Chinese Showbiz 2004: I Became a Big Shot Before the College Entrance Exams

That's too contrived. They just randomly save some old lady and she becomes Han Sanping's mother. Then the reward immediately becomes incredibly powerful and useful. You might as well have just let Feng Xiaogang choose you as the protagonist. What a roundabout way to do it.

Mimi

Stop writing so cheesy, bro! Less jokes, remember how badly that karaoke book was criticized back then? And could you add some sweetness to the female lead's story?

Before Yang Mi had plastic surgery, she was just passable, not pretty at all.

Rewrite Faye Wong's story, don't repeat the mistakes of the last one.

It's just written as a succubus. That's meaningless. Why not write it as a cannon?

This book is excellent; I also recommend the equally outstanding "From Street-Side Shop to Business Godfather".