The Body-Forging Lone Wolf in Cyberpunk

I can only say that it is better to play the game again, and even the writing is not as good as the plot text. You haven't changed anything, so what are you doing? It's just that a camera was added to the original plot, right?

After it was put on the shelf, I pulled a bigger one.

I have read a lot of comments from book friends, and I would like to give some suggestions to the author based on my feelings. I believe that those who come to read fanfics all like the story of Cyberpunk 2077, and they like to watch V and David to watch the stories of various little people becoming legends in Night City. We do not require him or her to be omnipotent, nor do we require them to leave no regrets in Night City. However, they definitely achieved their ultimate goal according to their own ideas. They lived humble but died great. For example, David didn't actually do anything big, but his story was extremely exciting. Cyberpunk is deviance, destruction, and salvation after destruction. We hope to see the protagonist in the fan fiction have a happy ending in the troubled world. Jack, David, Rebecca, every living and promising life should not be devoured by the garbage in Night City. Back to this work, as one book friend said, the plot in front of the Kanbi Building is actually pretty good. It's really cool to have an invincible protagonist. It saves David's mother, prevents David from embarking on the self-destructive path of an edgewalker, and prevents Mann from becoming a cyberpsychopath. But things started to change after Kanbi Building. A huge poisonous point is that the protagonist obviously has the ability to know the plot and make changes, but in the end V still inserts the chip to start the death countdown. I can understand this, because it is true that if the original plot is not followed, Johnny's existence will not be easy to deal with. But the subsequent plot goes further and further away from the original plot. Helping Miles and rescuing the lark are no different from V in the original plot, they are all being treated like dogs. If your characterization cannot make readers feel that this character is interesting even when he is frustrated and aggrieved, then make it more enjoyable for readers. The handling of the protagonist's imminent death in the following pictures is too sloppy, because the lark was discovered by the black wall as soon as he came in, and the system was about to be killed... After complaining, let's talk about the good points. Your description of the character's language is very expressive, and the tone of his speech is very similar, so you must have an advantage in writing fan fiction. If you polish the plot, you will definitely be able to write a well-received and popular one. And I also understand the system of leaving foreshadowings from the first chapter. Although I think this idea is a bit out of touch with the plot and not particularly novel, who can let go of the inspiration they got in a flash? You can polish it next time. Finally, there are very few cyberpunk fanfics. The first half of the fanfic you wrote is considered a good one, but if the plot is not invincible, you must remember to make it more enjoyable for readers. I hope you will finish this book successfully and start a new book soon 🌹

I don't know how it is set up. If you want to dilute the memory of the protagonist, you can write that you encountered a problem during the time travel. It is really poisonous for the system to actively interfere with the protagonist. This gives people the feeling that the protagonist is just a puppet and has no control.

Save the flow: If you want to see Lucy as the heroine like me, you can withdraw, Lucy is not the heroine

In this way, if you change your name to Lu Mingfei in Cyberpunk, the protagonist will have a physical cheat, and his indecisive character will also have an explanation.

What I wrote earlier has a cyberpunk feel to it. When I saw Chapter 77, I laughed out loud. The protagonist was completely invisible and forced to follow the game plot. More than 70 chapters of scenes were just for this? This is not nothing, what is even more outrageous is the author's acceptance speech 😒 What does it mean to drive away some people because of the poisonous points? Modifying the poisonous points will affect the people who are watching, so I will continue to write it Haha😄

I am the arrow, this is the arrow. It's not that the writing gets worse, but that the author planned to feed everyone from the beginning. 🙂 It's better to cut it off when you're being criticized for nanny posts, so that I'll have a better impression of you.

Who is eating this shit? I got addicted to the Lark exam, and today I suddenly realized that I was still writing

The protagonist is recognized by most readers as a clown.

You see, this is an ancient set routine The protagonist, a small character, gains strength to strengthen himself, but has no big ambitions and just wants to be content with the situation. He is forced to be involved in various incidents and face evil organizations. During the battle with the evil organization, the evil organization obtains his own genes (tissue samples). The evil organization develops strengthening medicines (surgery) or clones. The protagonist solves the evil organization's biochemicals and becomes a comrade with a powerful biochemical. In the end, the protagonist leads everyone to defeat the evil organization. What the hell is this ancient Selulu animation setting? It has to be a short animation with only 6 episodes.

I kept looking forward to it until V still inserted the chip. Thank you to the author for sending me a smelly Ollie.

This is pure shit, I should have read the comment section first. I have never written a bad review in a book review section, and I have never been a Shennong. This is the first time it is so disgusting. Latecomers should not read this book.

It was okay at first, but completely fell apart in the few chapters before it was released. The dialogue is indeed very cyberpunk, and the protagonist's prodigal personality is well developed even if it does not involve the main plot. Then the entire section collapsed as soon as it entered the main line. That's right, the whole section collapsed. It's just a forced game plot. For the sake of the game plot, the characters simply lost their minds and turned into puppets to act in an already boring drama. The reminder of the protagonist is useless. The characters in the plot are all puppets. The characters who have lived in the world of cannibalism for so many years have become clear-eyed college students who just came out of college ten years ago. Forget it, I spent two or three hours reading a book whose main plot is all about poison.

You have to put in coins to comment, just treat it like a beggar. I suggest the author cut the network cable, the keyboard is smashed, and the writing is really a mess💩.

So far, Chapter 26, this book makes me feel like when I first read the cyberpunk interdimensional science and engineering book. In this era of studio-free novels and AI-written books, to find a book like this makes you feel that the author has really played the game many times. 2077 Has even studied the Night City cyber novel in depth. This book is still a small seedling, but I believe that if the author does not have any big problems later, I think the Night City series of novels will usher in a new immersive novel. Of course I'm going to start by stacking the armor first. There are currently less than 100,000 words. My comments are for reference only. You need to rate this book yourself. For the poisonous points, I can only say that the prophet's plot is not necessarily poisonous. It is actually difficult to define whether it is poisonous or not. I can understand it. To explain this vague move, it may not be acceptable to everyone in the current mainstream of cheating. But still the sentence above, I hope you can come in and read it for yourself before making a conclusion. Give this book a chance and a chance to let this seedling grow.

It's so fucking awesome👍. I couldn't stand it when I saw the plot of forcing V Company to blackwall and activate the relic after it was put on the shelves. Obviously the writing in the early stage was quite interesting, but once the key plot reaches the climax, it is full of shit.

Before I saw the memory fade, I thought it was pretty good. But suddenly I saw that the system had changed the memory and it was as uncomfortable as eating shit.

Where do you see the Cyanbi Building? What is the role of the protagonist? Keep using soy sauce. This should be rated as high as tomatoes and give it two stars.

How can a prosthetic protagonist fight against corporate power? 🥵 The author chooses the system to directly open the body plug-in for the protagonist 😡. After all, how can mere technology defeat the well-trained body...? 🤭 I don't know if the power of Kowloon has penetrated the protagonist's brain or something. There are frequent plots to promote the development of the story. In the published chapter, the protagonist went to the roof of the Kanbi Building to find Saburo. When he met Takemura, he could have kicked him to death, but in the end, he was outsmarted by Takemura and imprisoned in a floating car 😅. What? Why don't you just kick the door down? Sorry, the floating car door is so hard that even the current protagonist cannot kick it open 🥵 In summary, the author does not have a good grasp of the plot. He cheats the protagonist too hard, so that there is no intelligence reduction and the plot cannot be promoted. If the plot is promoted, the protagonist will appear to be even more stupid than wise. In the end, what is presented is an Oglin with well-developed limbs and a simple mind. 😊

There is a poisonous point in Kanbi Mansion. Many people were planning to abandon the book, but at the end the author said he would handle it properly, but later said he would not change it, and directly drove away the readers who wanted to give him a chance. At the end, the author just let himself go, and suggested that newcomers just leave when they see the paid ones. It is not worth subscribing later.

Poison, poison, poison. The system is getting into trouble with the AI. The matter of the time traveler was exposed to the lark. You still think your idea is a good idea. It's so poisonous.

After seeing Chapter 186, I am full of old jokes I won't talk about a bunch of messy memory gags. If it is well-written and exciting, these are bonus points, although this author's writing is average Currently, I have also written about the sudden appearance of ancient and explosive accidents and the behavior of being controlled by the system. I am really speechless. Okay, I will put this aside. What makes me speechless the most and what I can't help complaining about is the portrayal of the protagonist. He is theoretically invincible, but problems will occur every time he takes action at a critical moment. It is really so low that it explodes. There is also the inexplicable mentality of thinking that he is invincible. Obviously, every major operation has never been completed smoothly. His self-confidence in invincible strength has always been unexpected. The goals of every important operation have been achieved and not achieved. The protagonist's invincible strength has rarely achieved the final result twice. Every important goal is almost achieved by additional factors, and the last few steps always force the horse. Back to the original plot, holy crap And does the protagonist's brain exist? Every big action in Ta Ma is done as others say. The protagonist is a tool man, an NPC, and important actions are planned by others. He does whatever he is asked to do, and then acts like I can do it with my strength without any surprises, as if using my brain is completely redundant. As a result, every time I fall into a trap, I am either caught in a trap or an accident occurs. The battle scenes written by this author also have to be vivid or not vivid, and they have to be realistic but not realistic. They are as blunt as chewing rocks. It's better not to read this chapter of battle. Finally, I want to say this to the author. I would say that the route of your book is completely wrong. It is actually quite interesting at the beginning, but the invincible article is about invincibility, and the rise of little people is about the rise of little people. You have created a pseudo-invincible article. It is theoretically invincible, but you feel frustrated every time you take action. The setting at the beginning is too high, the growth curve is too straight, but the benefits are not realized. It cannot be matched in the content of your story, and it is completely contrary to the readers' expectations. You know. One Punch Man would still be called One Punch Man if his arm was broken every time he shot. Will anyone still like it? You deserve to be criticized for what you wrote. You can't even figure out the core definition of the story you are portraying, so you write blindly

Just a big lump. Obviously you write your story and we read ours. Everyone tacitly agrees to skip the time-traveling thing and focus on the plot. You insist on explaining it forcefully, trying to "justify yourself" and then explain a lot of stuff that is full of loopholes and no one can convince... Is there something wrong? ? ? And how many times has a guy with a physical body of 30 who is already close to invincible been aggrieved? The settings are forcibly added just to follow the main line of the DLC and make it easier for you, right?

And in terms of combat power, the author is a bit confused. Before a battle, the protagonist boasts that he is so powerful, but in fact, once he enters the battle, he is all kinds of deflated, giving people the feeling of being punched on cotton. If it is neither good nor bad, it will lose more than half of the strength. I don't know why 🤷🏻‍♂️

The book friends are right, there are not many poisonous points but they are very poisonous: the game plot still follows the Ganbi Building; the system is intelligent but has no meaning to the plot; the extremely selfish Song Zhaomei puts down the butcher knife and immediately clears her name. And when you endure the many poisonous points and read to the end, you will find that the author suddenly cut himself off, insisted on poisoning and then suddenly cut himself off, which is completely unacceptable.

This author is suffering from literary youth disease. I regretted it after reading Chapter 200.

You can leave after reading the free chapter, the Dog Town plot starts to be full of shit. It's the first time in a long time that I've read a book because of the author's poisonous comments. It's really disgusting. (Don't fight me, I'll fight you)

Don't read it, the free chapters are full of poison, and I'll feed you a big one before it goes on the shelves. I even suspect that the author gave his wife to the editor before this history book was put on the shelves. After all, he already has this tendency.

There is a mistake. When escaping to the Draman car, the route has already been set. The person who set it up is Dexter and it cannot be changed.