Surviving on Mars, Connected to Earth Seventy Years Ago

It is still too crazy to write about this era. If the protagonist talks about the future, it will be really devastating.

Read a few chapters. I can only say that the subject matter is good, but the writing is not very good. In Chapter 6, passers-by imagined that the protagonist was a member of the secret plan to land on Mars. The passers-by here are the national elites selected from thousands of people in the launch base. Is your writing too illogical? What level was the country at that time? These national elites didn't know? (Just like now, the launch site suddenly received a piece of information from thousands of light years away. China's xx space battleship formation was attacked by an enemy or something. Do you think this is a national secret project?) This is too ridiculous. If the protagonist is just trapped in extraterrestrial orbit, he can imagine a secret project, but how can he imagine it on Mars? Brain supplements should also be reasonable. From here we can see the traces of AI. Only novels written by AI will be illogical. The strength of AI lies in data and details. Artificial intelligence lies in logic and plot. If it were a human being, such a low-level mistake would not be made.

AI injection hydrology, firm completion. I wrote the things myself, and the water was injected by AI.

It is okay to write down clearly the difficulties in establishing mutual trust between the two parties at the beginning. But if you choose to start from a low-level character and spend 20,000 to 30,000 words on how this person escaped, took the train, encountered thieves, and stayed in a camp, then there would be a big problem. No one wants to see this. Not to mention your age and background, it would be too difficult for people who escaped from the base to take the train with such arrogance...

Quantum storm, an unrealistic scientific phenomenon. Generally used as a fantasy vocabulary in science fiction works. Commonly used in games and film and television works. In science fiction novels or settings, it usually refers to a huge energy storm generated by a runaway quantum computer or the impact of ball lightning, which can serve as an entrance to a parallel universe. Because the time factor is involved here, conventional scientific vocabulary is not used, but this fanciful quantum storm is used. Don't worry too much, the words are not created by the author.

Just one sentence: Personal heroism novel🙂

The author's writing skills are good, the description is accurate, and the story is eloquent. The overall framework is also very good, and the plot twists and dramatic conflicts are quite attractive. Bai Xuan's character design is considered successful, and the environment/dialogue, etc. Are at least not dramatic; but the character creation in the 1970s is a serious failure. It can only be said that the author may have gained the impression of that era by watching movies. However, if you read several relevant biographies or documentaries, you will never see such a so-called base and personnel based on the (Western) personal heroism template.

Being alone on Mars, looking at the blue earth in the distance, looking back at the lonely and empty universe, and the confusion of looking up at a vast place with no home, the shots focusing on the protagonist lack a pessimistic color. Some places are inexplicably funny when read. 'Is this an astronaut who lives in the future, is well-informed, has been selected through many levels, and is going to perform a mission in outer space? Why are you always surprised? ' Thoughts like this. In addition, I don't quite understand why too much ink is spent describing Zhu Xutai. At least he should be written in an interesting way when a small character leverages the overall situation.

I didn't dare to write, it felt good but I didn't dare to feel happy, so I just kept pushing. If you don't dare to write, why write on this subject?

It's beautiful, better written than some apocalyptic texts.

The concept is quite good, but as I read it, it started to sound more and more like AI when I read a sentence seven or eight times...

The heart is good, but there are a lot of flaws. It's not a poisonous point, but it can be seen that the author really doesn't understand the feeling.

Is the author not professional enough and can only get stuck on the plot? This kind of writing is bound to fail. Chapter 40 is still stuck on communication. In the fast food era, not many people are willing to read it.

This idea and creativity is possible. But I hope it's more rigorous. In that era, when you received news, you didn't report it to your superiors, but instead secretly went to the capital? Do you have no idea why a satellite center was built in a ghost place in Jiuquan in that era? The advantage of the meteorological environment is on the one hand, and it is easy to keep secrets with no one thousands of miles away. On the other hand, how did you escape? Without a letter of introduction, you can't even buy a ticket, right?

I originally thought it smelled like a certain cat from Mars, but at first I thought it was in this direction. As a result, we turned to the familiar direction again. The short drama flavor is so strong. Seriously. To this day I still don't remember the main character's name. Going in this direction feels like it would be better to vote for something. At least it's straightforward to watch without thinking. But having said all that, I still look forward to seeing if there will be any changes. After all, there are fewer and fewer people writing science fiction. Keep writing. I have no choice but to give up if I continue to write short plays.

Is this the old aerospace company where Mr. Qian is still around? Chuncaotai team

Isn't this the plot from the last time when the stars were shining in the promotion? Just use the same plot?

No matter how much the signal is encrypted, it's useless. The whole world is watching. Suddenly there is a signal from Mars. Do you think the overlords of the two main camps are fools? 😁. Do you think the United States and the Soviet Union will continue to confront each other😞 if they know this? You write this timeline very well, but you write it poorly.

First, it's very ink-stained. Really, it's so tiring to watch, and I feel so emotionally ups and downs. Second, you told the country that upgrading technology is good, but are you so close to revealing your identity? If you don't prove your identity, why would the country believe you and then touch the most confidential things?

. . . . . . After the movie is over, will you still write the novel?

Have you started chatting with each other in the last two chapters? Want to be tagged too? 😰

I feel that the author failed to make consistent logic. If the protagonist traveled through time, there would be no space station on Mars in the current time and space, and at most it would travel with the spacecraft. If we were still in the future time and space, with the level of science and technology at that time, we would be able to know the situation immediately if we lose contact with the earth. If the protagonist can communicate with the outside world, it means that the earth can also contact the Mars base. Creating a space-time dialogue can certainly increase the interest of reading, but in the end, the content will become emptier and broader. Use future technology to help China in the 1970s. You can't think of future technology, and you can't describe the changes in technology, so you can only end it hastily.

There must be data records at important jobs, and there may be multiple backups. Playing back the data can solve many problems.

So you guys have been chattering for a long time, what kind of movie is it?

This book has been rewritten by at least tens of thousands of words. I wrote two books with the same amount of work as others wrote one. Half of the two thousand readings have been corrected. I am still chasing Feng to put it on the shelves. I can't write anymore and I don't know how to write. It seems that the order is only a few hundred, and it is full attendance when it is put on the shelves. You can't make any money, and then you have to be banned and changed. Breaking a rule of heaven? What did I write that was outrageous?

It's a good idea, although it's a copied movie It's a pity that there are too many imperfections in the details, I really can't bear it

What about the food on the return ship? Did the author not consider it? After all, the nearest ground fire needs to be stored for seven or eight months, right? , Food for six or seven people for seven or eight months is enough to feed one person for five or six years, right?

Qun Xing's idea is actually very good, come on👏

I've been pulling here and there, hurry up and reveal or confirm time and space, brother. Otherwise the Earth would be suspicious and the protagonist would remain silent.

According to our country's 25-year plan, our country's Mars settlement will use 3D printing and sintering technology to make protective walls, and then place the Mars settlement underground. And according to the current sodium electricity technology (sodium electricity is heavier than lithium electricity but safer), one cubic meter can store 500 kilowatt hours of electricity, and sponge metal hydrogen storage technology has also improved, and wind power generation is supplemented. It is not a problem to rely on electricity storage for a month, let alone a week. There is also the addition of wind power. However, according to NASA's latest plan, the small and responsive one is 40 kilowatts. There is also a unique Chinese microwave space power generation wireless transmission project. The China Daily Project has now completed closed experiments. According to actual needs, settlements should undoubtedly be equipped with it. Therefore, if this Mars settlement is in China, it is difficult to say anything else. Electricity cannot be scarce, and there is no need to manually scrape the sand in the article.