A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Starting Five Hundred Years Ago

In fact, this book is quite good at the beginning. The protagonist has a clear understanding of himself. He will not stand out if he can, and he can run away if he can. At least before the pill formation, the protagonist is still very similar to Han Li, but after the pill formation, there are some flaws in going to Tiannan. For example, the plot derived from Feng Susu, Yun Ying's Yunlu kidnapped a Qi practitioner and foundation builder, and had to babble a lot. Who is going to explain it? Qi training and foundation building? For the sake of her own peace of mind, Feng Susu did not give the protagonist a chance or anything, but she arranged the hatred between Yunlu and the protagonist. However, the battle between the holy tree when the pill was formed was quite good, with many twists and turns, and it was quite exciting. The battle between the monster after the baby was born was also okay, and the strength of the protagonist after the baby was given, but the emptiness behind it was quite good. The plot of the Temple of Heaven has begun to lower the IQ of other characters. The protagonist is a Nascent Soul, and the alchemy monks can't even take care of themselves. They have no time to worry about the safety of the protagonist. How dare Ji Yin and the Nascent Soul female casual cultivator provoke the protagonist? The protagonist's record in the sea battle is obvious to all. Where do the two junior Nascent Soul casual cultivators get the courage and confidence? The strength mentioned earlier will be forgotten later, right? As for opening a chamber of commerce in Tiannan, I am even more speechless. What materials can you exchange for the materials of the fifth and sixth level monsters in Luan Xinghai that are helpful to Nascent Soul in Tiannan? Those few eighth-level demon pills might be able to be exchanged for some useful materials. This chamber of commerce is purely useless. It can only provide the protagonist with some scraps and spirit stones. The last few pictures have been extremely bad. It takes several martial arts masters to write a chapter, and they have to talk a lot when going on an adventure. I guess they have learned the essence of the animation production team.

By the way, the protagonist always has a cold look in his eyes. Everything is cold. Is there no other look in his eyes? Those who don't know clearly think how wronged the protagonist is. Also, later on, it is said that the protagonist deals fairly and I agree with you. But what happened when he used Xuan Gu to inform Xuan Gu and blackmailed Ji Xuan into buying and selling? Then there is a problem. Some chapters are too dull and the fun level is low. I skipped and read the following ones without any impact. The density of text information is too low. Then, the preface before the main line is too long. At this pace, it will probably be 400-600 chapters before the main line starts, right?

Five tickets

The protagonist is a loser. He has a Wind Spirit Root that is comparable to a Heavenly Spirit Root. He has an Enlightenment Death and a Prophet Death. He is still in the middle stage of the Nascent Soul in 400 years. He crazily suppresses his combat power just to enter the third Xutian Palace Water plot without any brain. Han Li has a pseudo-spiritual root. Even if he has the Sky Palm Vase, his strength increases very slowly at the beginning and he has no elixir or elixir seeds. There is no elixir, the pseudo-spiritual root absorption efficiency is very low, the elixir is drug-resistant, and a number of spiritual beasts need to be cultivated. Also, he is alone and can enter the late Nascent Soul stage in about 347 years. It is estimated that the author has no brains to improve the protagonist's strength. After all, the pressure from the front is too strong. It takes about the same time as Han Li in the original work to break through to the gods.

Chapter 420: Save money: In order not to affect Han Li's fate, he took great pains to make a plate of dumplings for Nangong Wan's vinegar. The summary is finished.

It is estimated that there is a high probability of collapse in the later stage, so let's forget about a batch of water. Several chapters of monthly tickets will be added to the update. The result of the additional update is some kind of bird plot. I specially wrote a few chapters about saving mortals, hiding opportunities, etc. The monthly tickets are like feeding a dog. The design of a magic weapon that forces one's destiny is also mediocre. I designed a shuttle just for the purpose of escaping and sneaking across the country, right? I only learned it in the later stages of forming pills, and I don't have many methods. The writing in the article doesn't reflect the feeling of being crushed by the same level at all. There are only a few dry sentences about how the protagonist is powerful, but you have to explain why he is powerful. I have only practiced a few techniques. I only have two or three magic weapons before I can practice them. The means are really pitiful. To reach the same level is entirely the author's forced explanation. You can see for yourself how many techniques and secrets Han Li practiced in the original book during the period of forming an elixir. There are also a lot of magic weapons and ancient treasures. , Formations, spirit insects, puppets, a lot of means to become invincible. As for the protagonist of this book, plus the natal magic weapon, there are only three magic weapons. Each one is made by adding materials behind an umbrella. They are not top-notch magic weapons. They may not even be as good as other people's natal magic weapons. Then there is only one. The Demon Suppression Tower is still being repaired, but has not been completely repaired. I consider this to be a top-notch ancient treasure, a natal magic weapon. It was only developed at a later stage. It has not been cultivated for a long time. It has no power at all. It is estimated that it can only run away. And there are not many magic and secret skills. Compared with Han Li, it is almost the same. The beggar's version of Han Li, how can he crush other alchemy monks? The protagonist expressed in the writing of the article can at best be regarded as a passerby in the late stage of ordinary alchemy in the original work. He took a bunch of ten thousand-year elixirs and sold a bunch of demon pills in the Blood Forbidden City. The Nascent Soul is looking for you everywhere. You have nine in your body. We have Qu Ling Shen Dan, we have the guarantee, we have the spirit stones, we have completed the skills, and we have the ten thousand year elixir. You told me to take such a big risk to plot the Ding Ling Pill. It happened to be the time when the devil was planning, and a bunch of Nascent Soul old monsters gathered in the Yun Sect. You told me that you had to join in for the Ding Ling Pill. Fishing in troubled waters, right? If you get caught and beat into dumpling fillings, I guess I won't believe it. There is no pill with the same effect in Luan Xing Sea. Taking such a big risk for a pill is completely out of proportion to the risk and benefit. When you come back, Luan Xing Sea is also a pile of water. A natal magic weapon is trained from elixir formation to Later, when I saw the picture, I couldn't help but laugh. It's true. Logically speaking, the wind type is light, agile, sharp, or sustained weather damage. Even if I re-train that umbrella, I think it is better than the shuttle you made. When you wrote it, I was still thinking about the picture in my mind. Look Come to the picture, what is the difference between this and a rocket? Why don't you talk about building a space carrier? Your imagination is completely useless. Since you mentioned that the shuttle is assembled, why can't it be formed by a needle and an array of shuttle pieces? Each group of shuttle pieces ranges from six to twelve, or consists of hundreds or thousands of shuttle pieces. It is composed of pieces, which can only be split into dozens of pieces at first. If you have strong spiritual consciousness or a child, you can split it into hundreds or thousands of pieces. You control the shuttle needle yourself. You can stand close and act as a gunman, and you can attack from a distance. The shuttle piece attacks are interspersed and make it difficult to guard against. Or you can say that you add some kind of material. If you have accumulated a large number of shuttle splints to a certain extent, you can hide them in the void. When you fight against the enemy, you can hide in the void and hit with a fatal blow. You are also a formation master, and you can use shuttle splints to form formations to kill enemies. You can even split a certain number of shuttle splints, and you can assemble a battle armor and wear it like a gold-eating insect. Not only Defense has speed and speed. It can be said that when worn, wind spells can be added, and escape skills can be greatly improved. And since there is comprehension, why not develop a secret method that can engrave formations on the shuttle pieces. When wearing the armor, the formations on each shuttle piece can be linked, isn't it? Is it because of the body formation? It is simply an all-round magic weapon. One armor can pull out a lot of functions. When stowing away, you can stick the Six-Ding Heavenly Armor Talisman on it, and the shuttle blades themselves have array text to link up to form an array. With the strength of the magic weapon, you need a chicken-feather cockpit, and you can also build a shuttle-shaped spaceship to stow away. Are you going to the stars? Internavigation, right? Now that the comprehension hook is enabled, it should be developed well. There is no little green bottle, and there are not as many resources as Han Li. If the quantity is not enough, the quality will be lost. With the comprehension hook enabled, it can be said that the protagonist is comparable to Dayan Shenjun and Qing Yuanzi. Moreover, the protagonist is not a pseudo-spiritual root, and is second only to The alien spirit root of Tianlinggen ended up giving birth to a baby. The author seemed to be timid and half-dead. He is now 180 years old. He said that it will take 60 years to create a baby, which is equivalent to maybe 250 years old before the baby can be successfully formed. To be honest, the shape is far worse than Han Li. Now he is really 250

I haven't entered the Yellow Maple Valley for a long time. I guess it will take a few days to enter the Yellow Maple Valley before entering the Bloody Forbidden Land. The story of the Bloody Forbidden Land will also need to be watered down for a few days before it comes out. I don't know, I thought you wrote the original novel. The story is so stinky and long.

Mulan Saint (Picture AI)

1. Water, many people are talking about water From the protagonist's solo flight in Chapter 57 to the opening of the Xutian Palace in Chapter 100 or so, I don't know what the author is writing in the middle 50 chapters. It is too bland and will be forgotten after reading it. It is just like many comments below said, Water is not about the speed of cultivation, but many descriptions are procrastinating, not refined enough, and the plot advances slowly. Du didn't make the transition well, so he improved a bit and added an additional skill (Dongxu Condensation, what a sand sculpture name, Dongxu Splitting Wind Strength/Shattering Wind Slash/SuFeng Kill sounds better than yours?). A lot of writing was spent on this key skill, but in the end the power was not as powerful as the previous Dongxu Finger who appeared out of nowhere and explained it in a few words. Everyone felt numb when he saw this. In addition to this skill, you also spent nearly three thousand spirit stones to buy a talisman with three remaining times? In the later stages of his qi training, Han Licai had collected Qi Tianlei Zi, two or three talismans, a full set of top-quality magic weapons, and other equipment. He had both regular and trump cards. What was the protagonist doing? We are already in the late stage of foundation building, but it is still the same flying sword from dozens of chapters ago. It obviously has no configuration, but the author forced it to write that the protagonist is very strong (the first person under the formation of pills?). Yes, the protagonist has two killer skills, so he doesn't need external objects such as magic weapons? Those who have made it to foundation building, everyone else is mediocre, without any trump card? And the skill consumption is not much more than the magic weapon? Under the impact of the beast tide, how many times can you let go? In the later stage of Qi training, you can use two magic weapons at the same time to fight. How many can you use in the later stage of foundation building? You mentioned several times that the protagonist's spiritual consciousness is stronger than the same level, and you wrote about everything from Qi training to foundation building. Hey, I just wrote it for fun, and I didn't use it. 2. Many of the descriptions are inappropriately detailed Do the subsequent plots such as the pill formation meeting, monster hunting, and beast tide defending the island have any help in shaping the protagonist? Moreover, there are so many chapters to prepare for the beast tide. As a result, the Nascent Soul War ended up with a few wrong moves and two people escaping to death. It was an anticlimax. It would be better not to write it in detail from the front, but to write it from the side. For example, a few Nascent Soul bosses fought hundreds of miles away from the sea to the sky. Deep in the clouds, the fight caused lightning and thunder, the sky was dark, the earth was dark, and the huge waves were huge. Just explain the results. The protagonist is only in the foundation stage, so the narrative must be written from the perspective of the protagonist. At most, it is like the previous writing of Ji Xuan (I personally think that the writing of the early stage of forming the core is too exaggerated). It is enough to show the majesty of the next big realm. If there are too many realms beyond the protagonist, just let it continue to remain mysterious, not to mention the dialogue between the two Nascent Souls, which is a whole 5 chapters! ! ! What should be written in detail is the growth of the protagonist. The first is the harvest and expenditure of the protagonist before the beast tide. The protagonist could have relied on the skill of alchemy to have multiple sources of income to subsidize his training needs. Since it is not written, then after you use up the existing elixirs, you rely on killing monsters in exchange for supplies. Is it a mistake or is it just enough? You have to write down whether it is difficult or not, otherwise readers will feel that the protagonist is just dawdling around, which is inexplicable. (On the one hand, the author repeatedly told readers how to earn two or three hundred yuan a year from foundation building, but on the other hand, he did not write about the financial situation of the protagonist as a casual cultivator. He spent a lot of money to buy talismans, and was reluctant to part with the more than one hundred transmission fees later. The former is to prevent trouble before it happens, while the latter is a disaster that is imminent! If the readers don't criticize, who are you to criticize? Another thing that should be written in detail is the sacrifices and gains made by the protagonist in the past few months of defending against the monster tide. How many monsters were killed/how many materials were obtained/how many treasures were exchanged/how many spiritual stones were saved/how many items were exchanged to the Star Palace based on the performance? These are the key points, and the author briefly mentions them.

AI generation

This book has been updated for 1.7 Million times in a row. There are many fan books that are finished in less than 1.7 Million words. So far, so many readers have subscribed to read it, which is considered a masterpiece. I believe they all hope that this book will have the good ending they want. Nowadays, there is no heroine in more than 400 chapters. It is not an exaggeration to say that there is no heroine in this book. Most book friends who want to read harem or multiple heroines have already given up on this book. I believe that most of the readers who insist on subscribing and reading every day are attracted by the single heroine of the book or the different timelines of the book. It may also be the author's writing style and characterization of the characters, which are extensions and innovations based on the original work. As for the appearance of the heroine, the author mentioned in the previous article that the protagonist met Song Yu in Yunmeng Mountain during the tribulation of the mortal world, which is also the biggest controversial point in this book. Based on the actual situation of this book, the protagonist should be more than 500 years old and in the late Nascent Soul stage by then. He will definitely not fall in love at first sight and at least have some feelings for her. From my personal point of view, it is far-fetched for Song Yu to be the Taoist companion of the protagonist given that there is only one female protagonist in this book. It is more appropriate to use a highly talented female heroine as the Taoist companion. No matter how she is accepted, it is somewhat inconsistent with the protagonist's character. The gap between his behavior and that of the Sky Thief and the protagonist is too great, and he is not at the same level at all. Song Yu also has many shortcomings. 1. Lack of stamina. As a Tianlinggen monk, he successfully formed the elixir in less than a hundred years (90 years old on the right). His early cultivation speed is extremely fast, but his subsequent cultivation level is slow to improve. He should break through the Yuanying at around 350 years old. The novel finally mentions that his cultivation level only reaches the early stage of Yuanying. 2. There are many shortcomings, very few fighting skills, extremely lack of actual combat experience, the skills he has practiced are not good at fighting, the overall output ability is extremely weak, and the combat power is just a tile. 3. Conservative negligence. The sword test meeting noticed that Du Dong's identity was abnormal and reported it to the sect so that they could arrange a response. In the end, they failed to capture or kill him. There are great deficiencies in crisis management and layout execution. 4. Lack of courage and easy to retreat when faced with high risks. Zimei and Song originally planned to go to the Devil's Falling Valley with Han Li, but they gave up because they were afraid of the dangers in the valley. This missed opportunity meant that only Zi Ling could gain something. It can only be said that she has a clear personality and refrains from risking her life, but she also manages to break through important resources in the mid-to-late stage. In the human world, it's not too bad for the protagonist to treat Song Yu as his little sister. They are both the protagonist's younger sisters and it's not too much to consider her a heroine. It's not unreasonable to give her training resources. Based on the premise mentioned above, there are not many female cultivators with outstanding talents and appearance in the human world. So far, only Nangongque and Master Le have some intersection with the male protagonist. It is more appropriate for one of them to become the protagonist Taoist woman. Let's first analyze the shortcomings of the two women. Master Le's shortcomings: 1. Obvious shortcomings Most of his combat power comes from the sacred Yuanming Lantern, and he has very few magical powers and killing moves. 2. Arrogance and underestimation of the enemy Believing that his cultivation level was much higher than that of Han Li, he underestimated Han Li and did not take him seriously in the early Yuan Dynasty. Later, he fell into his trap and suffered constant losses. 3. Not good at tactics Not good at using tactics and conspiracy, only good at head-on fighting. Twice, he was deceived by Han Li into running away and the battle situation was entirely under Han Li's control. His ability to respond was seriously lacking. 4. Taoist heart is unstable The Holy Lamp was taken away twice, which made him confused every time. Later, his Taoist heart was damaged and he stopped in the Yuan Dynasty. Nangongque's shortcomings: 1. Extremely utilitarian The interests of the sect are often used as the criterion for doing things. Putting the junior sister who has been together for nearly 300 years as a bargaining chip on the gambling table, and pushing the junior sister into the fire pit of Wei Lichen, doesn't she know what his character is? 2. Short-sighted Only focusing on immediate interests and ignoring long-term risks. The sect fled the Yue Kingdom and found itself in a difficult situation in the Northern Liang Kingdom. Instead of planning how to strengthen itself, the sect forced its junior sisters to marry and join the Nine Nations Alliance. I don't know that forcing someone to do something will be counterproductive, and the result will be a loss of money and people. 3. Do your own thing In the novel, he makes his own decisions on everything and rarely consults with the elders in the sect. To put it nicely, he is the general leader of the sect's affairs and coordinates the overall situation. To put it badly, the entire sect is under his control and is dictatorial. 4. I don't know how to adapt Her junior sister is adamant about not wanting to get married, but she uses the sect as a guide to force her to do so. This shows that her thinking is rigid and she doesn't know how to adapt. I believe that marriage is the only way out for the sect. I don't think about other methods of revival and only go to the dark side. 5. Arrogant Having the airs of being an elder of the clan. When she met Han Li again in the Fallen Demon Valley, Han Li also came to help her. He knew that Han Li was now extremely powerful, but he just couldn't let go of his attitude to resolve the dispute between the two parties. 6. Use public interests to destroy private interests Put the fate of the sect above the fate of the individual, abandon personal gains and losses, and focus on collective interests, but be separated from the world view of mortals. Comparison between Nangongque and Master Le in relation to the Heavenly Thieves My general guess is that in the novel, Master Le should break through the Yuanying before the age of 250, reach the peak of the middle Yuanying at the age of more than 400, and break into the late Yuanying more than 100 years later. However, he failed twice when he met Han Li in the early Yuan Dynasty and was defeated by Han Li in the early Yuan Dynasty. His Taoist heart was damaged and he failed to break through to the gods. In summary, Master Le is guaranteed to be in the late Yuanying. It is speculated that in the novel, Nangong Que broke through the Yuanying around the age of 350, broke through the Yuanzhong around the age of 550, reached the peak of the middle Yuanying around the age of 800 and was defeated by Han Li in a robbery attempt, but finally fell into the hands of the ancient demon. In summary, Nangongque's peak is the peak of the Yuanying. In terms of combat power, it is obvious that Master Le with the Yuan Ming Lantern is stronger than the demonized Nangong Que. If accepting Nangong Que and then accepting Nangong Wan as his disciple is different from annexing the entire Biyue Sect, the other six factions of the Yue Kingdom must unite to fight against it. Based on the protagonist's strength, the unification of the eight factions is an inevitable outcome. This will only attract the covetousness of more forces in Tiannan. However, accepting Master Le will not have much impact on the follow-up. Many gods in the human world stipulate that monks who have reached the level of spiritual transformation will not take action. The most likely thing Master Le will do after she breaks through the transformation is to suppress the abruptness. Before she breaks through the transformation, she will not have much impact on the plot. In terms of getting along with the two of them, it was written in the previous article that Master Le was easily defeated by the protagonist, and was later captured and shown his ugly appearance, which caused a lot of inner demons. The way to solve the inner demon is either to let go or acknowledge it, or to kill it. Later, it is better to take her to the Chaotic Star Sea to practice, plant a ban on her and make some promises. The protagonist and Nangong Que do not get along well, and there are still entanglements in the interests of the sect. Nangong Que has a strong personality and will not give in to the protagonist. The only way for the two to force a match and Nangong Que's short service is to succeed, but this hope is slim. If the Mulan people ask for the release of Master Le and the return of the Yuanming Lantern, it directly means that Master Le abandons the lamp and runs away, and then asks him to pay a large price to redeem the Yuanming Lantern, and then "borrows" the lamp after the protagonist becomes a god in the future, and then asks Master Le to activate the lamp to contact the holy birds in the upper world. Grandmaster Yue broke through to the Nascent Soul not long ago because of her talent. A Saint in the early Nascent Soul stage who has not fully demonstrated her talent should not be worthy of falling out with the protagonist who can kill Master Zhong Shen. You must know that it is difficult to kill each other at the same level of Yuanying, not to mention that the protagonist is only in the middle stage of Yuanying. This further highlights the horror of the protagonist. Afterwards, the Mulan people will spend at most several decades to cultivate another saint in the early stage of Yuanying. Why it is most appropriate to become a Taoist couple with Master Yue First of all, she can control the Yuan Ming Lantern to contact the sacred birds of the upper world to ensure the final success of her ascension. Then the protagonist and the music guru both have wind spirit roots, have the same skills and attributes, and are both proficient in wind spells, so they can learn from each other. The reason is that after the protagonist breaks through the stage of divine transformation, her breakthrough method and remaining resources are suitable for Master Le. This can at least shorten the time it takes for her to break through the divine transformation stage for more than a hundred years and become a female divine cultivator in the human world for thousands of years. Finally, since Master Le is of the same age and similar in spiritual roots, attributes of his exercises, and breakthrough methods, he can find a dual cultivation method of the wind system to practice together, and the speed of improvement in cultivation will be twice the result with half the effort. After transforming into a god, you can also form a spiritual couple with him. You can use the essence of the master to push your cultivation to the peak of the early stage of transforming into a god, and the lost essence of the moon master can be replenished after it reaches the spiritual world. The protagonist was born in Luan Xinghai and did not have a feud with Mulan. Now he is just seeking benefits in Tiannan. Although Master Zhong was seriously injured and captured several masters Yuanying alive to kill, this was just an exchange of interests with Tiannan. In the future, he promised Master Le to release the Yuanying of these masters. Based on the above situation, there is no fundamental conflict between Master Le and the protagonist. Moreover, there are many discords among the Mulan tribes, and there are often conflicts, fights, attacks and killings between large and small tribes. I don't know how many Mulan monks died. As a saint of Mulan, Master Le must have gone through a harsh and brutal selection. After becoming a saint, he must have been favored by Mulan's large amount of resources. He must have a lot of feelings for Mulan and some complaints and dissatisfaction. The title of saint is a higher shackle for him to break through. Now that she knows that the protagonist has a high probability of becoming a god-transformer, the protagonist promises to fight for the survival space for the Mulan people after he has enough strength or becomes a god. I believe she will not have much resistance to the protagonist. Now she fights for Mulan not only for the clan, but also for her own future. The mortal world is inherently cruel, and only benefit is fundamental. I believe that she sees in the protagonist the possibility of breaking through the late Yuanying stage, and even the hope of ascending as a god. She will definitely let go of most of the obsessions of the Mulan clan and plan the road to ascension together with the protagonist.

I hope the author can stabilize the character of the protagonist, and never forcefully change the setting or suppress the behavior in order to accommodate Song Yu, otherwise the character of the protagonist will collapse. To be honest, the two of them are really not suitable for being Taoist companions. If they are arranged to be the protagonist and the younger sister, I personally think that this form will be more acceptable.

I read about two hundred chapters without feeling unhappy. I won't say what other fellow Taoists have said about it. In terms of plot, the author Wen Qing is very ill and always writes things that are inexplicable, meaningless, touching the protagonist himself, and making no progress in advancing the plot. It's very embarrassing. Do you know the author? For example, the plot where Ji Dan goes to Tiannan, and then meets the man disguised as a man in the capital of Yue Kingdom. I would like to ask the author, what is the significance of this plot? What do you want to do? Why don't you write something about improving your strength? Even if you show off in front of low-level monks, you will still be respected. At least your reputation has improved, and low-level monks all admire you. You have obtained 2.5 Million spirit stones, but they are of no use in cultivation. What do you want to do, author? I know you may be worried about this and that. In this case, wouldn't it be better if you skip the worried plot and directly write about sneaking into the Yellow Maple Valley → going to the Bloody Forbidden Land → returning to the Chaos Star Sea? Can't you just take it all away? Why write a plot about Linghu getting slapped in the face during the wedding ceremony? What's the point? You don't want to mention it in one stroke, why don't you write more interactions? If you don't interact with such a big person like Hong Fu, why the hell are you writing about being ruined by Yunlu? Isn't the point of fan fiction to change the original ending? What is the difference between this and hydrology? Do you know that it's hard to spend so much money to watch so many meaningless plots?

To be honest, I am a little disappointed with the author. It is understandable that you rebuilt the mountain gate in the Chaotic Star Sea, but I can't understand why you want to share the teleportation array with others. What is the point of building a sect in the Yue Kingdom? If you want spiritual stones, you have the best spiritual stone mines, and you need cultivation resources or spiritual materials. You just practice this Spiritual Elixir and then collect monsters and bring them to places like the Nine Kingdoms Alliance and the Righteous Way Alliance. You show off your peak behavior in the early stage of Nascent Soul in a high-profile way. After you finish the transaction, you just pretend to be in seclusion. Then you go out and show that you have just broken through in the middle stage of Nascent Soul. Who will give you trouble? Who the hell dares to kidnap you and ask you about your origins? You vaguely mention that you were chased here by your enemies. You have already entered the explanation period. Why do you feel like you are still in the elixir formation period? You don't dare to do it here and don't dare to do it there. What's the point of you still making a fuss here in Yue country? If the ancient teleportation array is exposed, you will be dead. Those short-lived or great monks will definitely surround you and kill you. After chasing this book for so long, I feel that you will not be able to write this part after you reach the middle stage of Nascent Soul. You will just do some meaningless things and it will be clumsy. Have you ever thought about how to write the heroine's scene? What are you doing when you become a great monk and find a female alchemy cultivator to be your Taoist companion?

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Can I get a character card?

After reading about 60 chapters, I feel that there are two problems. The first point: Goldfinger was too late and not well developed. I realized that to be honest, it was too weak and the usage was wrong. The best way to use it is to practice various secret techniques and spells, so that even if you don't have top-level magic weapons, you can still have strong combat power like Master Mulan. With secret techniques like Blood Spirit Diamond, you can easily achieve the effect of killing at first sight, instead of having to fight for a long time every time you encounter an opponent of the same level, with frequent accidents. The second is formation and talisman making. The formation can lead to enlightenment and achieve achievements like Xin Ruyin, or it can refine a large number of talismans, so that you can have confidence when running away. . But the protagonist chose alchemy, so the effect of enlightenment was not obvious at all, and it was not even useful. It gives people a sense of forced reasonableness. 1 Second point: The protagonist has no characteristics at all compared to monks of the same level, and he is also very poor, with no channels or ability to make money. I can barely make alchemy, mediocre fighting skills, weapon refining, formations, talismans, and beast-controlling spiritual insects. It is the kind that will be forgotten the next day after watching it. I can barely make alchemy, but there is no source of elixir. This will consume a lot of resources to build proficiency. I don't know how to form, and I'm already in the late stage of foundation building and haven't learned how to practice weapons yet. So how long will it take you to practice the magic weapon after you have formed the elixir? Where can I find the materials for the magic weapon? The top-level skills practiced also lack characteristics. They say they have deep magic power, but in fact, they will start taking drugs after two hits. There are no decent supporting spells. Even the wind escape was realized suddenly. Look at the Xuanyin Sutra, which is also a top-level skill. The Yue Emperor directly penetrated Han Li's two top-level shield magic weapons with a Blood Spirit Diamond, almost killing him. Where are the spells that match the protagonist's skill? How is it different from ordinary exercises? Secondly, when I left as a seed, I received no elixirs, no talismans, no life-saving things, and very few secret arts and techniques. What kind of seed is this, foxtail grass? This sect gives people a very tasteless feeling. I also want to go to the Xutian Temple during the foundation building stage. The original Zi Ling is in the foundation building stage, but his parents are both alchemy monks, and they have a lot of life-saving things in their pockets. The protagonist dares to go to the Xutian Palace just to buy a talisman, which is unnatural.

Don't cater to the audience too much and change every suggestion you make. Then the comment section will be all about you. By then, it will be a bad article without any characteristics. What about gold-eating insects and Dayan Shenjun, you have to take it? The writing is all bad. All mortals have these opportunities, so why can't they come up with something original? Isn't your writing of Tianfengsuo Qingpingjian very good? Also, aren't the plots of Qing Yuan Zong all very well written? If I have to seize the same opportunity from Han Li, then I might as well read the original work. Isn't Wang Yu better than yours? There are also jokes to be made at any time, and the Nine Turns of the Big Intestine is here, so why not make a show? 😰😰

Han Li can basically kill people in the early stage of Yuanying with one blow in the early stage of Yuanying. The protagonist in the middle stage of Yuanying can't kill even the early stage Jiyin. It's a waste. It's exciting but not exciting enough.

Seeing the scene of getting the tripod from Xutian Palace was really poisonous. It was too witty. I'll never see you again.

I can understand why you hide your cultivation for fear of being targeted by the Six Paths and the Twin Saints, but do you think you want to take the Xutian Cauldron in full view of the public after revealing your cultivation in the early stages of Nascent Soul? Since the choice to take the Xutian Cauldron's hidden cultivation is purely unnecessary, otherwise it would be impossible to rush out with the initial cultivation level, and then we have to consider the sect, not to mention that Xing Palace has long regarded the Xutian Cauldron as something in the bag and will not let anyone take it away casually. No matter how you look at it, there is no reason to take it, but the author just writes that the protagonist intends to take the Xutian Cauldron. How old are you? Even if you want to take it, you have to be well prepared and consider the consequences. There is no such thing as just taking it. And then the author has no intention of letting the protagonist actually get it, so he has people kill the blood jade spider. Doesn't that mean It can't be killed, but the protagonist in this article is too stupid. He just and honestly took two blood jade spiders and put them there. A bunch of people were watching, and the Xutian Cauldron spit out the two things. The protagonist, who was only in the early stage of Nascent Soul in the eyes of others, took them all, and he was not beaten by a group of people. There are other Nascent Souls that are almost meaningless if they don't come. If nothing else, Xing Gong has already regarded this thing as his own. If he doesn't show up, there will be other ways to peek, which is not written out. And among the few present, Wan Tianming and Mrs. Hao have nothing to say, Qing Yi and Man Hu must be the protagonist's followers? I didn't get any benefits. I originally said that I would take the Xutian Cauldron and the Dry Blue Ice Flame, and let Man Beard choose the ancient treasures first. But Man Beard had nothing in his hands. There is also a middle-stage Nascent Soul named Jiang who is about to die of old age. In his eyes, the Heaven-Building Pill can extend life, and he can easily let you take it away. , Even if he is kind to his granddaughter, it will be difficult The author probably watched the anime and wanted the protagonist to maintain a certain relationship with Qingyi and Man Beard, but he can't make the characters stupid. Opportunities are ahead. Man Beard Qingyi and Man Beard have no psychological fluctuations at all? Obediently give everything to the protagonist The most difficult part is the scene where the blood jade spider is killed. I think the protagonist described by the author is very indifferent and doesn't care about Mrs. Hao's methods. He has a calm face and are you threatening me? It seems that I have been prepared for a long time, and I am also looking forward to preparing some back-ups. As a result, the blood jade spider was killed in two blows, and the mid-term cultivation did not show any deterrence. It showed its initial toughness, as if it didn't take anything seriously. After it was a foregone conclusion that the Xutian Cauldron could not be pulled out, the protagonist slowly lowered his head to look at the blood jade spider, slowly raised his head and suddenly smiled, and then revealed his mid-term cultivation to kill Mrs. Hao. It was really stupid There are too many contradictions before and after, regardless of whether the hidden cultivation is to get the cauldron and the treasure. It doesn't make sense to keep a low profile, but the protagonist is still pretending. Manbeard is also a free thug. He doesn't get anything and doesn't compensate the protagonist, so he doesn't have any opinions. What kind of people in the devil's way are so pure that they can't be righteous anymore, and the protagonist still gets two, ancient treasures and elixirs. Logically speaking, Manbeard has a share. If it is useful to the protagonist, then the protagonist has to pay some compensation from his pocket, so he just left and became a free thug along the way.

There is nothing wrong with the author's writing. Regarding the plot, I can understand that he is cautious in the early stage but not in the later stage. But now you are low-key and low-key in front of Yuanying of the same level in the late stage of Yuanying, and you are crazier than the old devil in front of the transformed gods. I always feel that something is not right 🙂

The author, so far, this book is well written, and I think it is good food, but I personally think there are still some unreasonable parts. You can refer to it appropriately, and if you think there are reasonable places that can be adopted, then make reasonable optimizations👇👇👇 Chapter 157: Physical training corresponds to physical training, and tempering the physical body to a level comparable to a magic weapon is actually dead muscle? This is an obvious poisonous point Chapter 218: You get a golden treasure chest at the end of this chapter. You can set up your own formation accumulation to break the ban on the treasure chest and get the ban token Chapter 219: You can set up a refining ban token to avoid ban strangulation (I personally think there is a ban strangle). Get the token first and then unblock the repair. There is something particularly confusing to me. Nangong Wan and the protagonist both entered the forbidden area through secret methods. This is absolutely fine, but Nangong Wan did not unlock the cultivation seal before leaving the forbidden area. There are no monsters above level 2 or 3 in the Bloody Forbidden Land. The black dragon was at level 1 before it broke through. The place where the ink dragon exists should have a ban to cover the aura. After all, it is the place where the treasure box ban token is placed. The treasure box has not been discovered for so long (personal understanding) Personally, I think there should be a large formation ban to clean up these second-level monsters and above on a regular basis. Can't the seven factions clean it up on a regular basis? The Queen of Yuan Dynasty can resist to the past, after all, it is a place where inheritance is left. The protagonist exposed his alchemy cultivation but it did not trigger a ban reaction. If you could get in by suppressing your cultivation, the seven sects' elixir-forming Yuanying would probably have gone in long ago. After all, it was left behind by the ancient monks Chapter 220: It's still a treasure chest, not a forbidden token. Chapter 267 (269): I have reservations about whether there is erysipelas among mortals. Personally I don't think so. ① There is erysipelas: The uniqueness of the elixir that ripens in the small green bottle. Han Li ate the elixir as a meal. There is no mention of Han Li getting erysipelas in the original work. Maybe because of the pure potency of the vial, Han Li never got erysipelas But other monks did not have cheats like Han Li. The elixirs he took There is an accumulation of impurities, which makes it difficult to completely refine, which can also be explained by a long time. ② No erysipelas: The small green bottle only has the law of time in the early stage, and the ripening elixir only increases its age, which is no different from elixirs that grow normally in nature. Han Li is still not infected with erysipelas, which shows that there is no concept of erysipelas among mortals Chapter 293: I re-read the part about exchanging skills with Barbarian Beard, the life-saving grace + the real film of Brahma Saint in exchange for the Demonic Skill, there is absolutely no problem (there is no problem if I don't modify my personal feelings) But after all, it is Barbarian Beard's native skill, Manbeard is not Tiehanhan, it can increase the inner demon oath, Make the protagonist promise not to reveal the skills (this is more rigorous) Chapter 330: When talking to Man Beard, you can use psychological activities to highlight the main purpose of the trip, what treasures you must get, and what the consequences of exposing your cultivation are. You can pretend to act in the name of "taking the tripod". And the new blood jade spider, paving the way for the subsequent three entries into Xutian Palace

About Chapter 406 Why should the Mulan people return to Master Le instead of Yuan Ming Deng? Just because the protagonist's asking price is too high and they are afraid that the protagonist will not agree? First of all, two questions must be clarified What important role does Master Le play to the Mulan people? What important role does Yuan Ming Deng play to the Mulan people? For example, Master Le is the security code against cracking, while Yuan Ming Lantern is the insurance. The insurance contains life-saving cards for the ethnic group, but they all fall into the hands of outsiders. The clan knew the insurance code, but instead of exchanging the insurance, the clan exchanged the clan's heritage for the code lock. You can understand the Yuanxuan lamp this way. This lamp is like the gold-eating insect in its entire mature form; like the holy tree in Yunmeng Mountain; like the bloody forbidden land of the seven sects. The Mulan people are already at a disadvantage in the battlefield on the grassland. Master Zhong Shen's body was destroyed and his Yuanying essence was severely lost. After taking the body, he will probably fall into a state that will not be recovered for a hundred or two hundred years. Now that there are only two great masters and the Holy Lamp Wailuo, how can he resist the unexpected? How to check and balance Tiannan? After Tutu learns the news, he will most likely unite with the Jin clan to destroy the Mulan clan in one fell swoop. Combined with the timeline, Master Le should have broken through the Yuanying not long ago, so he should not first replace the original Ming Deng and then train a new saint, so that he can activate the Yuan Ming Deng to create an additional Yuan Empress with combat power, which makes Tu Wu worried. In the future, the original bright lantern should not be used in the Tiannan border battlefield, but to defend against the suddenness. The protagonist cannot cross Mulan to go to the border battlefield between the suddenness and the Mulan people. If the lantern is replaced, it will be no longer needed if it is feared that it will be taken away again.

Song Yu 1. Insufficient stamina The Tianlinggen successfully formed the elixir less than a hundred years ago. The early cultivation speed was very fast but the subsequent improvement speed was slow. Breaking through the Nascent Soul around the age of 360 is quite satisfactory. At the end of the novel, it is mentioned that the cultivation level is only in the early Nascent Soul stage, with some resources from Han Li to help. 2. Many shortcomings There are very few fighting methods and actual combat experience, the skills they practice are not good, the overall output ability of fighting is extremely weak, and the combat power is just a tile. 3. Conservative negligence The Sword Trial Conference noticed that Du Dong's identity was abnormal and reported it to the sect to arrange a response. In the end, he was successfully captured or killed. It has great deficiencies in crisis management and layout execution. 4. Lack of courage She easily shrinks when faced with high risks. The three of them originally planned to go to the Devil's Valley with Han Li, but she was afraid that the danger in the valley was too dangerous and gave up. In the end, she missed a great opportunity. Only Zi Ling who walked with Han Li could gain. It can also be regarded as a clear-headed character who restrained herself from risking her life. Nangong Que 1. Extremely utilitarian The interests of the sect are often used as the criterion for doing things. Putting the junior sister who has been together for nearly 300 years as a bargaining chip on the gambling table, and pushing the junior sister into the fire pit of Wei Lichen, doesn't she know what his character is? 2. Short-sighted Only focusing on immediate interests and ignoring long-term risks. The sect fled the Yue Kingdom and found itself in a difficult situation in the Northern Liang Kingdom. Instead of planning how to strengthen itself, the sect forced its junior sisters to marry and join the Nine Nations Alliance. I don't know that forcing someone to do something will be counterproductive, and the result will be a loss of money and people. 3. Do your own thing In the novel, he makes his own decisions on everything and rarely consults with the elders in the sect. To put it nicely, he is the general leader of the sect's affairs and coordinates the overall situation. To put it badly, the entire sect is under his control and is dictatorial. 4. I don't know how to adapt Her junior sister is adamant about not wanting to get married, but she uses the sect as a guide to force her to do so. This shows that her thinking is rigid and she doesn't know how to adapt. I believe that marriage is the only way out for the sect. I don't think about other methods of revival and only go to the dark side. 5. Arrogant She has the airs of being an elder of the sect. When she and Han Li met again in the Fallen Demon Valley, Han Li also came to help her. He knew that Han Li was now extremely powerful but he just couldn't let go of his attitude to resolve the dispute between the two parties. 6. Putting public interests over private interests Putting the fate of the sect above the fate of anyone else, abandoning personal gains and losses and only focusing on the interests of the sect, is really separated from the world view of ordinary people. Master Le 1. Obvious shortcomings Most of the combat power comes from the sacred Yuanming Lantern. 2. Not good at tactics Not good at using tactics and conspiracy, only good at head-on fighting. In the article, he was tricked twice by Han Li into running away and the whole battle situation was controlled by Han Li. 3. Dao Heart is Unstable The Holy Lamp was taken away twice, and each time his mind was in chaos. Later, his Dao Heart was damaged and he ended up in the late Nascent Soul stage.

I wrote it for a long time, laying the groundwork, and then sent it to Yellow Maple Valley. On the way, Yuan Ying of the Hehuan Sect saw the female consort and took her away. Then the protagonist told the female consort boyfriend that it was his fault. I won't ignore it. Let's look at the logic. The female consort is going to take the imperial examination herself, and she also won the top prize. The princess was granted marriage by the emperor. The woman disguised herself as a man and had sex. Before the female consort passed the imperial examination, she met the male protagonist who had just arrived here. The male protagonist spent money to learn the local dialect. This is a transaction involving money and goods, and no one owes anyone. It can only be defined as someone you know. The male protagonist feels that this female consort can no longer play anymore and is about to be eliminated by the nine tribes. Because we know each other, I tried to find a way to build a ladder for her to go to Yellow Maple Valley. The thing is done. To be considered helpful, the female consort owes the protagonist a favor. As for going to Yellow Maple Valley, there was a "car accident" on the way and he was captured by the Hehuan Sect. What does that have to do with the protagonist? At that time, the female consort was considered a person from Huang Maple Valley. The Hehuan Sect and Huang Maple Valley are on the verge of fighting. Who is the protagonist? Do you need to stand up and say "I want revenge"? ? ? Author, how much did you drink? Writing this kind of shit plot?

A Jiedan dares to take advantage of Nascent Soul, are you kidding me? Han Li was forming a baby in the Luoyun Sect. When the Nascent Soul Celestial Phenomenon appeared, no Nascent Soul would take action. It would either succeed or fail. In other words, the moment the Celestial Soul Celestial Phenomenon was discovered, the formation of the baby was almost over. The inner demon tribulation seemed long to me, but it was only a moment to the outside world. How long would it take for the group of pill-forming pills to discover the Celestial Soul Celestial Phenomenon and wait for that idiot to fly over, fly around the front and attack the formation from the weak point? Author: Have you ever seen Mortal? Is it possible that even Yuanying has no time to take action? If you look at any mortal fanfic, the moment the celestial phenomenon of infant formation appears, unless you are a late-stage great monk, even the peak Yuan Zhong will not make any other moves, because it is too late. No one is willing to form a deadly feud with a Yuanying for no reason! Where does one have so much time to attack the formation? Doing a lot of bullshit? People who have formed a core are hundreds of years old. There are no fools in the mortal world. If you really want to trick someone into failing, you have to be sure that the other person has failed before you dare to do so.

The protagonist is not as good as Han Li, so I don't know if he can get the sole. Then I keep on going, but sometimes I know that there is no gain in the danger, so I just take the risk myself. Maybe the author feels that this will be cool. The protagonist is pulled back and forth by the author, with a heavy puppet feel and unstable character. The main character's natal magic weapon is the author's hot-headed mess, and its effect is average. It feels like the author simply writes whatever comes to mind, and then wants to take advantage of Song Yu's traffic. The heroine has not yet been born with almost 2 million words. It makes me laugh to death Does this book have no outline?

In the original book, Han Li went to the Star Palace. The momentum of the Star Palace was already very low at that time, and the possibility of offending anyone was very small. Han Li had saved Ling Yuling and would not do anything to him. Moreover, Han Li's magic weapon and supernatural powers at that time were much stronger than the protagonist's. The Supreme Saint of Six Paths and his puppet of the Yuan Queen. The protagonist's magical powers at this time are incomparable to Han Li's. The Star Palace is still in its heyday, and the protagonist is not as strong as the Yuan Queen. In the past, as the Yuan Queen, you have to pretend to be Zhu until the opponent attacks you. Even the two saints can activate the magic circle on you. Oh my god, you are so arrogant, and then you escape without a trace. I'm chovy! In Chapter 426, after breaking through to the Yuan Empress, he is still saying that he does not dare to publicize the news about breaking through to the Yuan Empress, for fear of being targeted by the Star Palace. Which great monk is so cowardly? You are already the Yuan Empress, why don't you go to Xing Gong to trouble him, he is trying every means to go against you? Then why wasn't the original Wanfamen destroyed when Wan Sangu just broke through? Xing Gong is not afraid that you will continue to mess with Xing Gong after you escape? Okay, I just accepted it. You don't want to leak it when you want to check your credit. You cashed out to find an opportunity to do something big, but Xing Gong later invited you to go directly. You knew that Xing Gong suspected you of teleporting the formation, and you said that you were going to do it, so you ran over to it openly. The words revealed that it was a big deal and showed the strength of the Queen of Yuan to fight. Then who said before that you should not say anything? Isn't the left and right brain fighting each other?

To be honest, judging from the protagonist's current skills, it is not suitable for Song Yu to be the heroine. In the barren environment of the human world, there is no good character. There are only two people who are suitable to be the heroines or apprentices. One is Xin Ruyin, whose talent in formations is incredible. Send her to the pill formation. Maybe she can help you when you ascend. , And there is Ling Yuling, the richest woman in the human world, who can help you transform into a god. Other Yuanyao, Ziling and the like are pure drag in the human world. Don't tell me that they can ascend to the spirit world, the demon world and the like right now, in the human world, and the protagonist's cultivation is very difficult and difficult to do now.