One Piece: I Can Bring All Things to Life

Why is it that authors who can come up with good topics can't write well?

Does the protagonist have no name? You can't pronounce the name Dog Basket. You keep using someone else's name? You call me Dog Basket and no one will laugh at you.

Author, your writing is a bit erratic. It feels like there is no main line. Do you have an outline?

Some book friends said the writing was poor, but I didn't think so. I felt it was at a standard level for fan fiction. But the main character is really a bit off sometimes. Two examples: First, the protagonist wants to go to the island to get artificial fruits. His collaborators wonder why he doesn't join the navy. After all, joining the navy will give him the opportunity to go to the island openly. The motivation given by the protagonist is (not an excuse to deal with his collaborators, but the real reason he has in mind not to join the navy): He is a time traveler, and his life experience cannot withstand investigation... The author wants to write not about the navy route, and it is okay not to join the navy, but you need to find a motivation when writing it. Okay, you can just casually say "the protagonist likes to love freedom behind the scenes" and "the protagonist doesn't want to serve the Celestial Dragons". You can even write it according to your original text and write "the protagonist thinks that he can send his activated men to go undercover, there is no need to go in person"... Now this is really too late. Secondly, the protagonist captured Lola, and Lola could directly affect Loki, so he decided to let Big Mom use Devil Fruit to redeem her. The protagonist's subordinate is good at making suggestions and offers a box to the aunt. The protagonist who is watching thinks that he originally only asked his subordinate to ask for one box. Some readers questioned that there are too few. The reason given by the author is that the Auntie Pirates are not full of capable users. The implication is that Auntie cannot produce many ready-made fruits... There are so many flaws that I am not sure where to start complaining. First of all, the quotations are not always quoted at a higher price. How can anyone directly quote the lowest price? Even if you really think that the aunt group can only give out one, there is no need to directly ask your subordinates to report one. The author wanted to portray this subordinate as reckless, but his reckless behavior actually made him appear smarter than the protagonist. Secondly, kidnapping does have to consider what the kidnapped person has at home, but you shouldn't completely ignore the value of the chips in your hand, right? Charlotte Lola, just exchange for a devil fruit of any type? Finally, even if the aunt group can't get much fruit, can they still get Pele? Is it still possible to get Kaido's contact information to facilitate the protagonist's layout? No matter how bad it is, if you ask Homiz to come back and do the activation experiment, I will consider you to have tried hard.

I just read one or two chapters. When you write a novel, you need to be smarter in your writing. When you animate things, you need to give them personality and characteristics. For example, after being activated, a statue of a god can speak in a god-like style, which is more three-dimensional. The vampire fruit can turn you into a bat and give it a personality, such as being funny or what kind of temper? If you don't have any personality traits and interact with others, you will become a tool. This book is destined to go nowhere.

Shennong has a good idea. But the whole plot is like playing house. The one who had a slight influence in the original plot was not killed, and even the one who was the enemy of the protagonist was not killed even if there was a chance to kill him. For example, Enel was already a mortal enemy to steal his gold, and then the protagonist was controlled by scent for 12 minutes. There was also a boy with the Blue Dragon Fruit beside him, and he just watched Enel break away from the hallucination and did nothing. It's just a matter of imagination.

1. If the power of the Pink Dragon Fruit is exposed like this, what will the World Government think? Are they unaware of the potential of artificial Devil Fruits? Will Vegapunk be allowed to continue researching artificial devil fruits? As a result, Vegapunk is even more reluctant to leave with you. 2. What is the purpose of inviting Vegapunk to make you a devil fruit in front of Zefa? Are you afraid that the world government doesn't know the value of man-made devil fruits? Im wanted him to create Mother Fire, but you almost kidnapped him and threatened to abduct him later? Are you afraid that you won't be able to play high-end games before you grow up? We can't talk about anything in private. Isn't that what your snail fruit is for?

The writing style is too lacking and pale. It should be very low among the novices who can sign contracts at the starting point.

If you directly activate seawater into evil ocean water, wouldn't you be invincible?

There is no senior colonel in the navy in One Piece. After the colonel, there is a commodore.