. The probability of him dying for the princess will be greater. In the end, the man takes the lead and takes the lead, bringing beauty and establishing a career. This is God's start. The list of books has been added, and I am a fan of each other.

After reading Chapter 10, it has strengths and weaknesses, but the graphics are very good and can be added to the book list. There is nothing wrong with the writing. The naturalness between the picture and the characters, coupled with the clever plot design, should be quite popular among readers. The writing is very good, so it is actually quite difficult to improve. The main problem is that the architecture leaves insufficient space for reading. This is a very hidden issue. Let me take the connection of artistic conception as an example. Read the first short story. First, the picture of the man is given, the dialogue is suspenseful, and it has a religious feel. What follows is a series of rapid life switches that underline the pianist's emptiness. Next, the incense is started, and now it feels like the Palace of Eternal Life on July 7th. Perfect! However, at this time, the best thing is to leave a space for readers. For example, a pianist in tears plays a piece of piano music with one hand and his lover's disembodied hand, and then the scene flashes. If he wants to regret it, kneel down and repent. If the incense burner is going to break, you can arrange for him to try to possess it and then have an accident. In this way, the artistic conception is connected, and his story and pain are left to the readers. Next, you can return the incense burner, reply to the same dialogue, and then the daughter comes to act like a spoiled child, the hero loves her, and turns her into his friend or something to ask for help. This allows the male protagonist to rationally use "power" to expand the core and continue to give readers room to think. This book did not do a good job in this area, which makes the writing style slightly limited. It can be solved by repeated reading and relaxing the control of writing style.

See Chapter 12. This article does not include palace fights, CEOs, etc. That are common in female videos. Although at first you may think it is a layered world like swords and swords, but it actually shows a more delicate online game world. The heroine is quite attractive. As for the archers, they can use their double swords to activate the Infinite Sword System and just go up and do it. . . I digress, but she is actually a soft elf girl who is a bit cute. As a result, I didn't pay attention to the male supporting characters at all and just looked at her. The above structure is very attractive and the rhythm is very comfortable, but it lacks real writing. It would be great if the game's introduction and settings were toned down and there were a lot of real-life situations and worlds. In the first chapter, I tried to change the image of a stone gate. Similar to this, there are many details that can be added in the article. For example, when the girl goes down the mountain, she can write a more delicate arc of the downhill slope, the distribution of the forest layers, the condition of the vegetation, and the shape of the mountain in the distance. If there is an overnight stay, there can be animals, weather, homesickness and a campfire. After that, the Blue Whale sails through the sky, you can see the wind, different clouds, passing migratory birds, regional plants and overlooking villages. Taking your time is actually more suitable for such a soft and beautiful character.

Read the updated section. The train in the desert is not a rare artistic conception. I have seen the train in Spirited Away and the empty pipes in NieR Automata. In fact, this is a reflection on human history. Time is the same as sand to a certain extent. After a small and short history, what is left of human beings compared to the world may only be the precipitation of metal. So, what matters now is love and kindness. This article perfectly expresses this artistic conception. The heroine has a relatively strong symbolic character, interpreting religion and human care with a very pure heart, and redeeming the remaining souls in the world. At its core, there is an artistic refinement of realism that is rare among younger people like the author. Pay attention to the follow-up. Desert cities can be more concrete, and stories can take place in different cities, corresponding to different social and historical states of mankind. The characters should gradually become more fleshed out, and various low-level people can be realistically represented. The heroine's magical power should be more clearly derived from art and law, and the existence of dialogue must be complex and dual-sided, so that the train can connect the grand structure as it continuously travels, and must not fall into a tough transition after an excellent start. You can refer to the American TV series Lost, which shows this kind of structure.

See Chapter 15. There are quite a lot of fans of One Piece. In order to write a book review, I spent a long time writing it. . . Japanese hot-blooded animations are actually quite similar in core. In view of the differences in social systems and historical culture, Chinese readers will actually understand them somewhat differently. For example, different concepts of collectives and social hierarchies. The original One Piece film has indeed reached a certain extreme in its core expression of friendship and adventure. In addition, in terms of structure, it is basically a small island, decryption, crisis, reversal and the like. It is a looping single line for the immortal dream. This is also the standard configuration of the passionate migrant worker series. But it is beautiful because the group portraits are drawn in seconds, and the narrative line is exaggerated and full. Once you get used to it, you will have a very good sense of expectation and involvement, and it is especially suitable for young readers. In this book, because the lines have been flattened and stabilized, and the core has been replaced, it has not reached the level of the original work. This type of fandom is quite difficult, because the more you use the original work, the easier it is to interfere with the artistic resonance of the original work's clever combination. The structure of an infinite map like Pirates is even more troublesome. I really admire the author's ability to balance in this book, and I'm absolutely a fan of it. In addition, he tried his best to keep the details and writing style as close to the original work as possible, which is considered a good light modification. If you want to improve, just maintain the current level of writing, try to make light changes, and try to make the culture more suitable for audiences of different ages. Clumsy works of each other.

Read Chapter 20. This book is not friendly at all, and there is no compromise with the market, no concessions to readers, and no preparation for business. Have you ever seen the cramped and withered countryside among loess, rivers, sand, dead trees, winding mountain roads, dried noodles, withered ears of rice? Such is the picture of this book. The layered story relationships and vivid group portraits, like the layers of soil and gravel recording geological changes, extract individual family skeletons into this painting. After reading in depth, readers can feel such pain and have great concern for women. In fact, from the Han Dynasty to the present, such ethics and ideology have never stopped suppressing rural women in the central and western regions. The bullwhip on Fang Tong, the waving people and the cold spectators are actually around everyone. Each picture scroll in the book is similar to the clay of history, which the author lonelyly refined into pieces of black porcelain, scattered in an imaginary town, a lonely self-taste. The book is excellent. The author has an essential resonance with literature. In his intuitive creation, he avoids many mistakes and has extremely high artistic charm. I hope readers can understand what Lei Qiyun means, uncover ignorance and prejudice, and truly love the women around them. To improve, the writing style needs to be polished, and some children and kind people should be used to contrast and balance the overall tone. If possible, civilization, religion, and art should also have a place. Lei Qiyun wants to bring salvation that symbolizes reality, which is wealth and law. Finally, the reading difficulty is reduced, such as adding occupation and appearance, establishing a relationship with the protagonist, and a better sense of reading helps readers travel through this historical town. Clumsy works of each other.

See Chapter 10. Kaguya was particularly popular this year. For a while, the secretary dance almost dominated the screen. Almost all the girls in the Xiaopo Station club area danced it. . . Then I had no time to make up for it. . . The structure of the book is very good, but I obviously haven't read Kaguya, otherwise it would be better! First of all, you can delete all the chapters at the beginning. There is a problem with the author's understanding of 2030. It was an era when China was number one in the world. The presupposition of this era will obviously interfere with this book. The marriage certificate is tantamount to revealing the outcome of the stock market and greatly weakening the unknowable charm of love. Then, to withdraw from the author's interference, the heroine can have some experiences and views on marriage, but she cannot bear the author's emotions. You can't get married if you don't do anything, it will still interfere with the work. Finally, between the three-no girl and the warm man, other emotional lines and constant tests of reality and emotions need to be added. When appropriate, the heroine can be contrasted with cuteness, like a crotch? Hahaha, when the author and the male protagonist moderately fade away and exit, this book will make you shout, give me all the information about this woman in 3 minutes! Because the heroine is so cute~~ I love each other

After reading Chapter 10, as a die-hard fan who has spent a total of 100,000 on the Three Kingdoms game, I was pleasantly surprised by the author's details and depth of research. Many details have a kind of emphasis on the old version of CCTV. The portrayal of the male protagonist makes up for the difference in writing style of foreign history. Because the angle of entry is surprising, the subsequent development is very attractive. Let's talk about the improvements. First of all, Diao Chan and Miss Cai are too late, but there are also Luoshen, Sisters, and Miss Sun. They must be taken down, right? Then the structure of the Three Kingdoms is wonderfully multi-layered. Social core, historical facts, fictional facts, side stories, fan fiction, there is a lot of freedom in structural improvements that can be handled. This is the reason why Three Kingdoms has become a top IP. The main plot of this work has shifted slightly from science popularization to its own world. According to me, the nobles can kill them a hundred years in advance to avoid the tragedy of the Five Dynasties and Ten Kingdoms. Finally, there is the handling of conflicts between the Three Kingdoms and history. It depends on how the author designs it. The problem with most Three Kingdoms works is the reconstruction method and the conflict between the old and the new. I hope this work will become a classic with slight modification~

The legend at the beginning is picturesque, but the transitions need to be rearranged. It would be a perfect start to go through past and present life scenes to introduce the heroine, then switch to family first, and then daily life. If the characters appear slower and the heroine's perspective is maintained, it will be great ~

The book is very good. I saw the killings and touching the corpses. It's a pity that no good things were released. Thanks to the old gun structure, the book started very well. The entry point is very interesting with cross-dressing and cuteness. Already invested. If I want to improve, I can only say that I need to have a deeper understanding of the core of the game. I have never played Lao Gun, so I can only suggest that it needs to be reconstructed and have a different soul from the original. There are also some obvious problems, the characters' language is similar. The perspective of the protagonist is relatively scattered, and there is no need to write about the toilet. From awakening to the frozen state to entering the town, there is a good progressive rhythm and the wilderness map is wasted. It is better to use indirect writing methods as much as possible on the divine level. Ordinary readers have never played Lao Gun, so the introduction and popular science are a bit lacking. These issues are more complex to deal with and can only be balanced slowly.