Unfettered on the Path to Immortality

The family is about to run away when there is a war with the Zhou family, and the protagonist is a bit poisonous. This is different from Lu Wugui, Lu Fu Master and Han Lao Mo. The family and clan uncle were so kind to the protagonist, but the protagonist didn't repay much in return, and then ran away regardless of the family and clan uncle. The family has no discipline for such disloyal people. The writing is unreasonable. I took a look at the following chapters 670 and 78, but there is no protagonist in it. Are you writing a group portrait? If you don't write the protagonist, the pace will be slow and the main line will be distorted. The work still needs to be polished a little more, and it's a no-brainer.

It's about walking alone, but in the end, everything you do is thinking about your family. Can a reborn person have such deep feelings for a strange family? Even if the owner of the body is related to the protagonist and gives some good things to pass on, it is enough, but it has to be written like a sheep's head and a dog's meat. The author directly said whether he was writing about a family or a lone ranger. If it was a family, I would run away. Immortality is noble! I don't know how to write reference to mortals. To be honest, family tradition is not suitable for appearing in the world of immortality where the jungle is strong. Others can do this, but the protagonist cannot. Originally, cultivation is about thousands of troops crossing a single-plank bridge. I found that many authors can't change this problem when writing novels about immortality?

This is very good, because immortality is private, and cultivation is your own business. It is very rare for the protagonist to be willing to give back to the family appropriately. The formation of the family and the sect is for the individual to practice better, and one cannot put the cart before the horse.

To cultivate immortality, you must first be a human being, right? No one else writes about cultivating demons in such a bird-like manner. Profit-seeking, ruthless, narrow-minded, cruel and murderous. Could it be that you are not writing about cultivating immortals, but about cultivating animals. What kind of thing did you write about the theme of cultivating immortality?

Why so many explanations? Various explanations, too many explanations turn into nonsense

128, 256, 512... Are you cultivating immortality or making a hard drive?

It is said that it is a mortal abortion, but it is written that it is more terrifying than cannibal abortion. You don't need to ask anyone for directions. You can directly find a person with low cultivation level to kill people and search for souls. If you encounter an important treasure, you will find ways to kill people and seize the treasure.

There is too much nonsense. One thing is said over and over again. After a few orders, it is repeated again and again. If this can be changed, sooner or later it will become a god.

Very bland, nothing exciting, just a family nanny story

There is no one among ten thousand in the late stage of body refining at the fourth level, so you should cut the melons and vegetables in the late stage of Nascent Soul. You can't cross a level before rebuilding. It should be even better now. Why is it written so weakly?