Golden Magic: The Magic Academy's Strongest New Student

Original fantasy works are a dead end; their early performance will be shockingly poor, and even single-player games reaching a million words are impossible.

It's alright, but the magic system is really confusing. Casting magic only requires imagination, and even incantations can be made up at will. In chapter 18, the protagonist even made up his own incantation. Also, the protagonist is a bit too much of a saint; even when others are targeting and insulting him, he still rushes to save them, even in a potentially unsafe situation like being at school.

Why not just move Chapter 3 directly to Chapter 1? It wouldn't be as good to just have the protagonist transmigrate directly; instead, you have to use flashbacks.

What does this mean? The person who had been mocking the protagonist has disappeared. The protagonist's only contact with him was a brief sparring match, and then he became the culprit. 🙂

Let's not even talk about other settings. You're a freshman who just enrolled and hasn't learned anything yet. Isn't the density of events a bit too high?

Your setting for willpower is terrible. Literally, it should be related to life experience. To improve it, the easiest and hardest thing is to go through life-or-death experiences. It's normal to have a low willpower at the beginning. No one has a strong willpower without experiencing the world.

My suggestion is to delete chapters 2 through 11, or readers who see my comment can skip them themselves; it should be a relatively unobstructed reading experience.

She makes a good point; a book I read before described a similar situation.

It's only been thirty chapters, so we can't see much yet, but I'm somewhat interested in the unique magic system that's different from the usual ones. My biggest concern is that the events unfold too quickly; on average, there's a clue to a huge conspiracy every nine chapters. This pace, requiring growth through countless events, isn't conducive to a smooth progression of learning and research from a magical perspective.

The title sounds like a rambling, wizarding story, but after reading it, you realize it's actually a promising gem. Have you considered changing the title to better reflect the book's essence? Otherwise, many people might just walk away after seeing the title...